Hmmph... this junior is a good seed [Cultivation Management Quest]

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I'll tell y'all right now, if 13th Heavenstage is this god damn hard, Ninth Pillar is going to be a nightmare.

Theoretically, prior Golden Devils have made it to the thirteenth heavenstage. In theory, some have even made it to the Eighth Pillar! And Dual-Souled!

But Nobody has reached the Ninth Pillar, which screams to me that it's quest locked or something. That we have to learn something in order to achieve the Ninth Pillar--and even then, I doubt there'll be many of us who reach it.

I mean I'm going to have Rina go for it if she lasts that long, certainly--but that doesn't make it easy.
Yeah I am certain its quest or requirement locked, and as I've mentioned before my suspicion is that its two paths that are almost mutually exclusive (there might be a way to do both based on a comment from Occipitallobe): The Single Pillar 13th Heavenstage path and the Ninth Pillar path.

This is why one of my goals after the Trials if she survives (which I'm pretty confident in), is to build up my Oasis Formation through successive turns of effort, and spend some time seeking lore on the Ninth Pillar's requirements.

Round 2, lets go! This is gonna be the big one with Bungie's + the collab

Hmm, another POV brought to light, that of the merchants that benefit from the Trials as morbid as it sounds.
Again, yew-ouch! the imagery of her wounds just this one line brings to me is *shudders...
Oh that's a excellent idea! It serves as a very good excuse for there to suddenly have a whole lot of Cool Things or Lifesaving Treasures making an appearance
Hmmm, I wonder if Gong Rencao heard the news about Ferenike and decided to help in a less obvious way?? 🤔🤔
Just so you know, i'm kinda a flash of Wolverine waking up in the Weapon X lab vibes. Reforged into a Human Warmachine!
I know she basically recovers to a unwounded state, but dammed the imagery it conjures up sure makes me thing of Colossus
I think this will shows the trust he has in Ferenike. In alot of Xianxia settings, saying such doubts to your boss is grounds for a beheading since you're judging those above you. Even in a Clan like the Golden Devils, i'm sure there are more subtle punishments for those who are disrespectful since it is built on military lines.

So yeah, dat trust level!
And now she rides!
So I figured having the merchants in here was a good way to establish that yeah this is pretty much a fact of life. The culture of the desert has shifted such to accommodate the fact these Trials happen precisely enough you could tell time by them and it was fun to think about how that actually looks. Thus, coffin carving merchant!

I'm glad my descriptions of her wounds continue to be horrifying! :D

And then with the whole fierce competition thing, I initially had the idea that they'd all flee and book it for greener pastures. Then what I knew of economics walked up and slapped me in the back of the head and went "The fuck you on about?" and I realized that a much more sensible reaction is merchants competing with each other, possibly outright kung fu tournaments for rights of sale to the Clan in this time when the clan is screaming hand over fist for anything possible to stem the damage of the Trials and its so deeply established of a pattern.

As for Gong Rencao's involvement, I'll leave that open to interpretation.

And yep I was very much going for a Mummy rising from its coffin, Bela Lugosi Dracula doing the same, or Wolverine waking up in the lab. What do you mean by Colossus imagery beyond his buffness and metal skin? Admittedly my own mind jumps to Shadow of the Colossus, which is totally a thing I am drawing from for visual thematics for her but I know you mean the X-Men character in some way.

I haven't had a lot of screen time for Ales and he's not going to get a lot, and is going to die eventually, so I figured having them have a close relationship is what I needed to do.
 
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Kinda sad reactions ended where they did tbh, since that was just before Tasos :p

I'll write something else tomorrow so that I can get two Saving Juniors since that's the point.
 
What do you mean by Colossus imagery beyond his buffness and metal skin?
It's more on how the emphasis of gunmetal and other Metallic choice of descriptions brings to mind the Metal Man for all that she looks exactly the same as before. I mean the onomatopoeia that comes to my mind is stuff like the grinding of metal, sound of scrapping as skin slides along stone etc.
I haven't had a lot of screen time for Ales and he's not going to get a lot, and is going to die eventually, so I figured having them have a close relationship is what I needed to do.
Le Grasp! Is he going sacrifice himself so Ferenike can get away from a Hunter in the Trial? :o
Kinda sad reactions ended where they did tbh, since that was just before Tasos :p

I'll write something else tomorrow so that I can get two Saving Juniors since that's the point.
👌 I have powered up after eating some food, so i shall try to at least clear the Introductions!

It had been a while now, since his attempt at reaping benefits from a trip to the Qiguai Secret Realm. In some respects, it had gone worse than expected. Getting thrashed and then robbed by a higher level expert in the beginning wasn't exactly a pleasant experience. However, that experience led to him finding that peculiar Thousand-Tongued Toad which had gifted him a potent Saliva droplet that it said could allow him to even fight Early Foundation Establishment, and certainly defeat anyone within his great realm.

His luck seemed to be turning around, and Amaranth began to grow bold again. That was his mistake. A band of cultivators that hungered for the heavenly luck that killing a Golden Devil was said to grant hunted after him for months. In the intermittent skirmishes his injuries began to worsen and worsen.
He still winced, remembering the severity of the damage. At one point, he swore he could see the bone poking out of a hanging limb, but to stop was to die, and he still hoped to find another treasure in this place.

Finally, he gave up, and shattered his pendant. He didn't want to waste his Droplet on something like this when he didn't have any guarantee of finding another treasure, so he cut his losses where they were.

The giant burning eagle materialized, grabbed his shoulders with its talons, and flew away. The shock of such a beast appearing made his hunters freeze long enough for it to get off the ground, and soon enough, he was safely through the doorway. Once he came back, he staggered his way into his room, and collapsed onto his bed. He rested like that for years until he was in a position where he could do light expeditions again. Amaranth feared for the worst.
Summarizing the Qiguai Secret Realm in this fashion is pretty interesting to me because it feels exactly like how the usual Qiguai Secret Realm will go for the average lucky cultivator. Equal good and bad and in the end escaping with just one treasure.

I think the part i like the most is the emphasis on how it was Amaranth choice to take further risks for greater rewards instead of exiting after his first loot. It's a very understandable decision and is also likely the decision that is the main source of the majority of the Deaths. That idea of " Just one more shot ".

🤞@ReaderOfFate Nice Work!
The head of the Clan had made a gamble, and the broken technique palace that he and the many others who were at Qi Condensation visited was an inferior boost to more immediate, yet temporary measures. The incoming trials would be a slaughter, and not the good type.

The Clan that had helped him throughout his life in ways both simple and grand would be taking a terrible blow this year, and if he could help reduce that in some small way himself, he'd be glad to take it.
I like his calm acceptance of the news here. The instant understanding he had of the Clan's intention and the resolution to do whatever he can to help it in turns seems like the much prized combination of Loyalty and Stubbornness that the Clan loves.
He recognized several by sight. There was the one who had invited them all, Rina Callista, at the front. The Ninth Prince was rather distinctive as well, with his many snakes around him. There was a woman with a bear alongside her, equal in strength, as well as a man who gave off a strange aura of many metals.
For this part, i like the choice of only mentioning Rina and The Ninth Prince by name, it shows that not everyone is familiar with the upcoming talents but that Rina And Ninth Prince's legends were so well-known that knowledge of it has entered the Clan Consciousnesses.
Tasos had heard tales, had known what was coming - his parents had grown up in the eve of the trial, after all. In fact, it was quite strange for Tasos to think that some of the current disciples would be equal of age to them - but such strangeness was par for the course for a cultivator. And he had no time to dwell on things that would not matter come the battle.
@Zephias This is a very interesting approach towards the different generations. Quite unique among all the other mentions of Generations etc, i like this makes it more relatable just by that simple line of they're the same age as my Parents.

Tying the generational gap to such a relatable perspective instantly brings to my mind the Mortal Perspective of the Good Seeds who started in the first turn. To the Mortals, they're the champions they grew up with, people who they aspire to be. The ones who's stories and legends have shaped their entire life and now, would also be the ones sallying forth once more for them and their children.

I kinda want to see a Omake about that, how grandpas and parents reassuring their children that there's no need to fear, Rina Callista will save the day as she had before. The Ninth Prince and his Serpents will protect them from harm.

