Hmmph... this junior is a good seed [Cultivation Management Quest]

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Sure! I don't need tooooo many responses in order to have the right set up for my training arc.
No worries! It actually helps me as well because seeing Xiao Yi from an outside perspective may give me insight into traits i unintentionally gave him.

Also, for some reason, the " Dear Director " & " Dear Chairman " from RVB is playing nonstop in my head. Like literally from when i read the part about the letter. I've always liked the character traits that could be inferred from just their messages to each other
 
I.. wha...?? :o

Legit 🤯🤯. Is there going to be a parrot as well ??

No, not really. Part of the fun of this quest are the original characters. Stealing adapting Er Gen's cultivation system is one thing, but definitely not part of his universe.

On shared info stuff - I think with someone having gone to the effort of making a wiki, we may as well use it. If people have any major gripes, let me know, but it seems like a workable solution for the time being, and it should scale pretty well.
 
As a note. I've tidied up all the Regional Powers posts into the Overview post. I like to leave the new ones up for a bit, but then edit them into the other post to keep the number of informational threadmarks fairly low.

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Regional Powers - The Barriers

The question often asked is simple enough.

"Why is the Virtuous Flipper Region a region?"

It sounds innocuous, but in truth there is more to the the Virtuous Flipper Region than mere lines on a map. Such Regions range in size from large to small, with the Virtuous Flipper Region being on the small end. Regions are defined by being surrounded by Regional Barriers of various sorts - barriers which are usually impossible for mortals to cross, and those below Core Formation may as well not attempt the crossing. Even for a Core Formation elder, the crossing would be a life-threatening endeavour. As such, Regions are defined because most politics happens within the region. Invasions from outside the Region are virtually impossible, after all - to move in and seize resources en masse would cost hundred times the difficulty of the endeavour.

There are a total of five Regional Barriers - two in the mountains, one in the desert, one in the plains, and, of course, the sea.

The Northern Mountain Fenghuang Range

To the north of Qiguai Clan and Magic Oak Sect is a notoriously powerful bird, the Fenghuang. It rules over its range with absolute power and watchfulness, bounding thousands of li in mere moments. As powerful as a Great Circle Nascent Soul Elder, but far, far faster, it kills any human who dares enter its territory with no discrimination. Below it live many flocks of Fire Hawks, each of which strike with Core Formation strength. Nobody below Nascent Soul could make it through the ranges - unless one possessed a particular magical treasure.

The Southern Mountain Beehive

It is little-known that the Abyssal Devil Bee Sect capture their most powerful Devil Bees, seizing weaker stragglers from the massive hive in the south. These bees often form smaller hives, but breed far weaker Devil Bees than those captured. In the Southern Mountains is the Devil Bee Queen, who hatches Devil Bees in their thousands from her potent eggs. Another existence on the level of the Great Circle of Nascent Soul, her endless angry bees kill interlopers, as they safeguard many beautiful flowering Spirit Herbs that serve as nectar for their food. The wealth south of the Abyssal Devil Bee Sect is immense, but who can escape the incredible speed, anger, and number of the Devil Bees?

The Qi-Draining Desert

As one heads further into the desert, the thinness of Qi becomes something else entirely. A dead zone, where Qi is actively drained from you. For a Qi Condensation cultivator, it is death in minutes. A Nascent Soul might cross at the cost of immense wealth, consuming decades of a Clan's wealth to go from one Region to another. Devoid of creatures, plants, water, and even Qi, the Qi-Draining Desert can be entered, and indeed, some valuable relics have been found there, but straying too far into it is death.

The Ghostly Beast Curse Vein

Where there were once many Spirit Beasts, there are only terrifying spirits. The Curse Vein was founded by some ancient powerful curse coming to light, destroying cities, monsters, mortals and cultivators alike, each leaving a vengeful, terrifying ghost. They cannot leave the Vein, but the pulsating vein of thick black Curse Blood empowers them, even the weakest of ghosts striking with Core Formation strength. To cross it would be a disaster - even for a Nascent Soul. Only a treasure capable of repelling ghosts might give the hope of crossing it.

The Third Sea

The sea... vast, mysterious... and full of wealth! And the factions of the Third Sea send their cultivators across it without a thought. Well, the sea doesn't care about them, so it lets them pass. But we can give the sea a little hand in teaching the humans a lesson in humility.

- Ul Riksven, former Guardian of the Undersea Gold Palace.

