Ring-Maker [Worm/Lord of the Rings Alt-Power] [Complete]

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To be fair, that would be an improvement in Cauldron's eyes, since Echidna is comparatively easily dealt with.
After she nommed her way through the Birdcage ? Even accounting for casualties from Scion, that seems like the difference between a one million gigaton bomb and a one half million gigaton bomb.

Sure, one`s only half as powerful. It`s still gonna wipe all traces of you even existing away in pressure and flames.
 
After she nommed her way through the Birdcage ? Even accounting for casualties from Scion, that seems like the difference between a one million gigaton bomb and a one half million gigaton bomb.

Sure, one`s only half as powerful. It`s still gonna wipe all traces of you even existing away in pressure and flames.
I'm pretty sure that they regarded the entirety of Earth Bet as collateral damage in the evenual fight with Scion. As in they expected to lose the entire planet, and possibly many more in the resultant battle, all to save the rest.
 
I greatly enjoy your story, but I do think this was one of your weaker chapters.

There are two primary sins:
  1. The most important part of the fight occurred off-screen, and the outcome feels artificial as a result.
  2. Eidolon went down much easier than in canon, to the extent he was a burden instead of an asset.
The first point is straightforward, so I won't elaborate upon it. The second is more important, anyway.

While it's true that Eidolon probably shouldn't have entered the fight at all, he actually did pretty darn well against Noelle in canon, contrary to how the fandom often remembers it.

He managed to stalemate Noelle for quite a while with three prepared powers—a precognitive danger sense, a form of power immunity, and gravity manipulation to fly & create crushing AoE attacks. What turned the tide was Trickster betraying everyone when the Travelers intervened to stop Noelle, while the Undersiders and Chicago Wards were close to assist (against Eidolon's orders). Consequently, Noelle captured Grue, Regent, and Skitter. Yet she was hesitant to create Undersider clones, lest she lose the originals, and the fight primarily became Noelle & Trickster vs Eidolon—which Eidolon was winning.

On the precipice of defeat, Noelle surrendered control to her Echidna half, and it went crazy with clones. A lucid Noelle and Trickster together couldn't defeat Eidolon, but Echidna, two Tricksters, Skitter, Regent, Grue, and some cloned Chicago Wards? That was apparently sufficient. Despite that, Eidolon wasn't captured; Noelle, again in control of her body, let him go.

Eidolon and Alexandria were captured later, when the situation was upgraded to S-Class. The bulk of heroes were incapacitated by Shatterbird's scream, Echidna was several times her original mass, and was creating over a hundred clones at a time. But the clincher was when Echidna was duplicated four times by a Kudzu clone.

The situation in the update was nowhere near as dire. Noelle had no prepared army or captured capes (at least, none were mentioned), many of the peripheral capes weren't useful targets (the Ringbearers, Dragon, Chevalier), and Eidolon was prepared for a fight. The one major variable, the Travelers, were occupied with Annatar. In this scenario I'd expect Eidolon to win, or at minimum hold his own. Instead, he was defeated in a mere minute or two.

The outcome is surprising enough that it deserves a longer fight scene, or at least some elaboration for how it went so wrong, so quickly.
 
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In good news, the AO3 and ffnet mirrors are, at long last, up to date.

...There is no bad news. Just good news. Next chapter is Interlude 10a: Francis. Yes, Krouse's second interlude. No promises I can get it out this week, but I'm going to give it a good try.
 
Unfortunately, there will be no chapter this Monday. I've lacked energy and, more importantly, inspiration. However, I'm taking steps to fix that. The time I would have spent scrambling to throw together a last-second chapter today I am instead spending plotting out the next few arcs of this story. Once I know what scenes I'm looking forward to, it'll be much easier to write the intervening story.

I'm currently partway through planning arc 13, and I've already hit a couple of those points. With luck, I'll have enough by the end of the night that I can start drafting 11a tomorrow or the next day with little trouble.
 
Annnd planning is done, for the moment.

Ring-Maker is expected to conclude after a total 17 arcs, plus an eighteenth epilogue arc. There is a nontrivial possibility of Arc 12 in particular being split in two, but I hope to avoid that. All of the arcs through 15 have been plotted chapter-by-chapter, while 16, 17, and the epilogue are not yet plotted to that level of depth. Up to 15, the arcs have also been titled, but to give those titles this early might spoil things.