Maybe i'll even try to write it if i can come up with a concrete plot.
It was known that the attrition from the Trials was primarily on those towards the bottom and middle of a Realm - it had been so, during the war, and it would be so during the Trials.Such was, in a way, the curse of fast progress in the Golden Devils. The cull would come and take those you held close, even if it did not take you - but Tasos was not about to let it happen.
This is a unique way of summing up the losses experienced by the Clan. I never thought of it in this fashion before, but it makes sense and it also further drives in the dread of the Cultivators who are of that level. They Know they're the most likely to die, is there any wonder that they will take the greatest risks to try and overcome it?

Sobering thoughts.
From Rina Callista, jewel of the current hundred-year crop, sitting as befitted of the one who had called the meeting, to figures such as Aretaphila of the Miya and the elusive Ninth Prince. There was the Eirene girl who had blitzed through records, becoming his equal in cultivation in her first 20 years - and not too far was Peta Condos and her partner bear, Wajo. The poisoner and brewer Centenius, who he had quoted to Eudokia years ago as an example of what one could do if one was willing to be flexible, was now face-to-face with him. The array prodigy, Adelphos, and Wei Feng were here - so was Mograine, of Tasos's own generation of prodigies. All were now technically his peers.
Something interesting i noticed in comparison to @ReaderOfFate choice i mentioned above. For Tasos, it makes sense that he knows their names since the majority of them were the backs he was chasing, most of them being legends before his time. I thought that it's a interesting contrast and also shows the increasing importance of the Good Seeds to the later generations.

It shows them of the stars that will defend the clan and them, inspiring them to become able to do the same so that as more and more time passes, the number of stars will increase and the darkness that covers the Clan's future will be lit by the brilliance of the Good Seeds as they grow and shine.
Ferenike rode with incredible speed, the dunes of the desert rushing after her as her breaths sucked them towards her like a storm, the sand becoming red and glassy as it streamed after her and lightning sparked in its bulk. She was almost late, wasn't she?

Her smile broadened. She could feel it coming, the Change. Fate's course set off course. But here would be a gathering of her fellows, friends and masters of their crafts one and all. She hoped that things would go as she felt they might.
@BungieONI I like this! Especially reading this after the omake where Ferenike is healed! It really conveys the sheer joy she has in being able to move freely, of feeling once more someone who can protect instead of someone that needs protection. 🤞
"Hello, Clan Brothers and Clan Sisters." Ferenike said, her golden robes girded with practical lamellar of spirit bronze and her shield on her back and fire in her eyes. She bowed and swept off her hat. "It is good to meet everyone. I am Ferenike." She straightened and ran her eyes over the many people present. She knew Rina Callista and the Ninth Prince and Magnus Centenius on sight, as well as Achille Adephos after a moment of thought, but the others less so. The scent of Fire Wine caught her nose as she approached and sat at the table in one of the remaining open spaces.
Dat Confidence! Really happy to see Ferenike is back in peak condition! That's what i was looking for!
She paused there, glass pressed to her mouth.

"oh no…" She thought, trying to hide the flush to her face "it burns, why did i do this…

However, she was excellent at hiding such shows of weakness, and set the glass down, only a little reddened from the drink. "Good wine." She complimented, and set her hands back together—taking a moment for the antics of the room to calm down as the rest of the room settled down.
Haha, i like how despite all her achievements, despite her strength and despite her being from the First Generation, she can't handle the Fire Wine. Really gives off a slight litter sister feel and makes the juxtaposition between her personality and abilities stand out even more.
 
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It's more on how the emphasis of gunmetal and other Metallic choice of descriptions brings to mind the Metal Man for all that she looks exactly the same as before. I mean the onomatopoeia that comes to my mind is stuff like the grinding of metal, sound of scrapping as skin slides along stone etc.
Le Grasp! Is he going sacrifice himself so Ferenike can get away from a Hunter in the Trial? :o
There was actually a change here :D She does look pretty different. Before she was less metallic her flesh being bronze tanned and reddish from brass colors. Now its actually metallic and a gunmetal color and texture like this:



Something that is brassy, and shines red-blue-green in the light and she has rose glass teeth now like her nails.

And yeah she moves silently and feels awesome.

And nah I don't think Ales will? He's just old.
 
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Perspective Shift: Phaedo (Qiguai Secret Realm)
Cameo: Ambrus Nike

"Form up!"

The desperation in Critias' voice lashed at them nearly as hard as the tumbling rain, his rough baritone breaking on the last word. Next to her, Phaedo felt someone fall, gasping wetly. She looked: she shouldn't have, an impact jarred its way up her shield arm, nearly making her stumble.

Simmias was dead.

"Form up!"

Phaedo gritted her teeth, stepped up to make up for the now missing man, her boots slick as they dug through the mud, and tried ramming her shield forward.

It slammed into the shield afore her, its blackened, mirror polish reflecting the golden glow that was a training cohort trying to pull itself together, but rather than the expected ring of metal hitting metal, the impact oozed: her shield was stuck. The shadowy Qiguai Realm soldier (or puppet, or beast, or for all she knew, it was a friggin' Heavenly Treasure, reacting to their presence) in front of her slashed with its gladius, and Phaedo parried desperately, nearly losing her nose as her opponent's weapon drew a line of fire across her cheek. She jerked urgently at the leather strap that connected her to her shield, before spitting out a curse and letting it go.

"Form–"

She missed the last word as she lashed out with her foot, kicking her own shield – and that of her enemy's up, flinging its guard away.

The Shadow Soldier had only a moment to bring up its blade to block, before her sword entered where its throat should have been. She gave it a vicious twist, ya
nking it out in a burst of purple-black gore and saw the fire that was its eyes wink out before its body vanished, armament clattering to the ground.

She didn't even have time to pick up her shield: another Shadow Warrior stepped up, taking its place, much in the same way she'd taken Simmias', jabbing at her with a short spear. She tried to step on it and break the haft, felt the stupidity of her move as the spear lashed out, snake-like, and thwacked her in the shin – and then she did stumble, and it was hot, frantic swordwork as she turned her stumble into a half-hopping, half-running rush, pushing and shoving, as she threw herself at the enemy, her shorter blade would give her the better of it the closer she got, but her training forgotten, she used it more like a club than a sword, beating at him with it.

"Form up!" yelled Critias, uselessly.

Shut up, she wanted to say, her gladius digging into the haft of the spear, her free hand punching, grabbing, pulling at anything that'd give her-

Then something outside of her awareness hit her in the temple, and she fell, her body hitting the ground in a sideways heap. She grunted, choking off a cry as fire and pressure bloomed in her back before, with a sickening sound, like meat leaving a skewer, the pressure left and the fire started turning to ice, her lifeblood ebbing its way out of her. The last she could recall, was the mud, cold on her cheek, and her sword, still clasped in her hand. She hadn't dropped it. It was important not to drop it. Good.

Good.

Good.







The sun was shining, hot and pitiless in the way only a desert sun could shine.

A hand, hard, callused, reached out.

Bruised, but not quite broken, Phaedo accepted the hand and allowed it to pull her, stumbling, to her feet. Beneath her, the sands of the training pit were thick with the blood and sweat of twenty-three teenagers trying their best to beat one weather-worn old-timer of a soldier. No one knew how old Drillmaster Nike was. He wasn't old like the Grand Elder or even the Core Formation elders, but he was up there, years-wise, like, at least a hundred or something, and, like a mortal going white, his hair and beard showed spots of green.

He was a head taller than even the tallest of them, his frame thick with muscle.

And his face was... well, it was missing pieces. Lots of pieces. What wasn't missing was scarred. When they'd first seen him, their little group of misfit rejects had for the first time in a long time been utterly silent, unable to keep from staring. Then he'd beat them black and blue until they could focus on not being beat black and blue rather than on the particulars of his appearance.

Today, he seemed... tired. There wasn't a better word for it. Just… tired. Still, he gave them his time, which was more than what most of the Clan had managed.

"Now what," he asked, as he always asked, "did we learn here today?"

The bruised and bloodied teenagers stared sullenly at him. He stared back, with his one good eye, expectantly.

As drillmasters went, he was not, uh, the best. They'd gone through half a dozen at this point, so it wasn't hard to tell which were the ones that were experienced, and which were the ones that they had been foisted onto, their reputation for trouble making having landed them with worse and worse mentors.

However, what he lacked in teaching skills, he more than made up in personal prowess. The man was a monster.

Finally, after an awkward minute, a hand went up.

"Yes?"

