Well, I doubt she'd be able to absorb a body:

"(?)", but the body is the least magical part of a magical girl.
It almost fits really well with Ashtaroth being a 'normal' Witch and then absorbing a random girl's soul gem (i.e. her literal soul and container of all memories after becoming a MG), then thinking those memories were hers (maximum Shadowruns :p ). But the fact that she remembers seeing her soul gem witch out seems to put paid to that without some serious hoop jumping. Would've been a fun theory though :( .
Consider the following .
Yep, there's the sound blocker you were speared to- you can tell from the blood all over the bottom, and the giant hole that girl's harpoon made in it-
Ashtaroth remembers this as the thing that killed her (or ruined her body, but details). There blood all over it, has a hole where her attacker struck it, and the girl that killed her is even later shown to be right on top of it. From this we can infer that becoming a witch and taking a look around all happened rather fast. So with that in mind, where is her body?
 
I feel like I recognize the name "Tira Narumi," but a quick google search turns up nothing. Either way, there is a lot of good foreshadowing in this update and I await in excitement for it to all be revealed :D
 
Alright, update's been out a day, so an important announcement- this update marks the end of Emergence, the "prequel" arc, as it were. It also marks the end of my buffer. This means several things:
  1. Updates will likely be coming out at a more staggered rate from now on. While I'd love to do the "one update a day" thing I did with the previous iteration of this for a while, that's just not realistic anymore, unfortunately. I'm aiming for once a week right now.
  2. In exchange however, updates will likely be a fair bit LONGER, at least on average. The format won't be changing, but posts will likely be somewhat "meatier" than they are right now, which I expect will make at least some people happy.
  3. Because it will take longer to make updates and I've run out of prewritten material, suggestions are now more likely to be incorporated into the actual story. This is still a faux-quest, but as I've said before, I've always been open to some degree of reader input. I'd be going by my preference and what I think I can work in rather than popular opinion, so voting on someone else's suggestion would still be just for fun. Hopefully that makes sense to everyone.
Anyways, next arc should start soon. Until then, some responses:

Oh boy. Tetris incoming.

...I have no idea what this means. Mind filling me in?

Well, I doubt she'd be able to absorb a body:

"(?)", but the body is the least magical part of a magical girl.
It almost fits really well with Ashtaroth being a 'normal' Witch and then absorbing a random girl's soul gem (i.e. her literal soul and container of all memories after becoming a MG), then thinking those memories were hers (maximum Shadowruns :p ). But the fact that she remembers seeing her soul gem witch out seems to put paid to that without some serious hoop jumping. Would've been a fun theory though :( .

Don't take the abilities page as the final word on things. Keep in mind, for the most part, it contains only what YOU currently know about them. The descriptions may update with more information as time goes on.

I feel like I recognize the name "Tira Narumi," but a quick google search turns up nothing. Either way, there is a lot of good foreshadowing in this update and I await in excitement for it to all be revealed :D

You'd only recognize her name if you read the previous version; it's not taken from anywhere, so no need to go looking. :)

Thanks! Some of the foreshadowing I imagine the savvy reader can figure out themselves. The "skull witch" is not something I made up, for example.
 
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You'd only recognize her name if you read the previous version; it's not taken from anywhere, so no need to go looking. :)
How much of the stuff from there going to show up here? I've been wanting to give it a read so I have some more grounding, but I also didn't want to spoil anything that was going to be coming up soon.
 
"I ask again- you are certain that witches cannot be intelligent? That any indications of such are mere falsehoods and trickery?" she asked aloud.

'In all likelihood, that is correct.' Kyubey's telepathic voice replied, his body reclining on her pillow. 'While the possibility of an intelligent witch cannot be ruled out completely, and would be rather fascinating to behold, it is not as easy to distinguish between true intelligence and the mere imitation of such as you believe. I have explained this to you once already.'

I'm really curious if Kyubey is being deliberately deceptive or if it honestly has no idea about Ashtaroth and really does think a coherent Witch is unlikely.
 
How much of the stuff from there going to show up here? I've been wanting to give it a read so I have some more grounding, but I also didn't want to spoil anything that was going to be coming up soon.

