Goddait Akemi! LET US FRIEND YOU! If [REDACTED] was aware of our rolls they would facepalm at our luck. Ok Akemi I get your an Ex assasin, and stealth is probably a thing you were trained at put seriously!? WE were found in a couple of hours! Did we fail stealth class in Assasin academy? Did Akemi pass with flying colors by never showimg up!? *stealth level increases* ....Serenity damn it...
*Eye twitch* *Hisssss* The second we find Akemi, I suggest discretely yanking some of her hairs to make a bloody tracking/GPS/ idfk spell. Flavor it like The dowsimg mechanic from LoZ Skyward Sword. Just beep, beep, beepbeepbeep, as we get closer.
At this rate we will spend half the season to the ENTIRE SEASON lookimg for her while doing KR stuff, umtil we reach end of season 1 and she just appears out of nowhere to stab the boss. We will have a cast of card spirits, allies, rivals, enemies and over tje top explosioms before getting that girl!
*stealth level has increased* REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
[X] Plan Making Preparations for the Future -[X] Find Akemi
-[X] Pay Off A Contact
-[X] Look Into Void Glyph With Kira
-[X] Work At Animate
-[X] Talk with the strange spirits you've met.
-[X] Make sure your internet security is good. (DC 22)
-Work At Animate Animate Akihabara
Monday, February 12, 2080
1:00 PM
Your week starts off how most of your weeks have started off, actually— by busting your ass while working.
Animate is apparently collabing with this one gacha game you haven't heard of. "Litmus Company", apparently?
Either way, any collaboration with any game just means a lot more work for you and the rest of Animate. Especially considering that there'll also be a pretty good sale on the same day.
Hundreds of gacha addicts and F2P players who are now dropping that title stream through your aisle, mostly because they're too lazy to do self-checkout.
Of course, it doesn't bother you. Your hands fly, as you practically throw piece after piece of merch into the scanner.
Holy fuck, look at you go! [IMPRESSIVE]
If anyone could see you right now, they'd say that you're "in the zone."
Ignoring the fact that that commonly misattributed phrase should be used for sports players— check out that Gundam, scan that Outis print, you would agree, as you've been keeping up your best— make sure that Sinclair standee isn't ripped, Rei, customer service— just tell that otaku to talk to Mai, smile this whole time.
Alright, just a bit more, and you'll truly be done…
"Maruki-chan, are you good?"
You blink, as a hand is waved in front of you. It's Arata."
"Seriously, Rei. You've been moving nonstop for hours now. According to Mei, that was one of our biggest events ever, and you crushed it!"
You look at your hands. They still feel like they want to move, and checkout one more item. Then, you look up at the clock.
Animate Akihabara
7:00 PM
Oh damn, your shift's already over?
You start to walk out of the store with Arata, and as you do, you hear a familiar ding from your phone.
Boss (Hidejima)
>You're getting a raise for that. By my calculations, no normal human being should have even survived that.
[2 Income Gained!]
[You are now safe from being fired for what you did last week.]
-Talk with the strange spirits you've met.
Tuesday, February 13, 2080
2:00 PM
After an uneventful day doing… not much, actually, and finishing your shift at Animate, you've just been sitting in your room, scrolling through your feed.
What are you looking at?
You just keep scrolling. "It's nothing, I'm just on X. Or Twitter, as they used to call it."
From across the room, Atry manifests in her spirit form once more, before ghostily (is that even a word?) floating over your shoulder.
"Hmph. Sounds boring. All these stories are clearly fake."
"What, do you have anything better to entertain me with?"
Atry places a hand underneath her chin, and goes into a "thinking" pose. "Well, I could tell you about where I came from."
Now that gets you interested. You immediately sit up. "Ok, that definitely sounds way more interesting."
Atry smiles. Her grin looks… awfully toothy. Atry's Recolllection: Memories of an Empire
Ok, let's do this one last time.
My name was Atry, and for about seven years I was, and I still am, the pilot of the Second Gen Aerial Combat Knight: Gargoyle II.
