A Little Vice (Trans Magical Girl fic)

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@Wukong @Walker of the Yellow Path Wow! Thank you for the feedback on the cards! I don't want to derail this thread from Shadell's awesome story too much, so Tl;Dr I basically put flavor over everything when making the cards. My goal was never to make playable MTG cards, but rather to focus on trying to express how much this story inspired me! I think there's a lot of way to do a little vice MTG, but this was an idea I couldn't stop thinking about.

That said, there are a couple of things I'll try and reply to:

I am not sure how I feel about the transform mechanic on Gula Shark. If I was designing a set as a whole I would either make two cards to represent her before and after becoming a magical girl, or make a story spotlight sorcery card or something to represent her shifting sides. Whenever I design transforming cards it can be really easy to overegg them and write too much on them so I try to avoid them where possible myself.

Gula is a really powerful control card that will generate huge amounts of value over the game. Honestly you never want to flip her because your opponent discarding a random card each turn is huge. Even though you have correctly templated it as an upkeep effect it is far too cheap for a recurring effect that will grind out value. Not to mention the ability to get lucky and strip someone's lands away making them incapable of playing the game. It will be oppressive to be on the other side of, plus she comes down on turn two to get started on ripping through hands right away so even if your opponent uses removal on her you are still gaining tempo and advantage. She would make for the most miserable counterplay imaginable.

Hilariously enough, my main reason for not having two cards for Gula and then Temperance is based on the Avaritia specialize into white. I really like the idea that Avaritia, showing her charity, can cast both Gula and Invidia for free. Gula being really powerful is also kinda intentional in that in the story, my personal headcannon is that Temperance chose to join the Angelic Saints despite knowing it would make her weaker.

The other option was to try and make a Temperantia front with Gula back, but 1) it would mean Gula wouldn't be tutorable and 2) it doesn't really represent Temperance's character arc imo.

HOWEVER. This annoyingly doesn't work under current magic rules as dual faced cards cannot morph as they are always considered face up unless transformed via their own effect. You have accidentally created a triple faced card (which mark rosewater did design for duel masters but shush). I am going to ignore that for the rest of this review though because the design is fucking awesome otherwise. And it works fine if you play with sleeves. Just not according to the comprehensive rules

The flipside I think needs some adjustments, mainly I think the activated ability should be WURG as magical girls should be defined as not having black as part of their colour identity. Also her static ability I think should be reworked because its a little confusing, magic doesn't often describe abilities like that outside of some weird green creatures, and it wont work on herself as she is a 1/1 which will confuse some players for sure. If you want my design, her flipside should on transform return all angelic saints to the battlefield from the bin and give them indestructable + hexproof until end of turn. Make her a one shot rez that you can hold in reserve until the critical moment when you transform her to save the day.
I love Invidia Bat's copying ability. However, her morph ability should cost blue mana, since you can't get creature copying outside of blue, and with how Morph works that means a deck with no blue mana could cast her and copy creatures. In addition, she should cost about 4 mana, which is the standard rate for clone effects. Humanitas is perfect, no changes needed though. I would run her as my Commander.

Firstly, I totally missed that magic cards don't have three sides... Whoops! The text for Invidia mostly came from Vesuvan Shapeshifter, and I really wanted a repeatable morph effect.
In terms of what Walker wrote, I agree that the morph cost should be blue. But that was a flavor sacrifice in that it felt just plain wrong for Invidia Bat to not have green mana for her abilities.
Lastly, the WUBRG activated ability on the full res ability intentionally includes black mana believe it or not. Humanitas mentions in chapter 17 that she still has her seed. In my reading of the story, I believe part of C's transition to being an Angelic Saint involved them accepting their envy and forgiving themselves for it. That's why the ability has black mana!

Avarita I don't want to review because I have a personal bone to pick with specialize, its like six cards in one, and also I dont play mtg arena so the mechanic can smeg off XD.
Honestly, I have no notes on Avarita and eir forms. Specialize really made sure ey stayed balanced cost wise. I really like em.

Honestly, I decided for specialize for Avaritia because e's such a versatile character. Plus, I really wanted to get a White/Black/Red version of Avaritia to represent eir charity. Also, e's a freaking badass who can take on three saints at once so I wanted to make the card reflect eir awesomeness.

