Exploding Canon (Worm SI)

-Brain surgery is a high level skill because the risks in fucking up are very high. Coil's power mitigates that, giving him more freedom to try crazy stuff, and if it works he keeps it, and if it doesn't, he doesn't, where a real neurosurgeon who goes "Hey, maybe I can try this experimental procedure to fix this patient!" is in The Land Of Awful Ethics That Will End Badly.
The main issue is that he does not have unlimited tries given the circumstances. Sure, he doesn't suffer any negative consequence from a failed attempt other than the time spent but time is not something he has unlimited amounts of.

-Anesthetic is unnecessary to brain surgery.
Once you penetrated the skull, yes. Before it, well, not impossible to keep going with the pain but it's certainly going to make matters more complicated, specially considering the delicate operation being done and the need for good coordination during that time. It's not a problem in itself, but it does increase the train a bit.

-Even brain damage as severe as missing 50% of your grey matter does not necessarily obviously and significantly debilitate a person... even though something as minor as a bonk to the head can induce severe, obvious neurological problems. The brain is a complicated and mysterious thing. Moody, too.
The thing about reality is that it doesn't need to be realistic. Or specifically, yes, it's technically possible that he comes out of it without any significant and/or visible changes, specially not in any way that really affects the story. In the same way, it's theoretically possible for a person to fall out of an flying airplane without a parachute or anything of the kind and survive. Still, if either happens in a fictional story without extra cause people's SoD is going to suffer.

-Lastly, the idea that removing the tinkertech bomb from his skull is an incredibly difficult, precise activity seems rooted in an assumption that measures were put in place to prevent him simply reaching in and removing it. This assumption is unwarranted: SI me/author me didn't imagine the possibility at all. If you assume that SI me poked the bomb inside, put the piece of skull back in place, and then stopped, the only significantly difficult part is going to be re-removing the chunk of skull. This is a completely plausible scenario given that SI me didn't think of the possibility at all, and therefore had no reason to think such security measures would be necessary.
It might be feasible I suppose if you didn't even bother to "glue" the skull back in place, so to speak, just stitched it over and said hole is big enough for him to to reach after cutting over the stitches, but that also likely means that you used far too big of a bomb in a first place (given you're detonating it inside a person's head you shouldn't need a bomb that needs more than a small hole done with a power drill, probably smaller than his finger). Remember that skulls are hard and even if nothing else, I seriously doubt you or Oni Lee would leave coil with access to tools adequate to opening his skull at all, let alone doing so without causing massive damage (you can't just bludgeon it until it shatters and cutting it far from easy unless you had some kind of tinkertech "mono-molecular edged blade" or something of the kind.

Mind you, as I said, it's not intolerable for it to be as it's currently written, but it could do with a review to put less of a stress on the SoD.
 
I just thought about that Coil / Calvert doesn't need to take out the bomb, just to neutralize it (turn off the trigger), isn't it?
 
I just thought about that Coil / Calvert doesn't need to take out the bomb, just to neutralize it (turn off the trigger), isn't it?

Scorch mark on the floor: indicator that the bomb was removed and exploded.

The main issue is that he does not have unlimited tries given the circumstances. Sure, he doesn't suffer any negative consequence from a failed attempt other than the time spent but time is not something he has unlimited amounts of.

My point is that people keep coming back to the idea that brain surgery is an elite skill that requires lots of training and ignoring why that is and how Coil's power interacts with such. It's not a very useful thing to say "Brain surgery requires a lot of skill!" if you're not going to pay any attention to why it is, and how that might be less or more true in context.

Once you penetrated the skull, yes. Before it, well, not impossible to keep going with the pain but it's certainly going to make matters more complicated, specially considering the delicate operation being done and the need for good coordination during that time. It's not a problem in itself, but it does increase the train a bit.

/gibbering

HE ALREADY HAS A HOLE IN HIS SKULL

THE ONE BAKUDA MADE

AND THEN JUST SORT OF PUT HIS SKULL PIECE BACK IN PLACE WITHOUT ANY EFFORT TO SEAL IT

EXPLICITLY STATED IN-STORY

See, guys, I'd be taking your criticism more seriously if you didn't keep writing criticisms that are pretending things happened that explicitly didn't happen

The thing about reality is that it doesn't need to be realistic. Or specifically, yes, it's technically possible that he comes out of it without any significant and/or visible changes, specially not in any way that really affects the story. In the same way, it's theoretically possible for a person to fall out of an flying airplane without a parachute or anything of the kind and survive. Still, if either happens in a fictional story without extra cause people's SoD is going to suffer.

I think things work a bit differently than that. I'm personally of the suspicion that a major factor in SOD-violation is the awareness of how a thing fits into the narrative structure -in other words, someone hurling themselves out of a plane and surviving, if it's really convenient to the narrative, tends to be SOD-breaking even to people who know such can happen, because it's a cop-out -"Well, it could happen in reality, so I don't need to actually set it up in the story."

In any case, my point is that Coil could definitely pull it off in such a way that it has a reasonable impact on his functionality, in turn allowing him for to manage to escape. It's currently irrelevant how much damage he has or has not taken, exactly, beyond "Not so much he couldn't pull off an escape".

(There's also a question of exactly how Coil's intellectual functionality interacts with brain damage re: his power's behavior, which is something I've never seen a fanfic acknowledge, let alone explore. Is he unaffected by brain damage that isn't lethal? His shard might've done that, for all we know, or at least tied some of his "higher cognitive" functions into the shard itself, or something: something weird has to be going on with his thinking-meats if he's operating on split realities.

Of course, this is ignorable if you accept the "simulation" WOG)

It might be feasible I suppose if you didn't even bother to "glue" the skull back in place, so to speak, just stitched it over and said hole is big enough for him to to reach after cutting over the stitches, but that also likely means that you used far too big of a bomb in a first place (given you're detonating it inside a person's head you shouldn't need a bomb that needs more than a small hole done with a power drill, probably smaller than his finger). Remember that skulls are hard and even if nothing else, I seriously doubt you or Oni Lee would leave coil with access to tools adequate to opening his skull at all, let alone doing so without causing massive damage (you can't just bludgeon it until it shatters and cutting it far from easy unless you had some kind of tinkertech "mono-molecular edged blade" or something of the kind.

Explicitly, in-story, did nothing to re-seal the skull beyond putting the chunk of skull back in place. No glue. No stitching.

This does not require cutting instruments.

Mind you, as I said, it's not intolerable for it to be as it's currently written, but it could do with a review to put less of a stress on the SoD.

Might happen. I've always wanted to do a Coil interlude. Depends on how following events play out.
 
but that also likely means that you used far too big of a bomb in a first place (given you're detonating it inside a person's head you shouldn't need a bomb that needs more than a small hole done with a power drill, probably smaller than his finger).

Why are you assuming she even had a bomb that small? Remember, she didn't make one specifically for this, she used one she had on hand. Hell, why are you assuming she had a fucking drill? Her tools tend to wind up bomb components, remember? (Granted, the bomb she used is described as 'pill sized,' but A) I've seen some pretty big fucking pills, B) she had to make the hole big enough she could pick up and replace the plug, and C) this is a complete and utter hack-job in the first place.)

EDIT: For clarity's sake, I meant the, er...'operation.'
 
1) See alert that "Exploding Canon" was updated.
2) Go check it out.
3) Realise that it was not an update, but just another insanely long story related OP post.
4) Feel dissapointment.
5) Read the post anyway.
6) Realise that it was quite entertaning either way.
7) Decide to wait for the next update.
8) Goto 1.
 
Scorch mark on the floor: indicator that the bomb was removed and exploded.