I lived in one of the top provinces of the Centuri-La Empire. We are a huge nation, thriving off of the political magical power we have. That's because about 100 years ago magical meteors fell from the sky down to earth, and gave us the materials to make an equivalent of what you call "Magic".
However, the meteors spread their magical power indiscriminately. While plenty of good things were born from the magic of the meteors such as "The Spirit of Fire" from whom a lot of our helpful spirits are descended, monsters were born as well.
The shadows of the light that the meteors gave off also absorbed their own magic, and they became shapeshifting monsters called "Shades".
Because of the constant Shade attacks, Centuri-La had to up their military force. That's where me and Gargoyle come in.
Gargoyle is actually an artificial being forged using the meteor material, which was made for flying. Meanwhile, I became a prodigy in air combat. Because of that, once we were assigned to each other and teamed up, we rose through the ranks quickly.
Eventually, we both defended Centuri-La's eastern frontier along with some like minded friends, known as "The Dragon Knight Order Of Centuri-La." I was their commander. Centuri-La at large knew me as "Auxila the Dragonblaze" which is a kickass title if I have to say myself.
But recently, I found myself fighting a really bad Shade. It was… new… and I found that it kept on changing form so much that I couldn't lock on and shoot it down with my missiles.
Eventually, it got a bite in on me and Gargoyle, and I found myself falling through this weird void.
And after some time, I woke up and found you.
That gets you thinking. "…Atry, do you think that those Shades were created by Umbra?"
Once she's finished with her story, Atry shakes her head. "I doubt it. Shades are confirmed by the best scientists in our world to be a naturally occurring phenomena."
"…But I can't deny that there's a possibility that Umbra's powers and the Shades derive from the same source."
-Pay Off A Contact Wednesday, February 14, 2080
8:30 PM
After another hard day of working at Animate, you're back here in your Tokyo apartment.
And you're about to do something you just know you're about to regret.
Atry and Gargoyle (who is out of the giant robot form and seems like a tiny sprite) are floating behind you.
You 100% sure about this?
"Yes, I am, Atry." you groan out, as you start to punch in a number that you really didn't want to ever call again on your phone.
The phone rings once, then twice.
"Hey hey hey there, Rei! Why the hell are you calling me right now."
Jun Akimitsu
(This image was made with this great Picrew by @didimidal!) Your old friend, almost as close to you as Akemi. He is a Broker in the criminal underworld of Japan— meaning that he deals in illicit goods and intel with anybody and everybody. However, after he spent about a million yen scrubbing your identity from the International Assassin's Guild's database, he decided to make a pact of non-contact with you— until now.
"Jun, I got shot, got Rider powers, killed at least six men, and now an organization called Umbra is trying to kill me. Help."
There's an audible silence on the other end of the line. However, after a while, you can hear the clicking of a keyboard. Jun speaks in a tired tone:
"Wire me 50,000 yen from a burner phone and I'll see what I can do."
You do a fist pump. Nice! An Undisclosed Warehouse In Tokyo
11:00 PM
You walk into a dark and abandoned warehouse. The door's unlocked, but you know better than to just walk in. You grab a ladder nearby, before pulling yourself up and through one of the windows.
You drop down the pallets, before landing right behind Jun. He turns around, and even though there's barely any light to see in this warehouse, you can tell that behind his bangs, he looks so tired.
He throws you a phone. "Here. Hide this from the police, but I got you a Dark Web account under the name "Akane Reika". You can also log into it from your computer. Oh, and you can definitely buy almost anything from there, just run it by me first."
You look back up at Jun. "Wow, thanks… but what made you get this generous? The Jun I know would have asked for a least a million more yen before even beginning to consider all this."
Jun just shakes his head. "According to my sources, Umbra is this absolute behemoth of a criminal consortium, even though it's like they just appeared out of nowhere! Just a few months and they'll be on roughly equal footing with the Guild. And if— no, when that happens, we're all cooked. Seared. Charred. Probably deep fried at tha—"
"Jun! Focus."
