Think there is still the issue with it sounding like Jaune just made up an excuse when he got caught, what with the whole showing up unannounced thing. The reason I think we should go into detail explaining why Jaune is there to make it more believeable.
[X] "My name is Jaune and I was hired to fix your laptop by a guy with a ponytail. Please don't stab me in my eye I only have one of those left today."
Despite that, it still sounds better than the long winded explanations.
@Redshirt Army I can always be persuaded to switch to a better alternative. I just need an actual alternative to be suggested, with reasons that make sense.
[X] "My name is Jaune and I was hired to fix your laptop by a guy with a ponytail. Please don't stab me in my eye I only have one of those left today."
Despite that, it still sounds better than the long winded explanations.
[x] Your laptop was targeted by some really nasty ransomware, some probably SDC guy just hired me to fix it hush hush- ponytail, super slimy personality, ringing any bells?
[x] Your laptop was targeted by some really nasty ransomware, some probably SDC guy just hired me to fix it hush hush- ponytail, super slimy personality, ringing any bells?
I wonder if this little chain of events means that Jaune won't be attracted to Weiss. I certainly like this Jaune more than the canon one. This would be a good change.
@Redshirt Army I can always be persuaded to switch to a better alternative. I just need an actual alternative to be suggested, with reasons that make sense.
With like two exceptions they're pedantic to the extreme.
EDIT:Just so we're clear there's nothing wrong with wanting to be specific, but it's so easy to be over-specific and I think the issue compounds when they're stacked together.
I wonder if this little chain of events means that Jaune won't be attracted to Weiss. I certainly like this Jaune more than the canon one. This would be a good change.
I mean, he's still attracted to her, but he'd definitely be put off now, even if my ban on romance wasn't still in effect- hell, I'd hesitate to say you're gonna get past cordial acquaintance with her until Blue actually does hijack a hardlight projector and slap some sense into you.
Jaune, despite my best efforts, isn't some sexless monk who denies himself the flesh, and Weiss Schnee's a pretty girl. He just, you know, kinda has bigger things to be worried about right now.
With like two exceptions they're pedantic to the extreme.
EDIT:Just so we're clear there's nothing wrong with wanting to be specific, but it's so easy to be over-specific and I think the issue compounds when they're stacked together.
Personally, I'm taking any vote more than ten words long as full conversation guides at this point- there's just too much in there not to. But honestly, you're all voting for the exact same basic thing anyway- tell her the full story. Hell, most of your votes are so similar that I'm just slamming them together anyway, because not doing that would be pedantic.
Look, I'll say that this isn't like Ada at all. So long as you give Weiss something, without antagonising her, you're not going to learn how good her tracheotomy skills are. Either way, I'm closing the vote tomorrow, and anything even remotely similar, including just taking lines wholesale from other votes, will be smushed together for the sake of simplicity.
Adhoc vote count started by Prok on Dec 28, 2017 at 7:44 PM, finished with 1885 posts and 41 votes.
[X] My name is Jaune Arc and...
[x] I'm working for you, sort of!
[x] Your laptop was targeted by some really nasty ransomware, some probably SDC guy just hired me to fix it hush hush- ponytail, super slimy personality, ringing any bells?
[x] plz no stab
[X] I thought the offer was too good to be true, but now that something actually went wrong I'm not sure which one of us is being set up.
[X] Once she's calmed down and removed the sword from your neck, warn her about the spyware.
[x] I was just hired in order to fix some virus that appeared on both your scroll and laptop by a shady guy downstairs. Also, your backup is filled with spyware sending stuff to SDC. Do you want to keep it or should i remove them?
[X] Jaune Arc, expert in most fields related to computers. I was hired by one of your subordinates to remove the ransomware currently on your laptop and scroll. Your backup has also been filled with spyware, but I'll clean that up for you too. It would be bad for my reputation if I left such an important job half done.
Well yes, but "schadenfreude" flowing doesn't have the same ring to it, there's nothing to be salty about here (yet), and Dust is the local Spice equivalent. ...The metaphor got lost somewhere around Alberquerque, I think.
Either way, I'm closing the vote tomorrow, and anything even remotely similar, including just taking lines wholesale from other votes, will be smushed together for the sake of simplicity.
BlazBlue+Persona 4 Arena+that one fighting game no one cares about except that Eltnam's in it+RWBY.
So I guess it's ASW PSBR, because no one from a franchise that's still got a future (Guilty Gear in this case) is in the game.
But no seriously it's a 2D crossover fighter with ASW's 2nd tier franchises and RWBY because Ishiwatari's a fan (and because they want to keep costs low by reusing the BB/P4A engine).
BlazBlue+Persona 4 Arena+that one fighting game no one cares about except that Eltnam's in it+RWBY.
So I guess it's ASW PSBR, because no one from a franchise that's still got a future (Guilty Gear in this case) is in the game.
But no seriously it's a 2D crossover fighter with ASW's 2nd tier franchises and RWBY because Ishiwatari's a fan (and because they want to keep costs low by reusing the BB/P4A engine).
Thanks. And this made me think of a joke function and a function so serious we'll probably never use it in the quest.
Push() Description: after taping a fin to the Transistor and muffling the screams of {GET OFF OF ME. I AM NOT A DAMN SURFBOARD. THAT'S MY EYE YOU'RE STANDING ON} , Jaune proceeds to surf through the air on top of the Transistor, likely stabbing any poor fool that can't get out of the way fast enough.
SafeMode() Description: after staring his own mortality in the sharp angry eye and thinking about how dangerouse being a Hunter is, Jaune does his best to ensure his AIs can survive his death
Not cool man, Under Night In-Birth is awesome.
Admittedly the least well known franchise in the crossover, but still awesome.
Hopefully CTB will give it some much needed exposure.
Push() Description: after taping a fin to the Transistor and muffling the screams of {GET OFF OF ME. I AM NOT A DAMN SURFBOARD. THAT'S MY EYE YOU'RE STANDING ON} , Jaune proceeds to surf through the air on top of the Transistor, likely stabbing any poor fool that can't get out of the way fast enough.
You joke, but that's actually an upgrade you'll be able to buy once you get to the shop.
I'm not even kidding.
Get out of my notes.
As for the second one, that's, gonna happen anyway. The Transistor and the Process both are results of your Semblance, and wholly independent of it, as a child is independent of its mother after leaving the womb. They're both going to outlive you, the rest of Remnant, Remnant itself, and probably the star it's orbiting, unless things go entirely pear-shaped.
Anyway, bit late, but the vote is closed, and the vote tally's telling me that... HavocKeeper's vote won?
Or at least that theirs is the earliest chronologically. Anyway, that's the one that wins.
Now if you'll excuse me, I need to go and deal with screaming birds outside at 2:40 in the morning.
As for the second one, that's, gonna happen anyway. The Transistor and the Process both are results of your Semblance, and wholly independent of it, as a child is independent of its mother after leaving the womb. They're both going to outlive you, the rest of Remnant, Remnant itself, and probably the star it's orbiting, unless things go entirely pear-shaped.
