Hmmph... this junior is a good seed [Cultivation Management Quest]

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Alright, I've just added a page for the Shen Kingdom, if any other omake authors have done something with the Shen Kingdom, they can add it to there as well.
 
I can't access the link, what is Shen Kingdom?
Huh, I just clicked on the link and it worked fine. Maybe something wrong with your browser?

Shen Kingdom is one of our vassal states, and I've used it it some of my omakes, ao I put a little bit of information down on it, and was inviting other omake authors to do the same.
 
Can someone help me figure out how to add pages to the Wiki? I am very confused... (Never used a Wiki before either)
 
Can someone help me figure out how to add pages to the Wiki? I am very confused... (Never used a Wiki before either)
I have no idea how to do it the proper way, but if you go into 'edit' you can copy one of the links to an existing page and just rename it. Then, when you click it, it will take you to a page saying 'this page does not exist, would you like to make one?' and then you can make it from there.
 
I have no idea how to do it the proper way, but if you go into 'edit' you can copy one of the links to an existing page and just rename it. Then, when you click it, it will take you to a page saying 'this page does not exist, would you like to make one?' and then you can make it from there.
I think I've figured it out thanks!
 
Hmm.. call me crazy but we should consider building relation's with someone despite the 100 year war incoming, Jingshen is obvious even if they look a bit shady at the moment.
I don't want to fall into the trap about nation building while neglecting diplomatic tie's feeding into our already bad reputation, just thought it worth sayin.
 
Oh wow. That's riskier then i thought given the past 2 example. Still, that risk makes Xiao Yi's decision more weighty. For the Healing, will it be covered as a Cool Thing Bonus and be a instant heal ?

Oh and just to raise my own hopes slightly, are the Fate bonuses from Omakes taken into account during the Secret Realm rolls ?

Some further musings on this and the Wounded mechanic. I wonder how it will affect the Fate Rolls of the Char if they're wounded ? Is it a minus to their roll outcomes or is it basically full haltage of Fate Rolls generating beneficial stuff ? Hmm, it's probably also likely that the Good Seed makes absolutely no progress in Cultivation or Fate, with it being treated as being fully focused on healing.

@occipitallobe are any of my theories about the Wounded Status accurate ?
 
Oh my, our first Xianxia Auction scene! Minus points for there not being a battle over the goods or smacking each other with money :D

Oh wow. That's riskier then i thought given the past 2 example. Still, that risk makes Xiao Yi's decision more weighty. For the Healing, will it be covered as a Cool Thing Bonus and be a instant heal ?

Healing is going to be a potentially multiple-stage process. Wounds go (roughly), minor (basically a major negative multiplier to cultivation that turn but healed at the end), 20-year (negative cultivation for this turn and next), 40-year (this turn and the next two!), and crippling. Crippling is permanent, and requires a Cool Thing Bonus (or very favorable Fate) to heal at all - usually upgrading crippling injuries to wounds. Wounds can be healed by the use of a Cool Thing bonus, though. Note that the above isn't fully set in stone, but is likely to be the system I settle on.

Most importantly, crippling and wounds both massively increase the chances of negative outcomes. A wounded cultivator is more likely to get wounded more badly or get crippled, and a crippled cultivator is considerably more likely to die. So if you enter the Secret Realm without and get wounded, you're much more likely to get crippled next. If that happens, your chances of death skyrocket. Secret Realms are very dangerous - there's immense reward available, but the risk is commensurate.

I have no idea how to do it the proper way, but if you go into 'edit' you can copy one of the links to an existing page and just rename it. Then, when you click it, it will take you to a page saying 'this page does not exist, would you like to make one?' and then you can make it from there.

This is how I do it. Not sure if there's meant to be a different or better way.

Some further musings on this and the Wounded mechanic. I wonder how it will affect the Fate Rolls of the Char if they're wounded ? Is it a minus to their roll outcomes or is it basically full haltage of Fate Rolls generating beneficial stuff ? Hmm, it's probably also likely that the Good Seed makes absolutely no progress in Cultivation or Fate, with it being treated as being fully focused on healing.

@occipitallobe are any of my theories about the Wounded Status accurate ?

Basically when I roll Fate, there's a range of negative and positive outcomes. Negative outcomes tend to be 'loss of cultivation', 'wounded', 'badly wounded', 'crippled', 'dead'. Wounded status basically worsens all negative outcomes by a step - so if you'd normally lose cultivation, you'd fail to heal that turn. If you got a second 'wounded' roll, you'd go to 'badly wounded'. If you got a 'badly wounded' roll, your wounds would work together and make you crippled. If you were already wounded and rolled a crippled roll, well, you'd be dead.

While hale and hearty your chance of death is very small, but as soon as you start accruing wounds and the like it increases drastically. After all, you can't stop cultivating and taking risks, even if wounded - you need to gain resources to at least remain at your current level and heal your wounds.
 
Healing is going to be a potentially multiple-stage process. Wounds go (roughly), minor (basically a major negative multiplier to cultivation that turn but healed at the end), 20-year (negative cultivation for this turn and next), 40-year (this turn and the next two!), and crippling. Crippling is permanent, and requires a Cool Thing Bonus (or very favorable Fate) to heal at all - usually upgrading crippling injuries to wounds. Wounds can be healed by the use of a Cool Thing bonus, though. Note that the above isn't fully set in stone, but is likely to be the system I settle on.

