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Ring-Maker [Worm/Lord of the Rings Alt-Power] [Complete]

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Lithos Maitreya said:
He laid Vicky down on a table and in seconds, Panacea's hands were on her. The healer grew perfectly still.

Carol Dallon came over then, seemingly healed. "Well?" she asked worriedly. "Amy?"

Slowly, Amy Dallon looked up from her sister and met Dean's gaze. Her eyes were wet.

"Thank you for trying," she whispered.
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Oh, oh dear...
 
I don't see how Vicky could die from this, if she was well enough to speak coherently then she probably doesn't have serious brain damage which means that Amy should have been able to heal anything wrong with her even if she did 'technically' die.
 
yttam50 said:
I don't see how Vicky could die from this, if she was well enough to speak coherently then she probably doesn't have serious brain damage which means that Amy should have been able to heal anything wrong with her even if she did 'technically' die.
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I've posted this twice on SB now, but Amy can't heal things instantly. Panacea does not make capes around her immune to death. It takes her almost half an hour to heal most injuries, and Vicky's were worse than average.
 
Lithos Maitreya said:
I've posted this twice on SB now, but Amy can't heal things instantly. Panacea does not make capes around her immune to death. It takes her almost half an hour to heal most injuries, and Vicky's were worse than average.
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Essentially, "Things were shutting down faster than Panacea could turn them and their support systems back on," then?
 
For this scene, the part of Panacea will be played by Viggo Mortensen, and the part of Glory Girl will be played by Sean Bean.

 
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Thangorodrim Heavy Industries
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    • Lithos, well done. I've been inspired to this:


    Watching the unfolding battle in Brockton Bay from his ebony desk, Melkor picked up his phone and placed a call.

    "Brockton Bay."
    "..."
    "I trust you are watching the event going on down there?"
    "..."
    "Will this interfere with acquiring the key to the Withered Heath Project?"
    "... ... ....."
    "Excellent. No, I see no immediate opportunity to intervene yet. And I want to keep this all in house for now. I will involve the E.L.E. only if absolutely necessary. But regardless of cape victory or defeat, Brockton Bay is in need of urban revitalization... I believe it would be a ripe location for Thangorodrim Heavy Industries to invest in."
    "..."
    "If Leviathan survives, keep tracking it."
    "...?"
    "It... has something that I desire." As he hung up and turned his eyes back to the screen, He Who Arises in Might smiled. 'The Light of Perfection... soon you will be mine again. For I claimed such ownership unto the unmaking of the world. The Silmarils are MINE.'
     
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    • This is an Ex-Dallon!
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    • So... there was a mess on the SB thread (of course) and I got salty. I treated this salt by writing an omake. Do not take it seriously.

    -x-x-x-​

    "She's dead."

    "No, no," said Brandish quickly. "She's resting, look."

    "Look," said Panacea grimly, "I know a dead sister when I see one, and I'm looking at one right now."

    "No, no," Brandish was shaking her head. "She's not dead, she's resting."

    "Resting?" asked Panacea incredulously.

    "Yeah," said Brandish, nodding firmly. "Remarkable girl, our Vicky. Lovely hair."

    "Her hair," said Panacea flatly, "doesn't enter into it. She's stone dead."

    "Nah, nah, she's resting."

    Panacea stared at her mother blankly for a moment and then shrugged. "All right then," she said. "If she's resting, I'll wake her up." She ruffled her hands through Vicky's bloody hair. "Hello, Vicky!" she said, loud and singsong. "Dean's here for you when you wake up! Nice and shirtless, the way you like him!"

    Brandish reached out and nudged Glory Girl's shoulder. "There," she said proudly. "She moved."

    "No she didn't!" exclaimed Panacea. "That was you pushing her!"

    "I did not!"

    "Yes you did!" Amy grabbed Vicky by the hair and pulled her head up into a sitting position. She leaned down so that her mouth was right next to Vicky's ear and shouted. "HELLO, VICKY! VIIIICKY!!" She pulled away and bashed Vicky's head into the table a few times. "VICKY DALLON!" she shouted back into her sister's ear. "WAKE UP!" She bashed Vicky's head into the table a couple more times, then waved her around by the hair for a bit. Then, back to her ear: "VICKY!"

    She let her sister go, and Vicky's head dropped back to the table with a thud.

    Panacea turned to Brandish. "Now that's what I call a dead Dallon," she said.

    "No, no," Brandish said firmly. "She's stunned."

    "Look, Carol, I've had just about enough of this." Panacea's voice was hard. "Vicky is definitely deceased."

    -x-x-x-​
     
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    • Lithos Maitreya said:
    So... there was a mess on the SB thread (of course)
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    *looks*

    Multiple people bitching about the chapter without even having read it? Good lord. And after those arguments are addressed, more dipshits show up to complain about the same stuff as though it was never dealt with. I'm getting pissed at these people over this shit and they aren't even talking to me.

    Whatever. This story is brilliant.
     
    Pax_Empyrean said:
    Multiple people bitching about the chapter without even having read it? Good lord. And after those arguments are addressed, more dipshits show up to complain about the same stuff as though it was never dealt with. I'm getting pissed at these people over this shit and they aren't even talking to me.
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    No, one person complained about the chapter without having read it. Everyone else complained about the chapter for perfectly valid reasons (and the chapter subsequently received revisions that greatly improved it).
     
    macdjord said:
    No, one person complained about the chapter without having read it. Everyone else complained about the chapter for perfectly valid reasons (and the chapter subsequently received revisions that greatly improved it).
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    Sorry, I interpreted the person saying they didn't have a horse in the race and defending the person who didn't read it as "I didn't read this either but I'm weighing in to say this sounds dismissive of criticism."

    Saying that everyone else with a complaint had a perfectly valid reason for it is ridiculous. There were valid complaints, certainly, and there were also complaints that are about what you'd expect when a large group with its share of excitable retards hits a highly emotional death scene. For example, the person saying Vicky shouldn't have died because the human body is mostly water and Amy could have oxygenated her brain by breaking down the water molecules for oxygen pretty thoroughly destroys the idea that everyone's complaints were legitimate.
     
    There were three people who didn't read the chapter only the complaints although one later skimmed through the chapter. although the worst comment was that even though vicky was dead on arrival amy should have been able to resurrect her and heal any brain damage because shaper.
     
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