Well, Tira's pretty different from her initial version, and I never got far enough to really do a lot with her, so there's nothing that would really spoil anything about her beyond a few tertiary details. That said, I rebooted this more out of a desire to reorder some things and make a couple different early decisions than a desire to do a complete overhaul of the plot I'd already come up with, so there are a few things that will likely be showing up again. Remaining spoilers off the top of my head involve a few things about pirate girl, a couple of characters from Sengeitsu that I expect won't be relevant until pretty far in the future, and Ashtaroth's attempts to make a more concerted effort on the memory recovery front (though that will almost certainly go somewhat differently in this version). I don't think you'd feel too spoiled on the whole if you did choose to read it, but you might feel different.

I'm really curious if Kyubey is being deliberately deceptive or if it honestly has no idea about Ashtaroth and really does think a coherent Witch is unlikely.

*edits quoted bit ever so slightly*

Not saying whether he knows about Ashtaroth or not at the moment, but he's definitely being deceptive to some degree. I was very careful with the way Kyubey phrased things here- do note that his statements never definitively answer Tira with a yes or no one way or another. He says "in all likelihood" she's correct, and that an intelligent witch would be fascinating, but doesn't actually confirm he's never seen one before, or even that he isn't currently aware of any. His later statements also lead to a seemingly self-evident conclusion they don't necessarily support if you take each sentence individually rather than connecting it to the next- witches DO take in information in their surroundings, yes, as seen when their barriers form. Some CAN simulate that sort of information in various ways, though the reasons they know that information are probably a bit different than Kyubey implies. And many species DO have ways to protect themselves from predators... but he doesn't actually say witches do that, he just makes the statement, and then says witches are hunted by magical girls. Two completely disconnected statements that you could obviously make a bridge between, but which doesn't necessarily exist.

...writing Kyubey is kinda hard.
 
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He exploits human contextual understandings by making exclusively objectively true statements.

Every word true, but natural cognitive shorthand kills, while his tween target audience simply lack the context to treat him like a hostile fae. Teenagers are nearly by design the most prone to jumping to conclusions on incomplete data.
 
Confrontation 1: Beware Magic Bearing Gifts
You stretch your arms upwards as you slowly awaken, naturally floating up and out of the crushed grass beneath you as you slowly return to full awareness.

…well, that was a bit odd. You're not entirely sure you actually slept, so much as fell into a sort of waking trance, like a really intense meditation session. You don't think it was a mistake to do that, since you do feel a lot better than you did before, but actual sleep may indeed be out of your reach now.

You quickly take stock of yourself, noting without surprise that you are, in fact, still a witch. You didn't really think you'd wake up to find out it was all a dream, but, well, hope springs eternal. Arms, still present, head, still not present, magic…

Magic feels… a bit off, actually. Oh, great. Well, you already have a whole slew of outstanding issues to work out, what's one more?

You shake your neck back and forth as you take a brief peek outside, confirming that the sun has returned and that your barrier hasn't drifted anywhere overnight, before turning your attention inwards. Let's see, what's wrong with you now… hang on, what?

Determining how much magic you have on hand at a given moment is not, and never has been nearly as simple a task as you might like. As a magical girl, your soul gem provided an easy way to see it at a glance, but the constant movement of the colors within and the general vagueness of its "corruption" metric made it difficult to ever judge precisely how much you could afford to use at any one time. As a witch, you can actually "feel" your magic, presumably as it's now actually contained inside of you, but that doesn't seem to have made it much easier. It's sort of like trying to determine specifically how full your stomach is, or measure exactly how much oxygen your lungs are currently holding- reasonably guessable, but not what you'd call a particularly precise bit of science, to say the least.

…it's still pretty hard not to notice, however, that your maximum magic capacity appears to have almost doubled in size since yesterday.

For a moment, you're extremely confused, until you remember what your witch-mind was thinking while in the process of absorbing… ahem, "subsuming" Saar last night. Something about how the other witch and her magic are "part of you, now and forever", if you recall correctly? Apparently she meant it a tad more literally than you realized. Thinking back, you suppose it probably should have been more obvious to you at the time, since you did notice that your magic stores were refilling themselves with Saar's, and you hadn't used up nearly enough of your own to contain all of it… but with your minor mental crisis at what you'd done, and the magical girl showing up half a minute later, you admittedly never really had much chance to focus on that. You're going to go ahead and give yourself a pass on this one.