Due to an unspecified slight tens of thousands of years ago, only certain sealanes are open, and only to small islands and secret realms off the coast of the Plains. Any attempt to cross the sea in truth will see massive attacks from angry sea monsters, all of whom are bathed in the Qi of the sea, far more powerful than that of the land. Sailing or flying above the sea beyond certain small negotiated lanes is a desperately dangerous notion.
 

Feel free to create any and all pages. Please make an account, though I won't lock it to accounts only.
Um, I don't want to make an account. So uh, could you make a few pages for me? The Golden Devil Clan page, the Golden Devil Military page, The Virtuous Flipper Region page, the page for Fauna in the Virtuous Flipper region (or fauna of the desert region, a plant page would be nice as well). Map pages, and a page for the good seeds we have, or should we go with individual pages for each good seed?

I mean I can work with the character pages of the good seeds being inside the thread, and that seems to be what we are going with. The other page requests would help with the reason we want a reference location at all.

Edit: A Battle formation, and a Array page would be helpful as well.
 
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[X] Plan Firming Foundations

the omakes for this topic are the best i have ever seen and it isnt even close to be honest. I think i will reread the topic from the start so i dont miss any .
 
The Qi-Draining Desert

As one heads further into the desert, the thinness of Qi becomes something else entirely. A dead zone, where Qi is actively drained from you. For a Qi Condensation cultivator, it is death in minutes. A Nascent Soul might cross at the cost of immense wealth, consuming decades of a Clan's wealth to go from one Region to another. Devoid of creatures, plants, water, and even Qi, the Qi-Draining Desert can be entered, and indeed, some valuable relics have been found there, but straying too far into it is death.
Ooh. Seems like this place would serve as a great source to seek enlightenment if you follow the Dao of the Devourer or something on those lines.

Just got to make sure you don't get too deep and kill yourself.
Due to an unspecified slight tens of thousands of years ago, only certain sealanes are open, and only to small islands and secret realms off the coast of the Plains. Any attempt to cross the sea in truth will see massive attacks from angry sea monsters, all of whom are bathed in the Qi of the sea, far more powerful than that of the land. Sailing or flying above the sea beyond certain small negotiated lanes is a desperately dangerous notion.
I suppose this barrier is one of the primary reasons you need to be Spirit Severing to leave this place.
 
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Due to an unspecified slight tens of thousands of years ago, only certain sealanes are open, and only to small islands and secret realms off the coast of the Plains. Any attempt to cross the sea in truth will see massive attacks from angry sea monsters, all of whom are bathed in the Qi of the sea, far more powerful than that of the land. Sailing or flying above the sea beyond certain small negotiated lanes is a desperately dangerous notion.
If the reason it so hard to get out of this sea is a slight, getting in for outside factions may be easier and they probably negotiated for a safe exit.
 
The Qi-Draining Desert

As one heads further into the desert, the thinness of Qi becomes something else entirely. A dead zone, where Qi is actively drained from you. For a Qi Condensation cultivator, it is death in minutes. A Nascent Soul might cross at the cost of immense wealth, consuming decades of a Clan's wealth to go from one Region to another. Devoid of creatures, plants, water, and even Qi, the Qi-Draining Desert can be entered, and indeed, some valuable relics have been found there, but straying too far into it is death.
Interesting.

What about mortals? Can they enter?
 
Devoid of creatures, plants, water, and even Qi, the Qi-Draining Desert can be entered, and indeed, some valuable relics have been found there, but straying too far into it is death.
Interesting that ours is the only one that is both Danger and Opportunity. I can very easily see a cultivator nearing the end of their lifespan making one last roll of the dice to seek resources in there.
 
Interesting that ours is the only one that is both Danger and Opportunity. I can very easily see a cultivator nearing the end of their lifespan making one last roll of the dice to seek resources in there.

All are Danger and Opportunity.
Great Circle Nascent Soul beasts have excellent treasures, Curse Vein has ghosts which are a treasure by themself, and the Sea is full of wealth.

I'm actually not sure why the Southern Mountain Beehive is considered a Regional Barrier. Isn't there just more Sea south of it? (It is a danger zone though, one which we should also have access.)
 
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Ferenike 6 - Pursuit
Ferenike 6 - Pursuit​

Wu Gan tripped down a fifty meter dune, rolling ungainly like a desert spider until he came to a rest in the trough amid some golden flowers that smelled sharp and astringent.