Most importantly, crippling and wounds both massively increase the chances of negative outcomes. A wounded cultivator is more likely to get wounded more badly or get crippled, and a crippled cultivator is considerably more likely to die. So if you enter the Secret Realm without and get wounded, you're much more likely to get crippled next. If that happens, your chances of death skyrocket. Secret Realms are very dangerous - there's immense reward available, but the risk is commensurate.
Ah i see. This is going to be interesting, that it means it's in our best interest to go for healing asap to lower the risks. For the Wounds healed by Cool thing bonus, is that going to be regardless of the stages you mentioned above or is it just basically forcefully removing 1 stage to cutdown on the recovery time ?

Also, this information about the risks of the Secret Realm is very interesting! Based on this, i highly encourage other good seeds to prep healing CTB as well as LST before they attempt it, unless it fits the narrative point you have for your good seed lol. Like for me, i'm going to leave it since the risk spices up the decision.

Basically when I roll Fate, there's a range of negative and positive outcomes. Negative outcomes tend to be 'loss of cultivation', 'wounded', 'badly wounded', 'crippled', 'dead'. Wounded status basically worsens all negative outcomes by a step - so if you'd normally lose cultivation, you'd fail to heal that turn. If you got a second 'wounded' roll, you'd go to 'badly wounded'. If you got a 'badly wounded' roll, your wounds would work together and make you crippled. If you were already wounded and rolled a crippled roll, well, you'd be dead.

While hale and hearty your chance of death is very small, but as soon as you start accruing wounds and the like it increases drastically. After all, you can't stop cultivating and taking risks, even if wounded - you need to gain resources to at least remain at your current level and heal your wounds.
Thanks for the breakdown, with how it scales up i can really see that the danger with secret realm is less the fate roll going bad and more of the lack of opportunity to intervene with an omake hence prep being needed.

I was half-completing going for the Other Secret Realm next turn if Xiao Yi makes it out without anything serious, but with this info i think i'm going to wait till the next time it comes round and build up LST and Healing CTB.

Although i have to ask, considering that more and more Good Seeds are likely to get wounded with the Trials coming up, would it be possible to spinoff healing Cool Things Bonus as a separate category ? Something like Healing Boon or Medicine so that Cool Thing Bonus remains to be about Cool Things the Good Seed gets.
 
I have no idea how to do it the proper way, but if you go into 'edit' you can copy one of the links to an existing page and just rename it. Then, when you click it, it will take you to a page saying 'this page does not exist, would you like to make one?' and then you can make it from there.
This is how I do it. Not sure if there's meant to be a different or better way.
Pre-Post Edit: I've enabled an extension to make this easier. Just go to Create a page - Hmmph… This wiki is a good seed. Please make an account before making edits, so everyone knows who's making what changes.

This is how I do it:

If the page would get linked from somewhere, I'll edit in the link like so:

Code:
Blah blah [[Babelfish Array]] blah blah.

The double brackets indicate a link to a wiki page. Then, I just click on that link.

If there's no page to link from, I edit it into the URL.

Code:
Page title: Babelfish Array
URL: https://goodseed.miraheze.org/wiki/Babelfish_Array

After creating the page, be sure to add proper categories! This is done by using the bracket syntax at the bottom of the page like so:

Code:
The text of the page.

Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet.

[[Category:Some Category Name]]

Note that you do not need to manually link pages in a category from the category's page. As an example, you would not need to link

If there's anything else, either ask me – or use Google/DDG/any search engine.
 
Quick question about something 2-3 turns down the line, as part of the Poison Dao, I'm going to have a pillar for medicine/healing, would that improve anything healing times?
@occipitallobe
 
Found this fic yesterday, read all the threadmarks and I'm now making my way through the good seeds. I have a couple of ideas for my own good seed, however the first is the bastard child of an invader in the last trial.
As that was 60 years ago though would they still be 1st stage cultivator per the rules?
 
Huh, I just clicked on the link and it worked fine. Maybe something wrong with your browser?

Shen Kingdom is one of our vassal states, and I've used it it some of my omakes, ao I put a little bit of information down on it, and was inviting other omake authors to do the same.

I do like the more grounded worldbuilding, if you could point me to your omakes I'll take a look. The setting does seem to lend itself well to my character's concept.
 
Found this fic yesterday, read all the threadmarks and I'm now making my way through the good seeds. I have a couple of ideas for my own good seed, however the first is the bastard child of an invader in the last trial.
As that was 60 years ago though would they still be 1st stage cultivator per the rules?
Most likely yes. However, you can fluff it so that the age make sense via a variety of ways like the Mother being put into stasis and was being healed up or depending how attached to the idea of it being of direct decent it's a many times removed grandchild.

The easiest to go for what you want would be to introduce your Good Seed after the Trials which should be in Turn 5. Introducing them now just gives your 1 more Omake bonus + 1 cultivation roll & Fate Roll before the Trials. It's really up to you on how attached you are to the concept.

P.S: Super Alternatively, you can set your Good Seed's unique point is enhanced lifespan ?
 
Most likely yes. However, you can fluff it so that the age make sense via a variety of ways like the Mother being put into stasis and was being healed up or depending how attached to the idea of it being of direct decent it's a many times removed grandchild.

The easiest to go for what you want would be to introduce your Good Seed after the Trials which should be in Turn 5. Introducing them now just gives your 1 more Omake bonus + 1 cultivation roll & Fate Roll before the Trials. It's really up to you on how attached you are to the concept.