Superbia is a very cool design, very flavourful, and I like it a lot. Extremely extremely powerful mind you, I would definitely look to add some more restrictions on it because a 13/13 flying first strike is going to end games without a serious kind of drawback to hold it back. As it stands there is no incentive to block with Superbia which means you play it and next turn dome your opponent for 13 which is kinda good in just about any format. Even at 6 mana. The roles are cool as hell and a great way to represent what he has been doing to people in the story but Cursed is going to get out of hand real fast. Two mana to effectively neuter a blocker or attacker at instant speed and it's repeatable! Danger zone for sure. This card has very little counterplay and will win games with very little prompting. Giving roles and taking damage in the form of -1/-1 counters are the core of this card, I would look to reworking it while keeping those two aspects in mind as those are the core of what makes Superbia such a flavour win.
Superbia is also pretty good. I kinda wish he had some white in there to represent the light based powers he seemed to use in the battle, but that's unimportant. Preventing transforming or specializing is very niche, only really going to shut down werewolf decks. Still, it's mostly a flavor win. My big thing is that a 13/13 with Flying and First Strike is really oppressive vs creature based decks, even with the draw back. In a lot of games, if the opponent didn't bring a bunch of removal, or flying chump blockers, he will end the game on raw stats alone.

The Monster Role and Cursed Roles are good ways to represent Resinners, but I think the Monster Role should have been just GG instead of BG. Makes it read better, took me three reads to realize that he has green anywhere in him. (Plus the Cursed role really makes it easy for him to disable all your opponents best creatures with little trouble.)

Superbia... I did a bad job designing balance wise on purpose tbh. Something that I changed last minute, and might not have made it into the pictures I posted - Superbia can only curse allies and can only make enemies monstrous. Toxic masculinity dragon does not get the ability to help allies. Also, the transformation prevention was very much designed with the idea in mind that Gula and Avaritia cannot transform unless its your turn. Thus, the transformation prevention only stops Superbia's allies from achieving their true form.

The only exception to this is Chiro as Humanitas can transform at instant speed after she stops pretending to be another creature. Furthermore, Invidia Bat // Humanitas is the only card that doesn't care if she's been cursed! Cursing doesn't cause you to lose abilities, it only makes you weaker... unless you're already a 1/1!


Tbh, if black gets the beasts, [cour 3 spoilers omitted].
... ngl I was lowkey really depressed when I heard we only have an epilogue left... :( Cour 3 never hurts!
 
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Missing that Inessa is gay when you hang out with her every day is a heroic level of denseness. I know we're biased by having her BFF as the narrator but I gathered that "out and proud" is a big part of her social persona.

Nessa... forgot she didn't tell Ida. She's like that. And because she forgot, she assumed she knew. But like...Ida has absolutely no idea because Nessa is very shy around her crushes. However any conclusion Ida can make is immediately overridden by the fact that Nessa is cute when she's flustered/blushing. At first....Inessa was the same way around Ida but they got to know each other and the fact that they're Besties overrides her embarrassment.
 
Nessa... forgot she didn't tell Ida. She's like that. And because she forgot, she assumed she knew. But like...Ida has absolutely no idea because Nessa is very shy around her crushes. However any conclusion Ida can make is immediately overridden by the fact that Nessa is cute when she's flustered/blushing. At first....Inessa was the same way around Ida but they got to know each other and the fact that they're Besties overrides her embarrassment.
Eternal screening isn't enough I need a screaming emote now
 
I think if I was doing any set of characters as a flip card, I would take a note from the Creature / Planeswalker flips they did a bit ago, and use C and Invida?

Like a relatively low powered "innocent bystandard" C, and then the corruption arc early invidia. It feels like the most dramatic transformation to use for a flip card set up.
 
I think if I was doing any set of characters as a flip card, I would take a note from the Creature / Planeswalker flips they did a bit ago, and use C and Invida?

Like a relatively low powered "innocent bystandard" C, and then the corruption arc early invidia. It feels like the most dramatic transformation to use for a flip card set up.
Maybe a "whenever c blocks or another legendary creature attacks, add an envy counter on c. Remove X envy counters and transform c into Invidia with the abilities of another legendary creature in the battlefield with CMC X or less, as well as this ability". Kind of a Lazav but without the graveyard stuff.
 
