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Firebird, a Worm AU/Xover?
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chibipoe
May I tell you of the glory that is Catradora?
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Oh.
Ok. Sorry, I'm working and didn't parse it as such. Sorry!
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Must be that time of day. I've only just finished work so it probably wasn't as well worded as it should have been.
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Now this is the kind of thing I could get used to seeing coming off of work:
We're caught up, Taylor is mellowing out, Noelle is cured, and Coil is dead, dead, dead.
Other than that, I know couples like Noelle and Krouse. She's his 'better half' for sure.
All in all, good development of Taylor and a nice new interpretation of Krouse. Additionally, the Phoenix might not be awake, but it can influence/make/modify dreams to keep its new host safe. That's an interesting development. Keep up the good work Chibipoe! I look forward to see how many ways Coil screwed up before finally getting the ax BURNED.
We're caught up, Taylor is mellowing out, Noelle is cured, and Coil is dead, dead, dead.
Interesting Noelle is shown as normal, at least that's the implication I'm getting.
I do like how Noelle's appearance is never described, only implied. And Krouse taking the time and implied risk to have a lunch date with his girlfriend shows how unconditionally he loves Noelle. It's sweet.
And here's where he shows, as my mother used to say, "he's about as smart as a sack of hammers".
Interesting how Krouse can sing to soothe Noelle, and that she's been having dreams from the Pheonix as well.
Krouse willing to fix his mistakes takes him from a shounen protag out of genre into what my parents used to call 'an honest idiot'. He's trying to do right by his girl, but as others have stated, he doesn't have the wisdom, maturity, or experience to think things through and avoid situations like this.
Well that was unpleasant to read, and an appropriately accurate future.
And Krouse is redeemed, mostly. That was a big leap for him, putting his life in jeopardy, the collar could have killed him for all he knew, to save someone without Noelle. And I think he really did expect to die there.
Ah, head explosions. When a telekinetic needs to graphically murder everyone in a top-secret facility, accept no substitutes. Taylor would get along with Elfin Lied's Lucy rather well here.
The Phoenix, helping people? It must really hate the Space Whales, or what shards to to people. I'm wondering of this'll make a return when Case 53's start to make an appearance in-story.
Yeah, that's a normal meeting with Big Sleepy Burn-y Bird.
And Noelle knows Taylor's name. Chibipoe, with your WOG that there's a residual psychic bond between the two, its effects will be very interesting to explore, and what they mean for Krouse and Noelle's relationship.
Uh Phoenix, I think you missed a spot, she still likes wierd sandwiches.
Other than that, I know couples like Noelle and Krouse. She's his 'better half' for sure.Wow. This is a massive step in for Taylor. Rather than snap or storm away, she's willing to go for a fresh start. I wonder if she'll be willing to re-examine the confrontations with her father and the PRT now? Eh, she'll probably be back to independent hero-ing with her friends soon enough.
Noelle sticking around's nice, it'll be fun to see Taylor's various groups of friends interact: Victoria, Assault, and her two independent friends.
All in all, good development of Taylor and a nice new interpretation of Krouse. Additionally, the Phoenix might not be awake, but it can influence/make/modify dreams to keep its new host safe. That's an interesting development. Keep up the good work Chibipoe!
I look forward to see how many ways Coil screwed up before finally getting 
Castle_Bravo
The user formerly known as Nuke_Equestria
I like your story but this is the second time this trope has come up and it bothers me. To quote TVTropes:
chibipoe
May I tell you of the glory that is Catradora?
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*shrug* To counter that, while yes, you can see a rather wide range. You accept it and just shrug or don't even consciously acknowledge this. Bird flying over head, etc. It all depends on things you're used to. And in a city full of capes... the people who live there regularly... people flying will just be background noise to them.
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Having helped a bit with the past few chapters, I'm happy to see the general good reception here of Krouse and his not a complete mustache twirling villain.
He's really vastly overblown in fanon.