"We learned that we all suck?" Simmias said. That earned a round of surprised laughter from the other recruits, as well as a chuckle from the Drillmaster.

"Well, yes, but that's obvious," said Ambrus. "Anyone else?"

"That you're really, really strong?" said Euthyphro.

He considered that before shaking his head. "Mmm, no, though that's true too."

"That we need to train even harder!" said Critias solemnly.

"Yes, but that's always true. Stop trying to brownnose," Drillmaster Nike said, without missing a beat. Critias backed down, cheeks reddening in humiliation.

Phaedo took a deep breath and raised her hand.

"Yes?"

"We learned," she said in a strong, clear, and above all else, cool voice, "that formation-fighting sucks."

There was a round of surprised, nervous laughter, almost close to a titter, if you could ever describe soldiers as tittering – but to their collective astonishment Drillmaster Nike nodded. Critias looked like he was going to have a stroke, poor guy, couldn't happen to a nicer formation leader.

"You're right. It does suck."

Paradoxically, it was his agreement that broke her cool. Words she'd meant for others tumbled forth from her lips, bitter and angry.

"Sir, if you know it's useless, then why do we do it? Shouldn't we just learn how to," Phaedo made a vague gesture, somehow encompassing the giant hoplite soldier that was so key to the foundational battle doctrine of the Clan, "do that? Why drill us with all the rest of this nonsense? If we don't have enough qi to manifest any given Formation, we'll be dead anyway. And, to be blunt, sir, we're all dead men walking. We need to be doing useful shit, not," she bit her tongue in frustration, "not this. This is stupid – it's not even how real soldiers fight."

She'd seen a demonstration match between two legionnaires once. It had been awe-inspiring not… this dirty, sweaty, hold-the-line nonsense, where you fought elbow to elbow with no room to maneuver, and no qi to speak of, like a mortal.

They were young, but they were soldiers still. And unlike these old-timers, time was a luxury they did not have.

Drillmaster Nike nodded wearily.

"Is this what you all believe? Speak plainly – there will be no punishment."

A scattered round of umm's and sir's and yesses echoed forth, save for Critias, looking at them all in naked mortification.

"We do this," Nike said, "because you are scared."

Phaedo bristled. "I'm n-"

"Don't," he said, holding up a hand, "lie to me – and more importantly, yourself. You are scared. You are, all of you, scared. It's not your fault: your previous drillmasters tried to prevent this from happening and failed. So now, you get me."

He took a deep breath.

"Know this: you are not alone. Five out of ten cohorts show the signs, an unbelievably high percentage. Your generation was born in fear – bathed in it, brought up in it, and are now drowning in it. It's all you know. It's why your Hoplite Formation remains so unsteady and it's why we are drilling what happens when it breaks. Because, with the way you are right now, make no mistake, recruits, it will break and you will die. The Trials will be here, and they will be here soon, and none of you are ready. We can't risk putting you in a greater, more experienced group because your fear will poison the Dao Heart of their formation too."

Phaedo's hands made fists, nails digging into the palms of her hand.

She had thought… it didn't matter what she had thought. Her voice was leaden, hollow: "Is that all, sir?"

"Formation fighting – not the kind with big glowing qi projections, just normal, in the dirt formation fighting, where you're smashing army against army - is… difficult. Your sides are exposed, your motions are restricted, and the blow that will kill you might not be a blow you can block because the guy right next to you will foul you up if you move to block it. And that's why this is a useful exercise. Because your comrade will be right there next to you. They will guard your life, and you will guard theirs. Formation fighting isn't meant for duels. It is meant for war. In war, all you can do is your duty, all you can do is trust that the men and women beside you are doing theirs. There is both no glory in it, and all the glory in the world."

Nike stared at them and for some reason they all stood straighter.

"Recruits, there is no shame in fearing death. But there is shame letting those that you would call brother or sister die, in service of that fear. Get up. And keep getting up. It is the only way any of you will make it out alive."

He clapped his hands, breaking the spell his voice had cast.

"So, let's start again."







Phaedo woke with a start, hand still holding her gladius, the mud around her still churning with fighters moving back and forth, blood and fire spilling onto the ground.

Despite the rain, she felt parched. And maybe because of it, she felt cold.

"You don't ask for much, do you sir," she muttered.

Then, after taking a deep breath, she got back up.

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Author's Note: @DangerKitty I ended up using Ambrus as a tool for expositing what I think is one the gravest consequence of the Trials. I totally understand if you would rather this not be Ambrus delivering that lecture, I'll change it to some other Nike if that's what you would prefer.

@occipitallobe more fate
 
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Perspective Shift: Phaedo (Qiguai Secret Realm)
Cameo: Ambrus Nike



Author's Note: @DangerKitty I ended up using Ambrus as a tool for expositing what I think is one the gravest consequence of the Trials. I totally understand if you would rather this not be Ambrus delivering that lecture, I'll change it to some other Nike if that's what you would prefer.

@occipitallobe more fate
His attitude is pretty appropriate, there just a few things about his character that are off due to me not keeping up with his character sheet. they should be minor edits to fix though.

first off his age is actually 120, not 60. Yeah i hadn't updated it in a "few" turns lol. he should be quite obviously aged and experienced.

secondly is his appearance

Ambrus Nike (Sorry!) - Horrifying Fate. Badly wounded, losing an eye and an ear, with extensive scarring making up one half of his face. Pure luck saved his life, as he and both Aretaphilia Myia were sent on a mission, and ambushed by a Core Formation Cannibal. They together discovered a mystical mirror, and were able to escape, Ambrus escaping after being wounded as Aretaphilia lead the Core Formation elder away. Over the following twenty years managed to regain his 6th Heavenstage cultivation, after falling back to 2nd Heavenstage due to the severity of his wounds.

He got quite injured in one turn that never got fixed so he should actually have quite an intimidating appearance.


In short he is a 120 year old "old monster" (at least compared to young uns like your character prob lol) who cares a lot about his juniors but has quite a scary and intense look to him due to how he is horribly disfigured. As far as how this would change your characters should treat him, thats up to you. But they are probably aware of just how experienced he is, particularly for qi condensation vs qi condensation battles. And they should probably be a bit more intimidated by him i imagine.

i do like your take on him though. maybe he uses his scarring and disfigurement as an example of what can happen to them if they mess up? like what could happen to them if they continue to let their fear ruin their formations dao heart?
 
"We do this," Nike said, "because you are scared."

Phaedo bristled. "I'm n-"

"Don't," he said, holding up a hand, "lie to me – and more importantly, yourself. You are scared. You are, all of you, scared. It's not your fault: your previous drillmasters tried to prevent this from happening and failed."

He took a deep breath.

"And you are not alone. Five out of ten cohorts show the signs, an unbelievably high percentage. Your generation was born in fear – bathed in it, brought up in it, and are now drowning in it. It's all you know. It's why your Hoplite Formation remains so unsteady and it's why we are drilling what happens when it breaks. Because, with the way you are right now, make no mistake, recruits, it will break and you will die. The Trials will be here, and they will be here soon, and none of you are ready. We can't risk putting you in a greater, more experienced group because your fear will poison the Dao Heart of their formation too."

Phaedo's hands made fists, nails digging into the palms of her hand.

She had thought… it didn't matter what she had thought. Her voice was leaden, hollow: "Is that all, sir?"
I'm really enjoying the POVs you've been using in your omakes. Like how i never considered how the average Clansmen would be affected by the Purchase of the Palace and what they will do in response, so too did i not consider the effects of a generation growing up knowing that the bells will toll for them.

It seemed so obvious when you listed it out. Of Course the generation will have fear in their hearts knowing that the Trials will come before they can prepare, Of course that will lead to them not having a Dao Heart strong enough for our Bread & Butter. And Of course the Clan won't want their weakness to affect the rest and so will cast them aside for the greater good.

The line about fear reminded me of the one from Bane in the Batman Movies. But regardless of it's origins, the truth behind it still rings true. That heady feeling of fear rising and choking them, making them feel as if they were drowning is conveyed especially well!

