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Tacit Ronin vs. The World II: KRAUN Jewels

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Looking at it, it seems to me that while we asked them to identify themselves, we never threathened to shoot them if they didn't obey. Hell, we never even told them to bugger off.

Bit of an oversight there.
 
10ebbor10 said:
Looking at it, it seems to me that while we asked them to identify themselves, we never threathened to shoot them if they didn't obey. Hell, we never even told them to bugger off.

Bit of an oversight there.
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The real problem was the Overwatch order, that triggered after we only managed to get two messages off. It was a big screw-up, but I don't think anyone thought it'd be activated that fast.

[X] "We understand our hypocrisy and we don't deny it. But all we knew of you was that you were large, incoming bogeys coming straight to our city."
-[X] "We have faced Kaiju made to counter our forces. We have faced creatures that were part Jeger and part Kaiju whose origin we don't know. We have faced a copy of our city's own defender sent to annihilate us. We have seen the enemy take the form of our champions and twist it to their designs."
--[X] "When you approached we saw what might very well have been bombers coming through the cover of a snowstorm. When we asked KRAUN for an ID, they said your craft were from Oceania, a place who had gone dark. And still, we sent hails. We tried to communicate. When there was no answer, we assumed your craft had been compromised by the enemy and were hostile."
[X] "We have one hundred and five thousand souls within our walls. We couldn't take the chance to allow craft of your size, loaded with an unknown, probably dangerous cargo to fly over their heads."
[X] "We fucked up. We know that. We don't deny it. But please, lower your guns before more casualties happen."
-[x] "Do it, and we promise to help you however we can."
[X] "All units under our command, turn your guns away from the DGINN forces."

Best I could come up with.
 
For a short while, there's no reply. No sound, but the rushing wind and the humming reactors. And then, a voice speaks up.

[X] "We understand our hypocrisy and we don't deny it. But all we knew of you was that you were large, incoming bogeys coming straight to our city."

The jaegers twitch for a second, before the orange one's antennae flick up. Instantly, the others freeze, letting the council continue speaking.

-[X] "We have faced Kaiju made to counter our forces. We have faced creatures that were part Jaeger and part Kaiju whose origin we don't know. We have faced a copy of our city's own defender sent to annihilate us. We have seen the enemy take the form of our champions and twist it to their designs."
--[X] "When you approached we saw what might very well have been bombers coming through the cover of a snowstorm. When we asked KRAUN for an ID, they said your craft were from Oceania, a place who had gone dark. And still, we sent hails. We tried to communicate. When there was no answer, we assumed your craft had been compromised by the enemy and were hostile."
[X] "We have one hundred and five thousand souls within our walls. We couldn't take the chance to allow craft of your size, loaded with an unknown, probably dangerous cargo to fly over their heads."
[X] "We fucked up. We know that. We don't deny it. But please, lower your guns before more casualties happen."
-[x] "Do it, and we promise to help you however we can."

A few moments later

[X] "All units under our command, turn your guns away from the DGINN forces."

For a few seconds, the troops wait, confused. And then, slowly, the guns lower, pointing away from the mechs.

Over in the snow, the jaegers wait. For a split second, all their eyes flicker--

[---]

<Director Link-up established. Beginning mass analytical review.>
<Analysis verdict: information provided by speaker is not false. Alt, speaker does not believe the information to be false.>
<Determining course of action...>

[---]

-- before resuming their steady glow.

"...YOU ARE EXCESSIVELY VERBOSE," the lead jaeger replies, speaking in its harsh, metallic voice. "HOWEVER, YOU HAVE NOT INTENTIONALLY FALSIFIED YOUR INFORMATION, SO YOU'RE NOT LYING HYPOCRITES. YOUR ACTIONS WILL BE CONSIDERED EXPLAINED-- THOUGH NOT JUSTIFIED."

The jaeger flicks its rifle's safety on, though its gaze is more than deadly enough.

"WE DO NOT WANT YOUR HELP. WE DO NOT REQUIRE YOUR HELP. YOU ARE AN UNSTABLE, UNKNOWN ELEMENT, AND WE WILL NOT HESITATE TO RESPOND SHOULD YOU PROVE YOURSELVES A THREAT."

"IT IS ONLY THIS ONCE THAT WE WILL RELENT."

The mechs wait, almost as if daring the forces to prove them right. Beneath their feet, the fires of their transports finally begin to burn out, slowly dimming the glow that silhouettes the mechs.

A good shot-- enough to stop them from ventilating you immediately-- but you won't win them over that easy, if at all.
 
[x] "Well, now that we're not seconds away from killing each-other, would you kindly explain who you are, why you're here, and why you didn't answer our initial hails?"
 
Fyrstorm said:
"...YOU ARE EXCESSIVELY VERBOSE,"
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Well, I want to see you come up with a better speech, tin can! :mad:

Fixing diplomatic fuck-ups is way harder than causing them, ya know? Let me see how you do it before you start criticizing people's speeches!

:V :V

Still, we have as good a starting point as we are going to get.
LostDeviljho said:
[x] "Well, now that we're not seconds away from killing each-other, would you kindly explain who you are, why you're here, and why you didn't answer our initial hails?"
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Let's give them some time to calm down before we start asking them questions about their probably classified mission. Instead, let's focus on keepin communication channels open.