I will say that, as expected, I've found moments to look forward to. Among these are: 12.4, 13b, 13.7, 14b, 14.7, and 15b. By remaining goal-oriented and focusing on the work to reach these milestones, I should be able to get myself motivated to write consistently and quickly again. We'll have to see.

All told, there are expected to be 69 chapters of Ring-Maker which have not yet been written. This puts us slightly earlier in the story than I thought originally, at 58% completion. Nonetheless, I would like to finish this story before it hits its two-year anniversary. That can be considered my stretch goal. In order to achieve it, I will need to average 1.91 chapters a week, starting next Monday. Given that I refuse to post three chapters in one week under any circumstances, that will mean posting two chapters a week 90% of the time. That math is intimidating... but, if I keep my head in the right space, it may help me to get my groove back.

I'm sorry I couldn't get 11a out this week, but with any luck I'll be able to get more than one chapter ready for y'all next week.
 
Don't push yourself too hard.
As much as we love this story we don't want to see you burn out.
 
I'm sorry I couldn't get 11a out this week, but with any luck I'll be able to get more than one chapter ready for y'all next week.
Hey, IIRWIIR. I'd rather get a good chapter later than a worse one earlier, ne? I've been having fun reading this story and looking forward to its updates, and I'd very much rather that you'd do well and write slowly than you'd write quickly and be in a bad place because of it. 'sides, patience is a virtue, ne?
Either way I'm glad you have things on-track and am looking forward to the next chapter!
 
I can confirm that planning out the next few arcs was the correct move.

How do I know this? Interlude 11a has just finished being drafted, after being started only two hours ago. And it's actually good, in my honest opinion. After struggling to put pencil to paper for over a week, I manage to write the whole thing in one morning once I have a plan.

I appreciate the concern everyone has about me overworking myself. It's nice. Rest assured that there are things I won't compromise in the interest of haste. Those include, in no particular order, my health, my IRL performance, and the story's quality. It's unlikely that I will actually manage to finish the story before April 21st, 2019. But the attempt helps to keep me motivated to write now, rather than putting it off to later.

Anyway. With 11a done, I'm going to see how much more I can write this week. I won't update this Friday unless I get very far ahead, just in the interests of consistency. But I think I can probably get two chapters at least by the start of next week.
 
I won't update this Friday unless I get very far ahead, just in the interests of consistency.
This is what I said on Monday, around noon. From Monday to today, I have written four chapters--11a, 11.4, 11.5, and 11.6. That's enough that I have a solid backlog again, for the first time in a long while. 11a has also mostly finished its editing process, though my betas and I intend to give it another look tomorrow.

As such, I will be posting Interlude 11a: Francis on Friday, and you can expect Crystalline 11.4 next Monday. With luck, this pace will continue, or at least be more common.
 
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Interlude 11a: Francis
Many thanks to @BeaconHill and @GlassGirlCeci for betareading.

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The green mist dissipated as suddenly as it had appeared. Krouse stumbled as the ground suddenly met his feet again. His stomach rolled mutinously at the shift. Teleportation might be useful, but comfortable it was not.

He coughed to clear his lungs of the greenish smoke, leaning against a wall. They had appeared in a deserted back-street. His back was against an old industrial building, and across the street from him was a tenement house with boarded-up windows.

"Where are we?" Noelle asked. Krouse looked over at her. She seemed disoriented, but unharmed. Her agitation was already fading, her monstrous body settling down.

Satisfied, he turned to look around. "Still in Brockton," he said, recognizing the building beside them. He'd been standing on its roof when he stole Annatar's Ring. "About a mile north of where we were."

"I couldn't move us very far," the Eidolon clone admitted. "This power isn't a really long-range mover power. We're outside their perimeter, but they'll find us before too long."

"Then we need to move," said Trickster. "If we get out of the city, Annatar will stop chasing us. She's a feudal lord at heart."

"Well, I'd head north in the short term," said the Eidolon clone. "Downtown Brockton is the heart of Annatar's territory."

