He'd is 'he would', not 'he had'.
Calibration (BAHHSCQ/Sanctioned)
- Thread starter Alivaril
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He'd is 'he would', not 'he had'.
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- Finland
Coke Zero (because he has zero taste), is the protagonist of a fictional anime from the quest this story is a Worm crossover with.
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- Somewhere.
...Well, it's a Worm crossover in the same way BAHHSQ is an anime, but sure.
Except its not an interlude chapter, so the only relevant perspectives are the ones directly dealing with QA and HH (so the HH valks, QA, and Symbie at most), and Im still not sure that the HH segments arent slowly killing the story as well.
Also, the solution to having too many subplots is to cut some threads loose.
13th Bee
Worker
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- Tennessee, USA.
Also because his name, Koujirou, sounds sorta similar to "Coke Zero."
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- Sellicks Beach
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- Texas
If 75% of the chapter is an interlude then yes its safe to say its an interlude chapter. That said I agree were getting to the point where things are bloated enough that there are essentially three concurrently running side stories. Interludes are often a way to show an outside perspective and further flesh out the universe and its at the point where its taking over the universe; Then again its a crack fic which are generally a bit quirky and it isn't my story.
Also I feel the need to add that I don't particularly mind these flaws because I also like the side stories. An Alivaril update is still easily the highlight of my week.
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- Canada
Human communication options are so varied and amusing. The Valks are eccentric. Poor QA still not used to host's lack of self control.
Elise is fun, I hope she stays relevant after Hell's Hand is done. Really enjoyed Symbie's part too!
The Apocrypha of Anna's poor skill at describing things and Decimator getting bested by QA's anti-forging measures became canon.
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My problem is that the story already has interlude chapters that are labeled as such and this one wasnt. And that implies bad things about how bloated the story has become.
fictionfan
Please sir, may I have some Meows?
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- Tempe, AZ
Which means we can have 3 times as many cliffhangers per update.
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- A single human dimension
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- She/Her
Ironically, the original version of the chapter was about 2.5k words larger and 95% of them were from QA's perspective. It's likely that people would've thought of it as even more bloated, though, just for different reasons. 
You might be happy to know that the newly-deployed squad trying out Symbietech (probably) won't be getting further screentime, though.
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Basically all of my stories have the occasional dedicated interlude chapter even if they have multiple POVs normally. Don't read too much into it.
You might be happy to know that the newly-deployed squad trying out Symbietech (probably) won't be getting further screentime, though.
Don't tempt me
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Actually, I think that honor goes to Taylor's interlude in Sanctioned. I'm very proud of it.
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Symbie is getting attached to valks partly because Taylor and QA have different opinions on whether humans count as people automatically or not and is splitting the difference. She's handing out some info that's probably kinda sorta not meant to be handed out because watching people who might actually count as people suffer and die is distressing.
Why do I get the feeling that the valkyries will use that evaluation software for a lot more than missing out on situations that would have hurt them?
I feel that the pace is, perhaps, a touch slow around Hell's Hand. But the altrnative is basically no Hell's Hand. Pacing isn't really a binary thing, there is a range and everyone is on the "gotta go fast" team but there is usually a trade-off. They could have gotten through Hell's Hand with a single paragraph, but so much would have been lost. I am personally a little inclined to have gotten through The Queen Administrator Exhibit in a single update, where as here we got them arriving at the (admittedly impressive) front door and nothing more. Presumably, once Hell's Hand is finished, Taylor will get closer to the main story and be less of a disparate thread, tightening things down a little, but I wouldn't trade that.
I feel that the pace is, perhaps, a touch slow around Hell's Hand. But the altrnative is basically no Hell's Hand. Pacing isn't really a binary thing, there is a range and everyone is on the "gotta go fast" team but there is usually a trade-off. They could have gotten through Hell's Hand with a single paragraph, but so much would have been lost. I am personally a little inclined to have gotten through The Queen Administrator Exhibit in a single update, where as here we got them arriving at the (admittedly impressive) front door and nothing more. Presumably, once Hell's Hand is finished, Taylor will get closer to the main story and be less of a disparate thread, tightening things down a little, but I wouldn't trade that.
Browbeat.
Master Basher
hYPER Demon
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- UK
Honestly, if it got to the point of QA/Dreamer doing a "panic cover", and the "Kaworu expy" that'd happen, which would totally lead to Deci-kun, unintentionally triggering different sorts of flags, with unknowingly deeper than expected cover....
Which will all blow up in his face, with the madness, social antics, etc. Leading to a potential 'bee-line' into Anna. Confused on what caused an (other?) Antagonist to take interest in her. And it'd no doubt spiral to plots on further analysis... That totally won't ruin her day.
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But hey. It'd be more the "Kaworu/Rei" Shipping if it were Gilgamesh fans (plural, not the studio.) Before things go into wars between them, and the "Deci/Anna" shipping. But by that point, it'd be plotting to convert/corrupt Anna into the "Antagonist" side of conflict...
That's totally, not going to suffer a "Springtime for Hitler" effect, over conflict data exceeding scale, with not missiles. But words, ill tuned.
Neruz
Rogue Spiderbanana
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- The Land of Fire and Poison
Humanoid Antagonists are a thing, so...
Given the setting? 100%.
It's only a matter of time.
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- Out there
Isn't that's just one of the MIB aliens? I remember that particular tentacles-for-hair because the scene of agent J being a midwife is kinda permanently etched to my younger brain.
Carrnage
Human
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- New Zealand
the joke is that Kouji can't use guns with his core for some reason.
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- Somewhere.
Nah he has guns, just not a lot of them.
He has the Protagonist Special Budget 300 Frame. Set loadout, and some of it's locked.
Neruz
Rogue Spiderbanana
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- The Land of Fire and Poison
It was the most work-safe image for a female Cthulhu that I could find. Since my various attempts to find a female humanoid starfish failed, I decided to go with an octopus instead.Isn't that's just one of the MIB aliens? I remember that particular tentacles-for-hair because the scene of agent J being a midwife is kinda permanently etched to my younger brain.
Admittedly, I now deeply regret doing that image search. That which has been seen cannot be unseen.
But it unlocks when he 'needs it most' and the final unlockable is probably an outright 'I Win' button that may or may not also force some form of heroic sacrifice.
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- universe
Nothing happened in this chapter that couldn't be relegated to off screen events, which is a very big issue.
Carrnage
Human
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- New Zealand
I like fluff.
Hopefully it doesn't, because Anna is presented in the Quest as an unstoppable force of nature against Antagonists.
She also probably has spare body parts, and she doesn't use her organs aside from her head meats anyway.
Roth963
If I become inactive with this massage, I died
But does he have a reality warping alien god the size of a planet on a speed dial (or two of them I guess)?
He is the protagonist and this is an anime, him having totally once in a blue moon super power up that make him win is very much possible and even likely, even if Anna will still be the best the vast majority of time when he doesn't use this.
Double points if this powerup is something he won't be capable of consciously controlling when he does get it (until the finale seasons), because anime.
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- Deep in the Badlands of Equestria
I believe I detect a hint of Cuddlebug here.