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YES!!! A healthy discussion of feelings and the option of true polyamory!!!! FINALLY!
Rosario and Joestar
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I willen honest, I was more interrested in this very interresting exploration of Moka, Kuruma and Tsukunes relationship.
Because Kurumu is right, the problem With her parents was one man trying to maintain a solid relationship With multiple vampire woman without husband wife...having any sort of connection.
As Kurumu is trying to say, a Triangle With those three would be a more solid relationship as the girls are Also supporting eachother.
I am only curious What inner Moka thinks of this
Genon
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I personally have the exact opposite opinion. While this part needed to be written, I feel that it shouldn't have come at a climactic moment during the final battle of the season finale of the quest. I think it should've been during a relative lull in the story. I kinda felt blue-balled given that I got hit with four updates of relationship drama when I was expecting an exciting anime battle.
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Since this thread's current direction makes it seem like the "cool" thing to do, here's my 5 cents on the subject. The intermission is fine. Its placement is fine. Finishing the triangle conversation before the season's finale is reasonable; it makes sense to me. Postponing it until later would have made much less sense. My initial reaction may or may not have been an itch to strangle something but after re-reading the first two parts of ATE, I was once more hyped for the climactic conversation as much as for the climactic battle - that initial reaction was what it was mostly due to how long it had been since the previous ATE. Both sides are good, engaging, engrossing, and a pleasure to read for me.
Thank you for both the bitter and the sweet in this scene, Eva. For me, ATE has overall struck a neat combination of awkwardness, further intensified by the forceful, if well-meaning, trigger for the talk, and pleasant earnest openness that R&V itself is, Kurumu aside, unfortunately lacking in, especially where Moka and Tsukune are concerned.
...There is one line that bothers me to no end, though:
can explain it to me has some insights that I am not managing to grasp.
Thank you for both the bitter and the sweet in this scene, Eva. For me, ATE has overall struck a neat combination of awkwardness, further intensified by the forceful, if well-meaning, trigger for the talk, and pleasant earnest openness that R&V itself is, Kurumu aside, unfortunately lacking in, especially where Moka and Tsukune are concerned.
...There is one line that bothers me to no end, though:
And I'm not even sure why that is the case; it has just struck me as... not quite right... out of place, maybe? I may be imagining things, or it may be a personal issue with that phrasing specifically that I'm not consciously aware of. Still, I've decided to bring it up in case someone shares that sentiment and
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EvaUnit01
Kept you waiting, huh?
It felt screwy to me as well.
There are a few formatting fixes that need done to the update as well, I'll see if I can't address it with those at that time.
Genon
Baron Awesomesauce the Magnificent
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EvaUnit01
Kept you waiting, huh?
Well...
"Just for that sass, I'm interrupting the DIO fight with a Bleach anime filler arc!"
"Now you know how Mizore's been feeling since the end of summer vacation!"
"You thought it would be an animesque grand finale... but instead it was me, teenage hormones!"
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Implying teenage Hormones aren't some Animesque grand Final Battle.
EvaUnit01
Kept you waiting, huh?
I do a lot of my best work -- or my timeliest work, anyway -- when I just let my hands get on with the typing and stop trying to interrupt them.
Sometimes however, they interject clunky shit into the work, like what happened there.
About the only way I could think of to make the passage read better was to just cut the offending line and Moka's response to it, but I believe the original intent was to show/suggest that a) Kurumu still feels some guilt over the shitheel she was at the start of the term, yet b) enough time has passed and trust been built that Moka had forgiven her for it.
This, admittedly, can be better conveyed later on, but that was the original intent of its presence there.
And, oh yes. Someone roll me a d6 on SV's roller.
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Oh, that bad, right? I don't remember if lower is better in this quest or higher. If it's lower like I remember, then we're fucked.
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Eh it's in the middle not too bad but not to good
Genon
Baron Awesomesauce the Magnificent
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Rolling. If I can figure out how SV's dice roller works with the update.
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So completely mediocre
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Better than 4.
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EvaUnit01
Kept you waiting, huh?
Was originally going to be months, before I changed my mind.
EDIT: Fixed.
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EvaUnit01
Kept you waiting, huh?
Sorry for the long absence, things have been.... a bit of a rollercoaster, and I've had my attention on other things. I needed some time to step back as a creator of fiction, and be a consumer for a while.