"And what then?" asked Sundancer. He glanced over at her, but she was avoiding his eyes. "Say we manage to get out of the city. What do we do then? Where do we go?"

"We can figure that out when we're safe," Krouse answered. "But we have to prioritize."

"We can't leave Jess and Oliver!" said Marissa sharply.

"We can catch up with them later," Trickster argued. "They're chasing Noelle, not a girl in a wheelchair or a guy with a perfect face. Oliver has a phone, and Jess is smart. It'll work out."

"And if it doesn't?" Ballistic asked suddenly. Krouse couldn't read him, not with his voice controlled and his face covered. "What if Jess gets captured? What do we do then?"

Krouse shrugged. "We can't exactly launch a rescue mission," he said. "Not against Annatar. But—come on, guys, this is a talk for later. We're not safe here."

"Nor are they!" exclaimed Sundancer.

"Look, Annatar or one of her people could show up any second," Trickster urged. "We have to move now. Sitting here is just going to get us killed."

"I think it's more likely to get Jess killed," said Sundancer. He could feel her gaze on him, accusing.

"Look," he said sharply. "I don't want Genesis getting hurt. I hope she gets out of the city okay, and finds her way back to us. But we have to look after ourselves first."

The Eidolon clone yawned. "As riveting as this is," he said, "can we please get on with it? If I have to sit still any longer I might just start blowing things up."

"Yes, let's get on with it," said Sundancer, turning away. "I'm going to find Jess."

"We can't afford to split up!" Krouse said sharply. "Our best chance is in numbers! We need to look after each other."

"Like you're looking after Jess?" Sundancer said, glancing back at him.

"That's different."

"It really isn't, man," Ballistic put in. "I get it, this is a mess. But we can't just abandon the others."

"Give it up, Luke," Sundancer advised, turning away again. "When Krouse says we need to look after each other, he means we need to look after him."

"What about Noelle?" Krouse asked.

The words stopped Sundancer dead in her tracks. Slowly, she turned and looked over and up at Noelle, who was watching her impassively, her tentacles lashing at the air.

"Good point," she said. "What do you think, Noelle? You were our leader before Krouse was."

Noelle's face fell. A hand came up to massage her temples. "I… I don't…" she trailed off for a moment, then said, "It's so hard to think straight anymore. I don't even… why are we talking about running? We can fight them. We can beat them."

"And then what?" Ballistic asked. "Say we beat Annatar, say we beat the entire city's worth of capes. What are we going to do then? We're trying to fix you and get home, aren't we?"

The Eidolon clone made a sound. It took Krouse a moment to realize it was soft, mirthless laughter.

"What's so funny?" Krouse asked sharply.

"It's not really," admitted the clone. "Just… it's futile. Trying to 'fix' Noelle. It'll never work."

"You don't know that," said Sundancer, but she didn't sound certain. "There's always a chance."

"Who do you think distributed the power vials?" the clone asked. "And, yes, I know you took vials. Natural powers almost never cause mutations like these. The vials are usually pretty good, too, but sometimes…"

"Wait, back up," said Ballistic sharply. "You're saying Eidolon was behind the vials we found?"

"Not Eidolon by himself," the clone corrected. "He's a vial cape himself. One of the first. He's been there from the beginning, watching the experiments, watching them refine the formulas. They could have taken you home any time, you know. They have a cape who can take away powers, too. But they'll never help you."

"But they exist," said Noelle, her voice rising in desperation. "We can convince them—"

"You can't," said Eidolon flatly. "You're exactly where they want you. Running around, getting more powerful, maybe even causing triggers. There's nothing you can give them to make it worth their while."

"So… what?" Trickster asked. "We should just give up? Turn ourselves in?"

"Why the hell would you do that?" the clone asked, blinking at him. "Give up on Noelle getting cured, yes. But why turn yourselves in?" He turned to Noelle. Their eyes met. Something passed between them, unspoken.

"No," Noelle said, shaking her head. "No, I'm not that far gone. Not yet."

"Why not? Eidolon is considered one of the three or four most powerful capes in the world," he said. "Why are we letting Annatar chase us anywhere? We can have an army of me."

