Anyone sufficiently powerful before she has time to prepare? Like in The Games We Play, there can indeed be challenges that a Gamer faces.

That said, The Gamer is kind of a penultimate ability. Starts out pathetic, ends up beyond godly (IF you can make it). It can be a bit of a balancing act to keep things interesting, typically involving more than just bad guys to fight in order to keep the character always branching out, learning, and interacting in new ways.

A lot of the godliness in The Gamer was also the author throwing together a half-assed game system of the sort that breaks down as soon as you start getting real level advancement, and making various amateur GM mistakes in his own interpretation of what he'd written. For example, he seems to think an attack that does 100x more damage than a normal school kid's punch is some kind of awesome magical nuke, when it would actually be more comparable to a small mortar bomb or a shell from a light cannon.

I think the author made a good decision in discarding all of that for this fic, and instead making The Gamer ability simply allow Louise to learn the powers of her own setting at vastly accelerated rate. Even at her current rate of progress Louise isn't going to reach square level until well into the story, when army combat and geopolitical maneuvering make up a lot of the plot. Even reaching pentagon level would only make her a major strategic asset for Tristania, not an OCP that stomps the setting. Due to the nature of FoZ magic she'd still be vulnerable to personal threats like poisoning or surprise attacks, and can easily run out of mana if she tries to fight an army by herself. All in all, I think it will be quite easy to work things so that she resolves the major conflicts of the series at just about the point where it starts to get hard to write challenges for her.​
 
I think the author made a good decision in discarding all of that for this fic, and instead making The Gamer ability simply allow Louise to learn the powers of her own setting at vastly accelerated rate.​
This also makes perfect sense as that's what the 'Gamer' ability seems to be in its own setting: ease-of-use of the setting's own powers and breaking the usual limiters by putting everything in a numerical system with an EXP chart (e.g, most people probably have to make real effort and luck even to improve 0.1% in an ability, but the gamer will continue to improve whenever he dedicate time to it).
 
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"How is it, Lady?"

Louise looked at her reflection and marveled. She almost looked like a completely different person. Almost. "Would you have anything I can tie my hair with?"

"Of course, one moment." The armorer turned to his seamstress, and wife from what Louise understood. "Caroline?"

The woman stepped forth, a white ribbon in her hands. "How would you like it tied?"

"A ponytail, high." In deft hands, Louise's long hair was secured into a ponytail in record time.

Now Louise looked at her reflection and barely recognized herself. The only things she still wore from her original outfit were her undergarments, her shirt and rising breeches. Her riding boots had been replaced by a tougher sort, that she wore without folding the top. Over her shirt, she wore the main piece of her armor, a buff coat. It covered her thighs and had double sleeves only to her elbows, leaving her forearms and wrists with the proper freedom of movement. Even a different mantle had had to be made to fit over the buff coat. To complete the set she'd gotten a pair of boiled leather vambraces and greaves. Ideally, Louise would have wanted plate, and a cuirass at the very least, but there was no time to have them forged to her size. With her hair out of her face and neck, she looked older.

She glared at the mirror, and the reflection was so eerily reminiscent of her mother glaring at her that she almost scared herself. It was the hair, mostly, but never before had Louise looked so serious. That was the armor. There was nothing like battle garments to remove the youth out of one's composure.

She didn't look like a noble knight… maybe more like a cleaner mercenary. Certainly professional though. She understood what Sébastien had meant before. Nobody would give work to an Academy student just like that. To someone who looked like they meant business however….

"Yes. This will do. This will do very nicely." She said to both herself and the shopkeeper.

Since it had already been paid for, and well paid, for Louise had spent twenty-eight livres for everything, it was only a matter of folding her original clothes and putting them in her bag. She thanked the shopkeepers and promised to return later for the rest of the armor she wanted.

Stepping out onto the streets of Tristania was different. People looked at Louise differently. She wasn't a student of the Academyof Magic anymore. She was a noble dressed for battle. She wore no insignia that marked her as part of any of the Corps, so did they wonder for which noble she worked? Between her posture and attire, there was respect in the eyes around her.

Louise had never been looked upon like that in her life. Not really. There were always other things lurking in those looks. She found she rather liked it. The anonymity of coming into the capital and being seen as only another student from the prestigious Academy had always felt good, but this felt better.

The blacksmith she'd visited a week before took a couple of moments to place the young noble that stepped into his shop. It was hard to conciliate the young Academy student that had had maybe a bit too much alcohol with this serious young lady. The true difference was subtle, but he could spot it.