The whole group of Travelers are strongish personalities from the get go. They were competitive gamers for christ sakes. Noelle was the leader, the lynchpin, the thing that kept them running in the first place. With her out of the picture, the next two strongest personalities emerged and butted heads. This is where Krouse showed his dominance and leadership by making decisions for the best of the group at the time. By ditching Cody who was all, "Fuck the police, fuck everyone, I do what I want!"
Krouse made a lot of bad decisions, but at least he stepped up and made decisions. And they followed him.
Chibi wrestled for a long while on the prophecy bit and the precog speech Taylor gave to coil. and Krouse. It's hard as hell to write good prophetic sounding speech.
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While it's true your overall field of vision is extremely wide, look at the field your most commonly focusing on. You can only accurately see what your eyes focus on, So at any given time your only really focusing on and actively processing 10dec cones from your eyes. The trope about people not looking up, is exactly that.
Most people dont FOCUS their eyes above them.
So it's far far easier to evade detection by being still and being above people.
Emphasis on the still part. Human peripheral vision is tuned more for detecting motion than for picking out fine details.
He's really vastly overblown in fanon.
The whole group of Travelers are strongish personalities from the get go. They were competitive gamers for christ sakes. Noelle was the leader, the lynchpin, the thing that kept them running in the first place. With her out of the picture, the next two strongest personalities emerged and butted heads. This is where Krouse showed his dominance and leadership by making decisions for the best of the group at the time. By ditching Cody who was all, "Fuck the police, fuck everyone, I do what I want!"
Krouse made a lot of bad decisions, but at least he stepped up and made decisions. And they followed him.
Chibi wrestled for a long while on the prophecy bit and the precog speech Taylor gave to coil. and Krouse. It's hard as hell to write good prophetic sounding speech.
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@ Visual range:
While it's true your overall field of vision is extremely wide, look at the field your most commonly focusing on. You can only accurately see what your eyes focus on, So at any given time your only really focusing on and actively processing 10dec cones from your eyes. The trope about people not looking up, is exactly that.
Most people dont FOCUS their eyes above them.
So it's far far easier to evade detection by being still and being above people.
Emphasis on the still part. Human peripheral vision is tuned more for detecting motion than for picking out fine details.
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4WheelSword
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You can, at the very least, spoiler things like this. Hopefully these ten points will make you think next time.
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That's an interesting way to phrase it, and it gives me an idea. To the crack thread!
Hotdog Vendor
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A lot happened very fast in this chapter. I could hardly keep up with it all, it felt like an entire arc happened all at once.
It definitely feels a bit disjointed.
Both because we're catching out on a Krouse who isn't so much 'less' of a bad guy, but is being dream-manipulated, either by his subconscious or Taylor, to feel 'more' bad about what he's doing than he does in any of his canon situations.
He does it all for Noelle, which, while the basis of his fanon overblown properties, would make it rather difficult for him to see freeing Taylor and breaking away from Coil as a logical line of thought. Psychic manipulation explains that, but it feels like it cheapens his actions, a bit.
On the other hand, seeing the 'hard support' throw himself at the mercy of the enemy for the chance to have a hard carry hit their ultimate and wipe the enemy base feels somewhat more fulfilling. Hopefully Lisa managed to get out.
Not sure about the possible 'prediction' of Taylor joining the Travellers. While her psychic bond (and I'm curious on the specifics of the formation therein, as at least as I can recall, there needs to be much more mental 'closeness', usually either romantic love or extremely strong friendship/closeness, to keep that kind of bond open) providers her some 'in' with Noelle, and through that, dominion/security from the rest of the Travellers, it doesn't quite feel....appropriate, given the direction the story's been taking thus far.
Phoenix Power supplants some of that closeness, especially if Taylor is unpracticed at molecular level TK, but I'm not sure I want to see a repeat of the various Phoenix stories post-Jean in which the Force splits itself up, which generally, if not always, turns to in-fighting amongst the group to reclaim it.
Hopefully, Catherine's dad doesn't come along too strong, but at the same time, I'll be pretty disappointed if he's suddenly the voice of adult rationality, too.
Same/Similar problem exists here insofar as it's more 'catching up' providing a lower level of satisfaction than seeing it unfold, given that we already know that Taylor and the Travellers were A-okay from earlier chapters.