"I can't make as many clones as I want," Noelle corrected. "It uses people up. The clones get weaker, and more likely to come out wrong."

"Still," the clone said. "Four or five of me? That's enough to scare anyone away. By myself I'm enough to scare anyone away." He looked down at his hands, turning them over as though looking at them for the first time. Which, of course, he was. "Eidolon didn't understand his own powers," he said, almost to himself. "I don't understand them yet either. There's something he was missing."

"It's not about whether we can beat them," Trickster said. "Fighting doesn't get us any closer to getting away safe. They can just keep throwing people at us."

The clone rolled his eyes. "Fine, keep struggling. Your loss." He looked around at them. "Whatever you all do, you'll need a distraction. I'll go make one. I'm not in the mood to be squeamish." He grinned. "I've never burned down a city before. It'll be nice to cut loose."

"Wait!" called Trickster as he started to fly off. "We might need your help to get out of here!"

"Then make another Eidolon," the clone shouted back without stopping. "Maybe he'll be as boring as you are!"

Silence fell. It was soon broken by the sound of crumbling masonry in the distance as the clone made good on his promise to create mayhem.

"We need to move," said Trickster.

"Yes," agreed Sundancer. "I'm going to find Jess. We'll meet you outside the city."

"We need to stick together," Krouse said exasperatedly. "Why is this so hard to understand? We have a better chance—"

"Jess has a better chance if she has some help," said Sundancer flatly. "So I'm going to help her." She looked back up at Noelle. "I hope you manage to get out," she said quietly. "We'll find a way, Noelle. No matter what that clone says."

Noelle didn't answer. She was staring down at one of the heads on her lower body, which was snuffling at the ground like a dog. There was no sign that she even heard Sundancer, and after a moment, Marissa turned away and started down the street.

"I'm with you," said Ballistic suddenly, jogging after Sundancer. "I'll find Oliver, you go after Jess." He glanced back at Krouse. "We'll meet you outside the city."

"You're making a mistake," Krouse warned.

"Maybe," Ballistic admitted. "It wouldn't be the first time. But I'm not leaving Oliver and Jess stuck here. I'll see you later. Don't die."

He turned away and jogged down a side street.

"Well, I guess it's just us," Krouse said, looking up at Noelle. "What do you think? How are we getting out?"

"Getting out…?" Noelle echoed, her voice distant. "Think…"

"Noelle?"

She blinked and looked away from the head sniffing at the asphalt. "What? I don't know. What can we do besides walk?"

"You don't want to create another Eidolon clone?" Trickster asked.

Noelle shook her head vehemently. "If I do that," she said quietly, "I don't think… he's strong. He's really strong. If I brought that much power in… I don't think I could stop." She sought his eyes. "I can barely remember why we're trying to run away, Krouse," she said. "All I want to do is turn around and fight them. I want to break, and kill, and consume them." She shuddered. "What the fuck is wrong with me?"

"Nothing," Krouse said vehemently, his heart sinking. She's getting worse. "It's not you, it's that power. We need to get you out of here." While we still can.

She nodded hesitantly. "Okay. North, Eidolon said."

"That's this way," Krouse pointed. He wasn't actually sure—the sun wasn't visible over the buildings right now—but the important thing was to get moving, to stop Noelle from dwelling on her thoughts. "Come on. We won't get far without a ride."

"I won't fit into a car," said Noelle. "I've been growing."

"Then we'll find a pickup truck," Krouse said, scanning the street. "You can probably fit in the bed. We won't be stealthy, but—there's one!"

There was a red pickup, just a block down the street from where they were. It was pulled into a driveway beside a two-story townhouse. Trickster ran towards it, Noelle easily keeping pace.

Hopefully, the keys will be in the house, he thought. If not, that thing looks old. I can probably hotwire—

The explosion knocked him sprawling. Debris from the masonry showered the road around him. He rolled several feet before landing on his back, blinking up at the blue sky.

"KROUSE!" Noelle's shout seemed to come from a long way off. Her bulk swam in his field of vision.

I'm fine, he wanted to say. Just winded. But he didn't seem to be able to form the words.