"Ah!" He gasped, sand flying around him as the fourth Heavenstage Blood Path cultivator scrabbled to get back up and flee. Red light rose above the dune behind him and his heart shuddered in primordial terror at the horrific roar that echoed down into the trough. That monster had followed him for ten fucking li through the desert, a horrific storm of molten sand and blood pursuing him relentlessly from the City of Golden Bells. He had to return to his master!

An enormous presence descended and landed lightly upon the flowers in front of the kneeling Blood Path cultivator.

"Ho there! Going somewhere?" The damned Flood Dragon expert said conversationally, hands held in a meditative mudra as his red hair blew in the wind of his passage.

"Fuuuuuuuck!" Wu Gan gasped as he scrabbled away.

Roaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaar...

A rushing of wind and a massive impact kicked up a wave of sand, knocking Wu Gan over and choking him with fear. The monster was here.

He scrabbled away on hands and knees, screaming as red light filled the shaded trough.

There was a sharp crack and the sand rippled under his hands, searing hot and steaming in the daylight. With a crash a small tree of red glass emerged from the desert and sharp pain ripped through him as some of its thorns pierced him! "Ahhh!" He screamed, wiggling like a trapped fish. Behind him in the reflection on the glass branches in his face he could see his pursuer, the roots of the tree emerging from its foot resting on the sands.

A devil, reincarnated to hunt him and his school down for his sins against Buddha. Its skull was a covered in a spiked helmet with a wide and round turtle shell brim, under which dark pits held its gaze and in its horrible mouth of fangs the fires of hell bloomed. Light roared around it, blooming from the gaps between its spiky armor, a flowing sheathe of terrifying robes of firey glass in the general shape of a Golden Devil Legionnaires travelling robes. On its shoulders rose a series of spikes, two of which held the heads of his allies, blood leaking from open mouths and dead tongues.

Under its feet the flowers burst into short lived flame and the sand liquified. In its hands it held a spear forged of Spirit Bronze and wound about with red glass on its haft, and one of their damned shields of the same bronze.

"Wu Gan." The devil spoke in a voice like a roaring inferno, his bowels loosening, and it walked closer. He whimpered.

It rounded the tree of glass he was pinned to like an insect, his blood darkened in the red light and staining the sand beneath the tree and stood before him. Jamming the butt of its spear into the sand it reached out and grabbed his face, pulling him close. He wailed as his flesh boiled and blistered away from his bones under its hellish heat.

"Where is the Leg Thief? Where is his master Zu Jing?" The devil asked.

"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!" Wu Gan screamed pitifully.



"Hahhhh." Ferenike sighed as she relaxed in the Spirit Oasis Spring, red semiprecious stones carved with arrays in the bottom of the pool providing a nice circulation to the qi infused water. Going at full strength like that still drained her, but damn if it wasn't fun to get her anger out on these Blood Path cultivators. Behind her the neatly folded forms of her clothing and a letter in a sealed travel box remained. She'd gotten a response from her Senior Xiao Yi. She would have to compose a response to his insights, and find a suitable wine to bolster his heart into action.

She inhaled the smokey Qi laced into the steam of the spring and felt her dantian grow that little bit more, feeling phantom pains of her skin stretching and tearing as her spine bent like a tree in a storm. Incremental painful progress over months, but incremental progress added up to a lot quicker than most might think. Especially when you were as patient as Ferenike was, her Dao-heart calm and tenacious.

Outside the small domed building containing the small personal spring she was using, one of many in the entire Oasis complex, she could hear the tolling and pealing of the bells which gave the City of Golden Bells its name. The place was home to a tiny sect called the Sacred Tone Keepers, and their jade embossed golden bells filled the air of the city with a richer Qi than one might find out in the desert. It was something of a resort town for cultivators actually, and the local magistrate chief had been horrified to discover her and Rencao's evidence of a Blood Path sect infiltrating her city.

Bad business that.

She sighed again, frustration bubbling before subsiding under patient contemplation. Her and her Flood Dragon travelling companion had discovered and dispatched five of them, all beneath her in Heavenstage but the two men she was looking for remained so far unfound. The best they had at the moment was that they were close. In the region this city controlled. The two travelling cultivators had found a small mortal hamlet of perhaps a hundred denuded of life and crushed like a beast attack had passed through it, but that was a false conclusion. Careful examination revealed traces of corrupted blood and viscera, and a cook fire in the middle of the wreckage. All signs of Zu Jing's work.

A knock came on the door, a heavy thump-thump. "May I share the water, O Lady Ferenike?" Flood Dragon Gong Rencao asked, tone whimsical.