Before, it had been bravado. Now, it was confidence.

"Good morning, Milady," he greeted Louise. "Your request is ready, are you here for them?"

Louise nodded. "Just so."

The shopkeeper excused himself and moved into the shop's back, also his workspace. A few moments later, he returned with a sword and dagger in their sheaths, along with a pair of belts.

Louise picked up the dagger first, unsheathing it to test how it fit in her hand. Perfectly, was the case. With this blade, she thought, she could probably use some of Lecküchner's more close-range techniques. She replaced the belt holding her coat by the one provided by the blacksmith and fixed the scabbard and dagger to her right side.

Then she picked up Derflinger, still shrouded in mystery, and the sword stirred. "Is it time already? Oh, there you are girl!"

"Hello Derflinger," she greeted the sword and drew the massive blade from its scabbard. This time, no figment came to tell her she couldn't equip it. And indeed, now Louise held the mail-long sword one-handed with ease.

"Uh, this is new." Commented Derflinger.

Louise smiled and raised the sword to her shoulder, legs bent, then slashed forward, following into a text-book perfect feint and thrust. This was also new. Although she knew the movements in theory, it was good to see how seamlessly the knowledge she'd gained from the book was applied. It felt like she'd learned the techniques with Derflinger and only repeating what she'd trained a thousand times before.

"Oh, now we're talking." Laughed the sword, delighted at the skill his wielder was demonstrating. "You've gotten stronger, girl!"

"And you've gotten shorter." Remarked the wielder. The sword looked like new, having lost all of its rust and dirt, been polished and sharpened. The blade itself was actually made of rather dark steel and sported a wicked cutting edge. The hilt had been cleaned and re-wrapped with thin leather. Yet, in total, Louise estimated the sword had lost three of four fingers in length. She didn't think the balance was different from the first time she'd picked it up, but seeing as she hadn't been in full possession of her capacities, she couldn't tell.

"I was too big for you to handle." Said the sword suggestively. Behind the counter, the shopkeeper paled, hoping the surprisingly skilled noble didn't take too much offense at the sword. It was bad enough when it scared customers away, -but now it also shrunk without being asked too and cracked dirty jokes with a noble lady?

It completely flew over Louise's head. "Yes, probably. This will be remarkably more convenient." The pink-haired noble was far busier liking the fact that the sword wouldn't drag on the ground even if she wore it across her back.

"… You're something else, girl."

Oh, the sword had no idea. "Let's just see how good of a swordwand substitute you are, Derflinger."

"I'm the best, girl."

Louise raised a skeptical eyebrow she wasn't sure the sword could even see and held the blade in a guard. She focused. "Spark." And without delay, a number of sparks burst from Derflinger's tip. No painful shock meant she had kept full control of the spell. Perfect.

"Ah, you've become a stronger mage too, girl." Said Derflinger. "I could taste the wind in your magic."

"I'm a Line mage now." Louise couldn't help but smile.

She'd had three days. Three days to level up all of spells to level 10. It had been an uphill battle. Every level it got harder to rise up again, every level took longer. Louise had practiced hours on end, claiming a corner of the training grounds to herself. It had been Gust after Gust, Wind Slash after Wind Slash. During classes she practiced small, innocuous spells like Whispering Wind or Farsight. When she left the grounds, and only because it would really strange for her to continue practicing into the night, she cast Air Shield inside her room, pushed the furniture aside to make space to cast Wind Wall. She only stopped to eat, when she couldn't get away with it in class or when her Willpower ran out, which was more often than not. And not even those downtimes were iddle and unproductive, as she used to catch up with her studies. It was how she'd discovered she could also gain 'INT', which she'd correctly assumed to be intelligence.

It had been close. Very close. But Louise had done it. In three days, she had made herself a Line mage. On the fifth day since she'd succeeded for the first time. It was mind-boggling in a way, but Louise cared less. She had ten years of hard work supporting her, ten years of relentless study habits she finally saw bearing fruits.

The night before, after finally getting the twister spell to level ten, she'd gotten the second wind affinity. Louise's willpower had been almost gone by that point, but she'd still left her room and climbed up to the Fire Tower. She had to test it. She'd chanted the incantation for the two winds Wind Slash spell and the Line spell had burst out of her wand, cutting through the air like a honed blade. The figments had only appeared later, to tell her she'd learned the spell. She'd done it.

The sword in her hand chuckled, the metallic sound ringing inside the shop. "Oh, I think things are going to be interesting around you, girl! This is great! When do we leave?"