My point is that people keep coming back to the idea that brain surgery is an elite skill that requires lots of training and ignoring why that is and how Coil's power interacts with such. It's not a very useful thing to say "Brain surgery requires a lot of skill!" if you're not going to pay any attention to why it is, and how that might be less or more true in context.



/gibbering

HE ALREADY HAS A HOLE IN HIS SKULL

THE ONE BAKUDA MADE

AND THEN JUST SORT OF PUT HIS SKULL PIECE BACK IN PLACE WITHOUT ANY EFFORT TO SEAL IT

EXPLICITLY STATED IN-STORY

See, guys, I'd be taking your criticism more seriously if you didn't keep writing criticisms that are pretending things happened that explicitly didn't happen



I think things work a bit differently than that. I'm personally of the suspicion that a major factor in SOD-violation is the awareness of how a thing fits into the narrative structure -in other words, someone hurling themselves out of a plane and surviving, if it's really convenient to the narrative, tends to be SOD-breaking even to people who know such can happen, because it's a cop-out -"Well, it could happen in reality, so I don't need to actually set it up in the story."

In any case, my point is that Coil could definitely pull it off in such a way that it has a reasonable impact on his functionality, in turn allowing him for to manage to escape. It's currently irrelevant how much damage he has or has not taken, exactly, beyond "Not so much he couldn't pull off an escape".

(There's also a question of exactly how Coil's intellectual functionality interacts with brain damage re: his power's behavior, which is something I've never seen a fanfic acknowledge, let alone explore. Is he unaffected by brain damage that isn't lethal? His shard might've done that, for all we know, or at least tied some of his "higher cognitive" functions into the shard itself, or something: something weird has to be going on with his thinking-meats if he's operating on split realities.

Of course, this is ignorable if you accept the "simulation" WOG)



Explicitly, in-story, did nothing to re-seal the skull beyond putting the chunk of skull back in place. No glue. No stitching.

This does not require cutting instruments.



Might happen. I've always wanted to do a Coil interlude. Depends on how following events play out.
Shh, shh, it's okay.

I believe in you, Ghoul King.

Don't worry. Even if everyone else thinks you're more competent than you claim to be, I'll always be there for you!
 
Still after all of these I still want someone randomly pulls out a Makarov PB and kneecap the bastard. Coil deserved every hole added to him.
 
2.x Coil
So, seeing all the thoughts on coil's escape, I figured I might as well weight in with my own take. In the form of a snip, that the gracious Ghoul King decided to cannonize for your reading pleasure. I ain't the best writer, but I'll try. I hope you enjoy it anyway.

2.x Coil

Coil came too in a haze of confusion and pain. His body was distantly trying to tell him all about the many bruises, cuts, and minor burns littering it, but it was all eclipsed by his head. Oh god, his head. Pain radiated out from it, lancing and stabbing and burning in time with his heartbeat. It was... it was agony. Everything seemed to dim in the face of the mounting pain, his awareness trying to escape in the only way it knew how.


But he was COIL! He wouldn't let this defeat him. His mind fought the darkness, refusing to give in, no matter how sluggish his thoughts or scattered his resolve was. In the face of adversity, Thomas Calvert did what he always did. He split the timeline, seeking safety.


With two trains of thought, the path forward became clear. Moving his thoughts in ways only a person with two bodies and two minds could even understand, let alone learn to duplicate, he shunted the pain of both bodies into one self.


Clarity.


At least for one half of himself, but the one slowly falling apart under the pain would be erased, and so did not matter.


Now able to function, Coil opened his eyes. There was no use pretending to still be unconscious, as he was sure he had made some noise while dealing with the pain. Fortunately, he was alone in the room. Not that he particularly liked what he saw. Concrete walls, bare floor, heavy door. Feeling around with his aching body revealed that he had been placed on a basic cot. At least they had left him his underwear. Amateurs.


He slowly began to sit up, when suddenly his other timeline fell apart. He quickly created another split, and shunted the pain onto one of the two Coils. Hmm. It seemed the pain proved too much for the other him, and probably pushed him into cardiac arrest. Lack of oxygen to the Coronna Pollentia, and his powers and the timeline failed.


Well, the dying him's were able to take care the pain, so all in all, it worked well enough. Hopefully the pain would eventually pass. Using his powers this way removed the possibility of more useful applications. He would have to plan quickly.


The door was the first obstacle. Hobbling his way over, he knelt beside the lock and studied it carefully. It was an older model, one that he vaguely recognized. He clumsily felt around in his underwear, feeling for the emergency pouch he had sewn in place. His lockpicking tools, switchblade, and lighter were all there, good. It might take a minute or two to open the door, less if he used his power, but it could be opened.


Now for the other matter.


He could remember what that bitch had said. A proximity bomb set to blow up if he left a certain range. Best to assume that meant the room, and deal with it now.


In the time it had taken him to reach and study the door, three more timelines had fallen apart under the strain. Thankfully, standing seemed to lessen the pain, and while his other self was still dying under the pain from two bodies, it was happening much slower. Time to learn what he was dealing with.


In the throwaway timeline, the convulsing body on the ground spastically raised its arm, and tried to feel its head. Instead, it hit itself right on top of the cut piece of bone, driving it into the brain, and killing it.


Back in the main timeline, Calvert sighed while making a new timeline. Thankfully, the second attempt gave some more insight, as this body had only just begun to deal with the stress. Having a firm mental grasp on what exactly had been done to him, Coil paused to consider his options.


They were rather sparse.


Waiting to see if he could influence or trick the two psychopaths into removing the device or freeing him would be foolish. Coil was loath to simply wait and trust that he could outmaneuver them. They held all the power, and saw him as an object. If Coil had been in their position, he would have never let his victim go. No, that could only be a last resort.


But he did need to remove the bomb. He would just have to do it himself. He split the timeline again, then slowly allowed himself to feel part of the pain. Moving around, he found the optimal position, a hunched, awkward seat on the cot, and then began.


In the throwaway, he carefully prodded the wound, gauging how much leeway he had. It was hard to tell, between the blood and pain, but the loose bone seemed to be sticking out slightly. With slippery fingers, he managed to grasp it, and after taking a moment to steady his nerves, yanked.


Coil gave a short, breathless whimper, before fainting.


In the other timeline, Coil waited. While one of him was unconscious, he was still aware that there were two him's. If the unconscious one disappeared, it would indicate that either the bomb was trapped against its own removal, or he had fallen over and killed himself against the floor.


The second timeline did not disappear, even after he waited several minutes. So, Bakuda hadn't even thought to stop him from removing the bomb. So very, very unfortunate. After his escape he was going to kidnap her and torture her, show her how a real professional did things. He might even let her live. Hmm, he could certainly use a tinker to augment his forces.


Enough daydreaming, he had an escape to implement.


Dropping and splitting the timeline, he grasped the piece of bone. Reproducing the exact movements as much as he could, he breathed out, then pulled. Out it came with a grating pop. In the other timeline, the one that he had shunted the pain to, he keeled over once again. Nevertheless, he sat absolutely frozen, waiting to see if this timeline would end. After several minutes, he relaxed, and dropped the timeline were he had fallen unconscious, and were he had not removed the bone, then split one more.


Cringing at the next bit, one of the Coil's reached up, and began to feel around. While the hole wasn't too thick, it wasn't very big, and accidentally touching the sides would cause quite a lot of pain, as his feeling around had attested. Dropping and splitting once more to get rid of the shakes, he considered his approach.


If he was not careful, there was a very real chance of killing himself. Thankfully, where others might be unable to take the risk, he could try until he succeeded, with no repercussions.


