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    • I eventually decided to use ideas from fiction to help me with the problem of magic.

    With my strength far from recovered I couldn't undo the seal that the brothers placed on mankind when they left.

    Not to mention the Mana in the air is so thin since it not been long since I took over.

    Not just that. The previous magic system was so powerful. Far too powerful, even a child could easily wrought destruction of they tried.

    Not to mention that people don't believe in magic anymore and there also needed to be a way to make sure that the power isn't misused.

    So I took a book from Rezero.

    There two major religions in remnant.

    Those who worship The Brothers.

    And those who belive in the existence of spirits of nature.

    Faunus in particular had this belief.

    Likely came from some of the action s the old man took when he was alive.

    Regardless. Nature Spirits didn't truly exist in remnant.

    So I was going to take advantage of that and create spirits using the idea from rezero.

    These spirits would be able to form a contract with someone and enable them to manipulate an element depending on the type of spirit.

    Though the spirit affinity will be tied to the seven virtues, chastity, temperance, charity, diligence, patience, kindness, and humility.

    The more of each one has, the higher one's spirit affinity and the more easily they can communicate and call to them, and the easier it will be to form a contract with more spirits.

    The Seven sins, pride, greed, lust, envy, gluttony, wrath, and sloth, on the other hand will act as a detterent for spirits. The more of each one is the more difficult it will be to commune or to call to spirits.

    The two act as a balance. Too much sins and very little virtue would mean it would be nearly impossible for one to get a spirit to litsen to them let alo e to communicate with them.

    Though once I do create them I wonder how I should introduce them?
     
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    • Are you going to create the Fairy Kings Forest and/or the sacred tree? You could also create the Spirit Spears Chastiefol and Basquias give them to champions like Blake(If you don't know what these are from they're from Nanatsu no Taizai/The Seven Deadly Sins and you should stop reading this comment till you've watched the anime or read the manga), you could also create the Fountain of Youth but without the "if you drink it the forest dies thing. You could also create the Seven Deadly Sins fairies, and have the Fairy Kings Harlequin/King and Gloxinia wield them, and the Giants and their Kings (Diane and her sacred treasure, Gideon and Drole) Druids too(Instead of the Goddess clan they'd worship you)

    There's also the Beastmen, like Ban's adoptive dad Zhivago who can disguise as humans, they could be good for infiltrating society, which would allow you to introduce spirit's and/or start a religion easier

    I would suggest some other characters and places/items but they wouldn't fit in with your theme, King,Diane, Gloxinia and Drole are already a stretch, considering 2 are part of the Knight Order:Seven Deadly Sins and the other 2 joined the elites of the demon race "The 10 Commandments"
     
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    You could also create the spirits from Black Clover, though you would probably have to create the BC grimoires too, since specific spells are needed to summon a spirit, and the level of magic control needed would definitely require a grimoire since the mana is so thin

    There's also Elves and Dwarves, but those probably require watching or reading Black Clover up to the latest chapter/episode considering how far into the story they're explained and/or mentioned, and as far as I'm aware dwarves and elves haven't really been talked about lore-wise except for directly related to the plot information
     
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    So Remnant Rises has come back from hiatus. I'd prefer it was Mahouka's magic system since (been a while since i've read it) it's not powered by mysteries but science (I may be wrong).
    The idea of spirits being tied to virtues is actually a pretty good idea.
     
    Kazuto Morimoto said:
    not powered by mysteries but science (I may be wrong).
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    it uses science AND magic(Magic particles called Psions)
    Science is used for CADs while Psions do the heavy lifting and the ineherent problems it will create is big
    it will start a sentiment of Eugenics to create the strongest mage so the virtue system is actually a really original and nice way of stopping evil people access it
     
    Oof, forgot that genetics is a factor to be able to use magic in Mahouka
     
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    • You guys know that the Rezero what ifs are what happens if subaru fails a test and give into a sin.

    For example Pride if is what happens if subaru didn't swallow his pride and call for help when the muggers tired to mug him.

    What if... Passing each of these tests actually gave subaru something that could help him?

    For example giving up his pride and calling for help grants him telepathy. He would be able to speak with those he knows within their minds.

    The next test Wrath if he passes it by jumping of the cliff, killing himself and looping once more instead of going down a dark path, he get the power of Flight.


    Sloth if, if he doesn't run away with Rem... He gets Regeneration.

    Greed if... If he doesn't make a Contract with echidna he get an ability like 'Observe' from The Gamer except much more detailed.


    What do you think?
     
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    • It'd be interesting to see how the SDC and Jaques reacts to the Atlas Military no longer needing them, and how Ozpin and the rest of the Atlas government would react to Ironwood's sudden change of personality and approach to problems
     
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    Also another idea you can use: Your Teacher SI, but instead of SI in (What I'm assuming is) your body but modified so you can do magic, you're a slightly younger Ritsuka or Hakuno or something, and you're found by Waver in the Case Files timeline before canon, maybe along with Gray with the excuse of the villagers trying to use a ritual to somehow give you lots of magecraft knowledge and basically make you into her own Merlin substitute or something, with the goal of helping raise the El-Melloi's status in the Clocktower (While staying on El-Melloi II/Waver's side), and assisting Waver (Sort of like what Gray does)
     
    Shinji Ikari reincarnates as Shinji Matou after the third impact.

    Shinji remembers his previous life when he first sees Sakura...

    What happens...
     
    I just realised something, did the gods or Alaya/Gaia or whatever other powerful beings there are(Beasts don't count, they wouldn't do this) put up a giant bounded field or something so that unnatural/mystical hair /eye colours are just viewed like normal hair colours by the mundane? Because I'm pretty sure all the not-actually possible hair/eye colours I've seen have been on people with probable or confirmed ancestry in the moonlit world(royalty, magus ancestors, etc) like Achilles(apparently his mum was a nymph) and Jacksassin(Amalgamation of like 10,000 malevolent spirits of aborted children or something)
     
    Self insert as Kakashi in the Naruto world with Eidolon Package just after the bell test and proceeds to relax.

    Like completely let go.
     
    SI that tried to munchkin his way in Fate by trying to get access to ALL the True Magics just to give the Mages Association the middle finger.

    Meanwhile a certain wizard marshall is cackling in the background as mages scramble to get away...
     
    SI with Tinker of Fiction but instead of specific franchises it swaps genres, excluding useless genres like romance(franchises can usually be categorised into multiple genres, so actually good and useful franchises with the useless genres will have other genres that will/can be categorised as useful)
     
    Remember my old Roshi SI?

    Now imagine after he finishes his mission in Worm he is transported to the world of naruto...

    And his next mission is to take Rock Lee under his belt as an Apperentice.

    Objectives.

    Show Rock Lee that one doesn't have to be a ninja to be strong.

    If Lee leaves the Academy to study under the SI, the SI get a reward. Knowledge of how to learn the Power of Destruction.

    Second objective. Survive the Fourth great Shinobi war or Defeat the Tentails. Sealing Techniques not allowed.

    As a reward SI will gain the knowledge of how to use Kaikai.
     
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