Jun coughs, and awkwardly readjusts his glasses. "Yeah. As I was meaning to say, if you really are a Kamen Rider now, you're probably the only hope I have to not go broke. Consider this discount a… term of credit for later."
"If you don't want to go bankrupt, you could go legit. Work with me at Animate, man a cashier."
"Hah! Doing that? I might as well try and write a novel for all the money it'll make me. Goodnight, Rei."
"Night, Jun." You turn to walk out of the warehouse. But before you leave, you turn your head back to ask for one more thing.
"Oh, and one more thing, Jun: could you give me some hints towards finding Akemi?" Underworld Heat: (5/100) Almost Completely Unaware of Your Existence
Current Amount Of Capital: 6
Tutorial: Black Market
In the Black Market, you will be able to buy two things: Illegal Goods and Intel. Illegal goods work like Kira and Nakamura's offerings, in that they're free actions where you can spend capital in order to get some goodies. Just like in those two shops, spending more personal with Jun can also give you more features, such as bringing back old offerings.
Intel however, can get you some of the plans for one of the many factions working in the background. Alternatively, you can get some info on specific subjects, such as certain KRs, MGs, or people.
Intel will roll a background Mental roll with advantage for Jun, and he will then relay you the info he found at the beginning of next week.
Be wary however. Buying too many things of either type will increase your Heat, which tracks your chances of being noticed by the criminal world you tried so hard to get away from,
Heat can be decreased by not buying from the Black Market for a week or two.
Hypercharge Fixer Apparently, you've still got a gun? Alright then, this Glyph enhancement might be of interest to you.
-You may use this on any weapon. It'll allow that weapon's special move to be used twice per combat.
-Applying this to a weapon will be available as a free action next week.
burn until unburiable Oh, this spell… this one is super illegal. Like, holy fuck, if the police catch you with this, it's wraps.
-When casted successfully, deals ?d8 (likely 2d8) Fire damage each turn to a single enemy for the rest of the combat, until they're unconscious.
-And then after they're unconscious, until they're dead.
-And then after that, until their bones have turned to ash and they're been an active hazard to everyone in their area.
-Basically, extremely powerful spell that also has a good chance of setting you on fire and/or sending you to jail if you use it at the wrong time.
Recollection Enhancer I heard that you met "Kuro" Kira. Lucky…
Well, if you're trying to make Spells with her help, you've got to try out this thing. Apparently, it can extract even the weirdest of memories.
-One use (but extremely cheap) piece of Magitech.
-Instead of rolling from a predefined table when gathering Memories, I'm going to screenshot ten verbs I found from this word generator, and then give them to you as a memory options.
-Gives you a lot of possible variety when it comes to spells.
QM Notes:
(With the exception of Umbra, all Intel is currently priced at 2 Capital.)
(Umbra is very hard for Jun to figure out at the moment, so he will roll Mental without advantage.)
(If you want to buy multiple Goods or Goods and Intel, put it in a plan, please.)
[ ] Pass on buying something for now. Gargoyle II's Advice: [DO NOT BUY] [>2]
Atry's Advice: You should definitely try and grab some intel on Akemi. I have a feeling that we won't have enough time for dealing with any other threats if we don't find her next week. Author's Note:
Remember how I said this would come out Thursday? Well, I thought I'd write this slower, but as it turns out, having One Winged Angel on loop in the background does a lot to make you write faster.
Anyways, say hello to Jun! I kinda wanted to make him a dark counterpart to Aoi— while she's extremely socially capable but still a civilian, he's an awkward fuck who still has a lot of connections in the underworld.
Please leave a like and comment if you enjoyed, and happy voting, heroes.
How would buying intel on Akemi work? The action did say that it would reduce the DC for the search by 20 for this week and the next week, so would buying more Intel on her reduce the DC futher or is it needed to actually get the reduction?
How would buying intel on Akemi work? The action did say that it would reduce the DC for the search by 20 for this week and the next week, so would buying more Intel on her reduce the DC futher or is it needed to actually get the reduction?