Missing that Inessa is gay when you hang out with her every day is a heroic level of denseness. I know we're biased by having her BFF as the narrator but I gathered that "out and proud" is a big part of her social persona.
That's either something we have to ignore to make the joke work, or something that makes the joke even funnier.
 
Superbia... I did a bad job designing balance wise on purpose tbh. Something that I changed last minute, and might not have made it into the pictures I posted - Superbia can only curse allies and can only make enemies monstrous. Toxic masculinity dragon does not get the ability to help allies.
I just reread Superbia and yeah, looks like I missed that restriction on his abilities. It's an interesting one.

Tbh, Superbia is one of those guys where he's got enough going on he almost deserves two cards.

One to depict him making Resinners, with an enchantment theme that Goad's creatures with Monster Roles and has temp mind control effects that represent his arc attempting to control C, and the other as the big bad final boss beater.
 
So I'm an idiot who woke up in the middle of the night with a simple prompt: "What if the Angelic Saints were MTG cards?" I promptly spent the next three hours designing the cards instead of studying for my exam tomorrow morning. Oops.

Anyway, here the MTG.Design link, but I'll also post the pictures here. Don't have any artwork since I didn't want to steal any from this thread without permission, and it seemed hard to make them work for MTG artwork.


For the Angelic Saints, I decided to focus on a theme of buffing your friends. Temperance and C get transforming cards for... reasons. Angelic Saints are focused on the color white, and Abyssal beasts are focused on the color black.

Castitas buffs her allies with the flames of purity. Also, she's got that sweet double strike for a CASTITAS. FLARE. BARRAGE!

Diligentia is an angelic saint who makes sure her allies never fall! While they may get weaker, that doesn't stop Diligentia from holding the line.

Temperance is a hungry shark who eats cards from the opponents hand. But, she turns into an Angelic Saint that helps protect her allies... and cast iron eggs. Ward is basically a keyword that makes it cost more to target the warded creature with spells or abilities. Of note is that this abilities affects all creatures, even her temporary enemies.

Of course, the number two represents the number of hands Temperance has for obvious reasons.

Our favorite protagonist might be my favorite card I made. Due to design limitation, I had to make Humanitas a 5 color card, but I really like how it turned out! Invidia Bat can morph into other creatures on the battlefield, and change every turn by flipping facedown or faceup. If you clone your ally, the legend rule applies and one of them has to die. But if you don't clone another card, you can transform Invidia bat into Humanitas!

A tricky thing I figured out is that clone effects typically belong to blue in MTG, but our wonderful protag loves the color green. So I had to get creative and give her morph ability a green activated cost. While she seems weak based on her base stats, Humanitas is an incredibly powerful supporter and her invigorating wind helps all her allies rejoin the fight.

Specialize is an interesting mechanic in that you get 5 different versions of one card. But our greedy, greedy wolf only gets the best! I tried to make each card feature some form of "crime" on combat damage, except for the white version. Menace is a keyword that means our wonderful wolf can only be blocked by two or more creatures, fitting for er.
Base:

Crime forms! Blue steals from the opponents deck, black from the graveyard, red from the battlefield, and green makes treasure.



Avaritia's last form lets her tutor for another Abyssal Beast and play it for free if it has less power. Of course, when designing these cards I made white represent the Angelic Saints...

Our last "friend" is Superbia Dragon. As the apex of pride, any damage he takes is permanent. Of course, to offset that downside, he strikes first every combat. It almost appears that to beat him, you might need someone who can prevent lethal damage...

Superbia also has the ability to make other creatures into "Monsters" and "Curse" those who displease him. Unfortunately, it seems dear old Superbia has gotten confused in his old age and can only make his enemies stronger and his allies weaker. Woops!
Bonus points for sneaking green mana into his activated costs to represent the Abyssal Forest. He also makes his allies sad by preventing them from transforming or specializing, even if that would be the right choice.

Lastly, if all four angelic saints get together, Castitas buffs her allies by +1/+1 and hits twice for 4 damage. Digilentia hits for 3, Temperentia hits for 4, and Humanitas hits for 2 for a grand total of 13.