"Formation fighting – not the kind with big glowing qi projections, just normal, in the dirt formation fighting, where you're smashing army against army - is… difficult. Your sides are exposed, your motions are restricted, and the blow that will kill you might not be a blow you can block because the guy right next to you will foul you up if you move to block it. And that's why this is a useful exercise. Because your comrade will be right there next to you. They will guard your life, and you will guard theirs. Formation fighting isn't meant for duels. It is meant for war. In war, all you can do is your duty, all you can do is trust that the men and women beside you are doing theirs. There is both no glory in it, and all the glory in the world."
I like this as well! This was what i originally envisioned when i saw we were Formation Specced, about fighting shoulder to shoulder with your comrades and trusting them with your back with a Dash of Qi to enhance it's effects.

It's definitely something that i plan for Xiao Yi to work on developing a Qi Formation for. Something that grants advantages via the power of working together in clockwork precision.
 
An extra Saving Juniors bonus roll. Regular Saving Juniors writers will get one roll to assist the clan. Those engaged in this omake will get two
This please.

@occipitallobe
Could you add the below information on the benefits of going beyond the 9th Qi condensation heavenstage to one of the cultivation information threadmarks?

Updated the cultivation bonuses for Qi Condensation 10-13. A brief explainer follows:

10th Heavenstage - 108 (Benefit: Body Purification Stage - Cultivator's body is cleansed of all impurities, gains considerable strength, speed, and toughness.)

10th Heavenstage is of immense benefit to Foundation Building (offering one small realm worth of strength) and of mild benefit Core Formation cultivators (offering roughly a quarter of a small realm), but falls away during Nascent Soul.

11th Heavenstage - 188 (Benefit: Qi Purification Stage - Cultivator gains pure Qi that flows through a pure body. This pure Qi allows them to fuel more powerful techniques, and makes a cultivator unparalleled in their small realm.)

11th Heavenstage is of mild benefit to Foundation Building (offering half a small realm), and Core Formation (offering half a small realm), but falls away during Nascent Soul.

12th Heavenstage - 208 (Benefit: Soul Purification Stage - Cultivator purifies their soul, allowing them resistance against soul attacks, a boost to soul arts, and a large boost to soul cultivation in the Nascent Soul realm.)

Crucial for Nascent Soul cultivators. Offers 1.5x cultivation speed, but costs no more resources.

13th Heavenstage - 288 (Benefit: Dao Purification Stage - Cultivator purifies their Dao in the same way breaking into the Core Formation Realm requires. They are able to cultivate the One-Pillar Foundation Establishment path, yielding many benefits.)

Offers considerable benefits in the Foundation Building realm as only one pillar is required. The cultivator will consume 7x the usual resources to advance through Foundation Building, but builds a pillar of immense strength. In Early they will be able to challenge Late, in Mid they can challenge the Great Circle, in Late they are unrivalled in Foundation Building, and on reaching the Great Circle they will be able to stand against Early Core Formation experts.

Each realm increases the chances you die during tribulation, though, and as a Golden Devil Clan member your Good Seed is already at significant risk here.
 
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Eirene of Nowhere 7 - watch the hands
Bonus saving Juniors roll FUCK YEAH

Increased efficiency from coordination!

I wonder if there's a diminishing effect for omake affecting Fate rolls... cause I'm going to write another one.

Eirene of Nowhere seventh (individual) omake - watch the hands​

Liao Zi was having a good time.

It was said that Golden Devils kept a good watch on their territories, that bandit cultivators were doomed. But in the long run everyone was doomed, weren't they? Age claimed everyone, with time, the important thing was to live well. Besides, he knew firsthand just how thinly their resources were stretched at the moment - and if he managed to extend his lifespan at least a little beyond what it would have been otherwise with the plundered cultivation resources he managed to seize with his gang and with the refusal to die for the Heaven-cursed devils, that would be a victory already, would it not? And even if he didn't manage, he would still have lived well in the meantime, which was the important part as far as he was concerned.

Currently, he was living it up by chasing after a fleeing young woman. She was clearly a cultivator, but he could not discern particular power around her - perhaps first or second Heavenstage, far below his own eighth, stumbling into his territory by ill-luck. She was visibly giving it her all, panting and stumbling but not giving up, aware she was running for her life.

He, on the other hand, was relaxed, more jogging than running. This was his entertainment; one could only terrorize mortals so much before it grew dreadfully dull.

He sped up a little, knowing she could sense his presence. She redoubled her efforts, increasing her speed just a little.

He sped up more, and was rewarded by a growing look of terror on her face as she glanced back.

...the distance wasn't shrinking, though.

He sped up.

He sped up.

He sped up.

Until he was at the edge of his ability, and he was still not gaining.

He glanced back, and of course his gang had fallen behind. None of them were as fast as him; why was this girl? And if she could run this fast, why was she so slow at first?

The moment of confusion cost him, as all of a sudden he tripped - he could swear there was nothing on the ground before him a moment ago! - and fell.

He was struck by two - no, three sensations at once: the pain of a knife being plunged into his back, the loss of all sensation below his neck... and the sudden silence.

Silence? What had he been hearing?

Oh. Music. There had been music. Why had there been music?...

The knife struck again, this time into his brain through his neck, and he never had time to finish the thought.

***​

Eirene of Nowhere wiped the dagger off on the man's clothes, long desensitized to death caused by her hands. The rest of his people were being mopped up by legionaries right now; she'd volunteered to personally deal with the leader. He had a more than a couple of decades of fighting experience on her, having been a legionary before he turned on the Clan with his buddies; disgusting, and a greater challenge than most bandits presented. So the legionaries she was working with expressed worry for her wellbeing, uncertain she'd be able to deal with the man's combat skill with just the power difference of a single Heavenstage. Perhaps they needed to call for help, hold off on the operation, sacrifice a few more innocent lives rather than risk that of a cultivation prodigy who could go on to save many more in the long run?

She had a trick, though.
end omake​

i hereby present the defense of my thesis "properly written bards are horror movie monsters actually"

edit: bards and pissed-off healers
 
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I wonder if there's a diminishing effect for omake affecting Fate rolls... cause I'm going to write another one.
Not that i'm aware. In fact the reverse is true, more omakes = better bonuses to Fate Roll

With the strongest example being Ferenike in the last turn's Good Seed Report.

Ferenike:
Omake Reward:
Bloodline boost to combat as per omake. Fights as the 10th Heavenstage.
Fate - Sent south to the war. With her group of trainees, she was involved in the disastrous defeat where the Elder of War was killed. Wounded, she managed to shepherd most of her trainees into a southern city, only to find it under siege by the Devil Bees. After months of siege, the city of Guo Wo fell, and the remaining garrison of the city were driven out. They were rescued by a column of relief troops, but Ferenike was Badly Wounded, trying to save what little remainder of her command. The only bright point in her past decades was her ability to break through cultivation-wise prior to heading south.
Cultivation - Rose from 8th Heavenstage to 9th Heavenstage. 3 turns from breaking through. Cannot advance further while Wounded.
Health -
Currently Badly Wounded. 40 years to fully recover. (Fun note. Without a Fate bonus this would've been considerably, considerably worse. Ferenike's Fate bonus was big.)

Healing is going to be a potentially multiple-stage process. Wounds go (roughly), minor (basically a major negative multiplier to cultivation that turn but healed at the end), 20-year (negative cultivation for this turn and next), 40-year (this turn and the next two!), and crippling. Crippling is permanent, and requires a Cool Thing Bonus (or very favorable Fate) to heal at all - usually upgrading crippling injuries to wounds. Wounds can be healed by the use of a Cool Thing bonus, though. Note that the above isn't fully set in stone, but is likely to be the system I settle on.

Most importantly, crippling and wounds both massively increase the chances of negative outcomes. A wounded cultivator is more likely to get wounded more badly or get crippled, and a crippled cultivator is considerably more likely to die. So if you enter the Secret Realm without and get wounded, you're much more likely to get crippled next. If that happens, your chances of death skyrocket. Secret Realms are very dangerous - there's immense reward available, but the risk is commensurate.
So it seems that without the fate bonus from the Omakes, it would have been Crippling.
 
I meant diminishing returns, forgot the right phrasing - that the fourth omake gives less than the third etc

the question was rhetorical anyway ofc i was writing that regardless XD
 
I meant diminishing returns, forgot the right phrasing - that the fourth omake gives less than the third etc

the question was rhetorical anyway ofc i was writing that regardless XD
Ah. I believe there was a mention by @occipitallobe about not wanting to give hard numbers to the bonus because that would lead to people attempting to game the system by writing Omakes with long wordcounts etc.