(DEEP BREATH)
BUY
THAT
AKEMI
INTEL!
I am this close to aaaaaaaagh.... ok im good. [X] Pay for Intel about…
-[X] Akemi
Can we stack this? Because really at the rate our rolls go (effimg 18....) we nead the help. If we can stack this it would be a minus 60 (if im getting this right) if not... still want at least 1 intel vote
With how badly we suck at finding her, I wouldn't be surprised if we don't actually find Akemi until like the middle of this quest if our luck stays the same.
Hey there! I'm just here to do my end of the deal drop off a review of the story itself, so you readers of this quest won't be seeing me participate in in it (probably. We'll see how I feel later).
And, for you specifically @MrKermie, before I even start, I just wanna give a disclaimer that I am not that familiar with quests. I have only participated in one, and the rest I've simply read the main story, which aren't many. So any convenentions or such that are normal/accepted in Quests will likely be missed and any criticisms/comments about them should be taken with a giant shaker of salt.
Now with those disclaimers out of the way... -puts on review glasses- It's time for to (poorly attempt to) analyze the quest generators and first story update of "Perhaps For Love, Or Maybe Justice"!
Okay, so first we're gonna get the more..."negative" stuff out of the way, so we can end on a happy note! And first on that lost that is that I like the character creation post as an intro more than the actual first "chapter" of the story as an intro. Why is this "negative"? Well, you see... That world creation intro is not what is posted in the contest thread. What is posted is the first story update, and when I had initially read that, I...quickly decided to skim through the entry. X/ But when I read the very first post ven though as a story the first here, read the rest of the creation sections, and then read thr first proper story update, that's when I was a lot more invested. I don't know for sure it was simply timing on when I read the contest entry version, but I think the reason why I was more interest that way is because, one, as I said, I like the opening lines. They were a fun start, reminding me of main game Pokémon intros and the personality tests in Pokémon Mystery Dungeon, but with a little more self-awareness (aka a hint of genre savvy) and a little more humor as it decribes how the worlds of Magical Girls and Kamen Riders don't (presumably) mix often. And then we get into the mindset and such and so on, getting invested in the character, as well as a little intrigue on this disembodied voice that may or may not play a part later on, and so by the time I reached the story update again, it simply felt like a natural continuation. Again, kind of like with Pokémon and its Mystery Dungeon spin-off. But when it was just the story update, the one shown in the thread...I didn't like it because it was both too abrupt and barebones. The first few lines were just a simple "mc eepy, friend wakes em, they both get movin". You are told you're in Akihabara, but that's just the heading, and not everyone is going to have seen Akihabara, and that's it. And therein lies the reason for my initial neutral feelings/urge to skim came from and why it wasn't the case when I read from the begining of the thread. The details I wanted were from before the story update, and thus when I reached it again, I wasn't as bothered by the lack of description. Not to mention the character creation sections set my expectations on how much description I should expect (ie "oh of course the descriptions are simple. It's the characer creation. Others have to decide all the details" vs "oh it's a story, I'm gonna need (x) amount of description, exposition, characterization, etc etc")
Or it could just be a me thing, who knows. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
Either way, I'm not sure how you could fix that considering that, despite my preference, I can see why you had the first story update as the actual entry in the contest. Story wise, there isn't much going on in the very first creation post, even with the fun intro, while the actual story is in, and starts at, the first story update.
Next, I'm not sure how to feel about the spoilers and stuff. While images I feel like excusing by virtue of knowing the frustration of figuring out how the eff you're supposed describe some more complex things that somebody might never have seen before, like a monster design original to a series (like Pokémon), I'm not as willing for the mechanics explanation in the middle of things. Maybe it's probably fine/more accepted in quests, as again I've only read...very few, but...idk. I feel like those stuff in spoilers could just be put at the end of a post, because it kinda feels clunky like this, being in the middle of the narration (oh and also the lines of showing the rolls too; if this was a story set in a game-world with HUDs and such, I'd roll—heh—with it, but it isn't, so...). It's not like a video that has an OST playing so that your story has a soundtrack. And sure, you can ignore them, but again, as someone more used to simple old stories and fics, they break the flow of the lines and paragraphs.