What felt like an hour, and thirty seven failures later, he had mapped out the hole in his head, the device, and the various parts of his brain he should not be poking. He had also pulled the bomb out four times, only to realise he had given himself some form of brain damage. It was subtle, but Calvert had a unique advantage in being able to compare healthy and not so healthy selves in real time, so as to discover any injury.


The fifth attempt had been delayed after number four had seemed successful, until he had felt the blood starting too gush out of the hole and down his head. So far, the attempt seemed to be working out, as he had managed to grasp the device without touching the sides and flinching, or poking his brain and bleeding out, or pushing the bomb in further and cutting into something important. With a slow methodical movement, he drew the bomb out of his head, and carefully, he brought it around, peering at it blearily.


Was that a bandaid holding the wires together?


No matter. Just as slowly as before, he moved the bomb away from himself, placing it in the furthest corner of the room. Taking several minutes, he made sure that his thoughts were not slower, or more disorganized than those of his safe timeline. He moved his head around, and felt his limbs to ensure he could still feel his whole body.


Coil rated it as a tentative success, and went to work on the lock.


With both timelines working at the lock, one with a headbomb, one without, the lock opened relatively quickly. One Coil opened the door, while the other waited.

Seeing no one on the other side, he set off in opposite directions, each timeline looking for a way out. The base was curiously empty, and he only had to hide in an office once. Eventually, the Coil with the bomb in his head found the stairs.

While the Coil without the bomb would have walked down the stairs and out the door, the one without couldn't do so without running an even greater risk of exploding. This would not be a huge loss, but Coil felt somewhat cautious about dropping the timeline just yet. The longer he kept it, the more certain he could be that he had not damaged his mind in some way. So constrained, he decided to head upstairs, to see what he could find. It may not be the way out, but he figured there might be a chance of finding something useful.

At first it all seemed more of the same, until he found a room he recognised. Bakuda's workshop. Quickly hiding himself, he took the moment to look around. The place was a mess, filled with piles of scrap and random junk, some of it not even mechanical. A banana peel sat on an old newspaper, which hid a pile of who knows what underneath. He started to cautiously search the place.

Darting through the workshop, Calvert froze when he caught sight of someone. It was Bakuda, working at one of the tables, oblivious to the world. He nearly laughed out loud. No traps, simple lock, no guards, not even aware of the world around her. This would be sweet.

Crouched low, Coil made his way toward her, knife out and ready to stab. It might not be as fun as some of the other options he had envisioned, but work came before pleasure. He was thirty feet away, and almost halfway through the room when a single beep pierced the silence, and the timeline dropped as his head blew up.

Over in the other timeline, the one where coil did not have a bomb in his skull, he snarled to himself. So she did have some measure of defence against him attacking her after all. Not that it mattered he thought, as he split the timeline in two.

One of him continued out the door of the stairwell on the first floor, while the other stayed behind. This floor, being marginally more busy, took a few retries to avoid being seen, but the place was once again rather empty, and Thomas Calvert was an elite soldier, even without counting the benefit of his powers.

Having distracted the door guard and made his escape, he made his way out of sight of the building and down the block until he found a suitable alley to rest in. His body was sore, but now that he had escaped it would soon be remedied. Assuming the other timeline did not work out, in any case.

The other Coil, once he had cleared the door, had started up the stairs once more, heading for Bakuda. This time, he thought, she wouldn't be saved by her bomb. He was going to hurt her, and maybe see what he could find out with some inventive questioning. Coil was considering retrying his attacks until he found one that ended with her dead and his re-escape. She had made him so angry, he wasn't sure he cared just how hard it might be. He wanted her dead.

The Coil on the inside made his way up to the third floor, and was once more approaching the tinker on silent feet. This time, as he closed in on her, no bomb went off, and he entered into stabbing range.

Stooping low, and still as silent as possible, he stabbed her leg. Best to limit her movement from the start, limit her options, maybe even cripple her with the pain. Coil knew he was about to enjoy this.

He stepped to the side, prepared to fight off a desperate counter-attack. Unexpectedly she simply shifted onto her other foot with a wince, and continued to tinker. Thomas Calvert was confused. And furious. How dare she just... ignore him like that!

He grabbed her arm and spun her around, knife coming up to her throat as he threw her on to the table.

That was more like it, there was the fear, the weakness and the pain. Just as he opened his mouth to start talking, to offer her life in exchange for useful information, (she wouldn't survive this, but hope was such a powerful tool for keeping people obedient) she seemed to come to some realisation.

Whatever the epiphany was, it caused her to reach over to a device, and before he could stop her, she had pressed one of the many buttons. A dozen exotic bombs suddenly exploded, each effect capable of devastating destruction. These caused the other bombs to explode in a cascading eruption. Together, they managed to damage the city in a wide area, from hyper-ballistic pieces of the building to a strange lightning that seemed to disintegrate matter, to a series of marble sized black holes that had been scattered like shotgun pellets by one of the other bombs, to more.

The only one that would actually affect anything, as the timeline fell apart as Coil died, was the bomb that caused agonising nerve pain. Already wounded and weary, and not expecting such a shock to the system, the remaining Coil gave one startled gasp where he was sitting in the alley, and fainted.

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Several hours later, Coil came to, and decided he had enough of fighting the ABB on his own. Wearily, and furious despite his successful escape, Thomas Calvert headed home.
 
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You know, I just realized one thing: If nothing else the repeated attempts at trying to get away are quite likely to be second trigger material.
 
You know, I just realized one thing: If nothing else the repeated attempts at trying to get away are quite likely to be second trigger material.

Does that even work if you're a Cauldron cape? I had always thought of it as being that natural triggers have powers that are harder to immediately leverage, but the chance of a second trigger; Cauldron capes get immediately more useful powers by and large but can't second trigger.

Admittedly, I'm not sure there's any actual evidence for this theory, but it seems to make sense.
 
Coil's excellent adventure

Awesome. I'm genuinely tempted to canonize this, even though there's some bits that don't fit how I've been internally conceptualizing things. (And even though the near-total lack of reaction to being hamstrung is maybe too far. Admittedly, I've never been hamstrung. I have no idea how much it's supposed to hurt)

(Though I'd have to adjust Oni Lee's dialogue to account for Coil having gone out the door rather than out the window... eh, I was considering editing it anyway to say "the trail of blood is several hours old")

I particularly like the end bit -"Oh. You know what, fuck you Coil, you'll just drop this timeline if I kill us both." BOOM

... because that is the kind of logic I engage in. Not so good at suicide, but I could totally see myself going "Eh, it's not really suicide. It's rational."

Does that even work if you're a Cauldron cape? I had always thought of it as being that natural triggers have powers that are harder to immediately leverage, but the chance of a second trigger; Cauldron capes get immediately more useful powers by and large but can't second trigger.

Admittedly, I'm not sure there's any actual evidence for this theory, but it seems to make sense.

Cauldron capes are heavily implied to be fully capable of second triggering, at least generally speaking. I'm personally of the interpretation that the "unbound" examples like Alexandria and Eidolon probably wouldn't be, as a second trigger is supposed to be lifting limits and they're not supposed to have the proper set of limits normally imposed on parahumans, but most Cauldron capes should be second-triggerable. The fact that Cauldron sells second triggers is particularly suggestive.

You know, I just realized one thing: If nothing else the repeated attempts at trying to get away are quite likely to be second trigger material.

I... kind of doubt that. Admittedly, it's unclear how Cauldron capes would interact with the "akin to the original trigger event" component of second triggers, but honestly, fans severely underestimate the difficulty in second triggering.

Let's look at Grue.