I personally like to believe that more can always help lol. So i just write one if i get inspired to do so :D
 
Very fair lmao

I'm just on my fourth omake this turn and I'm wondering if writing more will make any difference at all.

I guess the point of the system as occipitallobe likes it is that yes it always will!
 
Holy shit y'all madlads. I had a busy weekend, but mood drastically improved now that my laptop is officially bootable(ignoring the screaming CPU fan, its replacement is ordered and not expected to give any trouble), and if work doesn't pop a surprise in my ass I should hopefully have an omake for this turn up within 24 hours again!

(probably before reading all the new omakes, considering theres enough to eat several hours of read time)
 
Ferenike 15 - Shadows Beneath the Sun
Ferenike 15 - Shadows Beneath the Sun​

Like always the Desert was the same. Even as the arrival of the Trial Hunters loomed closer and closer. Golden sand for li upon li and the baking heat of the sun, now reflecting off her new metallic skin and rose red glass nails.

She felt almost as she had before she was injured, full of energy. But even if it felt no different she could see the changes the coffin had wrought on her body and her dantian whenever she cared to look.

Confusing.

And all this free energy left her thoughts rushing back down well trod and formerly abandoned paths, returning to old conclusions and refining them anew, taking them even further and finding new conclusions with a healed and clear perspective.

Strange and wild ideas almost, now that it was the time for Action.

Waiting was over and all the energy she had built while doing so, all the energy they had built was rushing free.

The sun was setting now, as she guided her camel into the orchard of trees and fields of hardy and nutritious plants which surrounded the little unnamed Oasis she had come to.

Her camel nickered softly as she walked down the yellow cobblestones towards the center of the oasis. Around her she saw the shapes of people going about their business and watching this new traveler carefully. Some were rushing towards the center, and she gave them time to do so, taking her time to breathe in the sweet air of this place and its slightly denser Qi.

The central pool of the oasis was a well crafted thing, a natural spring bubbling up from some deposit of Spirit Stones or other crystalized organ tissue, that had been shaped into a square pool with a border of smooth white stone pavers and a subtle pattern of white and blue tiles. All around this square the channels of canals and irrigation directed the water of the spring to the oasis orchards around. Trees dotted the area in little plots of soil and sand for shade.

Seated nearby the shore, resting his bare feet in the waters was a very elderly man with three brawny boys and two equally brawny women standing near his shoulders as they looked at Ferenike. They all looked related, brothers and sisters near their grandfather it seemed from the set of their faces and mouths.

The younger ones were all near the second or third Heavenstage, but the elderly man was in the fourth.

Ferenike stopped at the edge of the open plaza around the central pool and dismounted. She bowed in the direction of the elder, who had not looked at her. "May we speak Grandfather?" She said in the Third Sea dialect of the sands, using an old honorific for this man, the soft syllables tugging at her throat as they reminded her of home.

There was a taut pause for a moment and then a tiny, wheezing laugh and a shifting of old cloth and a splash. "Come closer Traveler of the Sands, come share water with us and make merry." A thready, wizened voice said. Ferenike let out a knot of tension in her chest. That was a much better welcome than she expected.

There was a smack of flesh on flesh. "Jiji, go get food, we'll have ourselves a story here." The voice continued.

"Yes papa." A quiet voice said as Ferenike straightened. One of the women, whose voice was more masculine than she might let on walked towards a small domed building nestled in the trees on the other side of the plaza.

The elderly man was straight backed, seated cross legged with his hands clasped in his lap, and his skin was craggy like the dunes and dark from the sun, so much so that his eyes seemed like small glittering gems in the shadows of his weathered face. His beard, white, hung down to his lap.

She walked closer and sat across from the grandfather in the shade of the date tree. His children, had relaxed, hands moving away from weapons as they sat and lounged behind him in positions that reminded her of big cats and how her mother and father liked to relax. Stretched out and quiescent.

They waited for a moment until the girl from before came back followed by two much smaller children of seven or eight, all of them carrying bowls and linen bags and urns which they set out around the gathering. When she was done the woman chivied off the smaller children, who couldn't take their eyes off of Ferenike and particularly her shiny glass nails without prompting and then settled with her siblings after handing the elder an empty wooden bowl.

Carefully the man leaned over and scooped some of the oasis water into the bowl and then passed it to Ferenike.

She took it in both hands and bowed over it slightly, then drank. It was refreshingly sweet and extremely cool.

She smiled. "That was very good, thank you Grandfather."

The man smiled and nodded his head in a bow of his own. "Good! Come on then everyone, grab something to eat!" He said with a clap as he reached into a small jar and dug out some dates to chew.

A flurry of controlled chaos ensued as food was passed around and soon Ferenike had a half dozen bowls laid out around her, a spread of rice and seasoned meat and fruit at her fingertips.

Savoring the food in front of her Ferenike began to speak. "Agreements have been made amongst my peers to defend ourselves against what is coming using our gathered power. We come to trade."

The elder smiled. "I am Grandfather Laosha. Name yourself girl." He said with a coaxing gesture.

"I am Ferenike of the Ninth Legion of the Golden Devils and the Sands. Daughter of Hesha, who was daughter of Ziyou, who was daughter of Shucai." She said, a little girl before her mother reciting her names again. The fire of the hearth snapped in her ears, a sharp memory.

Grandfather Laosha frowned in sympathy. "May she rest." He rubbed his chin in consideration. "The Golden Devils have done right by us. You are respectful. And I knew Ziyou and traded drinks with her more than once. Lets begin negotiations then."

And so Ferenike began to lay out a loose outline of what she needed; long keeping food, medical supplies, navigation gear, water collection arrays, and the safe locations for caches in this area west of the Uncast Molds. All valuable things for those out in the sands for long periods, but easy to make if one was prosperous and already heading out of Clan territory.

She'd seen how Laosha's grandchildren had cheekbones a bit like hers, and lighter hair than was the Third Sea norm. They were at risk. And they were leaving, heading west into the mountains and towards their hillfolk kin.

They would return but for now they could make use of the funds she had received from the gathering, ferrying it to these people. Grandfather Laosha kept talks going for more than four hours, many courses of food passing between their lips as they haggled. Around them stacks of crates, urns and long boxes containing medical supplies and fragile arrays built up as Ferenike laid out her own wealth in Spirit Stones, and other easy to transport valuables.

It was deep in the night, the stars wheeling in the clear sky and reflecting off the oasis pool so that it looked like an inky expanse of the night sky brought down into reach, when they were finally done.

"A good deal Grandfather." Ferenike said as she clasped her hands and bowed. The stack of materiel behind her was at least twice her height and packed full of medical supplies and water catch arrays and some preserved food.

He laughed. "A good deal Ferenike. You'll make a terrifying merchant one day." He said in a thready rasp, his own pile of Spirit Stones, drugs and information all gathered in a wicker basket quite a bit smaller than her pile, but slightly more valuable than what he had lost.

Now it was just them out here under the stars, his children having left to do work in the family compound she could dimly see.

"My family will do well with these and be strong enough to make it to the hills." He said with satisfaction.

"You do not expect to return to the Sands." Ferenike said solemnly.

He shook his head. "I'm old and weathered girl. This'll be my last trip west, and my bones will return to the Sands." He stood, cracking his back with staccato pops. "Go, stay here as you like for a day. There's a room open for you, Jiji will have left a marker on it." He offered.

She smiled, glass teeth dim in the starlight. "I'll be training out here Grandfather till dawn I think. I'll rest when the sun rises." She told him.

He shrugged. "Feel free!" And walked towards his home with a jaunty step and a whistle, his basket under one arm. She gathered up her own goods into her storage ring.

Ferenike then waited until he was gone, taking in the air of the oasis and relishing the slightly denser Qi. She already had plans to visit oases like this one when it came time for her to form the Oasis Formation.

Now however, it was time for training.

She took up a stance of Legion Standard, feet shoulder width apart with one in front. One hand and arm a spear held out, the other a shield held close. She practiced her strikes, hands stabbing out as a mantra ran through her head.

Make of your hands spears.

Strike. Strike. Strike.

There was only her feet on the ground. Strike.

Her body moving like a well oiled machine. Strike.

The energy within her, flooding down well carved channels. Strike.

Slowly she tried to align her channels, untangling them and shaping them so that the energy flowing from her feet and dantian, up and out through her fingertips erupted in one ferocious blow.