Speaking of lines and paragraphs. I don't blame you for making it like this, 'cause I didn't notice it until someone pointed it out to me either, but...a lot of the lines could be easily made into paragraphs. Like these:
You look up at your destination, a huge skyscraper painting blue and yellow on the top.
As civilians pass both of you by, you can just barely squint to see the logo. Animate Akihabara.
It's the anime store you work at, constructed 10 years ago in 2070 once the whole excitement about magic had died down. It's apparently two floors bigger than its predecessor, Animate Ikebukuro.
Personally, you don't get the hype, about Magic, that is. That's probably because you were just seven when the Glyphs started appearing, and by that time you had already been focusing on trying to survive in the Assassin's Guild for one year or so.
You look up at your destination, a huge skyscraper painting blue and yellow on the top. As civilians pass both of you by, you can just barely squint to see the logo. Animate Akihabara. It's the anime store you work at, constructed 10 years ago in 2070 once the whole excitement about magic had died down. It's apparently two floors bigger than its predecessor, Animate Ikebukuro. Personally, you don't get the hype, about Magic, that is. That's probably because you were just seven when the Glyphs started appearing, and by that time you had already been focusing on trying to survive in the Assassin's Guild for one year or so.
You just stand there as you're falling into the void and smile. Well, at least I went out protecting my friends. "Looks like you won't get the chance to do so. We'll both be sacrificed, won't we?"
See? Still looks fine, right? Okay, that last edit/quote can be the same as the original version for impact, but that's my point. Before someone pointed it out to me, I did my best to keep things as paragraphs as much as possible so that the single lines would have impact, but I still ended up still ended up splitting it up more often than I thought and lessened the impact/emphasis of the lines I did want to have a big punch, partially because of writing on a phone meaning that paragraphs and lines fill up space differently, and partially from simply being used to seeing the lines breaking up a lot, like what you're doing. Of course, there are times when you want to break form, but when done with purpose. And using the above as an example...I can't see why would you want to emphasize anything but the last quote, and even then you could group "You just stand there as you're falling into the void and smile", "Well, at least I went out protecting my friends", and "'Looks like you won't get the chance to do so. We'll both be sacrificed, won't we?'" together.
Again, don't blame you, and honestly you could also take my approach as basically going extreme in the other direction, but felt like pointing it out 'cause it reminded me of how I wrote before. And again, not all of them I felt like needed to be its own lines, just a noticeable chunk. Some of them felt properly dramatic. Like this:
I assume that's a typo. Is that supposed to be meant?
And with that out of the way...let's finally get to the positive stuff! Er, mostly. That cliffhanger does have me wanting to read the rest of the story thus far...but not enough to do that right now. Maybe later, when there have been more updates. And when I don't have other things I wanna do first. Maybe. (No promises...) Anyways, first off, I really love the concept of this Kamen Rider/Magical Girl fusion. I haven't watched any Magical Girl anime (unless Symphogear counts) and am still pretty much new to Kamen Rider (only have seen a few series), but still, I love it for the same reasons why I love both Pokémon and Digimon: they share central themes yet execute it different, making interactions between them make sense yet interesting to see how they would relate with each other. So I'm happy to see this exist! Next...I am a Persona fan. So the moment I see Tarot, you immediately get brownie points. I don't know what you're doing with them yet and may never will and I'd have to sit down longer and analyze it to figure (hopefully) it out, but I'm happy to see it. I think my favorite part is Rei herself so far. Despite all the hiccups I point out above, I still want to root for her and was basically going "cmon cmon, you can do it, rei! get outta there!" by the end, and again, REALLY wanted to see if she'd be fine because of that dang cliffhanger. So you gotta be doing something right to make me care enough about her in such a short time. I can't tell if it's thie story update/chapter itself or the slowly getting attached to her by reading the creation sections. Either way, again, you must be doing something right. ...or maybe im just easily attached to anyone named rei or maruki or a sucker for former assassins trying to live a happy life (glances at yor forger). That could also be a big factor on why. Who knows? In any case, that's...all I got to say. Sorry if I didn't have to much on good things to say. I'll blame the update being short for that. ahem. Hence why I wanted to end it off on a nice note. I hope that my feedback could help at least somewhat, despite me not exactly really being qualified for it or something like that with my lack of familiarity with Quests. ^^; Good luck in your quest and the contest! I hope your quality continues to improve and your Muse give you inspiration! now fellow writers reading this if you also want a review like this for your story or quest just follow the instructions here because i too am in the contest and bribing others
Hey there! I'm just here to do my end of the deal drop off a review of the story itself, so you readers of this quest won't be seeing me participate in in it (probably. We'll see how I feel later).