P.S: Super Alternatively, you can set your Good Seed's unique point is enhanced lifespan ?
Thanks. Guess I'll hold off.
As for the unique point I was thinking the father would be one of those ultra blessed characters, like a protagonist but nothing but good luck + a young master.
So that mixing with how the clan are hated by heavens resulting in a weird karma balance, good luck from heavens love, which attracts heavens attention, which causes bad luck due to the clan's curse. And the cycle continues till either the seed dies, hides from heaven, or learns to balance their karma.
 
Ferenike 10 - Mother Scorpion
Ferenike 10 - Mother Scorpion​

First Tessarian Rongnu was a svelte woman of Third Sea features, mixed interestingly with the white-yellow hair of the Golden Devil Clan. She also didn't look a day older than Ferenike, a youthful face in its early twenties, even after a century of life. Sitting across from her in her office Ferenike could feel her cultivation sitting comfortably at the Ninth Heavenstage, only a half-step above her own that was scraping at the peak of the Eighth Heavenstage.

On her desk were stacks of reports from the War. Three days ago the first wall of the Night Fortress had fallen, and the War was all anyone could talk about, as it looked like the second would as well. Her Trainees were babbling about it constantly.

The Grand Elder was attending to other matters and while things were terrifying in a sheer numbers sense, the reports she'd seen and the general tenor of the atmosphere in the Dawn Fortress spoke to a quiet confidence. In a few years her Trainees would probably be called to war. A part of her mind changed direction, shifting and clinking like a great river of glass as her plans for them altered. The mosaic crunched and ideas sank beneath consideration as others rose.

Nan Fuxi shifting as she sat in a chair besides her brought the three of them out of their momentary reverie and Mellissa Rongnu chuckled as she rolled her neck, humming in thought as she considered Ferenike's report on her Trainees.

She looked to her left and nodded at Ferenike.

"You've done good work Legionnaire, I'm happy, the boss is gonna be happy. Everyone's happy with your little babies progress." She said brightly, then her eyes gained a slightly shrewd glint. "In fact the sir has said he's considering you for promotion to Second Tessarian. Augustan is getting ready to attempt his Tribulation and Fourth Legion are eyeing him to replace Centurion Pherenikos."

Ferenike blinked, then rubbed her chin in thought. "Not entirely... unexpected." She said quietly. It kinda was

Thwap! "Ow!" Ferenike yelped as a hand smacked the back of her head.

"I can tell you're surprised, Ms. Terrifier of Hapless Juniors. I'm happy for you." Fuxi said with a snort as her hand returned to her sleeves in her lap.

Rongnu snorted. "Yeah well don't get too excited little lady. You're going to be behind this desk in the not too distant future if I don't miss my guess and you'll have to deal with all. My. Work." She said with a very ominous chuckle.

Fuxi paled while Ferenike snorted and giggled.

Rongnu waited to continue until they calmed down. "Anyhoo," She pulled out a pipe of her own and took a puff as she stared at the two of them. "I hear you're saddled with some Salviati kids, Ferenike?" She asked idly.

Ferenike smiled as she pulled out her own pipe. And a second for Fuxi, which was declined politely, as it always was. "I have yes," she said as she took a pull and her sweet smoke joined the pungent black cloud Rongu was letting free. "I'm expecting something interesting at least. Markus always had funny stories about his family."

Fuxi nodded with a smile. "I remember the Great Cake Explosion."

Ferenike winced. "God not that story, that one was horrific and we got it second hand." She grumbled.

Fuxi just giggled.

"Yes that, I just wanted to be sure I had you sorted out properly. Diao Xi will handle your trainees Spirit Beast ID and Deep Desert Manuever training on the days you need to handle the kid to confirm?" Rongnu asked as she pulled out a schedule scroll and made some notes on it.

Ferenike nodded. "Yep." She said, popping the p as she took another pull on her pipe. Their clouds were mixing, doing battle as it were above their heads. Her smoke was losing.

"Right then, before you go, is Gallius available for dinner in three days." Rongnu asked blithely.

There was dead silence for a solid thirty seconds as Fuxi and Ferenike glared at Rongnu. Then Fuxi sighed deeply. "Really?" She asked rhetorically as she rested her head in her hand.

Rongnu burst into laughter. "I'm kidding, he's in my chain of command and Dragoumis would chew my face off for it... mostly." she said, trailing off at the end with a considering expression.

"NO." They said in unison.

"Awww. Shame." The older woman sighed, smirking at their expressions. Then she waved her hands. "Out, the both of you. I have things to do."

Ferenike was already out and moving through the door before she finished speaking, waving over her shoulder.

"Yes ma'am." She said brightly.



The Salviati compound was much the same as it had been a year or so ago, when she'd met Magnus and delivered to them the corpses of Zu Jing and his erstwhile followers. He'd accepted it with a heartfelt thanks and a pat on her shoulder, and then invited her to drink with him and his father Gaius.

Those had been good times. She'd popped out the Ice Peach Wine, freezing part of the table with its chill, for that. The sharp and sweet taste as it tingled on her lips had gone down wonderfully with the cactus and meat skewers they had made. Things had been better with the Salviati since.

Now she looked around seeing what they might have put to use from the results of her vengeance. Here and there on the circle of buildings she could see new skulls, covered in bronze and with etched gems in the sockets. Arrays glimmered on them in the star light. A quick assessment was done of how they sounded to her Qi senses and what she could see of the symbols.

Hmmmm...

