Cetashwayo
Lord of Ten Thousand Years
- Location
- Across the Horizon
So in the end no one was happy and we all ended up exhausted and stressed. So it goes.
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Deep Red (Avatar: The Last Airbender)
- Thread starter kosm
- Start date
Dark Abstraction
Infrequent Participant
- Location
- United States
Take what time you need. Tensions are running high, but both you and the audience will calm and be able to look at things with fresher eyes with a bit of a break. You've been doing wonderfully with the writing of the story, don't doubt it.
I certainly hope you don't. I didn't vote for this path, but i think it's a perfectly good avenue for the quest to go down now that it's happened
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DarkLight140
Credit to Team
- Location
- Lost in my thoughts
That last update was Ozai really showing off his "manipulative gaslighting fuck" chops. He's nasty when it comes to dishing that out; acting from a position of incontestable physical and social power, emotionally manipulating and undermining his victim, making sure that he can punish her and tell her that everything was her fault no matter what she did, and isolating her from all other sources of emotional support. He's checking all the boxes.
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RadiantPhoenix
Trudging up the Hill
- Location
- USA, Earth
- Pronouns
- She/Her
At this point, running away the first good chance she gets is probably the best option.
Ozai's wrong about there being no other teachers, and I'd give him 95% odds on being wrong about Iroh's bridge being completely burned.
Ozai's wrong about there being no other teachers, and I'd give him 95% odds on being wrong about Iroh's bridge being completely burned.
- Location
- Oblivion
Honestly? I would say ignore the feedback entirely for this chapter and just re-write it the way you want to write it.
RoninSword
Sky God
- Location
- Canada
Draton
Probably Alpharius
Ozai is like... 15 pounds of crazy crammed into one of Iroh's tea bags. If he asked you what color the sky was and you answered blue, he'd tell you how you were wrong while lecturing as to how its your own fault you could be so wrong. He's the kind of mean and crazy that cant be reasoned with or rationalized. You'll only win against him when you slit is throat, and then make a nice cup of tea while watching him gurgle and die on the floor.
*shrug*
But none of the detracts my enjoyment from watching this all unfold. Its quite relaxing not being responsible in anyway for how this goes, lol. Plus, any way it goes its well written enough to be entertaining.
*shrug*
But none of the detracts my enjoyment from watching this all unfold. Its quite relaxing not being responsible in anyway for how this goes, lol. Plus, any way it goes its well written enough to be entertaining.
- Location
- Here & There
And lo Akane's will and bending is sapped.
And my vindication is sated. Now all I feel is dismay.
And my vindication is sated. Now all I feel is dismay.
- Location
- Leeds
Good god, that was horrifying.
Fantastic update.
Fantastic update.
- Location
- The Library
I love this story. I think we got so wrapped up in being better than Ozai that we lost our way.
Learn from Ozai and cut out the rot. Make plans that don't involve Azula, there's a whole world out there.
I'm incredibly greatful to have read this, let kosm rest for as much as needed then we can move forward.
Learn from Ozai and cut out the rot. Make plans that don't involve Azula, there's a whole world out there.
I'm incredibly greatful to have read this, let kosm rest for as much as needed then we can move forward.
- Location
- Massachusetts
Honestly, this is an excellent piece of writing, and it really tears my heart out, which means it's really good. However, I fully understand if you're not satisfied with your work.
If you want my honest opinion/advice, don't take too much stock with Anonkun's chat. Or even too much stock on SV either. What you need to focus on is the kind of story you want to write, which direction you want to take the story in. This story is your story, and other players are mere passengers in your vehicle. Players can get on and off, but it's up to you to drive the car.
If necessary, read chat minimally. Don't let it stress you, or get you down even.
- Location
- Leeds
If the live is getting salty about this I assume that the difference is the amount of investment between there and SV, its their decisions so when things go tits up its their fault however for us its mostly a story so it doesn't offend our pride or our fault.
- Location
- Florida
- Pronouns
- He/Him
First of all, take as long as you want. Ultimately you have no obligation to write this and there is no need to stress yourself over something.