Updated with Renu's awesome artwork and the correct language on the Monster / Cursed role tokens.:

Feedback on these is appreciated if anyone has any suggestion for improvements / other ideas. Shadell thank you for making such a wonderful story!
They read out nicely, so that's pretty cool. But in actual MTG this is really underpowered, since there are 4 saint cards, and they are too weak individually. Invidia Bat also literally cannot fight any of the saints since she has no flying. Also there are too many land colors lol, although the low cost does help with that. They are fun to read though.
 

Most of these are really good! Some have problems though.

1) Invidia Bat does not work the way you probably intended as a card with both Transform AND turn face up/face down actually has THREE sides, one face, the transform side and a blank "Face down" side (which like all face down cards is a 2/2).

A better way might be "When Invidia Bat becomes tapped, she becomes a copy of target creature until she becomes untapped"

WUBRG, tap Invida Bat: Invidia Bat transforms.

2) For Avarita Wolf, its worth noting that Specialize is an Alchemy mechanic that only works in the MtG Arena app. To make her work in paper magic you'd have to probablly do something similar to Kenrith, the Returned King with activated abilities of each color.

1R: Avarita Wolf gets +1/+0 and first strike until end of turn

2G: Avarita Wolf fights target creature

3U: Avarita Wolf Connives (draw a card, then discard a card, if a non-land card was discarded, put a +1/+1 counter on Avarita Wolf).

4B: Mill 4 cards then return an artifact or creature from among the milled cards to your hand.
 
I think if I was doing any set of characters as a flip card, I would take a note from the Creature / Planeswalker flips they did a bit ago, and use C and Invida?

Like a relatively low powered "innocent bystandard" C, and then the corruption arc early invidia. It feels like the most dramatic transformation to use for a flip card set up.
It's a four-dimensional card and it can be flipped twice.
C. >> Invidia (Chiro) >> Humanitas (Chiro).

UPD: Or, well, three times, if Temperantia flipping the table every time Chiro refuses to admit to being a girl counts.

UPD2:

wow now that I write it out how does everyone else have more game than the heroine.
She hasn't finished the tutorial location yet.

First, she needs to master the the basics of self-love mechanics, then beat the surprisingly tough mini-boss and, well, decide to step into the big scary world of possibilities.
 
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The Two Chiros
Well, I know someone Who could help out there. Granted, she can be pretty strict about it, but just having future!Chiro show up for a talk should be fine.
Author's Note: Well, time to make good on this.
To clear up some confusion, 'Kaguya Naotake' is the alias The Doctor uses in the updated version of my first omake, though you may recall her using 'Jane Smith' in the version I posted to this thread.



The Two Chiros

Not for the first time, I sat with a lump in my throat outside the Guidance Counselor's office. But for the first time, I was seeing someone completely different than Mr. Noir, someone who Inessa had even vouched to me for. I was flattered, too flattered really, that she'd go out of her way to recommend the new Counselor to the likes of me. But hers was a somewhat guarded recommendation, so I was still trembling more than I should have.

"Miss Dunne, the Doctor will see you now," came the soft yet scratchy voice of Miss Mortlake. My face scrunched up being called by that prefix, but I only got as far as opening my mouth to correct her before I stopped. I was no Miss, yet the thought of being addressed as Mr. instead gave no comfort either.
Best to chalk it up to a simple mistake, Mortlake and I had barely interacted after all.

Lavinia Mortlake, I think I full name was, had... some connection to Counselor Naotake? She'd showed up the same time the new Counselor had, with her having gotten a job on staff through them. I guess maybe she was the Avaritia to Naotake's Noir. In the general sense of course, unless there really was something supernatural going with them, which really wouldn't surprise me by now.
She had what could be called an 'overachiever' or 'smartest in class' look to her, with her glasses, dark braids, and freckles. Made me think back how much I'd been slacking in my own studies.

I stepped back into that Counselor's office once again, and my eye immediately caught on something Mr. Noir certainly didn't have. A large box draped in a woolen sheet dominated much of the room. I magnetically moved towards it, my hand outstretched, before I heard a loud cough and a velvety yet firm voice proclaim, "Chiro Dunne, I believe your business is with me."

