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logiccosmic said:
"You can't change your feet to some other size?" She asked, clearly curious.
Technically she can with
Loom-Snarling Deception. Sort of. But yes, she has strange limitations on her shape-shifting, because she isn't a normal Changer at all. Note that since the classification is not about how capes do things but rather what effects their powers have in practice, Defiler's ability to turn into a
shadow or a
stone giant make her a
bona fide Changer, albeit an unusual one.
logiccosmic said:
"No. I've gone up four sizes, too." I grumbled, shuffling my ridiculous boat-like pink footwear.
"Dress?" she - almost - squeaked.
"Shoe," I answered, slightly irritated. Really, four dress sizes? What did she think I had been before, a size double zero?
hahaha
The snips has barely started and I'm already laughing. This is going to be a good one. ^_^
I have to say that given how lanky Taylor is, I have to agree 100% with her. DoD is right to be embarassed.
logiccosmic said:
They both needed to, if not get on the side of good, then at least make themselves useful. I could fix this, if they cooperated.
Actually if Taylor learns either
Golden Years Tarnished Black or
Crowned With Fury cooperation becomes optional. GYTB would be great for her campaign against evil, but I have a soft spot for CWF, possibly because of its total lack of anything resembling subtelty, and how trivially easy it is to use ; it really convey's Malfeas's style. Also VWF is a prerequisite of
Fealty-Acknowledging Audience, which is not only awesome at making large groups loyal but also (and more importantly) lets the Warlock share mutations from
By Rage Recast. Beyond the obvious stengthening of the minions, it lets her do awesome things like increase their
longevity or
healing ability : healing from wounds 4 times faster is not the real benefit, recovering fully from anything short of amputation is more important, letting the blind see and the tetraplegic walk. Walking into a hospital and granting youth* and health with a wave of her ar* to all those who merely say that they love her? (a
dismissive wave of her arm, because Malfeas) That would be totally awesome.
* degeneration from old age is a crippling effect, so combining those let anyone bless physically revert to their thirties (maybe late twenties) and stay there until they reach about 200 years old.
logiccosmic said:
"Then let's go destroy every gang in New York City."
MALFEAS APPROVES
The way she concludes a rather subtle manipulation with
that is precisely why Fiends favoring Malfeas are among my favorites sort of Infernals.
logiccosmic said:
Several hundred dollars poorer, we all rode in Damsel's van
Given that Damsel lost the keys, I'm guessing they had to wire the thing. Hehe. Maybe I shouldn't enjoy their misery like that but I can't help but smirk at the disconnect between their terrible might as a supervillain (supervigilante?) group and how they have to steal not just a decrepit van but their own vehicle.
logiccosmic said:
Damsel was mirroring Sundancer's silent treatment- embarrassed, over having to pay an obscene amount to a locksmith to get into the van. I had shrugged it off as the cost of doing business, but she was holding the debt like it was a promise of her firstborn child.
Hahaha, so
that's what happened. Can't even steal their own car, that's pretty pathetic, especially for such a high profile group. I actually laughed at them, does that make me a bad person?
logiccosmic said:
I cleared my throat, and enunciated clearly, "Are we all clear on the plan?"
Sundancer replied first, "Yes. We hit hard, and fast. Grab everything inside that we can carry, and then keep moving."
Malfeas would probably approve at the directness of the smash and grab (He certainly approves of taking other people's stuff, He used to steal His little brother's toys all the time), but the end here suggests you are anticipating some meanigful response. A true Malfeas-approved plan would be "smash, grab, calmly stroll away secure in your knowledge that those puny insects cannot do anything to you", not "smash, grab, run away".
Still, I'll give it a 80%. Nice effort, Defiler.
logiccosmic said:
In front of us stood the warehouse that had been full of guns last week.
So ... she isn't using her awesome Stranger power to check things before entering with her minions (squishy minions!). That's reckless. Oh well, that gets her a +10% to her
Malfeas Approval Rating, at least.
logiccosmic said:
"Go." I whispered, hoping they hadn't heard anything.
OK, I have to admit that I don't get that sentence, specifically the second half. From the way it is worded, she is hoping that her "go" won't be heard, but that's just plain weird. maybe she is hoping it will only be heard by team Lawgivers and not the targets? Or maybe she is hoping the target won't hear the wall being obliterated (btw, nice job DoD)?
No matter how many times I re-read this, I can't understand what it is saying, so it should probably be clarified.
logiccosmic said:
I rushed through the new entrance, heading along a path I had tread not long ago. Silent, and swift.
Like a scarlet wind?
logiccosmic said:
I kicked the table, and it flew up, clipping all but one of them in the jaw. The woman closest to me, missed being hit by the flying furniture, only to take the swung rifle to the chest.
... what swung rifle?
That's another line that could use clarification, even if it isn't as confusing as the one quoted above (I clearly get the impression that all the guards got quickly beaten down). I know what is happening, but I'm not clear on the
how here. Is this the gun Defiler just snagged, used as a club? Was it lying on the table and knocked the woman over as it flew away from Defiler's kick? Is it another Lawgiver doing their part while the boss is kicking the rest into submission?
That line gives me the impression that I should know that the rifle-swinging has been mentioneed earlier, but it hasn't. maybe that's an edition artifact? Whatever the case, the scene would still be good without changing it, but it might be better with some clarification here. Unless you are aiming to make ita bit confusing, transmitting the chaos of the action to the reader (but that's not the impression I'm getting from the clear and crisp exposition of the rest of the action).
logiccosmic said:
"Hands up," I ordered. "Don't be stupid, and you won't get shot."
[...]
"Turn around," I continued, gesturing with the pistol.
See this? That's precisely the sort of thing you can't do without blowing your nature if you learn
Crowned With Fury. But as far as I'm concerned, that's an upside added on top of making Defiler such a better* leader. "Infernals: there are no drawbacks
(tm)".
* warning: the Infernal version of "better" might not match mortal expectations
logiccosmic said:
The loft was dark, lights off, but it could either be unoccupied, or have someone setting a trap.
Unluckily for them, they weren't helping themselves.
... Oh! I hadn't noticed until Taylor pointed it out, but that's true. Yay for Witness to Darkness. When I did notice it, I couldn't stop myself from
laughing (there might also have been some hand-rubbing involved).
logiccosmic said:
Sundancer, after checking that we were far enough away, lit up her fiery orb. Harsh light emanated from it, as it grew hotter and hotter. She loosed it, and it flew right through the hole Damsel had made. As one, both of us turned away, as a brief fireball blasted out the windows of the warehouse. Sundancer walked towards me, gently stepping over the melted pavement.
Ah, yes, Sundancer is much better than a few grenades at cleaning up behind yourself. Also,
MALFEAS APPROVES (although he is slightly disappointed that the searing sunfire was not the green radioactive type).
A good an enjoyable and satisfying snip. Intra-party stuff, Taylor becoming a leader (both motivating her minions and using their skill to great effect), action, superpowers, and progress on the protagonist's agenda.
(now I am saving this before sending because I am not typing everything a thrid time)