And, for you specifically @MrKermie, before I even start, I just wanna give a disclaimer that I am not that familiar with quests. I have only participated in one, and the rest I've simply read the main story, which aren't many. So any convenentions or such that are normal/accepted in Quests will likely be missed and any criticisms/comments about them should be taken with a giant shaker of salt.
Now with those disclaimers out of the way... -puts on review glasses- It's time for to (poorly attempt to) analyze the quest generators and first story update of "Perhaps For Love, Or Maybe Justice"!
Okay, so first we're gonna get the more..."negative" stuff out of the way, so we can end on a happy note! And first on that lost that is that I like the character creation post as an intro more than the actual first "chapter" of the story as an intro. Why is this "negative"? Well, you see... That world creation intro is not what is posted in the contest thread. What is posted is the first story update, and when I had initially read that, I...quickly decided to skim through the entry. X/ But when I read the very first post ven though as a story the first here, read the rest of the creation sections, and then read thr first proper story update, that's when I was a lot more invested. I don't know for sure it was simply timing on when I read the contest entry version, but I think the reason why I was more interest that way is because, one, as I said, I like the opening lines. They were a fun start, reminding me of main game Pokémon intros and the personality tests in Pokémon Mystery Dungeon, but with a little more self-awareness (aka a hint of genre savvy) and a little more humor as it decribes how the worlds of Magical Girls and Kamen Riders don't (presumably) mix often. And then we get into the mindset and such and so on, getting invested in the character, as well as a little intrigue on this disembodied voice that may or may not play a part later on, and so by the time I reached the story update again, it simply felt like a natural continuation. Again, kind of like with Pokémon and its Mystery Dungeon spin-off. But when it was just the story update, the one shown in the thread...I didn't like it because it was both too abrupt and barebones. The first few lines were just a simple "mc eepy, friend wakes em, they both get movin". You are told you're in Akihabara, but that's just the heading, and not everyone is going to have seen Akihabara, and that's it. And therein lies the reason for my initial neutral feelings/urge to skim came from and why it wasn't the case when I read from the begining of the thread. The details I wanted were from before the story update, and thus when I reached it again, I wasn't as bothered by the lack of description. Not to mention the character creation sections set my expectations on how much description I should expect (ie "oh of course the descriptions are simple. It's the characer creation. Others have to decide all the details" vs "oh it's a story, I'm gonna need (x) amount of description, exposition, characterization, etc etc")
Or it could just be a me thing, who knows. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
Either way, I'm not sure how you could fix that considering that, despite my preference, I can see why you had the first story update as the actual entry in the contest. Story wise, there isn't much going on in the very first creation post, even with the fun intro, while the actual story is in, and starts at, the first story update.
Next, I'm not sure how to feel about the spoilers and stuff. While images I feel like excusing by virtue of knowing the frustration of figuring out how the eff you're supposed describe some more complex things that somebody might never have seen before, like a monster design original to a series (like Pokémon), I'm not as willing for the mechanics explanation in the middle of things. Maybe it's probably fine/more accepted in quests, as again I've only read...very few, but...idk. I feel like those stuff in spoilers could just be put at the end of a post, because it kinda feels clunky like this, being in the middle of the narration (oh and also the lines of showing the rolls too; if this was a story set in a game-world with HUDs and such, I'd roll—heh—with it, but it isn't, so...). It's not like a video that has an OST playing so that your story has a soundtrack. And sure, you can ignore them, but again, as someone more used to simple old stories and fics, they break the flow of the lines and paragraphs.