She remembered what she had done to Zu Jing and the vision of thousands upon thousands of soldiers invading his body vividly.

As she struck again and again her mind sank into her body, the hyper awareness of her bloodline rising up and consuming her mind's eye. Sinking through her skin and muscle and tendon, to the veins that ran through and around everything and her little glass soldiers, each a single flake of glass invisible to the naked eye flowing through them.

All of them marching to the flow of her Qi. It was a little like drilling she realized, training every tiny part of her body to move how she wished it to. Made more complicated by each action needing to be unique. Again and again she moved, watching how her body executed the blow.

Hanging above her Dantian was an image of a technique, an Invasion of the enemy's body and the destruction of their meridians and acupoints and tissues. She'd done a very simple and incomplete form of it before and she knew how to do it again, but she wanted more. Something that could pierce even the hardest flesh, creating a breach for her inner armies to march within and destroy them.

Slowly as the stars wheeled over head it became clear that her body could move perfectly, down to the last speck of glassy blood, directed by her will without error. Again and again she could achieve what she had done to Zu Jing, molten glass beading on the tips of her fingers. She could go further, stronger and faster and she did it again and again. But as she came to realize, she was not strong enough to go even further than that.

Her Qi was not dense enough, fast enough, and the volume of its flow insufficient. The technique was incomplete. Patiently she worked at it, repeating the move over and over as she examined herself, no longer refining the action, but instead trying to see what she was missing.

And she could not see where the failure was, as Qi cycled up from her dantian and her rooted stance, up through her lungs and past her heart, and then along her arm and out her fingertips.

She let go.

Invasion!

A bright red glass spear flew from her hands, launched from ten thousand soldiers. It sailed over the trees and out of the oasis entirely. She breathed in, taking Qi from the air and cycling it through her body as she replaced what she had expended.

She took another breath, feeling the Qi of the air settling in her lungs, and she had an idea. Changing her breathing she opened a connection between the Qi of the air and her body, like her breath trick to create sandstorms, one long and great breath. Qi surged through her, her skin and muscles and her little soldiers soaking in the energy. She felt like she was a tuning fork.

Again!

This time she was closer, her blows slicing through the air and her spears soaring even higher, seeming to rise towards the Heavens like birds. But still not strong enough, no matter how much she tried.

She was still missing something. She kept practicing, the mosaic in her mind shifting and clacking as her thoughts raced onwards, almost ignoring her body now.

She needed a stronger technique. She herself could become stronger by breaking through to the next stage, she could gain the ability to grasp more Qi and the skill to channel more of it at once, some alteration of the Qi distribution that increased the raw piercing ability of the technique.

But none of those felt right. The frisson of energy in gunmetal and rose glass dantian pushed her on to look at what she already had, and what she had was a bloodline that in some ways exemplified the idea of humans being made of an incredible variety of distinct parts. Each of her small muscles, every pore on her skin, every vein, every little glass soldier working together.

A wild fancy took her. Setting her feet she took another great breath and aligning her body she struck again, this time diverting some Qi to settle within her tiny blood glass soldiers instead of leaving them. Trying to strengthen a part of the process of the technique.

There was a loud bang as the spear shot away into the sky, trailing whipping winds, and her arm screamed at her in pain as part of her blood exploded. She hissed, stopping and clutching her arm. Examining it she could see a deep purple bruise beginning to develop on her forearm near her elbow, where the little glass soldiers that made up her blood had outright exploded under the Qi invested into them.

She went back over what had happened, the memories crystal clear in her mind. Qi had flowed into them, stopping and then building up and enhancing the little flakes of glass making them better at harnessing and directing Qi and improving the power of the spear as they were invested into it. Those that had remained in her arm had almost seemed to glimmer before exploding in a little burst of light.

Looking closely at the bruise using her heightened awareness she saw her veins and soldiers moving to repair the damaged and split veins and capillaries, each flake of glass carrying Qi which soothed the pain and broke up the clotting and damaged blood. And within them were some glimmers, shimmering grains, tiny soldiers which had survived the blast and been changed.

They were invested with Qi now...

"Interesting technique there. How long have you been working on it?" The wispy voice of Grandfather Laoshu appeared suddenly, the first light of dawn beginning to intrude and silhouette him.

She didn't break her focus on what she was thinking, her mouth absentmindedly answering. "Twenty years or so..."

The little soldiers that made up her blood which had survived the blast were faster, better able to handle Qi and move it to places where it could heal her. And they didn't seem to be losing the Qi invested into them as they moved under her direction, increasing her capacity. Maybe the analogy of soldier had more truth to it than she thought.

Because that almost seemed like cultivation.

Wonder bloomed in her chest as her brain stopped in the face of this little impossibility. "Huh."

"Realize something?" Grandfather Laoshu asked as he stood patiently besides her.

She nodded as she rubbed at her arm, the pain easing. Maybe more than one thing.

"You want some advice from an old man?" He asked her.

She looked up at his weathered face, brow raised curiously. "Yes Grandfather?"

He gestured in the direction of where she had been launching her spears. "Work with the world." He said simply.

She looked towards where he had pointed and thought about his words and she smiled. Definitely more than one realization. She'd have to work to make them a reality however.

"Thank you Grandfather. I think I'll rest now" She said as she turned to head towards his home and a bed. She had a lot to sleep and meditate on and then after that even more work to do.

He smiled, wrinkles folding happily and began to lead her back to his home. "Let me show you an open bed then." He told her.



@occipitallobe here's another omake! Another Fate supplemental please. Already having a ton of fun with this.
 
His attitude is pretty appropriate, there just a few things about his character that are off due to me not keeping up with his character sheet. they should be minor edits to fix though.

first off his age is actually 120, not 60. Yeah i hadn't updated it in a "few" turns lol. he should be quite obviously aged and experienced.

secondly is his appearance

Ambrus Nike (Sorry!) - Horrifying Fate. Badly wounded, losing an eye and an ear, with extensive scarring making up one half of his face. Pure luck saved his life, as he and both Aretaphilia Myia were sent on a mission, and ambushed by a Core Formation Cannibal. They together discovered a mystical mirror, and were able to escape, Ambrus escaping after being wounded as Aretaphilia lead the Core Formation elder away. Over the following twenty years managed to regain his 6th Heavenstage cultivation, after falling back to 2nd Heavenstage due to the severity of his wounds.

He got quite injured in one turn that never got fixed so he should actually have quite an intimidating appearance.


In short he is a 120 year old "old monster" (at least compared to young uns like your character prob lol) who cares a lot about his juniors but has quite a scary and intense look to him due to how he is horribly disfigured. As far as how this would change your characters should treat him, thats up to you. But they are probably aware of just how experienced he is, particularly for qi condensation vs qi condensation battles. And they should probably be a bit more intimidated by him i imagine.

i do like your take on him though. maybe he uses his scarring and disfigurement as an example of what can happen to them if they mess up? like what could happen to them if they continue to let their fear ruin their formations dao heart?

Edited a bit. Still considering the scars as an example thing, it's hard to picture anything except that T&I guy from Naruto during the chuunin exams so I'm still mulling it over. >_>;;

I'm really enjoying the POVs you've been using in your omakes. Like how i never considered how the average Clansmen would be affected by the Purchase of the Palace and what they will do in response, so too did i not consider the effects of a generation growing up knowing that the bells will toll for them.

It seemed so obvious when you listed it out. Of Course the generation will have fear in their hearts knowing that the Trials will come before they can prepare, Of course that will lead to them not having a Dao Heart strong enough for our Bread & Butter. And Of course the Clan won't want their weakness to affect the rest and so will cast them aside for the greater good.

The line about fear reminded me of the one from Bane in the Batman Movies. But regardless of it's origins, the truth behind it still rings true. That heady feeling of fear rising and choking them, making them feel as if they were drowning is conveyed especially well!

My thanks! I myself am a big fan of character informing plot - not a because they need to get there the characters do X, but rather because they are these characters, X happens.

One of the big advantages of this particular quest setting is things keep changing. Speculating on how those changes would affect things helps keep the writing fresh and gives a throughline to the omakes that keeps things feeling cohesive.

Like, no lie, if Manuel miscalculated and the Golden Devils head into a downward spiral that ends with a mad Max style post-apocalyptic wasteland I'd be pumped to see how everyone reacts.

I like this as well! This was what i originally envisioned when i saw we were Formation Specced, about fighting shoulder to shoulder with your comrades and trusting them with your back with a Dash of Qi to enhance it's effects.