As she walked up to one of the training buildings for the Salviati, a dojo to the natives of the Third Sea, and walked through its wide double doors with a nod to the guards on either side, both in Qi Condensation and beneath her she thought the new arrays might be a clever little trick of illusion that settled into the blood and marrow of a person and caused delusions of being burned alive. Fun stuff for Blood Cultivators. Powerful stuff too.

She walked into the training house and found within it a long and wide room with mats of padding laid down and then linen anchored on top of it to provide a slightly squishy and rough surface that mimicked packed dune-sand. Her golden robes swished over it gently in near silence. Pillars of marble stood to either side and held up a thin balcony that went around the entire room. The floor above would be a rectangle of storage rooms reached by one of the two stairs at the very back of the first floor.

The walls below the balcony were also padded, and patterned with sand dunes, such that it was rather like standing in the middle of the Desert to stand in the middle of this room.

At the far end was a looming four armed statue made of Spirit Bronze. The Imperator, a symbol that reappeared in Clan imagery again and again and again. In his upper left hand he carried an aspis shield, in his upper right a hoplon spear. In his lower right he carried a ledger and in his lower left a sprig of grain. Symbols of the Legions. On his head he wore a Legion helm with its signature crest of horse hair, something only seen on the supreme commander of the Legions in times of true war.

The Clan's records, once great, were now fragmentary and spoke little on who the Imperator actually was but going by the title and the symbols and what fragments of lore described the Imperator, he was a being the Imperial Optimatoi's own Earl of Bronze had once served with distinction. Ferenike slowly walked across the mats to stand before the twenty foot tall figure, in arms reach of the rectangular marble base on which he stood.

She bowed her head and clasped her hands. In the Legion tongue she recited. "Father of Legions, gird us in good bronze, give unto us stout and hearty bread, let not sand nor mountain nor swamp stay our march. One day, this land will be conquered, in your name. Blessed be the Golden Fist of the Imperator."

An old Legion prayer. There were others, for speaking over the dead, but most of the prayers she had been taught were decrees of defiance against the Heavens. Little enough of the old ideas persisted, in their diminished state.

She hummed as she raised her head and turned her back on the old figure, and settled into a comfortable seiza, legs folded underneath her. In one hand she took her pipe and in the other she removed the hat on her head and examined it. Golden, with four quadrants of white upon its top, it was a simple and sinfully comfortable thing. She hoped Old Hat Pelops had a strong family that maintained the skill, she'd miss it if it faded away. She blinked... maybe she could do something about that at some point. Hmmph, something for later.

Time to wait for her student.

The time was arranged for a bit before dawn, presumably with the young mistress being awoken and sent to her care before the sun rose. And if she didn't? Well, it was their time. Her role was very clearly set out.

She could wait.

And she did, for an hour. Long enough for her to brew a pot of tea and serve herself, a small table of lacquered wood set before her with a porcelain tea set she had received as a gift in the City of Golden Bells. The cups she had replaced with crimson crystal glass versions of her own. Not up to her satisfaction quite yet, but they worked for now.

The sun was shining into the room from windows up on the second floor and the birds were chirping sweetly when the young mistress finally arrived with a bang as she threw open the double doors at the front of the training room.

"So your my trainer then, peasant?" The short, blonde haired girl with bright green eyes said grumpily. Her hair was bound up in a ponytail which highlighted her bronze skin, and slightly upturned nose. Katerina Salviati. First Heavenstage and going no where fast from what they had told her. Violent and full of irrepressible energy.

Ferenike didn't react, her brown eyes sedate and calm as she drank her tea. "I am your Legionnaire trainer." She said, mild challenge in her phrasing.

The girl scowled and stomped forward, then stopped, seeming torn. She stood before Ferenike and crossed her arms with a huff.

"Well then, what are we going to do first? You gonna spar with me or something? You're strong right? Well I'm strong and strong people fight!" She grumbled out in breathless rush, rubbing an arm as she bounced in place. She looked like she hadn't fought in weeks and needed to fight.

Energetic this young miss. Probably not more than... 17? If that? She took a puff on her pipe. She could see why the Salviati had sent this girl her way. Her eyes narrowed.

"If you want to fight, why haven't you struck at me at the first opportunity? That's what the strong do right?" She asked lightly, tea raised halfway to her lips.

Katerina huffed, shaking her head as she rubbed her face in frustration. "No! No, no... that's... they do that but it isn't right..." She trailed off, hands gesturing angrily.

"... it isn't right... I need permission first for a spar..." It seems to pain her to say that.

Ferenike nods. "Then you have permission, come at me!" She said, wave a hand with a snap of her sleeve.

"RAAAAAAAGH!" The Salviati girl explodes into a blur of motion, a cry of stress and anger let loose from her guts, feet slamming against the mats before she leaps off them and soars towards Ferenike where she sat serenely. The girl's foot was aimed squarely at her head.

All of this pent up energy in her junior. They really did need a trainer for this girl. She could understand the burning need for a fight, in her own way.

She raised her teacup and caught the girl's leading foot on its edge. With a flick of her wrist the girl's course was redirected, up and over her head, tumbling through the air to bounce off of the Imperator's bronze chest with a meaty thunk. A corner of her mind was glad that the Clan built their monuments to stand up to their rambunctious activities.

The girl recovered and twisted above her to try and punch her in the skull.

Ferenike's pipe hooked her elbow and with a twirl flung her right back out the front doors with a surprised scream.

A swipe of her hand cleared away her tea, to be continued later.

This was easy... relaxing.

She walked out with a smile on her face, descending the short step leading up to the front doors casually as her student picked herself up out of the dirt.

Katerina was smiling, grinning.