Huh. Well, all told this is a rather pleasant surprise, actually. You think you could probably even get off an extra illusion or two outside of the void of your inner barrier now… but, something is still strange. You feel nearly filled to the brim right now, which is great and all, but doesn't seem quite right for some reason…

You clap your two front ribbons together as it hits you. That tornado ability from yesterday- you used that after Saar was already subsumed, and while you're not sure of the exact amount, you're pretty certain that it took a fair bit of magic. Yet, you think you're pretty much topped off at the moment. How is that possible? You definitely didn't do anything that should have caused that; all you did after the battle was move your barrier up and immediately go to sleep. It's as if your magic…

…came back on its own…

It takes a minute for the thought to really sink in, as the idea goes contrary to all previous wisdom from your time as a magical girl, but it's the only thing you can think of that makes any sense. This… this could be big. The primary thing that limited you as a magical girl was the fact that magic could only be regained via grief seeds, and while you have less than no idea why witch magic would work any differently, if it does, that's a huge weight off your shoulders that you hadn't even really considered until now. The ability to not have to squeeze your magic for every drop of possible effectiveness would automatically make your life a hell of a lot less stressful.

...that being said, you can't help but feel somewhat suspicious. Not only did you get your arms free, not only did you get a new ability, but your magic is now twice it's former size AND is apparently self-replenishing? While you don't want to be pessimistic, almost every upside you ever discovered about being a magical girl turned out to have an equivalent downside, and the idea that that trend might have broken now that you're a witch seems almost laughable. Sure, that last one might just be a witch thing, but with all these benefits you've seemingly gotten from subsuming Saar, there has be a catch somewhere.

A few unpleasant ideas quickly jump to mind. Deciding to test them, you make a few shatterwords and toss them at a nearby road, while scrutinizing your thoughts for any signs of another's mind (be it your witch-mind or Saar's) having leaked in. Okay, your magic doesn't seem impeded or anything, and you don't think you're thinking any differently, so that's good. Could still be something physical though…

You move your arms over your body, patting yourself down and twisting around on yourself to try and make sure that you haven't somehow grown the witch equivalent of a tumor overnight. Nothing… well, nothing you can feel or see at least; who knows how something like that might potentially manifest given your lack of sensible, or in fact actual biology. Still, the absence of anything glaringly apparent is a good sign, you think.

You breathe a mental sigh of relief. Well, that rules out all your immediate suspicions at least. Whatever the catch is, it's clearly not all that obvious... maybe there really isn't one, beyond the actual act itself? If that's the extent of it, you suppose you can live with that- while you still feel kind of bad about "eating" Saar, after a night to sleep on it, the feeling is a lot more muted. Saar gave no indication of having retained her sapience, and since she'd already forced you to kill her in self-defense, it wasn't as if you had a reason not to make use of her remains. Besides, from absorbing her you got your arms back, grew stronger, and even gained a new bit of magic- if you had a skill like that back when you were still a magical girl, you'd have been ecstatic. The whole "witch mentality takeover" thing is still kind of concerning, but you managed to resist your desire to subsume top hat girl when she showed up immediately afterwards, so maybe it was just that powerful the first time because you didn't know that would happen?

You weigh that over for a moment as you look down on the city below you, watching as it seems to slowly come alive. Honestly, if some potential mental wrestling with yourself is the only real negative to this, that actually seems perfectly acceptable, given the positives involved. You're just not sure that's the case... but, for now you think you're going to move forward with the assumption that it is. Not just because you'd love to trust that something magic related and seemingly advantageous actually is for once, but also because you've spent way too much time on this subject doing nothing but float around aimlessly in the lower atmosphere. You have other things do, and are perfectly capable of multitasking, so if you're going to keep getting lost in thought you can at least do that while starting in on your plans for today.