[X] "Do you have any reliable methods of communication available we can use to keep in contact, at least? If not, we might be able to arrange something."

If anyone has suggestions on how to word it better, they'd be more than welcome.
 
Uh, maybe not fully communicate, but at least have an iff so we recognize them if they come round again.


Also, I can smell bad news from them. Unstable? That sounds like a very white and black mentality.
 
Highwind said:
Let's give them some time to calm down before we start asking them questions about their probably classified mission. Instead, let's focus on keepin communication channels open.

[X] "Do you have any reliable methods of communication available we can use to keep in contact, at least? If not, we might be able to arrange something."

If anyone has suggestions on how to word it better, they'd be more than welcome.
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I want answers on why they thought it was fucking acceptable to fly over our city in their fancy jaeger-bombers without answering our hails before we get all buddy-buddy and start trading phone-numbers.
 
LostDeviljho said:
I want answers on why they thought it was fucking acceptable to fly over our city in their fancy jaeger-bombers without answering our hails before we get all buddy-buddy and start trading phone-numbers.
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Don't get me wrong, I want those answers too, but they aren't likely to give us any answers for now. Let's offer a method to communicate reliably, then we can start probing.

And besides, the most likely answer we'll receive for why they ignored our calls involves atmospheric interference and "we didn't hear anything but static". We did roll quite poorly back in that first attempt.
 
Be that as it may, I want questions and answers first, "let's chat some other time" later.
 
[X] Have all forces begin to fall back to the defense perimeter of Neo-Seattle.
[X] "We have identified ourselves as members of what is left of the Pan-Pacific Defense Corps. We are currently allied with the group known as KRUAN towards our mutual goal of freeing Earth from the Kaiju Invasion."
-[X] "You have identified yourselves as being from 'DGINN' - we assume you are also an organization dedicated towards defeating the Kaiju threat."
-[X] "It is unfortunate and regrettable to the highest order that our first meeting has had such a hostile outcome. Our desire for ceasefire comes from a realization of a most grievous error, having mistaken you for Kaiju-alligned forces only to learn that you are instead someone we share a common goal with."
-[X] "We also recognize that our error in judgement would naturally make it difficult for you to trust us, but we hope that this does not bring about a long-term conflict that puts the future of the planet in further jeopardy from our common enemy."
-[X] "Are you at least open with establishing a common, reliable means of communication?"
[X] Try to contact KRUAN and give them an update on the situation.
 
[X] Space Jawa

As good as it gets, I think. Let's just hope that Bucket 'o Bolts won't get on our case because of our "excessive verbosity" again.
 
Do we need to be so verbose? I kinda get the feeling the DGINN Jaegers don't want to hang around shooting the shit with the dudes that just shot down their rides, along with who/whatever was driving them.
 
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Omake: Devlin feels exquisitely irritated with excessive verbosity
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    • (I'm gonna RP a bit here)

    Devlin runs a hand over his face. "It's always this with you lot. Get called out for being overly verbose and respond by using even more words."

    "Look, what're we trying to convey here? That we're what's left of the PPDC, we're allied with KRAUN, which is a similar group, we assume from their acronym that they're part of a third such organization, and we're very sorry for shooting down their suspicious planes but we thought they might be the Kaiju's suspicious planes. Now that we're sure they're not kaiju we'd much prefer if we could not shoot each-other, and maybe sit down and talk like reasonable people if they're willing."

    He gestures. "There, done, and in two sentences rather than a small essay."

    He stares at the other council members, waiting for their rebuttal.
     
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    • Space Jawa said:
    [X] "We have identified ourselves as members of what is left of the Pan-Pacific Defense Corps. We are currently allied with the group known as KRUAN towards our mutual goal of freeing Earth from the Kaiju Invasion."
    -[X] "You have identified yourselves as being from 'DGINN' - we assume you are also an organization dedicated towards defeating the Kaiju threat."
    -[X] "It is unfortunate and regrettable to the highest order that our first meeting has had such a hostile outcome. Our desire for ceasefire comes from a realization of a most grievous error, having mistaken you for Kaiju-alligned forces only to learn that you are instead someone we share a common goal with."
    -[X] "We also recognize that our error in judgement would naturally make it difficult for you to trust us, but we hope that this does not bring about a long-term conflict that puts the future of the planet in further jeopardy from our common enemy."
    -[X] "Are you at least open with establishing a common, reliable means of communication?"
    [X] Try to contact KRUAN and give them an update on the situation.
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    From paragraph to paragraph, as it is late here and I'm busy on something else:

    P1) Simplify the last part. 'To defeat the Kaiju threat' sums it up.

    P2) '... dedicated towards the same goal'

    P3) 'We regret that our mistake led to such a hostile outcome in our first meeting.' Cut the part after 'Kaiju-aligned forces', as it sounds like we're assuming their answer after the way P2 was written.

    P4) '... In further jeopardy' sounds like a good finish.

    And those are my nitpicks. I like the way you wrote it, but they (the bots, I mean) seem to be a bit too simpleminded to treat them like we would address a true human diplomat, which would be a great fit to your original text.


    It is still verbose but hopefully is more to the point.
     
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