Hah! How fun!

The girl's next blow was preceded by a handful of sand tossed towards Ferenike's face and then a knee flying for her gut. Ferenike slapped it down with an open palm and then smashed that same hand into her gut.

Thud, Katerina fell to her back again, her forward momentum completely redirected into the ground. And her spine when she hit it.

"Guh..." She said, attempting for articulate eloquence and failing terribly.

"Yes quite so student. I think we shall start with your ability to dodge." Ferenike said with a grin.

The girl paled slightly and then leapt up and away from Ferenike.

"Attack!" She shouted and the girl blitzed into motion. A flurry of blows flying at Ferenike, which she defended with one hand and one foot.

"Good good! Fire is what tempers our bronze! Use it! Dodge!" She barked as a hammer fist slammed towards the Salviati's guts.

There was a massive pained whumpf of air as Ferenike's knuckles smashed into her sternum and sent her flying again. But this time Ferenike could tell she'd started trying to react properly and lighten the blow.

Ferenike skipped over the sands, dancing over handfuls of grains like she weighed nothing. "Use your Qi! Lightening yourself is the essence of Qigong, the Soft Movements of the Clan!" She lectured as she raced for the girl.

Katerina popped up like she was made of springs and met Ferenike furiously.

Their training went long into the day, breaks throughout for cultivation, before finally the girl ran out of steam. Ferenike herself was fine, even disregarding her enhanced stamina. Boons of legion training.

They spoke little, only exchanging words on form and how to properly dodge a much higher ranked cultivator briefly.

Eventually, Ferenike ran the girl down and found her contemplative. Thoughtful.

They were sitting in the training room now, separated by her tea set, this time with the fine porcelain cups.

Katerina Salviati was staring down into her tea now, something obviously weighing on her mind as Ferenike smoked contentedly.

"... M... Hmm... ah, Master?" She began.

"Yes?" Ferenike idly responded.

"Why is fighting something cultivators are so... good at... no that's not it. Why does cultivation seem to inherently bring violence?" She asked.

Hmm. Ferenike paused, letting her pipe rest in her lap as she looked at the girl before her. Green eyes met older brown eyes.

"A good question that has cursed Clan scholars for generations. I do not know the reason, and anyone who tells you they do know is either a fool or deluded. But I can speculate." She said quietly.

Katerina looked at her raptly, tea forgotten in her hands.

"I would speculate that one of the causes comes from three reasons: First, people do not like to be hurt or to have things taken from them. Second, if people are hurt and have things taken from them, they want to take them back. Third, Cultivation involves the concentration of resources, in this case Qi, and taking the resources necessary for it from other people is easy."

"Greed then?" She asked.

Ferenike nodded. "Greed is certainly a part of it. The higher you rise, the greedier you have to be to stay there, and to protect what you care about."

"Seems... could it be better?" She asked sadly.

"Perhaps, my student... perhaps. In our own way, we're trying, for what it is worth." Ferenike said quietly.

A contemplative end to their first day. Ferenike expected many others to go similarly.

She returned to her quarters in one of the many Legionnaires barracks dotted around the Fortress to steal a quick nap. An hour or so after midnight she returned to her Trainees in the Third Training Barrack and slipped into the building easily.

They'd set up a sentry like they were supposed to, running it in shifts, but it looks like Diao Xi had paid off and the sentry was asleep from a sleeping draught, the girl's chin resting on her collar as she snored quietly. Sloppy. With the war kicking up they'd have to learn how to watch for poisons and treachery. She walked past the trainee into the main room, a kitchen and lounging space with a few shelves for shared scrolls and ledgers and manuals. Those were well cared for, as was the garden. They'd done remarkably well in that respect.

She was proud of them for that. They'd progressed well in the year or so gap between when she started training them and when she started training the Salviati kid.

Carefully, using sparing amounts of Qi to make her steps soundless and light as a feather, she snuck up to the top floor of the Barrack and went to the room at the far end of the hall. Each floor was arranged as one long hall, one open space at the end closest to the front side of the building used as a small relaxation area and for equipment storage, then rooms on each side, and at the back of the building the stairs.

Sneaking towards the furthest bedroom she looked around and noted the small lamp, the shutter just slightly open, hanging in just the right position to let a beam of light into the rooms if the doors were opened incautiously. A moment of fiddling with the anti-tamper arrays on it and it was shut off.

Then she approached the door of her first target and after a moment of careful examination and silent work jimmied the lock open. The door eased open silently and she slipped in like a shadow. The sleeping form of Agha Kleikos, the gangly redhead starting to gain muscle under the Legion regimen, and starting ask more intelligent questions than she used to.

She carefully ducked the gourd full of noisemaking metal beads, holding it carefully as it tried to fall, wove her way through the trip wires to other noisemakers and traps in the room. The she paused, precariously balanced as she adjusted her foot to carefully not step on the pressure plate the girl had set out and hidden by a rug.

Then she was in and looming at the foot of the sleeping girl's cot. Gripping the ends she burst into bright red light, face changing into a horrific visage of glass and fire and flipped her out of it.

"WAKE UP TRAINEES!" She roared at the top of her lungs, rattling the entire building.

Agha screamed like a banshee as she was catapulted to the floor, babbling uncontrollably as she tried to straighten up.

"Uniforms on! Sandals on! Get to the training field!" Ferenike barked at her as the girl flailed about for the light cord.