....but y'know what? Vacation time's over, amigos y amigas.
Just popping in to say that I'm back, I intend to have an update ready in the next handful of days, and my vow to bring you all to the end of Rosario and Joestar Part 1 by the end of this year still holds true.
And on that note, the quest's 5th anniversary will be precisely two months from now, so anyone who's anticipating the fourth wall mail slot has slightly less than that amount of time to come up with questions and snarky comments. (and this time, Mizore will finally actually get to answer how big of a wedding she wants, so look forward to that if nothing else)
....but y'know what? Vacation time's over, amigos y amigas.
Just popping in to say that I'm back, I intend to have an update ready in the next handful of days, and my vow to bring you all to the end of Rosario and Joestar Part 1 by the end of this year still holds true.
And on that note, the quest's 5th anniversary will be precisely two months from now, so anyone who's anticipating the fourth wall mail slot has slightly less than that amount of time to come up with questions and snarky comments. (and this time, Mizore will finally actually get to answer how big of a wedding she wants, so look forward to that if nothing else)
Update 172 - Season Finale and Joestar, part 3
EvaUnit01
Kept you waiting, huh?
You make eye contact with Mizore over Kuyo's shoulder, desperately hoping that she'll calm the hell down and not go picking a fight that's almost certain to get her killed.
Your woman's gaze flicks over to you, fortunately, and after a moment's hesitation she visibly forces herself to relax, releasing some of the tension from her stance, before going back to her actual role in the plan.
And as you bring your focus back to Kuyo, the rotten son of a bitch turns to look behind him, and pauses.
His surprise causes everyone else in Youkai Academy to turn that way as well, and now everyone can see quite plainly how Mizore's standing next to the rope-bound Tsukune, ice claws raised against the ropes to cut him loose.
If it were literally any other context, that sudden look of stage fright on Mizore's face would be hilarious or adorable.
Eventually, however, something has to break, and Kuyo's silence proves to do so a little faster than his patience.
You can see his shoulders beginning to twitch, and his voice sounds like it's on the verge of cracking. "I gave you a fair and just opportunity to speak in Mister Aono's defense," he growls. And as the heat haze all around him starts escalating in intensity, several things all happen at once.
"And you reward my justice-"
Mizore's eyes grow wide, and with a muttered "oh shit!" she finally cuts Tsukune loose....
"WITH A JAILBREAK?!"
The roar of Kuyo's voice seems to almost harmonize with the roar of his flames as the stage is engulfed in a towering inferno, the intensity of which sends even his own enforcers scattering in fear!
Your own heart almost stops in panic over the fate of your loved ones -- before you see Mizore diving out of a steam cloud in your direction, carrying Tsukune over her shoulder. She must have thrown up some kind of ice or frost wall to buy her the critical seconds she needed, you realize.
From the screams of pain, they're both alive! ... but not unharmed, you realize with a sinking feeling.
Tsukune's lost the right sleeve of his uniform, and the arm beneath it is covered in blisters and what look like second-degree burns. Mizore, for her part, is clearly panicking from the fact that her shirt is on fire and half-dumps, half-tosses her charge onto the ground so she can tear it loose, revealing a black tank top beneath it... and extensive charring across her stomach, and up and down both arms and her thighs, and dry and flaking skin everywhere else. Fucking christ.
Frankly, looking at the flame pillar they just escaped from, part of you can scarcely imagine that they weren't instantly incinerated, much less as comparatively uninjured as they could, almost should have been.
Your naked relief and disbelief must show on your face, for as Mizore glances at Tsukune and then at you, she fights through the pain and fear she's going through and tries to smile at you. "Made it," she says simply.
...you really don't know how to process everything you're feeling right now. Mizore got pissed off and distracted paying attention to Kuyo, and that almost got her and Tsukune both killed. You've never lost anyone close to you before, and the scene of the stage exploding keeps playing over and over in your mind, with the shock and terror gripping your heart until Mizore burst out of it.
Your first friend at Youkai Academy in Tsukune, and your lover in Mizore, both almost died just now.
Things are only going to get worse.
There's a non-zero chance that right now, before the violence escalates and you have to focus on beating the shit out of Kuyo -- and the son of a bitch hasn't even revealed his true form yet, so he can clearly get even more dangerous -- might be the last chance you have to say something.