And frankly if you want to keep it, then keep it. If you don't, then dump the chapter and rewrite it the way you want it to be, regardless of if the changes are just simple things like dialogue or even picking different choices than the audience had picked. Since this is your story to write when it comes down to it.
Sure, you have the voters but if you think it's not going to be going in a fun direction for you then there isn't a need to force yourself through that.
Crow
Falling is a Pleasure. Regardless of its Fate
Ahaha ah yes. I'll admit it is really easy to get swept up by the panic and the salt . Specially when we're dealing with such infuriating developments.
It speaks of your ability as a writter to inspire such strong emotions. Though it kinda is noticeable how you're stressed about it all , taking a rest is probably for the best.
It speaks of your ability as a writter to inspire such strong emotions. Though it kinda is noticeable how you're stressed about it all , taking a rest is probably for the best.
- Location
- Massachusetts
To add to him, there are stories on Anonkun that have no reader votes, so you can move this to a traditional fanfic if you want.
- Location
- United States
In my opinion, this is a great chapter from a narrative perspective.
I'm not sure rewriting would solve much in terms of player satisfaction. I'm trying to think of a way everyone ends up happy here and I doubt there is one - it seems to stem from the fact that different factions of voters just have different opinions of what the character should be. And chat is just... toxic.
Have you thought of getting an intermediary to read chat and send you the important bits instead of combing through each sentence? There's a reason why a lot of published authors don't read negative reviews or go on Amazon at all - it's a huge drain on the creative process.
A Nation's Virtue
南國山河南帝居
Cetashwayo
Lord of Ten Thousand Years
- Location
- Across the Horizon
It's really just the disconnect from a story versus a quest. Watching it happen in real time with only votes between defiance and obey was absolutely brutal.
SoothingCoffee
Umumumu
- Location
- The Library
Man. I feel like there was not any option where this could have worked well in our favor at all.
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Indeed. My initial reaction on reading the last part was "welp, that's obnoxious", and from a quest management perspective I think it leaves much to be desired (though how to do such things well is another question).
That being said, on thinking about it I do think it's a strong narrative move. Leaving it with a "the lesson is abandon previous characterisation and just obey Ozai" would have just been incredibly weak for the character. This otoh stresses Akane's character in more interesting ways and allowing the possibility of building upon the previous character arc - though I'm inclined to think that things are likely to get worse before they get better.
(also one of the logical lessons to take from that is "never believe anything Ozai says" - which possibly isn't the lesson he wants Akane to take away)
That being said, on thinking about it I do think it's a strong narrative move. Leaving it with a "the lesson is abandon previous characterisation and just obey Ozai" would have just been incredibly weak for the character. This otoh stresses Akane's character in more interesting ways and allowing the possibility of building upon the previous character arc - though I'm inclined to think that things are likely to get worse before they get better.
(also one of the logical lessons to take from that is "never believe anything Ozai says" - which possibly isn't the lesson he wants Akane to take away)
Lexica
Persevere
- Pronouns
- She/Her
I think purely on the strength of narrative that this scene was very strong, but obviously people get unhappy when bad things happen to a character they're invested in.
I don't really know what a good solution is, but regardless of what you choose I have confidence you'll write it well Kosm.
I don't really know what a good solution is, but regardless of what you choose I have confidence you'll write it well Kosm.
Dutch
Bored Spearman of the Wind
- Location
- CET
Very likely.
Though it might be better for both Kosm and chat to focus the next session's focus on Mitsuko trying to comfort a broken Akane and Akane finding new resolve.
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- Location
- CA
This was really fun to watch unfold. The tension between the decisions on what Akane was willing to give up and what she wanted to hold was intense, and while the vote certainly was a salt mine, I think it's a strong chapter both because of and in spite of that meta-tension.
While its hard to say I'm happy to read the suffering, I certainly think the story is better for it, and I'm excited to see where this'll go from here.
While its hard to say I'm happy to read the suffering, I certainly think the story is better for it, and I'm excited to see where this'll go from here.