But Ferenike was already gone, a spectre of horror moving through each room, banging on the door and knocking trainees out of their cots if they were too groggy. "UP! UNIFORMS ON! SANDALS ON! GET TO THE TRAINING FIELD!" She yelled, repeating it like a mantra as she started herding sleepy kids out of their rooms and down into the common room.

Some of the ones quicker on the uptake were partially in their uniforms, which got them a scolding about proper uniform care, and others were getting ready as she popped in and yelled her message at them.

It wasn't more than a minute or two before they were all gathered in front of her. In neat ranks, and mostly sorted uniforms, with their Spirit Stones stored and tucked away somewhere on their person.

Today she had them doing katas for hours in the morning which then progressed into sparring. This wasn't the first time they'd had a sparring day, and like the previous times she'd done it she watched how they moved in formation. Not Formations, but the precursors for it, the katas encouraging them to develop their control of Qi to suit such endeavors.

How did her juniors who knew nothing, shape their Qi? What would she have to correct for when teaching the weak how to use the Oasis?

As they progressed into sparring she watched their intensity, how well they fought as they grew tired. Again and again and again she watched them fight and fall, rest and recover to go again. Her mind churned as she pulled on the Spirit Stone dust in her pipe and felt the ever reliable pins and needles pain in her skin from cultivation. What was the limit of their stamina, what range of ability was present in these juniors? What was the least amount of stamina, what was the most? She asked these questions, trying to quantify or at least qualify how much stamina she really had to work with when sharing things out.

It wasn't a lot, she concluded by the end of the day. Not enough. It would be a pretty thin margin between improving stamina overall for a standard amount of Spirit Stones, and consuming more Spirit Stones in order to make up for costs. The Oasis was meant to allow them to spend less Spirit Stones in the long run as Qi was more efficiently used and shared, and cultivators healed quicker for less effort. Would be pretty pointless if it ate more Spirit Stones than it saved.

A bit of a dilemma. She was stuck for now. Nothing for it but patience and hard work and some luck. She looked out to the walls of the Dawn Fortress, the towering shapes obscuring the southern horizon and she worried. Things would get much worse, soon.



A few days later as the sun rose, red light swept across the desert outside the Dawn Fortress, bloody dawn. Ferenike rested, smoking her pipe fitfully as she sat atop a chair like rock and the sun glinted off her yellow hair. The Fortress was abuzz with news of the happenings at the Night Devil Fortress. The second wall had fallen. Elder of War Aikaterine was holding the Devil Bees off but rumors in the Taktika and dripping down from the Centurions spoke of Aikaterine considering plans to bring in more cultivators.

Her trainees would be amongst that number as the Ninth Century deployed.

And she wondered at the weight of responsibility she felt for her juniors, magnified a hundredfold. It hunched her shoulders and made her feel melancholy. Different than her squad did.

Why did this fit so well with her, teaching these juniors?

Why did she feel like this?

Why was she so... patient with them?

A strange question to ask maybe, for her Dao? It didn't feel like it to her, it just came, bubbling out of the vaults of her glass infused mind.

She didn't know what possessed her to put up with them and their stupidity, or why her pride in their progress grew out of all sense and proportion. She didn't know why she put up with teaching such a violent girl as Katerina Salviati, and why she enjoyed discussing philosophy with her so much.

She felt like her heart would burst, exploding with passion, and she felt like an endless sea of willingness to give. Her head pounded like drums when she worried about them, imagining the horrible fates they could endure, bodies lying still in the sand. Heads torn off and chests opened.

She got up, huffing. She was going to have to watch these kids die out there. Their lives literally getting sucked out or gruesomely poisoned by the Devil Bees. She knew she was going to have to, and many more beyond them. There were some school of thoughts which said she shouldn't get attached but she intrinsically rejected them. She just couldn't name why.

She paced through the sands, sandals slapping it as she paced near her rock.

She couldn't put words to why they weighed on her so much. And that wasn't the only thing, this training had started to make her question her Dao. What was patience, really?

Clunk!

A rock skipped away under her feet, kicked away without a care. She looked down and stopped as movement skittered away from her foot. A scorpion, just a small thing, red and bronze moving in the sand near her.

It skittered in a circle as it wiggled out of its little broken burrow and she saw on its back tiny white scorplings. A mother.

Ferenike remembered the weight on her back from her trainees. She thought about her conversation with Rongnu, calling them her babies, and she thought about watching them grow.

Further back, she remembered Agrippa ruffling her hair as they sat around a fire and watched the stars.

Even further back, she remembered the creak of her family's cart and her mother moving in the lamplight as she wove cloth.

She was speaking. "...burdens can be uplifting, daughter. Like you." She said with a smile.

Ferenike's eyes burned, her breath caught in her throat, her hand rising to cover her mouth as she shivered. Wetness touched her fingers.

It really was that simple wasn't it?

She'd been an idiot. Of course she knew what these kids meant to her, it'd been starting at her in the face all this time.

She breathed deep, settling her racing heart. Inside, her mind bubbled and frothed, plans falling into place as she saw what she had to do.

Soon war would come and take her children away from her. But it would not find them easy prey.



@occipitallobe another Omake for you! I'd like this to become a Cultivation bonus for Ferenike as she passes through an important milestone of self understanding. There is probably one more Omake for the Training Arc as it transitions into the War Arc I have planned, where I hope to explore the horrors of fighting the Devil Bees from a Qi Condensation Cultivator's perspective. Accounts will be settled, loose ends cleared, and then its off to War.
 
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Might be my formatting?

It might be that.