"Right away," replied Louise. "I have an appointment to get to."
 
She's certainly paying very, very, very close attention to the mage that was heavily bullied and is now practicing her spells, and quite a few combats spells too, to the point of obsession... while probably seeing and hearing things.

Eeeccchh. I hadn't even considered the "Carrie" angle between all the noble politics and worldspanning plots.
 
This is by far the best The Gamer fic I've come across. It's just so... fun. And heartwarming as Krahe said.

Can't wait for her to meet up with family. I expect Karin standing in place twitching as she internally fights between pride, alarm and showing neither.
 
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Tabitha is obviously at or near the point of flipping out due to obvious comparisons. On the other hand, is there anyone else worried? Tabitha noticed the seeing and hearing things that aren't there problem. But the constant training especially with the combat spells should be ringing alarm bells for the more observant.
 
Tabitha is obviously at or near the point of flipping out due to obvious comparisons. On the other hand, is there anyone else worried? Tabitha noticed the seeing and hearing things that aren't there problem. But the constant training especially with the combat spells should be ringing alarm bells for the more observant.

The upper faculty know about Karin and Louise's idolisation of her. Colbert is probably saddened by her going soldier girl but likely attributes it to her finally being able to try and chase her mother's shadow.

Of the students, Tabitha and maybe Kirche seem the only ones likely to notice and worry and we know Tabitha is.

If the servants notice... well would they care? Foquet maybe a bit.
 
Your introduction refers to this as nothing more than comfort writing from a lazy offer- and that's something we're all familiar with. And yet, given the comonality of the gamer fics with little plot and overly rapid escalation, thus is one of the few I've seen that feels written well.

The Idea of applying the gamer to a character that knows nothing about games is new and unique, and does well to prevent the overly rapid escalation, and the plot feels new, interesting, and well written.

I'm enjoying the hell out of this. Please, do continue.
 
Wondering about Karin's reaction to it... I'd say that once she discovers that Louise is now capable of with her magic she will, and while not like and approve it, sympathize (from personal experience if nothing else :p ) and tolerate her daughter's new hobby. That said, Louise might or might not get a stealth bodyguard following her without her knowing, at least for a while... :p
 
So what happens after Louise figures out she can have more than one affinity? She can be a square mage of every element.

I'm still waiting for her to find out how to activate the status page and freak out on how there's a skill called Void Affinity there.
 
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Of course, Louise's plans never went just like she wanted them to.

Just as she was leaving the alley that housed the blacksmith's shop, her strides long and purposeful, she ran into somebody. For once, with the not-insignificant weight of her buff coat and weapons, as well her greater strength, she wasn't the one knocked down. Instead, the Academy student she'd ran into fell onto their butts.

Louise saw the blond ringlets, the deep blue eyes sparking with anger, the faint smattering of freckles across red cheeks, connected it all with the black cape and pentagram medallion and spoke out loud first. "Montmorency?" What was she doing here? Was she also following her?

The only daughter and hope of the Montmorency family had already been in the process of opening her mouth to reprimand the uncouth that had knocked her down when she had noticed the mantle around their shoulders. Then the armed noble spoke her name with a familiar but impossible voice. Her eyes flew to their face and she found herself looking at a face that was just irreconcilable. Sharp red eyes glared down at her, pink hair caught behind their head, a steely facade showing only the slightest bit of displeasure.

She quickly took in the rest of their attire. The protective coat, the belt with a dagger, the sword peeking both over their shoulder and just above their knees…. No, this youth couldn't be Louise. The hair was a coincidence. And Louise didn't have those eyes. The color was just a coincidence. Yet, despise the risk of offending even more the man she'd bumped into, she couldn't help but to ask faintly.

"Louise?"

"Yes. What are you-" She stopped herself as she saw the girl on the ground pale even further. "Are you alright, Montmorency?" Had she been hurt? Founder, Louise hadn't meant for that to happen. She extended a hand to help her up.

The blonde blinked. "I- I'm fine, I think." No, she wasn't, and neither was Louise, she thought as she took the offered hand and was pulled to her feet. She acutely noticed the vambraces on those arms and the way the shorter girl seemed perfectly at ease with her weight.

Now, both on their feet, staring at each other without knowing exactly what to say, an uncomfortable silence lengthened. Montmorency didn't let go of Louise's hands, still trying to wrap her head around her colleagues complete transformation. Louise struggled to find words to question her classmate without scaring Montmorency, already out of balance, too much.

"So, are you going to kiss or what?" A scratchy voice questioned, curious.