-Captured by the Slaughterhouse Nine. Insufficient to second trigger.

-Bonesaw's tender mercies are upcoming. Insufficient to second trigger.

-Bonesaw has spread your nerves all over the room, cut you open to put your organs on grisly display, and generally inflicted a fate worse than death on you. Insufficient to second trigger.

-Taylor walks in, adding agonizing pain because nerves all over the room, and is horrified at what's happened to you. Insufficient to second trigger.

-Bonesaw captures everybody. Insufficient to second trigger.

-Bonesaw effortlessly stops Taylor's weird, half-assed bug control attempt that shouldn't even be possible, proving that your friends are 100% helpless/doomed. Insufficient to second trigger.

-Jack Slash tells Bonesaw she can only take some of the people, and directs Burnscar to kill the others. Insufficient to second trigger.

-Bonesaw starts cutting into Taylor's head. FINALLY second trigger.

This is layers of horror, layers and layers and layers, before Grue finally second triggered, and the layers are made up of "worse than just dying".

Like, yeah, Coil is definitely not a happy camper, but it's probably not second trigger material. It could be first trigger material, maybe... even then, first triggers don't generally occur in "You know, this is kind of horrifying, but I can deal with it" types of situations. They occur in situations people can't cope with. It's difficult to imagine Coil really considering the situation so completely beyond horrifying that he just can't cope. (Admittedly, he might if he didn't have his power -I've personally always assumed part of why second triggers are hard to get is that access to your powers makes it really hard to cross over that threshold of total despair that initiates a first trigger)

Oh, and let's add "Cherish doesn't seem to second trigger in response to her And I Must Scream experience".

Why are you assuming she even had a bomb that small? Remember, she didn't make one specifically for this, she used one she had on hand. Hell, why are you assuming she had a fucking drill? Her tools tend to wind up bomb components, remember? (Granted, the bomb she used is described as 'pill sized,' but A) I've seen some pretty big fucking pills, B) she had to make the hole big enough she could pick up and replace the plug, and C) this is a complete and utter hack-job in the first place.)

EDIT: For clarity's sake, I meant the, er...'operation.'

I've been internally conceptualizing it as small enough to comfortably fit into a closed palm and be hidden, but not much smaller than that.

1) See alert that "Exploding Canon" was updated.
2) Go check it out.
3) Realise that it was not an update, but just another insanely long story related OP post.
4) Feel dissapointment.
5) Read the post anyway.
6) Realise that it was quite entertaning either way.
7) Decide to wait for the next update.
8) Goto 1.

Hey, I'll call that a success.

... but seriously, I'm hoping to get 2.2 up today.
 
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Like, yeah, Coil is definitely not a happy camper, but it's probably not second trigger material. It could be first trigger material, maybe... even then, first triggers don't generally occur in "You know, this is kind of horrifying, but I can deal with it" types of situations. They occur in situations people can't cope with. It's difficult to imagine Coil really considering the situation so completely beyond horrifying that he just can't cope. (Admittedly, he might if he didn't have his power -I've personally always assumed part of why second triggers are hard to get is that access to your powers makes it really hard to cross over that threshold of total despair that initiates a first trigger)
I was adding the trauma and stress from his failed attempts at brain surgery in the alternate timelines to the feeling of doom and lack of control. Remember that Coil is a megalomaniac control freak, feeling powerless as guaranteed death quickly approaches, able only to make futile attempts with essentially zero chance of success (as he might perceive it in the context) is quite likely the worst possible thing that could happen to him, at least so long he doesn't get enough perceivable progress in the escape attempts as he makes them.

Essentially, for Coil, I'd say the worst possible thing would be the lack of power to meaningfully affect his situation. If he ends with such perception in such hopeless situation, but with enough ability to actually make futile attempts to compound the stress, I wouldn't doubt he might second trigger if Cauldron capes turn out to be able to do so.
 
2.2
2.2

I am surprised to discover there's an attached garage or something. A loading dock, maybe? Ugh, I don't know, point is a space for the car to pull into without me walking out into broad daylight (Well, it's dusk, but whatever) from my lair. Excellent, being in costume is not compromising this location. I was worried about that.

The vehicle itself is a minivan. I was expecting a car. No, it's a minivan. There is absolutely no evidence that it has anything to do with the ABB. Even the driver, aside from being Asian, strictly speaking (He looks to me like somebody grabbed an Aryan prettyboy, dyed their hair black, and gave them epicanthic folds, honestly), isn't anybody I'd readily associate with the ABB. Too... nerdy, I guess. No muscle, clothing isn't well-suited to hiding tattoos, he's smiling like he's actually happy, rather than looking angry or whatever, and his clothing is the sort of vaguely middle-class "I don't actually know how to dress well or comfortably" thing you don't usually find on gang members. The only reason I don't double-take is his complete lack of reaction to me in costume. Cementing it is that he doesn't react at all when I tell him, while loading the bomb bags in, that if there's any unusual sources of heat in there we need to keep the bags away from them so they don't kill us. (Well, "Got it boss" is a reaction. Technically)

I get in back with the bombs, laying down on my belly. The windows aren't tinted enough to keep me invisible, this is supposed to be stealthy, so hiding from the windows. The driver takes that in stride too, and simply hops in front, checks that I'm ready/reasonably comfortable (Yeah, basically, even if the armor was clearly not intended to be laid down in) and starts driving off to the meeting point.

I make a pointed effort to not focus on tinkering. This is not the time to get distracted with tinker thoughts. I think about games. That gets me wondering how much Bet parallels my known reality in games. Kyushu really ought to mean a lot of games are radically different or died out, given how many are Japanese or heavily influenced by Japan and Kyushu apparently was a major blow to Japan as a whole, but stuff like Taylor being casually familiar with real game series seems to fly a bit in the face of that. Like, is Starcraft a thing? Is it still South Korea's national sport? Starcraft is more heavily influenced by 40k than any other one thing, but there's enough Japanese influence in there I have to wonder, and who knows what South Korea is like with Endbringers and parahumans and all running around.

For that matter, 40k has enough anime influence, even before they introduced the Tau, that Starcraft bordering into 40k rip-off territory is also having a notable, indirect anime influence. Or maybe Japan has stepped up its game in exporting fiction and so on, with their land devastated? I mean, stuff would still be different... and to be fair, Starcraft came before Kyushu, I'm pretty sure. Actually, what's going on with Earth Bet in terms of presenting aliens and superpowered psychic beings and stuff? The Protectorate seems to be trying to discourage making parahumans seem like ascended, superior beings we should strive to become, so a lot of scifi tropes about aliens ascended to a higher plane of existence etc etc might not be kosher in Bet. Or maybe they're more popular than ever? I doubt the Protectorate can suppress every story utilizing that stuff, and having The Man try can be enough to promote the idea...

So. Hm. Could go either way: could be that deifying superpowered beings in scifi/fantasy is a big cultural no-no, could be that it's as popular as ever. Something to look into when I have some idle time.

Still trying to not think about tinkering. Um. Romance? I've got to wonder how Earth Bet handles romance fiction. I suspect there's a lot more in the way of exploring relationships where one partner has vastly more power -I mean, back on Omicron (Just sticking to that now, why not, it's my head) that stuff was plenty popular, and hey plenty of relationships really are uneven in that way- but it seems like it would be a much more urgent cultural question to Bet than for Omicron. You mishandle that kind of thing, and you've got A Cape Scorned type of shit leveling city blocks. See: Purity in canon, re: Aster's kidnapping. Regular uneven relationships only start destroying cities when one of the people involved is in a position of trust and power, if even then. Or maybe Bet focuses more on getting away from that kind of dynamic in its romance? Focus on two ordinary people who are about equivalent, stay away from cape/normy romance drama? A lot of romance is about escaping reality, rather than dealing with it...