Also, without trying to prejudice his fate, I don't much like the dragon fellow. Things get very... quippy and antic-like and it feels more forced? The hand of the author seems more present in that your intentions - this is a funny scene, now laugh - are more obvious. This scene just felt comfortable. I liked it.
 
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Castor Tyndaridae [DEAD] - Good Seed Background
Just got caught up after reading through, and got to say, I quite enjoyed myself. Was intrigued by the opportunities that arrays presented. Rather then the more generalist approach represented by Achille and others, though, I was particularly interested in the idea of more divergent array crafting techniques and styles, which I've got to imagine have cropped up from time to time in a clan with such a long history and interest in array crafting. Was a bit torn between this and some sort of array tattoo style, but ultimately decided that this would be more enjoyable to write. Also, I couldn't resist the mythological reference. So, without further ado, my Good Seed.

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Castor Tyndaridae

The Golden Demons' predisposition towards the use of arrays is a well documented phenomena, both within the clan and without. Where many clans and sects might ridicule or abuse their array crafters, the Mechanikos of the Golden Demons are a highly treasured asset, carefully protected and nurtured so as to allow them to reach their full potential and contribute their works to the clan. This nurturing has, over the clan's many, many generations, given rise to a variety of divergent techniques and styles of array crafting, as successive generations of Mechanikos sought new, innovative ways to improve upon the work of their predecessors, and while many such techniques have, with the clan's considerable fall from grace, died out, some have endured into the modern day, carefully passed down through family lines and their traditions.

Castor Tyndaridae hails from one such family line. Where most Mechanikos focus their education and efforts on learning and mastering the applications and production methods of a wide variety of different forms of arrays, the Tyndaridae lineage focus their work into a very specific field of array crafting: The art of animating automatons through the use of arrays. Where most array crafters will simply animate the automaton and be done with it, the Tyndaridae go to great effort to modify, economize, and improve upon the combat potential of their automatons, leading to a wide variety of different forms and functions among the automatons produced by different members of the family

And yet, Castor is an oddity even amongst this family of oddities. From a young age, Castor has focused all of his work and efforts into the improvement and modification of his very first training automaton, which he has taken to calling Pollux. Where most members of his lineage abandon their first training puppet a couple of weeks after it's presented to them, moving on to bigger, better things, Castor has lovingly modified and improved on the very first puppet he received, denying all other alternatives presented to him.

Those who might ridicule such a choice, however, can only be silent at the results that he's attained through his hard work and single-minded devotion. Castor has ably proven himself the most talented Tyndaridae technician of his generation, and Pollux has, under his expert control, proven capable of besting the automatons of Mechanikos many years his senior. Many young Mechanikos can attest to the dexterity with which Castor manipulates Pollux, who moves in perfect tandem with his master. Some even say that the bronze automaton seems to possess a gleam of intellect in it's marble eyes, when looked at from the right angle.

His potential as a Mechanikos aside, Castor is a deceptively cheerful young man. Playful and exuberant, he's ever willing to act the part of the class clown, cracking jokes and witticisms whenever he feels that the mood ought to be lightened, even at his own expense. He treats Pollux like a surrogate brother, despite his mindless nature, and he can often be found polishing and performing maintenance on it's shiny bronze exterior, ensuring that his companion is always in fine fighting form. He takes great offense to those who criticize or insult Pollux, even more so then those who insult Castor himself, and belittling Pollux is a quick way to align yourself as his enemy.

The mischievous side of his personality belies a keen and observant mind, and though his cheeriness is by no stretch an act, Castor is constantly watching and deciphering the actions of others under all the jokes and clowning around. The numerous trials and criticisms he's received over the years as a result of his single-minded focus on Pollux have tempered his resolve and determination, and though he often shrugs off the insults of those that belittle him good-naturedly, he's unwilling to give ground to those that try and push the issue and prevent him from achieving his goals.

All of these other character traits, though, serve to conceal a very deep sadness, related to his devotion to Pollux and his general unwillingness to, in spite of his friendly nature and demeanor, allow others too close to himself. Though he conceals the heartache well, Castor's path is a lonely one, and he considers Pollux, despite his inanimate nature, to be his only true confidant.

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Overall High Concept: A young expert of a highly specialized branch of array crafting, concealing a tragic past related to his strong connection to Pollux, his automaton companion.

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Basic Stats:


Current Status: 18 years old, Cultivator of the First Heavenstage of Qi Condensation

Effective Combat Strength: First Heavenstage of Qi Condensation

Life-saving Treasures: Nadda

Special Treasures: Nadda (Unless you count Pollux)

Starting Perk: Pollux, a bronze, former practice automaton of expert make and modification, with a number of concealed weapons and functions courtesy of the slavish efforts of his master. Might have a little more to him then meets the eye of even his owner.

Goal: Develop Pollux into the perfect fighting machine, capable of besting even Nascent Soul experts.

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Omakes:

Omake the First - Admission

Omake the Second - Teeth in the Dark

Omake the Third - Hundred Armed Giant

Omake the Fourth - The Depths


Edit: Any criticism's appreciated by the way, I'm a rather shit writer.
 
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This character looks fun.

It just so happens Keiros is also an array expert (kind of by default since I gave him no other distinguishing characteristics beyond 'asshole') and of the same generation.

Given Castor is unwilling to let others get close and Keiros is eternally attempting to get close to others and forever putting his foot in his mouth, I feel like they could be a fun mix.
 