"Ah yes, of course, so sorry!" I blurted out upon Counselor Naotake calling me out, my face already flushed. I then sat down before the Counselor; 'Dr. Kaguya Naotake' emblazoned atop her desk. Towering over me, she was as intimidating as Mr. Noir was, with her long midnight black hair marked by a single silver streak, deep and piercing eyes, and her dark, elaborate dress like that of a doll from hundreds of years ago.
I tried to keep Inessa's recommendation in mind as I gazed upon her, yet simultaneously, I had to commend her on dressing so strikingly. I knew I was far too self-conscious to wear an outfit like hers.

What she did next caught me more off guard, she actually smiled and chuckled at me. "Really, my dear Dunne, no need for apologies. Protective as I am of her, I can't blame you for taking such notice," Doctor Naotake said, her voice lighter and softer. For some reason, I took that the 'her' she mentioned wasn't Miss Mortlake.
"In fact, that's exactly what I've been meaning to talk about with you," she said next, her voice again growing firmer. "I hear you have a rather nasty habit of apologising when you have absolutely no need to. Awfully improper and impolite of you... though now I've said that I suppose your natural inclination is to apologise. That one's on me, I admit."

She was all too right, as I was about to say sorry before her words stopped me midway. I was even about to say sorry for saying sorry. I then changed it to, "Yeah, I suppose that's true," but then had to ask, "Wait, how did you know? I thought these sessions started with you asking me what the problem was? Er, or so I've experienced."

"Simple, my dear. Miss Brandt told me all about you," Doctor Naotake said, then eyed me closer, "and how you've found yourself swept up from one bad situation to another." I winced and nodded, but then she said, "Chiro, I absolutely do not blame you for that, doing so would help nothing. If I may play the 'relatable' card, I found myself in quite the bad crowd in my own schooldays. Why, some would insist I still run with a bad crowd even now."

I shuddered to ask just what about this 'bad crowd' Inessa had told her about. I knew she absolutely wasn't the sort of person would just tell on me, especially with something of Abyssal Forest magnitude. And yet, given what I'd done, didn't people have every reason to be warned about me?
Clearing my throat, I ventured "So, you're saying I can get out of this bad crowd? Cause if so, er, thanks for the encouragement, but I really believe I've gotten in too deep now..."

Before I could finish, Doctor Naotake then raised a hand, as a butterfly suddenly came flying in and landed on her fingers. "Can a butterfly break free of its cocoon, or a snake shed its skin?" she asked me. "Of course they can, as can you break free of the two prisons you find yourself in. I shouldn't need you tell you what the first is, but the second, Chiro dear, is the one you've built in your own mind. I'm not saying everything will be fine if you just escape your self-loathing, there's still an arduous road ahead, one I've walked myself. But they say 'all journeys begin with a single step' for good reason."

"No, I can't!" I gasped, nearly losing control of myself, before I blubbed, "I'm... I'm not that sort of person." I wasn't even a butterfly or snake, but a bat. I could picture Naotake saying that was but semantics, but I wasn't assigned that animal for no reason.

Dr Naotake then sighed; I couldn't blame her as her exhaustion with me emanating like miasma from her. "I am most likely going to regret this, dear Chiro. In my deal with time, this is a most grey area," she said. All I could think at the moment was what a 'contract with time' even was, I think I would've heard if there was a Saint or Beast with time powers. "But I can see drastic measures are called for. Bear with me a little while, I'm just off to fetch someone."
Drastic measures? No, please, not for someone like me, I'm not worth them. And definitely not if it involves messing with time or breaking a deal. Of course, I was too weak to voice any of this before the Doctor did what she did.

She then lifted up the cloth to reveal what I could only call a blue box underneath, stepping inside. Wait, it had 'Police' written on it, didn't England have those way back in the day? The weirdness of a British police box being here was then eclipsed as it vanished right before me, making a wheezing, groaning noise as it did. I know I really shouldn't have been surprised by a sight like that anymore, yet I still found myself almost falling back in my chair.

While Dr Naotake was out, Miss Mortlake came back in and asked "Guess she talked to you about apologising too much, right? She tells me that all the time too." I nodded, which made her come closer and add, "But if The Doctor says there's a way, then there really is a way. I used to be in, well, she called them a 'cult'. I thought I'd be trapped there forever, yet she really got me out. So I know, I just know she can do the same for you!" her voice raised.