Uh. Nope, still not arrived. Still need distractions from tinker-thoughts. Check: hands are where they belong, not fiddling with anything? Checked, they're good. Good.

Uh, Pokemon? How's Pokemon doing? Did it even happen? Hm. Hard question. Not really one I can answer without poking around -if it did survive, I have to wonder if cape culture intruded. Really, in general, I have to wonder what fantasy and scifi in Earth Bet looks like. How normal is it to project capes or cape-equivalents into such stories? Does scifi take it as a given that capes continue into the future? Are there cape-nerd scifi fans emailing scifi authors who project current parahuman percentages into the future to tell them that's wrong, at the rate things are going we're going to be 90+% parahuman within a century! Or snail-mailing, I guess. Both. Whatever. Canon seems to be operating on the assumption that non-capes don't know anything about parahuman trends, really, but canon also can't seem to quite make up its mind about where parahumans fit into the culture.

Like, video games. If you're into video games, there's tons of stuff to look at. But if you're not into video games, you probably have only a dim awareness that much of anything is going on with them, based primarily on things like seeing them in the electronics section at Walmart. (And it's easy to have no clue that the Xbox has been replaced like twice if you don't keep up with this kind of thing) Worm seems to kind of think parahumans are like that: people who care have this whole hidden world to dig through and learn about and be interested in, and everyone else is sort of vaguely aware that parahumans exist but don't give them a lot of thought beyond that... which is a bit difficult to reconcile with the world structure going on -parahumans are too intrusive on everyday reality, even if there's a culture of trying to be low-key involved. It'd be like having no clue computers exist. Certainly, computer nerds know more about computers and computer culture than your average citizen, but if somebody in 2015 lives in America and knows nothing about computers, it's because they're an Amish recluse or something, not because they haven't been paying specific attention to it. Just having people increasingly using wifi at public libraries etc is going to make it obvious to your average citizen that computers are a thing, a thing that is changing, etc.

So I suspect parahuman presence has influenced fiction in all kinds of subtle ways. Back in Omicron I saw stories making mistakes like implicitly treating 15th century folks as having access to cell phones, in terms of being so used to people being able to get information to other countries in no time flat that they write scenes where you basically have to assume King Arthur's kingdom has a cell phone network for some inexplicable reason. Probably a lot of fiction takes not only capes but the implications of capes for granted. Canon alludes to special Endbringer rules in government -Endbringer funds? Or is that fanon?- and I can easily imagine people writing fantasy wish fulfillment stories that explicitly have no Endbringers and no Endbringer equivalents and then forget that their government/culture has measures in place for disasters in general derived from the existence of Endbringers, and write their fantasy governments as obviously just having an Endbringer fund set aside even though the setting has no reason to have one. It'd be interesting taking in Bet fiction.

For that matter I have to wonder what Bet teen fanfiction looks like. Is their writing more realistic, driven by the need to engage real reality more, since failure to do so can get them killed, even if they're upper-middle-class? Is it less realistic, driven by a desperate need to hide from the horribleness that is the awareness that no matter how secure your life is, no matter how respected your father is, there's Endbringers and the Slaughterhouse Nine and random parahumans running around, ready to ruin it all without so much as a by-your-leave? Is it basically the same level of realism, but with entirely different paradigms? Do people consider it appropriate to argue over "power levels" or have "vs" debates -Worm suggests they think it's appropriate to have vs debates about real capes, so probably- or is that kind of thing considered crass in an environment where real people routinely die in powered fights? Like, getting into an argument over Darth Vader vs Sauron might strike a little too close to home, and go from "idle, interesting conversation" to "That fight literally happened in my backyard and killed my dog you fucking assholes".

I've wondered how much violence in games is, well, meaningful, what it means if it's meaningful. I'm not big on thinking people are sublimating their real life urges as the entire explanation -that's dumb- but if it is part of the explanation, that raises questions about violence in games in Bet. Is it more common, because the world is more dangerous? Less common, because people take out those urges in real life so much more: just trigger, put on a costume, and go beat people up, no need to pretend you're shooting the asshole bullies when you're playing Doom. More common because even super-conservative people's expectations of what is "too violent" have shifted? With the Slaughterhouse Nine running around (etc etc) it's not like games are any worse than what's on the news -which is a common argument people make in Omicron anyway, but a lot of that is at least Off Some Place Else, like wars in Africa being ugly, where the Slaughterhouse Nine are in America itself, operating with impunity- and that's a thought right there. Do people resent their government as a failure, that it can't stop the Slaughterhouse Nine? The Endbringers are at least like roving natural disasters -it's like blaming the president for the fact that tornadoes exist. The Slaughterhouse Nine are people, people the US has failed to stop for twenty years.

That can't be good for taxpayer opinion of The Man.

The driver's phone rings abruptly, he distractedly picks it up, and then passes it to me saying "It's for you, Ma'am."

Uh. Okay. Well, a distraction, that's good. I put the phone up to one ear and say "Yes?"

Oni Lee's voice comes over the phone, less flat than usual: I think he sounds angry, just a little, or maybe very angry but tightly controlled. "He vanished."

Awww. "You lost his trail? Damn."

Oni Lee cuts back in. "I found him. I threw knives at him. He vanished, and they hit a mannequin."

Shit. Trickster. Well. "How recently was this?"

"Less than a minute." Oh! Oh!

"He should still be in the area, he's being helped by a cape, goes by Trickster, can swap the position of two objects, the more similar in mass they are the faster he can do it, but he needs line of sight and objects to swap with. He's not a faster teleporter than you, unless the area has been prepared with his power in mind, and he has to teleport himself and the target separately so you can catch up easy."Oni Lee grunts. I continue. "You still have some time to find the target, but Trickster's part of a team and they're fairly heavy hitters. The team is mercenary, so I'd prefer it if you didn't kill them unnecessarily, but if killing the target demands you kill one of them, I want the target dead. One of them tends to look like some kind of monster, you don't have to hold back against her, she's a projection. Feel free to nuke her." Oni Lee grunts again and hangs up. I pass the phone back to the driver.

Not dead in the water yet. Worried, because the Travelers are heavy hitters, but Calvert hasn't gotten away entirely as yet.

… I feel kind of dumb for not bringing my phone, though. I don't know how to- actually, can I just have the driver call up Oni Lee? Oh, whatever, I don't want to phone up Oni Lee anyway, in case distracting him fucks up him killing Coil.

Uh, where was I?

… somethingsomething Endbringers and popular culture? Actually, there's a question -what effect has the Simurgh's existence had on Judeo-Christian imagery in pop culture? Having the worst Endbringer (No offense) be a blatant angel expy sure changes the context of A: vague "Just trust me" angels that, back in Omicron are supposed to be trustworthy and Good with a capital G and B: angels intended to be surprise! Evil! The former is suddenly very sinister, while the latter is suddenly not really all that shocking -makes me wonder how pre-Endbringer fiction gets interpreted by the youth of today. Hey, there's another thought: how's Romeo and Juliet taken? At the time it was meant to be a tale of two morons who didn't get that this was a terrible plan making everything worse for everyone, and back in modern American Omicron it was generally taken as a tale of ~le sigh~ TWUE WUV...

… completely misunderstanding and in turn misusing star-crossed lovers...

... so it has me wondering how (Modern) Bet Americans take them. Probably some completely different third way, honestly -maybe focusing more on how forces in place before they were born, impossible to negotiate with and otherwise beyond their control are ripping them apart. Like an Endbringer.