It's definitely something that i plan for Xiao Yi to work on developing a Qi Formation for. Something that grants advantages via the power of working together in clockwork precision.

Yeah, the big, classy qi projections are cool, but it's the side-by-side stuff that's fun to write and imagine. I mean, if you're going to have army scenes, you should probably have... an army, as opposed to an army that can Voltron up into a bigger, single soldier. It gives you the opportunity to write slightly more grounded war scenes and is just overall pretty sweet.
 
Ferenike stopped at the edge of the open plaza around the central pool and dismounted. She bowed in the direction of the elder, who had not looked at her. "May we speak Grandfather?" She said in the Third Sea dialect of the sands, using an old honorific for this man, the soft syllables tugging at her throat as they reminded her of home.

There was a taut pause for a moment and then a tiny, wheezing laugh and a shifting of old cloth and a splash. "Come closer Traveler of the Sands, come share water with us and make merry." A thready, wizened voice said. Ferenike let out a knot of tension in her chest. That was a much better welcome than she expected.

There was a smack of flesh on flesh. "Jiji, go get food, we'll have ourselves a story here." The voice continued.
Hmm, the introduction brings to mind the Desert/Nomad scenes of quite a few Western Fantasy i read. I've always liked how in that context sharing water is a really big deal.
The elder smiled. "I am Grandfather Laosha. Name yourself girl." He said with a coaxing gesture.

"I am Ferenike of the Ninth Legion of the Golden Devils and the Sands. Daughter of Hesha, who was daughter of Ziyou, who was daughter of Shucai." She said, a little girl before her mother reciting her names again. The fire of the hearth snapped in her ears, a sharp memory.

Grandfather Laosha frowned in sympathy. "May she rest." He rubbed his chin in consideration. "The Golden Devils have done right by us. You are respectful. And I knew Ziyou and traded drinks with her more than once. Lets begin negotiations then."

And so Ferenike began to lay out a loose outline of what she needed; long keeping food, medical supplies, navigation gear, water collection arrays, and the safe locations for caches in this area west of the Uncast Molds. All valuable things for those out in the sands for long periods, but easy to make if one was prosperous and already heading out of Clan territory.
This part is interesting, it reminds of the Desert tribe from the Jouster Series by Mercedes Lackey, the whole naming self and trading so that both sides benefit.
She remembered what she had done to Zu Jing and the vision of thousands upon thousands of soldiers invading his body vividly.

As she struck again and again her mind sank into her body, the hyper awareness of her bloodline rising up and consuming her mind's eye. Sinking through her skin and muscle and tendon, to the veins that ran through and around everything and her little glass soldiers, each a single flake of glass invisible to the naked eye flowing through them.

All of them marching to the flow of her Qi. It was a little like drilling she realized, training every tiny part of her body to move how she wished it to. Made more complicated by each action needing to be unique. Again and again she moved, watching how her body executed the blow.

Hanging above her Dantian was an image of a technique, an Invasion of the enemy's body and the destruction of their meridians and acupoints and tissues. She'd done a very simple and incomplete form of it before and she knew how to do it again, but she wanted more. Something that could pierce even the hardest flesh, creating a breach for her inner armies to march within and destroy them.

Slowly as the stars wheeled over head it became clear that her body could move perfectly, down to the last speck of glassy blood, directed by her will without error. Again and again she could achieve what she had done to Zu Jing, molten glass beading on the tips of her fingers. She could go further, stronger and faster and she did it again and again. But as she came to realize, she was not strong enough to go even further than that.

Her Qi was not dense enough, fast enough, and the volume of its flow insufficient. The technique was incomplete. Patiently she worked at it, repeating the move over and over as she examined herself, no longer refining the action, but instead trying to see what she was missing.

And she could not see where the failure was, as Qi cycled up from her dantian and her rooted stance, up through her lungs and past her heart, and then along her arm and out her fingertips.

She let go.

Invasion!

A bright red glass spear flew from her hands, launched from ten thousand soldiers. It sailed over the trees and out of the oasis entirely. She breathed in, taking Qi from the air and cycling it through her body as she replaced what she had expended.
Ah, those little glass soldiers.. Always ready for action! Kinda curious on if they have any changes from the coffin.
She went back over what had happened, the memories crystal clear in her mind. Qi had flowed into them, stopping and then building up and enhancing the little flakes of glass making them better at harnessing and directing Qi and improving the power of the spear as they were invested into it. Those that had remained in her arm had almost seemed to glimmer before exploding in a little burst of light.

Looking closely at the bruise using her heightened awareness she saw her veins and soldiers moving to repair the damaged and split veins and capillaries, each flake of glass carrying Qi which soothed the pain and broke up the clotting and damaged blood. And within them were some glimmers, shimmering grains, tiny soldiers which had survived the blast and been changed.

They were invested with Qi now...

"Interesting technique there. How long have you been working on it?" The wispy voice of Grandfather Laoshu appeared suddenly, the first light of dawn beginning to intrude and silhouette him.

She didn't break her focus on what she was thinking, her mouth absentmindedly answering. "Twenty years or so..."

The little soldiers that made up her blood which had survived the blast were faster, better able to handle Qi and move it to places where it could heal her. And they didn't seem to be losing the Qi invested into them as they moved under her direction, increasing her capacity. Maybe the analogy of soldier had more truth to it than she thought.

Because that almost seemed like cultivation.
Oh that is interesting. That means that as she practice her bloodline, it gets stronger which is a change from Bloodlines where the power is already there and it's the user's control of it that is the limiting factor.
Yeah, the big, classy qi projections are cool, but it's the side-by-side stuff that's fun to write and imagine. I mean, if you're going to have army scenes, you should probably have... an army, as opposed to an army that can Voltron up into a bigger, single soldier. It gives you the opportunity to write slightly more grounded war scenes and is just overall pretty sweet.
You won't hear any complaints from me! I've been mentioning that my goal for my Good Seed was the manga Kingdom's style of General leading the charge, with the main problem being a lack of Formation that allows that to be shown over the Qi Gundams.

I'm thinking of doing something like Cool Thing Bonus: Kataphraktoi Formation get's a defensive boost when Xiao Yi and his Spirit Beast is in it. And also tag it as a goal in the hopes that great Fate Rolls will expand on that so that more boosts such as attack or speed is added.

Then moving from there, i can try to work it into a Formation that uses a fraction of the boost to each individual instead of one construct. And lastly, try to work it so that these individuals can be used to form Arrays as they charge.

So kinda a longish term thing that will at a minimum need 4 Cool thing bonuses to work.
 
Hmm, the introduction brings to mind the Desert/Nomad scenes of quite a few Western Fantasy i read. I've always liked how in that context sharing water is a really big deal.
This part is interesting, it reminds of the Desert tribe from the Jouster Series by Mercedes Lackey, the whole naming self and trading so that both sides benefit.
Ah, those little glass soldiers.. Always ready for action! Kinda curious on if they have any changes from the coffin.
Oh that is interesting. That means that as she practice her bloodline, it gets stronger which is a change from Bloodlines where the power is already there and it's the user's control of it that is the limiting factor.
I was pulling from my own experience with Western Fantasy yeah, and thoughts on what stuff means for interpersonal interactions in a pre-state context during the fantasy Iron Age. I like having fun exploring hypothetical cultural norms that you could find in IRL in a fantasy context, because it provides the kind of grounding fantasy contexts need as something to connect to.

Never read any Mercedes Lackey but something I decided while thinking about it was that the desert tribes out here have a lot of focus on lineage and passing that on through names, which is similar to the naming scheme found in many many cultures all over the deserts of the world and other places. Some will have names structured like [Name of child] [gendered particle denoting daughter of or son of] [Parent that matches their gender] which is basically a compression of the English way of saying "Child's name, daughter of, Mother's name" like I had to do here. The dialect of the sands uses similar constructions, it just has further bits where you can tack on more names in one long list.

Didn't think about if they would but perhaps the potential to do this weird maybe cultivation thing is one such change. Gonna be doing more with them as time goes on, since they're my foray into more serious exploration of the Taoist "little god" concept.
 
Very fair lmao

I'm just on my fourth omake this turn and I'm wondering if writing more will make any difference at all.

I guess the point of the system as occipitallobe likes it is that yes it always will!