I get that not wanting to linger on Taylor being kidnapped is a thing, but even some sort of muted interlude/mix between her, Lisa, and Coil would have worked out better, IMO, but we're moving on, so that's that, for the moment.
Both because we're catching out on a Krouse who isn't so much 'less' of a bad guy, but is being dream-manipulated, either by his subconscious or Taylor, to feel 'more' bad about what he's doing than he does in any of his canon situations.
He does it all for Noelle, which, while the basis of his fanon overblown properties, would make it rather difficult for him to see freeing Taylor and breaking away from Coil as a logical line of thought. Psychic manipulation explains that, but it feels like it cheapens his actions, a bit.
On the other hand, seeing the 'hard support' throw himself at the mercy of the enemy for the chance to have a hard carry hit their ultimate and wipe the enemy base feels somewhat more fulfilling. Hopefully Lisa managed to get out.
Not sure about the possible 'prediction' of Taylor joining the Travellers. While her psychic bond (and I'm curious on the specifics of the formation therein, as at least as I can recall, there needs to be much more mental 'closeness', usually either romantic love or extremely strong friendship/closeness, to keep that kind of bond open) providers her some 'in' with Noelle, and through that, dominion/security from the rest of the Travellers, it doesn't quite feel....appropriate, given the direction the story's been taking thus far.
Phoenix Power supplants some of that closeness, especially if Taylor is unpracticed at molecular level TK, but I'm not sure I want to see a repeat of the various Phoenix stories post-Jean in which the Force splits itself up, which generally, if not always, turns to in-fighting amongst the group to reclaim it.
Hopefully, Catherine's dad doesn't come along too strong, but at the same time, I'll be pretty disappointed if he's suddenly the voice of adult rationality, too.
Same/Similar problem exists here insofar as it's more 'catching up' providing a lower level of satisfaction than seeing it unfold, given that we already know that Taylor and the Travellers were A-okay from earlier chapters.
I get that not wanting to linger on Taylor being kidnapped is a thing, but even some sort of muted interlude/mix between her, Lisa, and Coil would have worked out better, IMO, but we're moving on, so that's that, for the moment.
Castle_Bravo
The user formerly known as Nuke_Equestria
People are attracted to motion. If they see something in their peripheral vision, more often than not, they look.
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And people are attracted to motion that matters to them more than motion that doesn't. If Taylor's flying above multi-story rooftops she'll either be too far away to get a good look at or outside your cone of vision anyway because you'll be focusing on something else.
I'm a people, and I don't make a habit of looking towards the tops of buildings. And those rare times I do, I don't give a damn about a speck off to the side.
Sure, if I saw someone flying it'd probably get my attention, but unless they were flying at me it's not something I'd devote a great deal of effort to keeping track of.
William Stepp
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This is an awesome story. I can't wait to see what happens next. With here telepathy active, she will be more likely to respond positively to the wards and Assault and Battery.
OverReactionGuy
Verified Sanity
Not really, no. Maybe some of them yeah, but no. But then again I'm not an optimist and the PRT are probably going to cause Taylor to rampage with their blatant stupidity in this story. And because of Glenn.
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Rampage you say?
Rampage?
Or more like, this.
OverReactionGuy
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That's for sure what some people commenting want to do in Worm. But then again, I think they'd be happy doing the same thing in any fictional setting.
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That's not really true, not at least the way you seem to mean it. Yes you can see a very wide range without moving your head, but that's because you can move your eyes without moving your head and peripheral vision. If you're not in the habit of looking up you won't notice things above you unless some motion attracts your attention - despite them technically being well within your field of vision.
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As recent events in Virginia clearly show.
Selonianth
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Even if something above you moves, as long as it isn't sudden your brain can still ignore it.
Sasha
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That was both widely irrelevant and in very poor taste.
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Poor taste I'll grant, but it's incredibly relevant given the notion that people see everything in their theoretical maximum field of view.
We dont.
We can only really SEE what we focus on. which is a narrow cone contained within this maximum field of view.
Peripheral vision is suited to motion detection and tracking but unless you are actively focusing on it at the time your surprisingly blind to things going on around you.