Actually, now that I think about it, what about Neon Genes-

"We're here Ma'am." Yes. No more need for distractions, thank god. I was getting twitchy.

Once the SUV has stopped moving I open up the back before the engine is even off, grab a bag and haul it over one shoulder, and climb out. There's a crowd of obvious thugs lurking halfway into an alleyway we're parked next to. Lesse. We're meeting here because the convoy is supposed to pass by in -uh, er, I don't have a watch, shit- whatever, soon-ish, it'll be here, and... I guess this alleyway is convenient or something, I dunno. The thugs snap to and some of them double-take, not sure why. They don't salute me, but they do all make some weird hand/arm motion at me. From what little I know about gangs, probably a respect/greeting thing made specifically for the gang to subtly signal "I'm a part of the gang, you can trust me bro". I note that close to a quarter of the members are actually female. They're also a lot less tryhard than I was expecting. Hm. A difference in how Bet's male/female dynamics have evolved? When anybody can trigger -as far as most people know- I guess maybe you have less of that "Women feeling the need to be more macho than the men in male-dominated fields so nobody will question their presence"?

Or... something to do with Kyushu, maybe? Like, maybe a disproportionate portion of them are Kyushu survivors and everyone knows you don't fuck with Kyushu survivors? Man, I'd love to be able to just... talk to these people, it'd be interesting. No time though.

I point at three random goons ("You, you, and you"), tell them to grab the other three bags in the SUV. While they're doing that, I set down the bag I grabbed and call out "Everybody know what we're here for?" There's a kind of mumbling affirmative. I look up and say, irritably "Specifically?" Less mumbly, variations on free/rescue/release Lung. I nod sharply and say "Better." Then I ask "Alright, who has the most accurate throwing arm here?" A dozen arms snap to point at one guy, looking faintly embarrassed and maybe a little afraid of being singled out. I pull out what I've been calling a welding bomb, gesture for him to come over, and say in a projecting voice "When the first truck is in sight, you're going to toss this at its front or just in front of it, whichever you think you can pull off more readily. That'll screw up the whole convoy, and then we all move in."

He nods, taking the bomb somewhat gingerly. I clarify absently "It's not armed yet. None of them will be until somebody spots the convoy." I don't think he hears me. Regardless, I am so glad I thought of using my kludged transmitter to set them to "armable" vs "not armable" states. I really need to replace it with a less shit transmitter. Something occurs to me. I call out "Hey, estimated time to arrival?" One of the women holds up an arm with a watch on it, taps it, calls out "Should be thirty minutes, ma'am." Awww shit, I'm going to have to distract myself again.

Well, this time I can at least spend that time explaining what any given bomb is. That won't be boring.

I call out "Sharpest eyes, which one?" Two different groups of arms go pointing toward two different people -a bald man whose head is covered in dragon tattoos, with enough muscle I spend a moment reminding myself that Lung has been captured, this isn't him, and a petite older woman. I'm suddenly reminded of some of the memetic badassery of Japanese old ladies. I spend a moment wondering why there's a granny acting as a soldier when she's not a parahuman. Isn't gang warfare a young person's game? Regardless, I say "You two, sentry duty. Mostly I want to know when the convoy is in sight, but if you spot capes or cops, give a shout." They nod and head off to the alleyway's mouth, taking up discreet positions.

All right. Time to explain the bombs and distract myself in the process.

I really hope Oni Lee gets Calvert.

I clip some of the nastier bombs to my costume before I begin the explanations/passing out of bombs. Still trying to decide whether I want to "accidentally" time stop Lung or not, keeping my options open. Problem is, I'm not sure anyone would believe me if I pretend Lung's death/time entrapment is an accident. I wouldn't believe me, though admittedly I know me, but I'm also having difficulty imagining people trusting the Cornell Bomber to be a safe, sane individual. Hell, going by how utterly bonkers Bakuda is in canon, it wouldn't surprise me if word got around of pre-me Bakuda's personality. If so... why would anyone be surprised by chronic backstabbing disorder out of me?

The next twenty minutes (I hope it's twenty minutes) is me walking people through the more common bombs (ie the ones I made more than one copy of), as well as general operation. ("Once I've armed them, you depress the trigger -they're all x-shaped- for two seconds and then throw. It'll explode on impact or after six seconds, whichever comes first. So long as you hold down the trigger that countdown is frozen, though once you let go depressing it again won't re-freeze the timer.") It's only once I'm done that it occurs to me that I only made two bombs that explode into fire (Well, not counting my already-used cauterizer pillbomb) and one that explodes into shrapnel -and even then, the shrapnel is designed to superheat and burn holes into whatever it hits.

… I might be a bit more of an asshole than I thought.

The rest of it is more exotic shit. My longest streak ended up being a dozen "ice bombs" -freeze over things, which is... well, it's not cartoonishly harmless, as freezing the water in the human body actually does really unpleasant things -it's one of the difficulties with cryostasis in real life- but it's less overtly lethal than most of the other options, and doubles as a way to produce a barrier, buying time to retreat. Or otherwise maneuver, whatever. Hey, I like ice bombs, I dunno why. I like wind bombs, but the one wind bomb I made is dumb, all it does is basically scatter dust everywhere, which is just... lame. Hooray, a bomb to scatter paper everywhere. It's not even a non-lethal takedown tool. I actually left it at the workshop, because ugh, that's awful.

There's also a couple of black hole bombs, which I hold onto, a trio of what I've been calling "Stickyfoam" bombs -Outpost 2 was an awesome game- that... well, they don't actually involve buckytubes and I'm 99% confident they're way inferior to Dragon's containment foam (Their foam is melted by ordinary water, for one), but come on, Stickyfoam! I maybe should've made it breathable. Eeeeh.

Gosh, whatever, I explain all this stuff to people. Well, all the stuff I'm actually giving them. I only explain the black hole bombs, out of ones I'm holding on to, specifically because I want them to know they need to brace themselves if I chuck one/if they feel a major suction effect.

Doo doo doo, da da da, Zelda you got an item tune!

Fuck, I'm bored.

Don't tinker don't tinker don't tinkerdon'ttinkerdon'ttinkerdon'ttinkerseriouslydon'ttinker

aaaaaargh

I briefly consider striking up conversation with someone. Then I decide that's a bad idea. I seem to be doing okay at this "I AM BAKUDA YOU WILL OBEY ME" thing so far, I don't need to go fucking it up by trying to be social. Honestly, I'd probably derail the conversation into a rant about some fucking stupid thing in people's poorly designed fictional worlds that makes no goddamn sense and is bad from a story construction design standpoint and uuurrrgggh

Um.

Oh yeah, point being I'd probably totally ruin my reputation as a competent and/or scary leader. Or be so hard to hear mumbling they're just baffled. Or happen to engage the right otaku in conversation, end up with them actually reciprocating the conversation, and have who-knows-what horrible social consequences as a result. Like, I'm a girl now. Is Bet still a place where girls aren't considered to be associated with nerd things? Would I be liable to end up with a stalker otaku getting all excited that his boss is A GURL and also into the same kind of things as him?

Orrrr I could end up being interpreted as being an example of some of the creepier fangirl types out there. That would be bad too.

Fuck, I'm bad at conversations. Back in Omicron I had people wanting to see my ID when I was ordering a pizza, like it's a suspicious activity that only CRIMINAL SCUM would engage in. Which... hm. If people are already inclined to assume I'm a villainous thug, I'm... probably not botching "being Bakuda" too badly?

Yay, silver lining?