She blinked, brain locking up for a moment.

"NO! You imbecile I'm naked in here! Go find your own pool dammit!" She said as she turned towards the door and shouted at him through it.

"...Worth a try. Ah well, my apologies." He said with a chuckle. The door thunked as he presumably sat against it. "I'll just sit out here in the cold then!"

She huffed irritably. "What do you want Gong Rencao?" She grumbled, sinking into the spring deeper.

"Well, I was walking past and found myself burdened with a curiosity and decided I would ask the source of it. Would you happen to be from one of the caravaning families that criss-cross your Clan's lands? The way you handle horses and your familiarity with the Turtle Tongue is familiar to me." He asked.

Ferenike sighed. Most people couldn't tell she wasn't directly from the Clan's core territories due to her hair and brassy skin. She was in a way mildly regretful there was little outward sign of her mother and father's people on her, but her family was the Legion now and she wore their colors like she used to wear her family's own blue and red.

"Insightful of you Senior. Did the thought of bedding an exotic nomad maiden tickle your fancy?" She asked archly. She hadn't completely forgiven the annoyance yet.

He snorted and chuckled. "No, I'm not that stupid. You're pretty in your own right." He said sincerely.

She sighed, crossing her arms on the lip of the pool and resting her chin on them as she stared at the door. "Hmmm, why ask then?" She prodded at him.

"I'm a traveler, as most Flood Dragons are, and the thought of a kindred wandering spirit amongst our allies is a comfort." He said, voice quiet.

Huh, that was...much more personal than she thought. She smiled slightly, annoyance dissipating.

"It is nice to travel with someone with a similar spirit. Was there anything else?" She asked him happily.

He chuckled. "Well I was perusing the drinks available in this fair city and a little bird gave me a lead to some interesting people down by the east end of the city in that towering stack of forges and butcheries leaning against the city wall. I got a strange little tale from them of an old mine that one master Spirit Blacksmith used to dig his ore from, about thirty li from here to the north east, till a couple months back when the guy disappeared, apparently travelling to visit some relatives. Other locals near the mine have said the place has become dark and smells of blood. But given the seclusion of the place barely anyone goes there in any particular year. It would make a good hide out for someone to go to ground."

Ferenike's heart thudded in her chest. Zu Jing was close. Heat bubbled on her tongue and the water in the pool started to bubble violently. "Oh... fortune smiles upon us then. I was speaking to some of the tailors and rice farmers near the gates, and found tales of a strange man matching descriptions of the Leg Thief and a name. Jianxi Bai. And he let slip to a tailor he fancied that he was coming and going from a small town called Ling a few dozen li to the east from here. And, he should be coming to the city tomorrow to pick up an order for a 'relative' of his."

"Ho? Good work. This is your quest, which do you want to seek first?" He asked through the door, tone anticipatory.

Ferenike's smile was sharp and vicious looking. "I think Jianxi first. Rip the last connection his master has to the outside world and force him to have to emerge from his den if he wants to hunt. We will meet Zu Jing in battle then as he flees his hide."

Gong Rencao laughed. They spent time plotting for another hour or so until left.

As he did he paused and through the door his voice carried. "You know Ferenike an idle thought occurs to this one. Perhaps it might help you to consider the limits of an enemy mind's desires for patience? A bit of old lore I remembered from a text on war I read once in Jingshen lands."

Ferenike's mind was already going a li a minute as she processed the little nugget of insight he had inadvertently given with his advice. Her Qi soared and her dantian grew fiercely as she pondered within her mind, phantasmal glass hands beginning to shape a puppet of glass, a facsimile of Zu Jing that she could fill in with what she knew of him and in the depths of her mind patiently use as a tool to ferret out his secrets.



They waited in the sands outside the city. Here there were a pair of cliffs of sandstone, passing through the dunes and between them a road passed which led to the little village Jianxi would be travelling from. The sun beat high in the sky above and Ferenike waited on one of the cliffs, laying close to the stones as she waited. Gong Rencao was on the other prominence, sipping tea as he hid behind a rock. Even to Ferenike's powerful senses the man's aura was completely invisible and it was not possible to see or hear or even smell him from below with simple senses of the body. Rather impressive if she was honest.

Her mind shifted tracks as she saw a familiar man walking the road below, meandering at an easy pace. She could see the tension in his shoulders of a hunted man though.

