Firebird, a Worm AU/Xover?

"This town has a man who can turn into a dragon, your argument is invalid," he remarked and now I was sure it was amusement that I was feeling.

"That's… wow, I don't have a response to that," I said. "Point made. I don't have any bad intentions. I'm here because it's a place to stay and nobody tries to pry into my business."

He eyed me for a long time and I wondered why I was being so honest with him. I had seen him from a distance that day when I was getting my nose checked, but I hadn't learned any details about who he was.

"Very well," he straightened. "You may remain here, if you wish. You are now Asian."
I think this is the first time someone has actually used this in story (asside from Firefly maybe) though for Lung I would say hes intentionally aware of how it sounds and os just cheesing taylor.
 
Note that Taylor's starting to learn how to telekinetically manipulate molecules. The standard "Costume up!" power to most, but being able to transmute charcoal into diamonds would certainly solve her money issues. Of course, then you realize she can disassemble people...
 
Note that Taylor's starting to learn how to telekinetically manipulate molecules. The standard "Costume up!" power to most, but being able to transmute charcoal into diamonds would certainly solve her money issues. Of course, then you realize she can disassemble people...

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The only supervision Taylor had in the weeks between running away and Coil was Vicky. No wonder it turned out badly.

Heh. Taylor's a sidekick. Or in Japanese terms... does that mean Vicky is her Senpai? "NOTICE ME, SENPAI!"

Memetic Lung shit pulls me right out of the story.

Oh, let's see, that only took... 2 hours and fifteen minutes. I was expecting it sooner.
 
Well, I would try to be more constructive, but there's not much more to say about it. You knew what you were doing when you put that in.
 
Honestly, the Lung stuff bothers me, to some extent.

Not in the sense that it's there, but it's trying to blend (potentially) serious storytelling connotations...with memes.

Creates a sense of disconnect that doesn't really serve any tangible story benefit without the huge (potential) caveat of having that jarring feeling, after the initial humorous response has passed. Depends on the reader, to be fair.

Probably could have 'gotten away' with one of the 'Dragon argument invalid' or 'You are now Asian', but having both so close to each other...feels less like actual dialogue and more like 'hee hee memes', at least on some level. The 'You are now Asian' makes more sense from the point of the narrative, even if it could have been phrased less obviously.

Other than that, not a bad chapter, if a bit dry. The whole Wards showing up out of the blue, and Taylor not recognizing anyone save Madison/Browbeat's 'wavelength' also feels....perhaps a bit circumspect, especially with the whole 'we all just happen to be together, and in a giant fan club'. There's Taylor not reading their identities, which is good self-restraint, but it feels a mite bit too 'wink wink', imo.

Liked the Professor X reference, even if it seems a bit wary, given the Phoenix's distrust of him.

Not much else to say, specifically. A lot of setup, here.

edit: Though I am curious as to what, specifically, is up Brandish's ass with Amy trying to help her with her pain sensors, unless it's just being super in pain in addition to her previous issues compiling into more verbose distrust.
 
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Other than that, not a bad chapter, if a bit dry. The whole Wards showing up out of the blue, and Taylor not recognizing anyone save Madison/Browbeat's 'wavelength' also feels....perhaps a bit circumspect, especially with the whole 'we all just happen to be together, and in a giant fan club'. There's Taylor not reading their identities, which is good self-restraint, but it feels a mite bit too 'wink wink', imo.

Regarding that, well, she hasn't spent a huge amount of time around them, not compared to say, Madison. And I didn't want to have her just ferreting out everyone's identities so she's tuning out the background noise unless it's something that draws her attention, like the weirdness with 'Seiya'. She's basically making up rules for telepathy as she goes(or recalling them from 'memory' depending on how you view it). So backsliding or failing is a possibility. Cue, trying to read Lung's mind and hitting the wrong wavelength like she did with Armsy way back.

A lot of setup, here.

Yeah, this one was for setting the stage for this arc. There was more I wanted to work in, but it was already close to 10k and I had finally hit a point that felt like it could serve as an end/breakpoint
 
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I really can't stay invested in this. I've been struggling for the past two arcs, but I think this is it. I really don't care about this Taylor. It feels like a rehash of Acceleration, but with a different godlike superpower, this time influencing her brain as well. I don't think Taylor's life will be getting any better, and I wouldn't be surprised if it got worse. You did a good job, Chibi, of writing two decent OCs, but even then I can't say I care about them much.

So, I'm dropping it. Not because this chapter was particularly bad or anything. It's not even dark, really. It's just a 'meh' chapter in a long list of them, and I can't bring myself to care anymore. Maybe if I ran into this completed like I did Acceleration I would stick through with it to the end via binge reading, but right now I really can't bring myself to care.
 
A few details:

Seiya means Sincere One. Also, is a guy that's really a girl in some other franchise.

None of you are Asian. But... Taylor is!

Oi! I'm Asian here, and I, have nothing else to say about that.

But all in all, social interaction with mental abilities seems to be rather...awkward... Then again, it could be worse? Right, nice improv right there Mads, how long before the Taylor finds that bit of info? And a pressing question I haven't figured out, did Ms, Livesly survive that nasty encounter with that localized supernova?
 