I instinctively shook my head, about to say that she was worth it, I wasn't. And that whatever her situation was, mine was completely different. Except, was it? I knew nothing about the cult Miss Mortlake used to be in. It couldn't have but somewhere in the Abyssal Forest, but who was to say there weren't... other places?

That wheezing, groaning sound came back again, and Dr Naotake walked out along with something else, both having somehow fit in that one box. That someone else was... me? No, she looked like just me, but there was no way it could be! This person was a girl, and I'm not, I can't be...

"Quite the adventure, but we've finally made it," Dr Naotake said despite having been gone only seconds. "Chiro Dunne, since you're still shy with introductions," she added, patting the green girl on the back, "may I do the honours? Chiro, yourself from the future. Miss Chiro, yourself from the past." Hearing that nearly broke me.

"I, I know I'm going to stumble saying this, but I really am you! Er, I mean you're going to be me," the future 'me' pleaded with me. i trembled as I saw she was even holding Count Fruitula, if a little patched up.

I blushed again and felt the urge to leave the room, were Miss Mortlake not blocking my way. I just shook my head fast and faster instead, then said to the girl from the future, "N-no, I'm sorry, whoever you are you've gone too much out of your way for me. There is absolutely no way you can be me., you're too pretty, too feminine, too-"

"I remember," the girl suddenly said, "I remember saying those exact same words. Chiro, myself, please, don't hurt yourself by saying that. It'll only be start, but you have to be kind to yourself, tell yourself you can change for the better! It's, well, a lesson I still have to learn even now. I'd give anything to have learned it sooner..." she looked downcast, then muttered, "I still don't think I can truly love myself, but you have to try! At least accept yourself, accept you are-"

"A girl?" I asked, with me feeling ashamed over how quickly that word came to my head. Again, I was about to say no, and again I couldn't. I felt I had to say no, but did I really want to?

"If it helps, I used to look like a man myself. Granted, I have, how to put this, certain 'privileges', but the principle's the same, " Dr Naotake chimed in, "If a caterpillar cannot imagine itself a butterfly, how shall it ever grow?"

My 'future self' then looked at Dr Naotake and, with some hesitation, asked, "Doctor, may I? I know you don't like this sort of thing..."

"Well my dear, I did say your circumstances called for drastic measures," Dr Naotake said back to her, then narrowed her eyes, "but any damage to your own timestream is on you, am I clear?"

She winced and nodded, before 'myself' looked at me and said, "Gentle as a spring breeze, Angelic Saint Humanitas takes the stage!"
Were Miss Mortlake not there to catch me, I would've fainted seeing this girl who said she was me transforming into the very image a Saint right before me. I am no Saint, that should be proof she couldn't be me, yet she still said, "Chiro, I was you, so I know you cannot believe this, even I still find it hard to believe, but..." she said as I was engulfed in her green aura, "This is your future!"
Upon detransforming, she looked back at the blue box and said, "Suppose I really should go, timestream and everything. Not to mention how Michael would react to what I just did."

"Oh yes, that 'Who is like God'. We shall have words," Dr Naotake said, then smiled at 'me' and said, "It's all perfectly normal, my dear. My own interactions with my past selves have never gone smoothly either. But that's another story for another time."

Having no way to believe what I just saw, I tried asking something else instead, something more plausible... relatively. "Dr Naotake, er, if I may ask, how is it you can all fit inside that box?"

"The word you're looking for is TARDIS, Chiro dear. And it's simple, a little thing we call dimensional transcendence. Oh, and you can just call me 'Doctor', only reason I call myself Kaguya Naotake is your school made me give some name when I set up shop as Counselor here," The Doctor told me.
She then looked past me at Miss Mortlake and said, "Lavinia dear, time we were off. Now this whole business with the Daleks exploiting the Abyssal Forest has been sorted, our job here is done." Wait, Dalek? Did she mean the Beast of Wrath?

"Ah, can I just have a few more minutes? There are people here I wanna say goodbye too, that's all," Miss Mortlake asked, having to readjust her glasses. That she already had people to go out of her way to say goodbye to cast a dark mirror on my own social skills.

"Alright, just a few more minutes. I've always found farewells rather bothersome myself, but if they mean that much to you," The Doctor told her.