Stronger now, eighth Heavenstage like her. She remembered the three lesser cultivators who had been disciples of the so called "Blood Tiger" as Zu Jing was now calling himself. Their bodies were in a storage ring she'd taken from Wu Gan, and she'd put Jianxi Bai and Zu Jing's into it as well when this was over. Thing would be damn near overfull but it would do.

Her heart beat, blood thickening into molten rivers, shimmering from her skin faintly. She surged forward and leapt for the other prominence and then as the red light exploded into being around her she bounced off of it with a sharp crack of shattering stone.

There was a crack of stone and a masculine grunt of effort and then a massive stone blocked one end of the road, slammed down by Gong Rencao as he settled on top of it with a laugh, his Qi restrained to the fifth Heavenstage.

Jianxi Bai looked up at Ferenike and grimaced. "Fucking you again!? May devils rip your eyes out and skin you and your lap dog!" He shouted as he leapt away from the molten impact crater she'd just punched into the road. She turned with a spin and leapt, spears of glass growing out in a forest from where she had impacted.

There was a puff of distorting Qi and then his hands were filled with a disgusting three-sectioned staff made of bronze bones. Those were Gallius's leg bones bound with sinews! Anger made her scream, the walls of the cleft melting as she roared at him like a beast. His staff cracked against her spear as she lunged. But she had a dozen more and her passage ripped through the forest of red glass around them and she hurled them at him with kicks as she chased him down.

He raced for the edge of the forest and she grit her teeth. She took a great breath, glass trees bending towards their mistress, and a massive well of Qi built behind her breastbone.

Boom!

Her exhalation of heat flashed the sand behind Jianxi to liquid as a glob of white hot glass shot over his head and landed behind him, forcing him to leap to the side and then Ferenike was there. Clang! Her shield caught him in the ribs as she turned in the air over his leaping form and he smashed into the ground, forming a crater as blood burst from his mouth.

"No escape for you Leg Thief!" She roared as she stabbed down with her spear!

Crack!

His staff extended and slammed into the armor forming on her chest. The qi in it reacted with the hungry and explosive Qi in the butt end and she was flung away by a massive explosion, tumbling through the air nearly to the top of the cliffs again half a li up. That was annoying, she'd be sporting bruises from that under her lamellar armor tomorrow. She hissed and then righted herself and looked down.

The man was hiding amongst the stones, a trail of blood leading her to his Qi and the faint glint of that damned staff and she smiled. Pointing down towards his hiding place with her spear she pulled up on the qi in her veins, and they writhed as the little soldiers in her body readied their siege weapons in her minds eye. Veins bulged on her arm glowing brighter than the sun and then they erupted from her in a rain of glass spears.

A horrific rain of molten glass and fantastically hot blood erased the rocks from existence, charring them to ash and then stabbing into Jianxi. Pinning him to the ground surrounded by a searing pool of liquid sand steaming in the daylight.

She fell now and as the earth claimed her she directed her fall to skip off the second cliff dive for the man. Her veins subsided, digging deep to grab her bones and muscles. Her strength redoubled once, then again, far beyond what her enhanced muscles and bones could already provide and as he screamed and twisted and ripped a badly burned arm free from hardening glass she thrust.

His chest crumpled under the blow like paper and the interior of his shattered rib cage became a bonfire as she stood over him and Gong Rencao joined her with congratulations. Her distracted mind however did not take note of what he said, a well of satisfaction and growth overtaking her.

After months of waiting and planning and careful hunting, she was pleasantly satisfied.

One down, one to go.

Even if it took years.



Another @occipitallobe! Like the last one please put this supplemental bonus onto Ferenike's cultivation this turn. I'll be having likely one more update for her fight with Zu Jing and then be moving onto the Teaching arc!
 
Could we build mechanical constructs that don't use Qi and that move through gears and mechanisms, send them into the desert, and monitor their exploration using remote scrying techniques?

Probably. I don't think that sort of thing is common at all, though. Building non-Qi powered stuff in a cultivator world makes as much sense as building a plow to be pulled by animals in a world of oil. One source of power is so far above the other it'd be incredibly niche, and finding an alternative power source would be difficult. You still need a source of power for a geared and mechanical device.
 
Obviously we need to build a railgun, and sling over our Core Formation over the Desert as bullets. For a return trip, just build one at landing point.

What could go wrong? How bad could the Heavenly Cloud Realm possibly be? Nevermind the landing.
 