Of course, that sort of suggests that, above and beyond whatever reputation Bakuda got before I became her, I'd be liable to put the Fear Of Me into people just by talking to them, in conjunction with my power/being their boss. If people think I've got to be up to something criminal when I'm ordering a goddamn pizza, it's all too easy for me to imagine my underlings being inclined to assume any not-obviously-business-related conversation is proof that I'm intending to torture them for giggles.

sigh

ARE THEY HERE YET?

Glance at posted sentries says no.

I glance around and look at people from behind my mask without moving my head. Most people seem to be relaxed. There's a couple of people smoking a bit away -I scowl, but decide it's not worth making a scene over- and a handful of quiet conversations going on. The exceptions look new to the gang to me. They don't have any visible tattoos, they're younger on average, and they don't move like they have any injuries/old injuries.

After a bit I notice that people are trying to stay out of my direct line of sight without looking like they are. I also catch myself bouncing one leg a little, stop it, and clasp my arms behind my back. I end up rocking in place, back and forth, slowly, because I can't get myself to fully stop the bored bounciness, and it's a decent compromise. I don't want to be tapping my foot. It looks like a very particular form of impatience -the "Why are you assholes making me wait?" sort.

So yeah, people are wary of me.

I wonder how much of that is just "Lung and Oni Lee are scary bosses" and how much of that is "people think Bakuda, specifically, is scary". Man, I wish this was one of those questions you can just ask people. Noooo, if I ask they're going to say "No Ma'am" unless they think I want to hear "Yes Ma'am", and either way it'll have nothing to do with their actual feelings. Uuurgh. SOCIAL STUFF. ALMOST AS BAD AS REAL POLITICS.

I consider making someone give me their phone, call Oni Lee anyway. Then I remember I don't know his number. I didn't even try to memorize it, I just used the contacts list. Though maybe someone knows his cell number anyway? But wait, there's that thing where it's bad for an employer to let their employees see weakness, because... reasons... I dunno why that would be true in office politics, but here it's pretty straightforward: I don't need people thinking I'm a dumbass they can take advantage of, not when there's two dudes flipping knifes for fun because they're bored.

It crosses my mind that none of them are wearing masks. I'm puzzled. Bet has really weird standards about what people hide their identities and what people don't. Gangs normally have plausible deniability -in fact, canon indicates that the Brockton Bay gangs do that too, with Empire Eighty Eight using euphemisms in their tattoos- but if you're hanging out with Bakuda/Lung/Oni Lee, known parahuman(s) of the Azn Bad Boys, people are going to assume you're a member of the ABB. This isn't like real-life gangs, where everybody knows the mafia don is a mafia don but nobody can prove any crimes in a court of law. This is like having a mafia don walk in, say "Hi, I'm Don Mafia, and these are my loyal minions attached to my criminal organization".

Does Bet have laws relating to henching that are weirdly generous? Because otherwise I would expect these people to resent the hell out of their parahuman bosses acting as a flashing neon sign of "Everybody working with me is a criminal". Early canon has some references to "henching" that never really crop up again, I tend to take that as an indication that there was a major concept/tone shift to the setting -early Worm seems to have intended to be a lot more stereotypical of a superhero story, and a bit more lighthearted than it ended up being, the kind of thing where I could almost see Henchco being a part of the setting- but now I have to wonder if it's totally a thing and just not relevant to the story.

Like, Charlotte and Sierra are Skitter's minions in a manner that is surprisingly public at times, but it's in the context of post-Leviathan Brockton Bay. The law never touches them, but it's hard to say whether that's because the "good guys" are too busy dealing with real crises -Battery is pretty explicit that she's not coming down on Skitter like a ton of bricks because there's more important problems to be dealing with- or because there's some weird background bit of Bet culture that gives non-capes leeway for participating in crimes with capes.

I... hm. I could actually see that, now that I really think about it. The Army has rules like "If your boss sleeps with your wife, we're treating it as rape/coercion no matter what the parties involved say" because the Army is constructed with your boss having a lot of power over you, and so there's no way to clearly draw a line and say "past this line it was coercive". Parahumans are taking that principle and twisting it from social power to mechanical power. The law may be designed to be kind to non-capes working under capes under a similar sort of logic -that the implicit threat capes bring to the table just by being a cape might be legally considered a coercive force even if no evidence of strongarming exists.

If nothing else, there's probably lawyers who have built their career on defending "henchmen" with that basic logic, even if it's not considered to be a "real" part of the law.

Huh.

I'm gonna want to look tha-

The older woman sentry calls out "Three dogfood vans, right on time."

Dogfood vans? The PRT's "unmarked vans" are dogfood vans?
 
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I guess maybe you have less of that "Women feeling the need to be more macho than the men in male-dominated fields so nobody will question their presence"?

That, nobody really knows what causes Triggers other than some nasty ass shit, which means being sexist risks someone becoming a Brute with a grudge on you....

I spend a moment wondering why there's a granny acting as a soldier when she's not a parahuman.

Join the Yakuza, they said, only for a week or so, they said, can back out any time, they said.

Problem is, I'm not sure anyone would believe me if I pretend Lung's death/time entrapment is an accident.

Ya know, you didn't really LABEL the bombs, no? Just "accidentally" hand over the wrong one.

The law may be designed to be kind to non-capes working under capes under a similar sort of logic -that the implicit threat capes bring to the table just by being a cape might be legally considered a coercive force even if no evidence of strongarming exists.

Plus, to be fair, the place is sorta resembling a failed state. Few more years....

Dogfood vans? The PRT's "unmarked vans" are dogfood vans?

Makes sense, nobody'd hit dog food vans. Though moving in convoy like that is stupid. The odds of finding 3 vans all holding the same goods are slim. Just have a decoy convoy like that, Lung's in a sewage truck or something on it's own.
 
Uh. Nope, still not arrived. Still need distractions from tinker-thoughts. Check: hands are where they belong, not fiddling with anything? Checked, they're good. Good.

Uh, Pokemon? How's Pokemon doing?

That seems like a really bad choice for distracting yourself from tinker-thoughts, because if I were Bakuda it would immediately make me think about how to make a Poké Ball.
 
Oh my god. 5k of words and we still don't get to see the action, so sad~ :cry:

Oh whininng aside, chapter was.. interesting? I confessed I end up skipping a lot at the start, while I do like the fact that your SI is kind of... rambly and not all there in the head all the time, it just got so boring reading her going on and on and on that I had to skip. On one hand it made your SI more human and I like her more as a character, but on the other hand: just ugh.

I like how Bakuda interacted with the ABB though, especially when I recall how canon went, this just reminds me what an awesome idea you have at writing this SI at all.

Oh, the bit with Coil was interesting too. I didn't expect Oni Lee to catch to him so quickly, by all means I was expecting the reprecussion of the whole Coil incident to resurface much later, so it's a bit of a pleasant surprise to see that trail didn't go completely cold. Though with the Travellers... hmm, now I'm vaguely hoping they'll take Oni-Lee out... but then we'd have the issue of Bakuda actually broke out Lung, and she'll be left to deal with him all herself without at least Oni Lee buffering. Which doesn't feel like it's a good thing.
 
Oh my god. 5k of words and we still don't get to see the action, so sad~ :cry:

Oh whininng aside, chapter was.. interesting? I confessed I end up skipping a lot at the start, while I do like the fact that your SI is kind of... rambly and not all there in the head all the time, it just got so boring reading her going on and on and on that I had to skip. On one hand it made your SI more human and I like her more as a character, but on the other hand: just ugh.
You are not alone there...
 
Your mind works a lot like mine, so I quite enjoyed your trains of thought here.