Before Miss Mortlake got back, I knew I should ask one last thing... I just didn't know what. The thought of my own future, my own identity, was still burning in my head. Yet I froze at the thought of asking about, well, who I really was, even if that was what these sessions for. So instead, I asked maybe not the best question, but definitely no small one either. "Doctor... are you an Angel? You don't act like a beast at all, but I'd know if you were a Saint."

"I'm The Doctor," was all she answered. In turn she asked, "The question you really should ask, Chiro, is who you are."
 
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"In fact, that's exactly what I've been meaning to talk about with you," she said next, her voice again growing firmer. "I hear you have a rather nasty habit of apologising when you have absolutely no need to. Awfully improper and impolite of you... though now I've said that I suppose your natural inclination is to apologise. That one's on me, I admit."

She was all too right, as I was about to say sorry before her words stopped me midway. I was even about to say sorry for saying sorry.
Oh God, she actually acknowledged it!
"No, I can't!" I gasped, nearly losing control of myself, before I blubbed, "I'm... I'm not that sort of person." I wasn't even a butterfly or snake, but a bat. I could picture Naotake saying that was but semantics, but I wasn't assigned that animal for no reason.
Ah, semantics, the "best" thing to hide behind.
 
I've been thinking about Digimon. Like what if the Saints and Avaritia got pulled into the digital world and like I wanted to give Chiro a partner that gives her struggles context (her outstanding potential as both good and evil) but is also tied to Nessa's. Then it hit me. Lopmon would be perfect for her because Lopmon is very much a Digimon who's potential is like Chiro. But also one of Lopmon's digivolutions represents kindness. And like I'm definitely giving her that crest

Which means I'm giving Inessa Terriermon. And the Crest of Purity. I was thinking of giving her the Crest of love and one of the fire bird digimon but I think Mimi's crest fits her more.

As for Temperance....hmm... I'm going with Betamon. I could have given a shark digimon but this is better. Temperance gets the Crest of Honesty

As for Ida....hm...I think Armadillomon and hope would work best.

As for Avaritia. Fufufufu. She'll have Salamon and Light! I thought super hard about this! Because Avaritia is very much The Light in the Abyssal Forest.


That didn't take as long as I'd thought it would!
 
Unlike my previous DW crossover here, I tried to wait a while before making it clear it was a crossover (especially since I used my own companion and incarnation). Curious if people think that was the better approach?

Speaking of DW, Superbia even looks a bit like Peter Capaldi in his fanart.

I've been thinking about Digimon.

Coincidentally, the idea of a Digimon crossover has been brought up before. You might be interested.
Also, I thought Mimi's Crest was Sincerity, but that might be a localisation thing
 
Coincidentally, the idea of a Digimon crossover has been brought up before. You might be interested.
Also, I thought Mimi's Crest was Sincerity, but that might be a localisation thing

Hm... that Idea definitely has merit. Maybe I'll have them have the code key's as well.

I know! I'll inscribe the crest of kindness onto Chiro's left earing and the side key of envy onto Chiro 's right one.

And Mimi 's crest being sincerity is very much a western localization thing. Honesty/Sincerity being Joe's crest is the way things originally were.
 
Ida saw me first, looking on with profound confusion as I raised my tool as high as I could. Then, with a hop and my loudest scream, I brought it down against the back of Superbia's head with every bit of strength I had.
That wasn't a melee weapon! W-where was the dignity? The grace!? Starlight Princess Orion would never use her wand as some kind of club.
 
For once, just once, Chiro's conviction that she's just not a proper magical girl comes in handy.

Because it means she doesn't feel as inhibited about beating the bastards to death with her goddamn princess wand.
 
What an incredible ending for a great story! Looking forward to reading the epilogue too (and maybe also to Chiro getting a clue :V)

None of them noticed me as I crept toward the vain little snake. The wind helped me, pockets of air softening my steps as I approached. Ida saw me first, looking on with profound confusion as I raised my tool as high as I could. Then, with a hop and my loudest scream, I brought it down against the back of Superbia's head with every bit of strength I had.

Also also, reading this bit unlocked an ancient memory, lol.
 
Hmm... The name 'Michael' means "who is like God". I feel like there might have been a missed oppuntunity here in not making Michael an owl. :V

(I get strange thoughts in the shower sometimes)
 
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