The girls violently broke out their stupor. Montmorency flinched back, suddenly remembered of how she'd mistaken Louise for a man, while the pink-haired noble quickly removed her hands from Montmorency's, looking over her shoulder and hissing out, "Derflinger!"

The sword rattled in its scabbard before popping out just slightly. "What?" It asked, no longer sounding odd. "It was a nice moment, but you were taking too long. Isn't the girl to your tastes?"

"I- What- No! Don't even…" She sighed, rubbing the bridge of her nose. "Just don't go there. It's improper." And besides, Montmorency?

"Is that sword… talking?" Wondered Montmorency. Because of it was, or wasn't, maybe this was all a dream. She'd probably hit her head on the cobblestones. Or something.

""Yes."" Louise and Derflinger answered at the same time. "He's a magical- "A legendary-!" -a supposedly legendary- "Hey!" -magical sword. It also talks too much, so ignore it."

Derflinger slunk back into this scabbard, grumbling at the disrespect of some people.

Montmorency nodded absently. Oh. Right, yes, that made sense. There were probably some enchantments out there that could make swords talk. Maybe with an elemental stone, or the help of a spirit. Which still didn't answer any of Montmorency's questions, namely: what in the Founder's name had happened to Louise!?

So the blonde pulled Louise with her into the alley. The shorter girl dug her heels in, astonished at the blonde's unexpected actions. "Montmorency! What are you doing?"

"No! No! What are you! Doing!? You've been weird all week! I understand with what happened in the summoning, you had every right to be down and quieter. You just stared into space sometimes and I got a little uncomfortable, but I thought you'd snap out of it sooner or later. But then Guiche did that stupid thing! And I'm sorry about that. But you managed to cast a spell right and you were happy, rightfully, and that… that was great. Louise de La Vallière had finally managed to be more than a Zero. I was glad, honestly. Finally! I didn't think I'd ever see the day. But then you go missing for a whole day and after that… after that I just couldn't recognize you. It's like you just weren't there. You spent all of your time practicing and studying and... I understand wanting to catch up, I'd do the same. But it was all the time! Always, always, always casting a spell! You spent more time working than before and you already worked to a ridiculous level! You were desperate but you didn't miss meals or skip classes or train into the night! You're off! You're quiet, focused, you're cold!" She paused just the seconds necessary to catch her breath, then continued, louder. "And now! Now you're dressed like a man, in armor, with weapons! Like a mercenary! What is wrong with you, Louise!?"

Montmorency was panting by the end of her rant, flushed, gripping Louise's shoulders like she was going to disappear if she let go.

Louise looked back at her, entirely unperturbed. She'd almost snapped back with a callous 'why do you care', but Montmorency had been nothing but civil ever since the debacle with Guiche. Even downright friendly on some occasions. "Nothing's wrong." She said instead, reaching up to remove the hands from her shoulders. So Montmorency had also noticed something was off? She should be more careful in the future. Well, it wasn't like she planned on training like she had the past days again.

Louise raised a hand before Montmorency, still agitated, could say anything. "I might have taken it a bit too far the last couple of days, but it won't happen again. It was just the excitement, nothing more. As for my attire..." Well, for one, there was nothing wrong in dressing like a man! But Louise couldn't say that. She went for a half-truth instead. "I'm planning on joining the Royal Corps after graduating and it's come to my attention that I lack experience. I've found a former combat mage that's willing to give me a few lessons, but only if I acquired the 'proper gear'. That's all there is to it." To close the topic, she gently put her hands on Montmorency's arms, steadying her. "But are you alright? You're pale and shaking. Maybe you hit your head on the pavement." Really, with the way she had reacted, Louise wouldn't exclude that option.

"I'm… feeling a bit better now. Sorry about that." Replied Montmorency hollowly.

Louise had been perfectly reasonable, explaining herself calmly and patiently. She'd simply withstood Montmorency's outburst without complaint and proved herself the better woman.

Louise was never reasonable, calm and patient. Louise was volatile and always responded in kind.
 
Montmorency: Doppelganger Theory Confirmed!

Holy crap if Karin visits the Academy her classmates are going to be so confused.

"Dear Founder, the Firstborn has revealed its true form!"
 
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Dun dun dun!!!

Also I just realized Tabitha is going to assume Derf is puppeting Louise due to her experience with that other sword spirit, the evil one.
 
Next chapter: Quest Complete! Will Louise level up? Will she finally see her Status screen? What will she do with her skill points?! Find out next time (hopefully), on GAMER LOUSE FoZ!
 
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