The driver's phone rings abruptly, he distractedly picks it up, and then passes it to me saying "It's for you, Ma'am." Uh. Okay. Well, a distraction, that's good. I put the phone up to one ear and say "Yes?" Oni Lee's voice comes over the phone, less flat than usual: I think he sounds angry, just a little, or maybe very angry but tightly controlled. "He vanished." Awww. "You lost his trail? Damn." Oni Lee cuts back in. "I found him. I threw knives at him. He vanished, and they hit a mannequin." Shit. Trickster. Well. "How recently was this?" "Less than a minute." Oh! Oh! "He should still be in the area, he's being helped by a cape, goes by Trickster, can swap the position of two objects, the more similar in mass they are the faster he can do it, but he needs line of sight and objects to swap with. He's not a faster teleporter than you, unless the area has been prepared with his power in mind, and he has to teleport himself and the target separately so you can catch up easy." Oni Lee grunts. I continue. "You still have some time to find the target, but Trickster's part of a team and they're fairly heavy hitters. The team is mercenary, so I'd prefer it if you didn't kill them unnecessarily, but if killing the target demands you kill one of them, I want the target dead. One of them tends to look like some kind of monster, you don't have to hold back against her, she's a projection. Feel free to nuke her." Oni Lee grunts again and hangs up. I pass the phone back to the driver.

Every time you have a new speaker, you should make it a new paragraph. It helps readability.

Back in Omicron I had people wanting to see my ID when I was ordering a pizza, like it's a suspicious activity that only CRIMINAL SCUM would engage in.

WHAT THE ACTUAL FLIP. What the heck kind of pizza people did you have? Did you live in a place with lots of drug dealers or something?

Like, Charlotte and Sierra are Skitter's minions in a manner that is surprisingly public at times, but it's in the context of post-Leviathan Brockton Bay. The law never touches them, but it's hard to say whether that's because the "good guys" are too busy dealing with real crises -Battery is pretty explicit that she's not coming down on Skitter like a ton of bricks because there's more important problems to be dealing with- or because there's some weird background bit of Bet culture that gives non-capes leeway for participating in crimes with capes.

I... hm. I could actually see that, now that I really think about it. The Army has rules like "If your boss sleeps with your wife, we're treating it as rape/coercion no matter what the parties involved say" because the Army is constructed with your boss having a lot of power over you, and so there's no way to clearly draw a line and say "past this line it was coercive". Parahumans are taking that principle and twisting it from social power to mechanical power. The law may be designed to be kind to non-capes working under capes under a similar sort of logic -that the implicit threat capes bring to the table just by being a cape might be legally considered a coercive force even if no evidence of strongarming exists.

Innnnnteresting. I didn't actually know that about the Army, but it does seem to make sense, and I could see that being applied to henchmen. Alternatively, the three-strike rule might also apply to gang members?

Join the Yakuza, they said, only for a week or so, they said, can back out any time, they said.

Pffft hahaha!

That seems like a really bad choice for distracting yourself from tinker-thoughts, because if I were Bakuda it would immediately make me think about how to make a Poké Ball.

Those count as traps, right?

...DO EEEEEET!
 
Ya know, you didn't really LABEL the bombs, no? Just "accidentally" hand over the wrong one.

I have doubts an ABB gang member would toss any kind of explosive at Lung, even Ackbar's Completely Safe Child-Friendly Explosive, Bakuda Assures You.

Makes sense, nobody'd hit dog food vans. Though moving in convoy like that is stupid. The odds of finding 3 vans all holding the same goods are slim. Just have a decoy convoy like that, Lung's in a sewage truck or something on it's own.

I've seen with surprising frequency pairs and trios of identical/near-identical vehicles go passing by all across the country. It's unusual, but not super-duper unusual.

That seems like a really bad choice for distracting yourself from tinker-thoughts, because if I were Bakuda it would immediately make me think about how to make a Poké Ball.

Honestly, I tend to not think much about the things, because they're such an arbitrary tool of convenience/not strictly necessary to the functionality of the Pokemon over-setting. They behave in whatever is most convenient to Pokemon logic, regardless of whether it's practical to make it into an internally consistent physical system.

Oh my god. 5k of words and we still don't get to see the action, so sad~ :cry:

Oh whininng aside, chapter was.. interesting? I confessed I end up skipping a lot at the start, while I do like the fact that your SI is kind of... rambly and not all there in the head all the time, it just got so boring reading her going on and on and on that I had to skip. On one hand it made your SI more human and I like her more as a character, but on the other hand: just ugh.

I kind of expected some people would skip it. The whole point is to capture "Oh my fucking god I'm so fucking bored". If you're interested in world-building and all, it can be a treat to read it, but that's more like a bonus.

Also: I'm totes that rambly.

I like how Bakuda interacted with the ABB though, especially when I recall how canon went, this just reminds me what an awesome idea you have at writing this SI at all.

Thanks!

The guy's hamstrung.

Head start of a few hours or not, without a car he ain't getting far enough to escape Oni Lee. Plus, now it's a matter of PRIDE to catch Coil.

I think you're confusing Coil with Bakuda-from-dropped-timeline-from-Coil-Omake.

However, certainly, walking/running is not nearly as effective as cloneporting by line-of-sight.

Every time you have a new speaker, you should make it a new paragraph. It helps readability.

I find it looks clunky and awkward and artificially "lengthens" the chapter, making it seem like there's a lot of substance where there isn't. I prefer paragraphs to be a subject change where possible, or cut them up when they get too long if they linger on a single subject for too long.

WHAT THE ACTUAL FLIP. What the heck kind of pizza people did you have? Did you live in a place with lots of drug dealers or something?

Nope, it's all me. I have gotten this type of response in several cities, across multiple states, in various different kinds of business. Other people go to buy perfectly innocent goods with a debit card -they get smiles and friendly customer service. I go to buy perfectly innocent goods with a debit card -I get suspicious squinting and demands to see my ID. (It's only something like 30% of the time, mind, but that it happens at all is still ridiculous)

I'm pretty sure it has something do with my voice. I look like a horrible thug if I haven't shaved in a while, while I look like an overly tall twelve-year-old if I'm cleanshaven, but I get the "STOP RIGHT THERE, CRIMINAL SCUM!" response either way. In general I get this kind of response only after I've opened my mouth -if I can order without actual speech (Put items on conveyor belt, grunt vaguely at attempts at small talk, swipe card, take bags and leave) I don't get this response. People at grocery stores tend to like me.

I once ran across a thing online -which, unfortunately, I've never been able to find since- that talked about how people have some segment of vocalization where everybody has a different tone, and when you get a group of people together they all automatically shift to one tone -the tone of whoever is considered to be the boss of the group. My subconscious understanding/implementation of Prosody is so broken that it's led me to suspect I utterly fail to do this tone matching thing. Fitting to this is: people in very service-oriented industries (Don't ask me why pizza doesn't count as service-oriented) tend to like me, because I'm polite. (ie I'm not a monstrous asshole like a lot of people are to service industry people) Meanwhile, anybody in any kind of position of authority hates me if I open my mouth -cops will pay me no mind until they're given some reason to talk to me, and then the instant I've said something in response to them it's suddenly time to treat me like a suspected criminal, no matter how thoroughly I commit to being polite, inoffensive, and providing complete answers to their questions.

(If you don't feel like reading the Wikipedia page: Prosody is basically all the vocal stuff people do that conveys irony, sarcasm, focus of a sentence, and a lot of other stuff that doesn't come across half so well in a written format)

Ummm... does she have enough Gym Badges to make Lung obey? If not, that could end very badly for her...

Well, she certainly didn't get the Cornell Badge, and Lung is probably in the upper range of levels, given he can go toe-to-toe with an Endbringer.
 
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