Omake always make a difference. I have various others factors - wordcount is one factor but I have my own (crude) system for things like poetry, images, etc. I won't go in-depth on this, but broadly speaking if you write two Omake of the same quality and effort, you'll get double the Fate bonus.

Fate is a multiplier, however, not a simple +X bonus - so really good Fate doesn't stop you getting low rolls and getting wounded, crippled, or dying. It does make those things less likely, and at the upper end huge Fate offers huge rewards. The main reason Rina Callista is so far ahead of almost everyone else cultivation-wise is both luck (some very good rolls, including the best roll in the game thus far for a Good Seed in a Secret Realm which adds its own bonuses), but also having big Fate multipliers on those good rolls.

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Anastasia Outi - Good Seed Background
Anastasia Outi


Of the millions of Optimatoi, several bloodlines stand out. One is that of the Callista, a line known for its strength as much as its consistently fruitful multiplication, perhaps related. Another is that of the Miya, those most honorable and most hot-blooded masters of sound. Then there's the Outi, literally "Nobody", with origin long lost over the Optimatoi's long history.

One popular guess is that they may have served as infiltration, stealth, or intrigue specialists in the legion's ancient history. That's only one hypothesis though.

Regardless, the only notable traits of the Outi line are their shared name, one of the Legions' most common, their shared anti-luck – usually non-lethal, but often embarrassing – and their frequent heroic or ignominious deaths in service to the Legion. Of the million or so legionnaires in Essence Gathering, a full fifty thousand bear this gloryless name. Villagers, bastards, orphans – this clan-within-a-clan is open to anyone, and with it, the largest puffblobs of welcoming faces.

Anastasia comes from one of many Outi orphanages, a boarding academy run by a retired legion cultivator. Her talent? Nothing notable: a good seed, and nothing more. Her tact? On par with a hotheaded Miya. But her selflessness? Greater than heaven itself.

Starting Bonus: Anybody, Nobody. Nobody, Destiny. TODO: Figure out a nice eight character ZH ver

Anastasia is fated to die. Tragically. This is the fate of all Outi, and all accept this inevitability. But this is not the last the Heavens and Earth will see of her.

When Anastasia dies, the Outi will use her death benefits to improve the Fate of the next good seed of her lineage.

The next scion will cultivate at fourfold speed until they reach Anastasia's level.
 
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“Matthaios Outi” - Good Seed Background
"Matthaios Outi"

Background

What is a curse, truly? What it truly boils down to is the affliction of misery, of harm, onto something or someone. Misfortune, injury, bereavement, anguish, the forms they take are innumerable and immeasurable.

How many curses do we suffer through our lives? A hundred? A thousand? A hundred thousand, perhaps, spread throughout our lifespan--they accumulate as we experience the world and all its blessings. We are "average." We do not have the heaven-defying luck of true geniuses, the fortune that can make and break nations--our karma, in the end, is thoroughly average.

Then, what of those who suffer, in the world's effort to balance out the luck of those so blessed in heaven?

Naturally, they are those who suffer all of the curses in recompense.

Nothing is truly fair in the Turtle World.

. . .

There was a boy who woke up in the ruins of a house, with no memory. There was no one alive around him--not a trace. Thus, he set out, with no particular destination in mind.

He was injured, arms and legs broken from a fall. But he got up, and endured.

The food and water he consumed was tainted, poisoned, inedible and inpotable. He retched and vomited and was wracked with illnesses, but eventually, he got up, and endured.

He was captured by Demonic Cultivators, beaten near to death, clapped into chains, and put to work. And he endured, and endured, and endured.

There was no particular reason why. He didn't have any particular reason to live, for he had no memory but misery. He had no goals. And yet, and yet--every day he still got up. To see the sunrise. To see the beautiful blue sky. And one day he thought--

"Ah, what a wonderful world."

That night, he slept, and in his dreams, and he took a bite from the dark shadow that had been following him from the first night he could remember.

Of course, bad things still happened to him. He was beset by an endless amount of curses, yet there was never enough to truly kill him. He ate, and ate, and ate, and the curses began to sustain him. Bad karma begat more bad karma, and as he ate more and more things began to be attracted to him. Ghosts, apparitions, grudges one and all, and he ate them as well. He accepted them,they all were poured into the flame of his soul.

He had adapted, and grew better and better at consuming them, drawing them out of the world and into him. Until they grew too much for a mortal frame, and drew his soul to the stretching point--until he broke through, the flames burning a shining bronze, the body becoming durable from its experiences.

He continued on his meandering journey, eating the curses of the land, and becoming a vessel of them--akin to a cauldron with ingredients tossed in, ever-stirring, ever-heated. His newfound power of cultivation allowed him to do a twist on the typical convention. If he was a forge, refining out impurities, he inhaled negativity to use to pump the bellows. As such, when he released what he had consumed, from ore to miasma, the end result was "purified," positivity and treasure released back into the world. He retained the blackened curses to fuel the flame of his own soul, tempering his very core. Through this curse-eating method, he had great success in exorcising ghosts and the like in the areas where he managed to find himself, until one day, he found himself working alongside some of the Golden Devil clan on a job gone wrong, and was discovered to be kin--a mutation on the common Blood of Bronze, but kin, nonetheless. Naturally, he was given an offer to come home, and accepted it. On the journey back to the Clan, he was asked for his name--and he answered that he had none. So, then, he was named by a disciple of the Clan, until he could one day decide his own, and he took it on for ease of use, if nothing else. From then on, the boy was known as "Matthaios Outi."

Overall Concept: A Furnace in the shape of a boy. Parents had an even greater portion of the Golden Devil's misfortune than the norm, and simply disappeared one day. They passed on this misfortune to their unnamed son. Said son suffers the weight of bad karma, but instead of rejecting it, accepts it, and is able to make something out of it, essentially using them as fuel and raw materials to produce something.

Starting Perk: Boiling Blood of Bronze: A mutation of the traditional Blood of Bronze. Someone that by tempering others, tempers themselves. Able to consume "impure" materials and then produce "purer" materials from them, with the ability to purify even more tainted consumables or to produce even more refined products rising in cultivation stage.

Started Cultivation - Turn 5

Cultivation - 7th Heavenstage
Cultivation-Year Equivalent - 45 Years
Health - Currently healthy.
Impact - +8

Inventory:

- Five-Elements Disharmony Curse (+8 Impact)
- Necklace of Screaming Bells (Lifesaving Treasure)

Completed Omake:

Rise and Shine:
A boy is in a bad spot, and his first meeting with those of the Golden Devils in official capacity. 1204 words.

Desperado: A boy makes friends, for what it's worth, and they make plans together. Let's see if they survivethe dice are rolled. 1507 words.

Sundowner: A boy runs once more, but not alone. Twin hammerblows descend, the game is closing. 2010 words.

Bodies of My Brothers: A boy, crippled, beaten, and half-mad begins a journey. His virtuous heart can allow no less. 801 words.

Sightseeing: A boy recovers from some bad decisions and after a dream, watches the sun rise. 1809 words.

Turn 5 Fate - Matthaias' ordeal with the Trials was seemingly driven by Heaven's desire to kill him. He fought in many battles, his curse consuming constitution an immense boon to his fellows as Hunters leveled terrible curses against those he was guarding with his squad. In this he was extraordinarily lucky, for within his dantian a transformation took place, the curses building up and consuming each other nearly faster than he could process and negate them like a jar of cannibalistic scorpions. In that delicate balance he created an incredibly powerful curse dubbed the Five-Elements Disharmony Curse (+8 Impact) which provides him with even more incredible powers of curse consumption, enhancing his constitution and his body's sheer hardiness, and giving him the ability to rip apart the bodies of his foes with a simple touch if he desires. The combination makes him invincible in Qi Condensation, a now incredibly formidable foe.

With this power he quickly rose to the 7th Heavenstage in the blink of an eye and then turned the tables on the Hunters, striking out with his squad of companions and tearing through them like a desert sandstorm. They defied those who would kill them, though not without losses, and near the end of the trials Matthaias retrieved a Necklace of Screaming Bells (Lifesaving Treasure) from a camp of Hunters after slaying and banishing them with his companions. The bells will scream violently like howling winds when its owner's life is threatened, providing warning and briefly stunning his enemies with immense pain in their meridians, before a gust of divine wind picks him up and flings him over the horizon to safety.

I'll update the rest of this sometime.
 
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