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I approve of catgirl Amy. This shouldn't be a shock.
The Taste of Peaches (Worm AU)
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I approve of catgirl Amy. This shouldn't be a shock.
Windborne
Devourer of Stories
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Ok, got through the latest chapter. It was pretty good. Glad Taylor isn't deciding to murder Emma out of hand. Honestly the most mentally healthy one of those five girls is Vicky. She's just a teenager with all its usual problems. The rest need therapy.
If you hadn't needed to take a break I'd say it wasn't nearly long enough to justify the 8 month hiatus. But since you needed to take a break to avoid burnout and you told us beforehand I don't mind and instead I'm rather grateful that you informed us of the hiatus. Too few do that so it's great you did. Hoping the next chapter is released sooner though. I said it earlier today, but you should try to focus on two or three stories till they finish before working on others. This and Tangled Fate are easily the ones with the best quality thus far of your stories, so I hope you choose to prioritize them. Otherwise no critiques really, characters were in character and no major grammar issues popped out to me.
If you hadn't needed to take a break I'd say it wasn't nearly long enough to justify the 8 month hiatus. But since you needed to take a break to avoid burnout and you told us beforehand I don't mind and instead I'm rather grateful that you informed us of the hiatus. Too few do that so it's great you did. Hoping the next chapter is released sooner though. I said it earlier today, but you should try to focus on two or three stories till they finish before working on others. This and Tangled Fate are easily the ones with the best quality thus far of your stories, so I hope you choose to prioritize them. Otherwise no critiques really, characters were in character and no major grammar issues popped out to me.
FaerieKnight79
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Huh, for some reason I was misremembering it as Emma drinking the wine rather then Sophia.
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The first mention of gnomes was indeed from "A Book on Nymphs, Sylphs, Pygmies, and Salamanders, and on the Other Spirits" by the swiss theologian, philosopher and alchemist Paracelsus which was published in 1566 where Gnomi was used as synonym for Pygmæi which were a race from Greek mythology that was only a few span tall and which Paracelsus classified as earth elementals.
After their appearance there they spread into general swiss folklore where they were viewed as mine spirits which were helpful but would punish greed like when they supposedly caused the landslide that wiped out the swiss village of Piuro in 1618 to punish the village for their greed in relating to a local gold mine.
deathofrats0808
Don’t think of it as dying; just as leaving early
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While Norse myth often contradicts itself, the dwarves are the ones sometimes said to have been maggots (their other origin is that they were created from the blood and flesh of Ymir). Also, no race comes from Niflheim. You might be thinking of Niðavellir, but because the Dwarves and the Svartálfar are pretty much guaranteed to be the same people, it's usually believed to be a synonym for Svartálfheimr.
And seriously, the gnomes didn't exist until Paracelsus used the term (and possibly invented it) as a synonym for Pygmæi, and it's descended from Latin (possibly literally meaning earth-dweller). There's no connection with Norse myth.
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YEEEEES. FALL TO THE FLUFFIES MUWAHHAHAAH. On a side note, I'm excited on what happens to Victor, what he saw, how he explains it. I'm very much keen on making this a semi-light hearted story though, god knows there's enough grimderp to last me a lifetime. After all the Fluffies exist. And then Emma, poor Emma, she broke and she's trying so desperately to fix whatever is left inside her. I hope they all get therapy. And then The Booba Scene, I laughed so much at Sophia. This is everything I imagined it would be. Such a gem of a story. Looking forward for more!
So nice to see more of this,
The same Taylor that didn't talk about being bullied to attempted murder and near suicide by her previous best friend out of concern for how her dad would feel about it?
Yea, no, Taylor has hella issues standing up for herself.
This isn't godlike calm or anything like that, this is the same conflict adverse little girl who got shoved into a locker while hoping it'd all go away if she just kept her head down long enough.
She lacks the confidence to publicly confront somebody who spent two years torturing her, showing up at her own house. Because she doesn't want to cause a scene.
It took them following her through a mysterious portal, to a place they don't understand, and nearly getting themselves killed to make the 'what the hell were you thinking' reflex over come the 'don't cause drama' reflex.
It's perfectly Taylor.
The same Taylor that didn't talk about being bullied to attempted murder and near suicide by her previous best friend out of concern for how her dad would feel about it?
Yea, no, Taylor has hella issues standing up for herself.
This isn't godlike calm or anything like that, this is the same conflict adverse little girl who got shoved into a locker while hoping it'd all go away if she just kept her head down long enough.
She lacks the confidence to publicly confront somebody who spent two years torturing her, showing up at her own house. Because she doesn't want to cause a scene.
It took them following her through a mysterious portal, to a place they don't understand, and nearly getting themselves killed to make the 'what the hell were you thinking' reflex over come the 'don't cause drama' reflex.
It's perfectly Taylor.
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wingnut2292
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The question to ask is what flavor of wine was Sophia drinking? Anyone up for some Peach Schnaps of Divinity? (Because with some boys, and I use that term loosely, the only way to get them to eat their fruits and vegies is to ferment them. Ya' know what I mean?)
Crazael
Rehydrated Demon King
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It was probably fairly mundane wine. Just really, really good.
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- Russia
Alternatively she drank Ambrosia, and is now temporarily immortal. Not that she'll notice, probably, since it mostly seems to affect aging.