…come to think of it, what ARE your plans for today anyways? Given some of the things you've recently learned, a small shifting of priorities might be in order…



[-] Survey the city from above, looking for magical girls. Since your information is clearly a bit out-of-date if uber girl isn't the only one around anymore, it might be prudent to try and scope out the area's actual magical girl population.
[-] Go looking for the "skull witch" top hat girl mentioned. While you have no idea where she was previously encountered or if she's still alive, the things that were insinuated about her make her a definite point of interest.
[-] Continue your random searching for other sapient witches. Saar may not have been one, but a single data point does not a conclusion make, and you've only been at this for less than a day.
[-] Make like the tourist you are at heart and go sightseeing. Mitakihara is an interesting city to say the least, and… well, why not?
[-] Write in.
 
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[-] Go looking for the "skull witch" top hat girl mentioned. While you have no idea where she was previously encountered or if she's still alive, the things that were insinuated about her make her a definite point of interest.
[-] Continue your random searching for other sapient witches. Saar may not have been one, but a single data point does not a conclusion make, and you've only been at this for less than a day.

Practically speaking, there's not much difference between these two. What is Ashtaroth going to do to look for the Skull Witch separate from looking for witches in general?
 
If I could vote, I'd vote for the tourist option. We retained our sentience, yes... but do we really want to be doomed to eat witches and dance about with magical girls forever? Let's do something nice.

In any case, that option allows for something new to find us, which we can deal with on a case-by-case basis.
 
[X] Make like the tourist you are at heart and go sightseeing. Mitakihara is an interesting city to say the least, and… well, why not?

Live a little!
 
I agree, being a rubbernecker for a while sounds like a good call. Heck, having a look around severs multiple purposes. Can keep a weather eye out for Magical Girls and Witches without getting involved with them, familiarize thine self with local landmarks for future travel options, and just have a moment to enjoy for thine self. Sounds like a great option for right now.
 
[-] Make like the tourist you are at heart and go sightseeing. Mitakihara is an interesting city to say the least, and… well, why not?

Or plan is obvious..... We shall find a nightclub and dance our worries away!
 
[X] Make like the tourist you are at heart and go sightseeing. Mitakihara is an interesting city to say the least, and… well, why not?

Let's see if Witches can get drunk!
 
[X] Make like the tourist you are at heart and go sightseeing. Mitakihara is an interesting city to say the least, and… well, why not?
Without having to worry about Gem cleansing, we can waste our time doing all sorts of stuff! We can be a tourist for eternity!
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It's definitely not a Witch prowling higher population areas!
 
[X] Make like the tourist you are at heart and go sightseeing. Mitakihara is an interesting city to say the least, and… well, why not?

Let's get ourselves something a little nice. Like, maybe a person to eat or two a nice stuffed animal to cuddle. We've been through a lot, so we deserve it! Nothing like another human being to munch on a cute stuffed animal to play with to make ourselves feel slightly less hungry better about our situation!

What? The witchstincts are kicking in? Nooooo....I have no idea what you're talking about! :p
 
[-] Survey the city from above, looking for magical girls. Since your information is clearly a bit out-of-date if uber girl isn't the only one around anymore, it might be prudent to try and scope out the area's actual magical girl population.
 
[-] Survey the city from above, looking for magical girls. Since your information is clearly a bit out-of-date if uber girl isn't the only one around anymore, it might be prudent to try and scope out the area's actual magical girl population.

Seems we want to know where to avoid
 
[-] Survey the city from above, looking for magical girls. Since your information is clearly a bit out-of-date if uber girl isn't the only one around anymore, it might be prudent to try and scope out the area's actual magical girl population.

No Way we get free Magic. Maybe Saar had a few People inside her Barrier?
 
[-] Survey the city from above, looking for magical girls. Since your information is clearly a bit out-of-date if uber girl isn't the only one around anymore, it might be prudent to try and scope out the area's actual magical girl population.
 
[X] Make like the tourist you are at heart and go sightseeing. Mitakihara is an interesting city to say the least, and… well, why not?
Without having to worry about Gem cleansing, we can waste our time doing all sorts of stuff! We can be a tourist for eternity!
 
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