(your reaction time is limited; pick one)
[]Rebuke Mizore for her carelessness. What if the two of them had died just now?!
[]The only reason you're not crushing Mizore against you in a desperate embrace is because you don't want to injure her any further than she already is.
[]You remember from the start of school that Moka can heal people with her blood, like she did to you! Can she help?!
[](write-in, may be subject to veto)
Your woman's gaze flicks over to you, fortunately, and after a moment's hesitation she visibly forces herself to relax, releasing some of the tension from her stance, before going back to her actual role in the plan.
And as you bring your focus back to Kuyo, the rotten son of a bitch turns to look behind him, and pauses.
His surprise causes everyone else in Youkai Academy to turn that way as well, and now everyone can see quite plainly how Mizore's standing next to the rope-bound Tsukune, ice claws raised against the ropes to cut him loose.
If it were literally any other context, that sudden look of stage fright on Mizore's face would be hilarious or adorable.
Eventually, however, something has to break, and Kuyo's silence proves to do so a little faster than his patience.
You can see his shoulders beginning to twitch, and his voice sounds like it's on the verge of cracking. "I gave you a fair and just opportunity to speak in Mister Aono's defense," he growls. And as the heat haze all around him starts escalating in intensity, several things all happen at once.
"And you reward my justice-"
Mizore's eyes grow wide, and with a muttered "oh shit!" she finally cuts Tsukune loose....
"WITH A JAILBREAK?!"
The roar of Kuyo's voice seems to almost harmonize with the roar of his flames as the stage is engulfed in a towering inferno, the intensity of which sends even his own enforcers scattering in fear!
Your own heart almost stops in panic over the fate of your loved ones -- before you see Mizore diving out of a steam cloud in your direction, carrying Tsukune over her shoulder. She must have thrown up some kind of ice or frost wall to buy her the critical seconds she needed, you realize.
From the screams of pain, they're both alive! ... but not unharmed, you realize with a sinking feeling.
Tsukune's lost the right sleeve of his uniform, and the arm beneath it is covered in blisters and what look like second-degree burns. Mizore, for her part, is clearly panicking from the fact that her shirt is on fire and half-dumps, half-tosses her charge onto the ground so she can tear it loose, revealing a black tank top beneath it... and extensive charring across her stomach, and up and down both arms and her thighs, and dry and flaking skin everywhere else. Fucking christ.
Frankly, looking at the flame pillar they just escaped from, part of you can scarcely imagine that they weren't instantly incinerated, much less as comparatively uninjured as they could, almost should have been.
Your naked relief and disbelief must show on your face, for as Mizore glances at Tsukune and then at you, she fights through the pain and fear she's going through and tries to smile at you. "Made it," she says simply.
...you really don't know how to process everything you're feeling right now. Mizore got pissed off and distracted paying attention to Kuyo, and that almost got her and Tsukune both killed. You've never lost anyone close to you before, and the scene of the stage exploding keeps playing over and over in your mind, with the shock and terror gripping your heart until Mizore burst out of it.
Your first friend at Youkai Academy in Tsukune, and your lover in Mizore, both almost died just now.
Things are only going to get worse.
There's a non-zero chance that right now, before the violence escalates and you have to focus on beating the shit out of Kuyo -- and the son of a bitch hasn't even revealed his true form yet, so he can clearly get even more dangerous -- might be the last chance you have to say something.
(your reaction time is limited; pick one)
[]Rebuke Mizore for her carelessness. What if the two of them had died just now?!
[]The only reason you're not crushing Mizore against you in a desperate embrace is because you don't want to injure her any further than she already is.
[]You remember from the start of school that Moka can heal people with her blood, like she did to you! Can she help?!
[](write-in, may be subject to veto)
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Oh boy. This has gotta be high on the "you know your mistake? you pissed me off" scale.
Probably direct moka over and then do a thing. What thing, currently processing.
[X]You remember from the start of school that Moka can heal people with her blood, like she did to you! Can she help?!
Probably direct moka over and then do a thing. What thing, currently processing.
[X]You remember from the start of school that Moka can heal people with her blood, like she did to you! Can she help?!
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[X]The only reason you're not crushing Mizore against you in a desperate embrace is because you don't want to injure her any further than she already is.
DevilsAdvocate
Always follow the golden rule.
[X] Don't say anything, Act NOW! get between Kujo and his targets.
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