So this is actually something I looked up a bit, since various Fairies origins were something I needed for my work, and BOY was I jumping down a way bigger rabbit hole than I was expecting.
In short, its a fucking mess.
The long version is that Shakespeare infects everything as a top layer, and then once you start digging pretty much everything is a grab bag of whatever they felt like from a mix of Celtic, Greek, and Norse mythology. Oh and Tolkien took over pop culture. So when somebody says Dwarf or Elf, you think his stuff.
Dwarf Elf and Fairy are.... probably actually all the same thing. Depending on which ones anyway.
Dwarf is the German word, Fairy is a loan from the French, and historically 'elves' were ascribed traits that we'd now consider to be 'faries'. That is as Mischievous Fey.
Elves live in Alfheim, which literally translates to Elf Home, and Svartalfheim is.... Black Elf Home. Where the Dwaves live, and the gods go to commission works of craftsmanship from the residents. The whole 'dark elf' bit might actually just be a Christian influence trying to separate out 'good' and 'bad' versions of mythical beings instead of them just being generally a force of chaos, but that's only a theory.
But none of that is the same as the elemental spirits Fantasy lore is full of like Gnome, Slyph, Salamanders, Undine. That all came about when Paracelsus just made that shit up.
To which we also pile on the more 'traditional' fairy influences that everybody rips off from the Celtic legends. Which actually give us a bunch of (maybe beast people, maybe just smart animals?) things like the Cait, sionnach, or Puca.
And all the stuff Shakespeare gave us, which is kind of your great grandparents version of Tolkien in terms of infecting popular images. Though for extra fun there, Oberon the Fairy King had his name ripped from from a German Dwarf King.
I probably got some of this wrong, I would be shocked to find out I didn't get any of this wrong. I spent a long time chasing down all kinds of crap, and at no point did I feel like I had a handle on it, its all a giant mess, no good sources, seriously this shit is all based on the work of scholars chasing down the fragments of bedtime stories that happened to still be hanging around after this long. The origins of our fairy(pardon the pun) tales are murky at best.
FaerieKnight79
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Don't forget how the Roman Catholoic Church got involved in attempting to demonize fae. For example the church added a bit about the Wyld Hunt being because the Queen of Faerie has to sacrifice the soul of an innocent to hell once every seven years to retain her power. Or how Irish and Celtic folklore are not quite the same, but get used interchangeably by the masses.
Grounders10
Nine-Tailed Kitsune
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I will at least say that Sophia is no more immortal than I am. *Fluffy Ninetails nods firmly*
Gekkou_Yoko
Three-Tailed Kitsune
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- In my dreams, outside my mind.
Still more mortal than I am.
FaerieKnight79
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For a moment I misread that as you saying Sophia is no more immoral then you. Amazing how much one letter can change.
LostArchivist
Sane, unfortunately.
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Well. That is perhaps the best-disguised holdout weapon I've ever heard of. No one is ever going to confiscate that one!
So, whichever movies they watched together as children, none of them were ever the original Disney animated version of Aladdin. Good to know.
But yes, I'm not surprised that they fell afoul of something. But it's all the stuff they grabbed before that happened that really worries me.
Sophia clearly got upgraded somehow by that wine, or maybe it's her Sword of Piercing (see what I did there), but I suspect the former is probably addictive and don't want to know what happens when she runs out.
Emma is probably possessed now, if she wasn't before.
And Panacea is pretty much the halfling rogue of the party, so she's probably fine (at least at the moment). She seemed mighty pleased about nonchalantly walking off with a bag of loot...
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it's broken
comma needed after "life" but I'm not copying that in case it's misconstrued.
her clearly-out-of-her-mind friend
blouse-straining
(My goodness, I don't think I've ever read a sentence quite like this one before. Which is probably a good thing given where I'd imagine such phrasing to be common...)
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Yeah Irish folklore isn't the same as Scottish folklore which isn't the same as Welsh folklore which is in turn different from Cornish folklore which is different than Breton folklore which is different from Manx folklore because 'Celtic' as a umbrella actually covers a lot of different groups all whom have their own folklore.
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Well, Emma clearly needs a therapy pet...
Lycanthromancer
The Arcane Fuzz
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- USA
Is this fox for "verbally beat the ever-living crap out of her"? Because if it's not, and this is the way the story is going, I don't think I'm going to be reading it anymore.
Metaphorically screw Emma with something sharp and rusty.
You heard it here first. Sophia would rather be stupid than a coward.
Capitalization.
Capitalization.
Or curious guests.
Capitalization.
Capitalization.
Like I'm
Rogue apostrophe.
Hula.
Sunlit.
Doesn't.
Rogue apostrophe.
Rogue comma.
Zeus: *shifty look* "Why's everyone looking at me?"
Herakles: "Father, your typical response to seeing a pretty woman has always been "Instructions unclear, stick dick in."
Capitalization.
Tsukuyomi.
Add.
Double Capitalization.
Emma's mind in a nutshell:
A dildo lightsaber. Only in fanfiction.
Amy's so Done With This Shit.
I could see it honestly.
Even if Brockton is known for weird shit, there's a limit, and she's already a low tolerance for, well anything really, kind of person.
"Fuck you guys. I'm moving to LA, its literally as far away as I can get from you, here's hoping I never see you again!"
Vhalidictes
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Unfortunately, of all people, Sophia gets them. I'm.... Overjoyed.
Aside from the that, good chapter!