Something gold was glinting in the sky above. In his fuzzy vision its shape was indistinct. It looked vaguely humanoid. A beam of light shot down from it, striking Noelle, but she just snarled and shrugged it off. "NO!" she was howling. "YOU BITCH, YOU KILLED HIM!"

I'm not dead, Krouse thought in bemusement. What are you talking about, Noelle? I'm fine.

He tried to sit up, but his arms and legs didn't seem to be responding. He turned his head—a surprisingly difficult endeavor, maybe he really had been injured.

Then he stopped. Stared at the red, pulpy mass that had once been his arm. Oh, fuck. The thought was almost calm, barely affected by the sight before him. Almost boring—'Oh, fuck' was just the expected response to finding out you'd been horribly maimed.

Now that he thought about it, he could feel the pain. It was distant, though—muted, as if he was experiencing it through a wire connected to a body half a world away.

At least my legs are fine, he thought. He couldn't feel any pain below the small of his back.

Then again, he couldn't feel anything below the small of his back.

Noelle was leaning over him. "She's gone for reinforcements," she said, and her eyes were streaming with tears. "Oh, Krouse, I'm so sorry. I'm so, so sorry."

He tried to say something like Sorry for what? Or It's fine. His lips didn't seem to want to cooperate. The most he could manage was a vague mumble.

"I never wanted this," Noelle mumbled. "I don't—what am I supposed to do now?" She stared down at him. Then her face hardened. "They want to play hardball? Fine." She leaned down, and her lips met Krouse's forehead. "Thank you for everything, Krouse," she said. "I'll take it from here."

Then Krouse felt himself being dragged. His eyes flickered down. One of the heads, like a cross between a bull and a vulture, was pulling him by what remained of his lower body.

His eyes widened. Something deep inside him, a primal, unreasonable instinct, rebelled. He tried to struggle, to cry out, to beg Noelle to do something, anything else. All he could manage was an incomprehensible babble.

"Goodbye, Krouse," said Noelle, her voice soft—but her eyes were hard and flinty. "I love you. I'll avenge you."

He looked back up, and the last thing he saw before he was engulfed was Noelle's face framed by a clear blue sky.

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Christ, what a clusterfuck.

Also this is exactly the wrong time for Taylor to feel conflicted about lethal force. Funny how these things tend to line up.
 
The Eidolon clone mentioned Cauldron having a power nullifier. Annatar might be able to convince them to shut down Noelle. It'll still kill her without Panacea, but maybe Amy or her clone could help if they're close enough.
 
She'll give up and stop chasing at the borders of what she considers to be her rightful domain.

So, uh... you're probably gonna need a better mover.

Yup. As one of the beings who sung an entire universe into being, she would naturally view her rightful domain to be at least the entirety of Earth Bet, if not Earth Aleph as well.
 
Yup. As one of the beings who sung an entire universe into being, she would naturally view her rightful domain to be at least the entirety of Earth Bet, if not Earth Aleph as well.
Given her reaction to the n-dimensional Administrator Shard, I believe she considers the boundaries of her demesne to be roughly "three dimensions."
 
A bit late, but I wanted to respond to something
Eidolon is a PtV blind spot.

Mairon may be a PtV blind spot.

Shaper may be a PtV blind spot as a shard acting on its own.

Echidna may be a PtV blind spot as a shard human hybrid and Ziz bomb.

Also ... Eidolon getting Echidna'd happened in canon and massively fucked Cauldron over. Her inability to prevent this scenario is canon.

To add to this, I would like to post a from the increasingly relevant SMBC comic:



Even in a deterministic universe PtV CAN'T be correct all the time. It's simulations aren't perfect (If Eidolon was it's only blindspot, it's predictions would still only ever be probabilistic and nothing more) and so treating it as all knowing and incapable of making mistakes is the wrong thing to do.

Anyway, I love this chapter. As is the case with almost all the chapters of this story :p.

How can Krouse be so consistently wrong all the time? Is that, like, his true super power?
 
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How can Krouse be so consistently wrong all the time? Is that, like, his true super power?
It`s mostly because he believes reality to be something different than it is. Metaphorically, in Krouses world the Earth only has 0.9Gs, water boils at 87 degrees Celsius at sea level, a meter and a foot actually describe the same length, and Pi is exactly 3.
 
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