Now she looked around seeing what they might have put to use from the results of her vengeance. Here and there on the circle of buildings she could see new skulls, covered in bronze and with etched gems in the sockets. Arrays glimmered on them in the star light. A quick assessment was done of how they sounded to her Qi senses and what she could see of the symbols.
Ah Yes, all the latest in Death Bling. This season's in thing is the Skull of someone you personally ripped off.
At the far end was a looming four armed statue made of Spirit Bronze. The Imperator, a symbol that reappeared in Clan imagery again and again and again. In his upper left hand he carried an aspis shield, in his upper right a hoplon spear. In his lower right he carried a ledger and in his lower left a sprig of grain. Symbols of the Legions. On his head he wore a Legion helm with its signature crest of horse hair, something only seen on the supreme commander of the Legions in times of true war.
Oh hey, so that what our God-Emperor looks like! Strong imagery i like! I can see clansmen gallivanting to different hands based on their interests.
"Father of Legions, gird us in good bronze, give unto us stout and hearty bread, let not sand nor mountain nor swamp stay our march. One day, this land will be conquered, in your name. Blessed be the Golden Fist of the Imperator."
Ave Impreator! Thy Will Be Done! The Faith shall spread and one day when the Turtle World is a bastion of His Worship, he will come and look upon our work and proclaim it good!
"So your my trainer then, peasant?" The short, blonde haired girl with bright green eyes said grumpily. Her hair was bound up in a ponytail which highlighted her bronze skin, and slightly upturned nose. Katerina Salviati. First Heavenstage and going no where fast from what they had told her. Violent and full of irrepressible energy.

Ferenike didn't react, her brown eyes sedate and calm as she drank her tea. "I am your Legionnaire trainer." She said, mild challenge in her phrasing.

The girl scowled and stomped forward, then stopped, seeming torn. She stood before Ferenike and crossed her arms with a huff.

"Well then, what are we going to do first? You gonna spar with me or something? You're strong right? Well I'm strong and strong people fight!" She grumbled out in breathless rush, rubbing an arm as she bounced in place. She looked like she hadn't fought in weeks and needed to fight.
So erm, personally i felt that she's coming across as younger then the stated age ? Feels like a 14 year old. Pure Teenager
Then she was in and looming at the foot of the sleeping girl's cot. Gripping the ends she burst into bright red light, face changing into a horrific visage of glass and fire and flipped her out of it.

"WAKE UP TRAINEES!" She roared at the top of her lungs, rattling the entire building.
Oh God. My Flashbacks! Plus side, no high pitch whistle to drive them insane. Minus side, the face of nightmares staring at them.
But Ferenike was already gone, a spectre of horror moving through each room, banging on the door and knocking trainees out of their cots if they were too groggy. "UP! UNIFORMS ON! SANDALS ON! GET TO THE TRAINING FIELD!" She yelled, repeating it like a mantra as she started herding sleepy kids out of their rooms and down into the common room.

Some of the ones quicker on the uptake were partially in their uniforms, which got them a scolding about proper uniform care, and others were getting ready as she popped in and yelled her message at them.

It wasn't more than a minute or two before they were all gathered in front of her. In neat ranks, and mostly sorted uniforms, with their Spirit Stones stored and tucked away somewhere on their person.
Oh wow, that's pretty decent! Everyone was out in time that the whole unit didn't need to be punished while waiting for the last few to get ready. That breeds resentment like hell.
She didn't know what possessed her to put up with them and their stupidity, or why her pride in their progress grew out of all sense and proportion. She didn't know why she put up with teaching such a violent girl as Katerina Salviati, and why she enjoyed discussing philosophy with her so much.

She felt like her heart would burst, exploding with passion, and she felt like an endless sea of willingness to give. Her head pounded like drums when she worried about them, imagining the horrible fates they could endure, bodies lying still in the sand. Heads torn off and chests opened.

She got up, huffing. She was going to have to watch these kids die out there. Their lives literally getting sucked out or gruesomely poisoned by the Devil Bees. She knew she was going to have to, and many more beyond them. There were some school of thoughts which said she shouldn't get attached but she intrinsically rejected them. She just couldn't name why.

She paced through the sands, sandals slapping it as she paced near her rock.

She couldn't put words to why they weighed on her so much. And that wasn't the only thing, this training had started to make her question her Dao. What was patience, really?
Wow, she really got attached to them. i wasn't expecting her to latch on that strongly to them.
She'd been an idiot. Of course she knew what these kids meant to her, it'd been starting at her in the face all this time.

She breathed deep, settling her racing heart. Inside, her mind bubbled and frothed, plans falling into place as she saw what she had to do.

Soon war would come and take her children away from her. But it would not find them easy prey.
Well taking the phrase " Father to his men " to a whole new level. I think Ferenike's unit is going to be feared because not only are they tough to fight, if you kill one, you have a raging glass monster fling molten glass spears into your face.
Was a bit torn between this and some sort of array tattoo style, but ultimately decided that this would be more enjoyable to write. Also, I couldn't resist the mythological reference. So, without further ado, my Good Seed.
Personally speaking, Tattoo array is a concept that i was aiming for as my 2nd Good Seed so i agree without a doubt that it will be a interesting concept. But Bronze puppets are cool as well! Interesting to see how Castor plans to develop it.
 
Honestly, I wonder if the people hunting us have the concept of sustainable farming. Like, they surely must realise that at the rate things are going, their super easy to access secret realm is going to be depleted, right?

... If I were in their shoes, I would probably make an effort to destroy or weaken some of the GD's rivals so we could grow more in order to allow more prospectives to attack the clan for karma.
 
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