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As one heads further into the desert, the thinness of Qi becomes something else entirely. A dead zone, where Qi is actively drained from you. For a Qi Condensation cultivator, it is death in minutes. A Nascent Soul might cross at the cost of immense wealth, consuming decades of a Clan's wealth to go from one Region to another. Devoid of creatures, plants, water, and even Qi, the Qi-Draining Desert can be entered, and indeed, some valuable relics have been found there, but straying too far into it is death.

So the desert south of our territory/the Cannibals turns into a dead-Qi zone, then opens up into the sea? How far are we out from the sea on our south?

Due to an unspecified slight tens of thousands of years ago, only certain sealanes are open, and only to small islands and secret realms off the coast of the Plains. Any attempt to cross the sea in truth will see massive attacks from angry sea monsters, all of whom are bathed in the Qi of the sea, far more powerful than that of the land. Sailing or flying above the sea beyond certain small negotiated lanes is a desperately dangerous notion.

Have there been instances of further sealanes being negotiated (albeit at ruinous cost)?
 
A devil, reincarnated to hunt him and his school down for his sins against Buddha. Its skull was a covered in a spiked helmet with a wide and round turtle shell brim, under which dark pits held its gaze and in its horrible mouth of fangs the fires of hell bloomed. Light roared around it, blooming from the gaps between its spiky armor, a flowing sheathe of terrifying robes of firey glass in the general shape of a Golden Devil Legionnaires travelling robes. On its shoulders rose a series of spikes, two of which held the heads of his allies, blood leaking from open mouths and dead tongues.

Under its feet the flowers burst into short lived flame and the sand liquified. In its hands it held a spear forged of Spirit Bronze and wound about with red glass on its haft, and one of their damned shields of the same bronze.

"Wu Gan." The devil spoke in a voice like a roaring inferno, his bowels loosening, and it walked closer. He whimpered.

It rounded the tree of glass he was pinned to like an insect, his blood darkened in the red light and staining the sand beneath the tree and stood before him. Jamming the butt of its spear into the sand it reached out and grabbed his face, pulling him close. He wailed as his flesh boiled and blistered away from his bones under its hellish heat.

Oh this scene is just wonderful. The imagery it conjures up is just so Epic
"Ho? Good work. This is your quest, which do you want to seek first?" He asked through the door, tone anticipatory.
I like this. Really get the sense of a Wise Elder/senior letting the junior spread their wings while being ready to step in at any point
hey writhed as the little soldiers in her body readied their siege weapons in her minds eye. Veins bulged on her arm glowing brighter than the sun and then they erupted from her in a rain of glass spears.
Another scene of perfect imagery, i can just imagine it like the Mafia Pirates in One Piece. Of the little tiny Ferenikes preparing crossbows and pulling arms back to fling the spears.

Depending on how far you plan to take this metaphor, it would be interesting for future development to be coached as the army within her being forged and tempered into different divisions. Like maybe how Glass erupting out of the fist in a series of spikes is the army stabbing froth with their spears etc
 
Oh this scene is just wonderful. The imagery it conjures up is just so Epic

I like this. Really get the sense of a Wise Elder/senior letting the junior spread their wings while being ready to step in at any point

Another scene of perfect imagery, i can just imagine it like the Mafia Pirates in One Piece. Of the little tiny Ferenikes preparing crossbows and pulling arms back to fling the spears.

Depending on how far you plan to take this metaphor, it would be interesting for future development to be coached as the army within her being forged and tempered into different divisions. Like maybe how Glass erupting out of the fist in a series of spikes is the army stabbing froth with their spears etc
Thank you! It is admittedly a bit hard juggling the descriptions of her internal heat, body manipulation and glass so I'm having to do a careful balancing act to give screen time to her body manipulation abilities along with everything else. Could have probably done more in the last two omakes but eh, electrons over the wire.
 
Thank you! It is admittedly a bit hard juggling the descriptions of her internal heat, body manipulation and glass so I'm having to do a careful balancing act to give screen time to her body manipulation abilities along with everything else. Could have probably done more in the last two omakes but eh, electrons over the wire.
Yeah, so much about Xianxia is the imagery that unless a stop is put intentional, literal paragraphs can be used to describe one skill lol. It's kinda why i'm trying to move to observable effects from the skills in my past 2 omakes instead of the indepth description of it.

Need to save myself from losing the Narrative flow from when i get too detailed.
 
It's nice to see a xianxia story make a reference to the historical Daoist concept of the cultivator being a microcosm of the wider world, with an internal pantheon of little gods managing the mind, body and soul just as the heavenly gods manage the macrocosm.
 
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