Well, I liked Kenta bit, so there is that. Resonable Lung is the best Lung. And memes blend in good enough.
 
This one was going to be pretty slow-paced, no way around it, especially. As it lays out groundwork for the later arc. Things will ramp up though.
It's Worm, of course it's gonna ramp up... but it's also The Phoenix, that means it'll ramp up so much faster and to a higher level of kick-ass.

The only supervision Taylor had in the weeks between running away and Coil was Vicky. No wonder it turned out badly.

That's not true, she had Catherine and Minako on occasion and she also had Lisa stalking her toward the end.

Liked the Professor X reference, even if it seems a bit wary, given the Phoenix's distrust of him.

She may have been wary of him, but Xavier did lay the basics of telepathy control in Jean, which rolled over into her telekinesis, which then gave an even finer control for the Phoenix to use when it manifested, so it likely sees him as a starting point for someone like Taylor, aka a beginner.
 
The Wards reactions to Sirin seem...unusually hostile. Heck, it's about as bad as Shadow Stalker and they barely know her. It didn't seem as if her encounters with them were that bad. I'll re-read that part again where she interacts with them but for the moment, I'm going to list this as 'because the author said so' and count is as A Strike. I'll edit this post with an apology if it turns out I'm wrong.

In the meantime....this thing with Lung isn't going to end well, is it? It was an amusing encounter, though. And New Wave is just disintegrating, isn't it? Poor Vicki. It's hard to sympathize with Amy in this fic, even though we can see her mentally crumbling in every scene she's in, but I still do.

EDIT: AAaaaand I found the references. Jesus CHRIST, they couldn't have been trying to drive a wedge between Taylor and the Wards if they tried...and it looks like they did try. Of course, the fact the the subject of joining up was a trigger topic for Taylor at this point didn't help. Sorry for doubting you, chibipoe!
 
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Wow.

I'm now extra annoyed that Family travels have been keeping me from helping you edit. This was soo good, and you added so much since I was last able to get on the Doc.

A+, Dank Memes.
 
The Wards reactions to Sirin seem...unusually hostile. Heck, it's about as bad as Shadow Stalker and they barely know her. It didn't seem as if her encounters with them were that bad. I'll re-read that part again where she interacts with them but for the moment, I'm going to list this as 'because the author said so' and count is as A Strike. I'll edit this post with an apology if it turns out I'm wrong.

It's not that the meetings have gone bad or been hostile, Taylor just kept them at arms length and barely interacted beyond what was needed to give them a situation report and then leaving.

It most likely seemed like it was hostility towards them, but only Armsmaster and Miss Militia get that treatment... well hostility or flat out ignored if someone else is there that she can be distant to.
 
It's not that the meetings have gone bad or been hostile, Taylor just kept them at arms length and barely interacted beyond what was needed to give them a situation report and then leaving.

It most likely seemed like it was hostility towards them, but only Armsmaster and Miss Militia get that treatment... well hostility or flat out ignored if someone else is there that she can be distant to.
Plus they are used to a level of awe and/or deference from other good guys. I bet than even older heroes at least try to be polite and do the occasional small talk (even Armsmaster is more or less social here). Despite their apparent maturity (even from CB) they are teens and therefore a little less understanding of the rude attitude of others, especially when combined with the failures of their parent organization and the apparent brutality of Syrin.

That they are given incomplete intel from both the Protectorate and the PRT as part of operational security does not help either.
 
Yeah, I get that.

Piggot really dropped the ball on this one. She should have told them that she had come and spoken with them and was looking at allied hero rather than Ward, but her father signed her up behind her back, the paperwork was annoyingly fast-tracked and the psych-profiles and visit from family services was completely by-passed by an outside source and then she ran away before it could go any further leaving her father a drunken mess and Sirin on the streets with only Glory Girl as a contact to any hero orginisation.

Clockblocker: We're boned.
 
Yeah, I get that.

Piggot really dropped the ball on this one. She should have told them that she had come and spoken with them and was looking at allied hero rather than Ward, but her father signed her up behind her back, the paperwork was annoyingly fast-tracked and the psych-profiles and visit from family services was completely by-passed by an outside source and then she ran away before it could go any further leaving her father a drunken mess and Sirin on the streets with only Glory Girl as a contact to any hero orginisation.

Clockblocker: We're boned.
Ironically enough GG is doing a good job keeping her focused and keeping her mental health from worsening, she's even trying to get Amy to look at her (which is kinda urgent since there could be long term effects from the drugs). Is just hard to balance the distrust o Taylor towards authority, the distrust of Amy towards Taylor, and the overall mess being a telepath cause on people.

What the PRT/Protectorate desperately needs its to give their heroes new directives for dealing with Taylor now that she graduated into a mass (justified) murderess, and that she is suspected to be in less than stellar mental and physical health, especially Assault & Battery who are the closest to her, and maybe give a complete explanation to the Wards including the reasons why she is so angry and why the must keep their mouths closed (the PR reasons are good enough if they want to prevent the infiltrators from noticing [and yes I know they don't matter anymore since Coil is dead but they don't]). And any explanation should include the fact that she's probably a friend of GG.
 
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