Speaking of lines and paragraphs. I don't blame you for making it like this, 'cause I didn't notice it until someone pointed it out to me either, but...a lot of the lines could be easily made into paragraphs. Like these:
All of these could be easily turned into paragraphs.
See? Still looks fine, right? Okay, that last edit/quote can be the same as the original version for impact, but that's my point. Before someone pointed it out to me, I did my best to keep things as paragraphs as much as possible so that the single lines would have impact, but I still ended up still ended up splitting it up more often than I thought and lessened the impact/emphasis of the lines I did want to have a big punch, partially because of writing on a phone meaning that paragraphs and lines fill up space differently, and partially from simply being used to seeing the lines breaking up a lot, like what you're doing. Of course, there are times when you want to break form, but when done with purpose. And using the above as an example...I can't see why would you want to emphasize anything but the last quote, and even then you could group "You just stand there as you're falling into the void and smile", "Well, at least I went out protecting my friends", and "'Looks like you won't get the chance to do so. We'll both be sacrificed, won't we?'" together.
Again, don't blame you, and honestly you could also take my approach as basically going extreme in the other direction, but felt like pointing it out 'cause it reminded me of how I wrote before. And again, not all of them I felt like needed to be its own lines, just a noticeable chunk. Some of them felt properly dramatic. Like this:
Or, well, it certainly felt properly dramatic to me, at least. Speaking of that.
I assume that's a typo. Is that supposed to be meant?
And with that out of the way...let's finally get to the positive stuff! Er, mostly. That cliffhanger does have me wanting to read the rest of the story thus far...but not enough to do that right now. Maybe later, when there have been more updates. And when I don't have other things I wanna do first. Maybe. (No promises...) Anyways, first off, I really love the concept of this Kamen Rider/Magical Girl fusion. I haven't watched any Magical Girl anime (unless Symphogear counts) and am still pretty much new to Kamen Rider (only have seen a few series), but still, I love it for the same reasons why I love both Pokémon and Digimon: they share central themes yet execute it different, making interactions between them make sense yet interesting to see how they would relate with each other. So I'm happy to see this exist! Next...I am a Persona fan. So the moment I see Tarot, you immediately get brownie points. I don't know what you're doing with them yet and may never will and I'd have to sit down longer and analyze it to figure (hopefully) it out, but I'm happy to see it. I think my favorite part is Rei herself so far. Despite all the hiccups I point out above, I still want to root for her and was basically going "cmon cmon, you can do it, rei! get outta there!" by the end, and again, REALLY wanted to see if she'd be fine because of that dang cliffhanger. So you gotta be doing something right to make me care enough about her in such a short time. I can't tell if it's thie story update/chapter itself or the slowly getting attached to her by reading the creation sections. Either way, again, you must be doing something right. ...or maybe im just easily attached to anyone named rei or maruki or a sucker for former assassins trying to live a happy life (glances at yor forger). That could also be a big factor on why. Who knows? In any case, that's...all I got to say. Sorry if I didn't have to much on good things to say. I'll blame the update being short for that. ahem. Hence why I wanted to end it off on a nice note. I hope that my feedback could help at least somewhat, despite me not exactly really being qualified for it or something like that with my lack of familiarity with Quests. ^^; Good luck in your quest and the contest! I hope your quality continues to improve and your Muse give you inspiration! now fellow writers reading this if you also want a review like this for your story or quest just follow the instructions here because i too am in the contest and bribing others
And yeah, I really wanted to have the character creation thing as part of my summerfest entry, but I couldn't justify it to myself or get under the word limit.
We really shouldn't keep the gun on Akemi, since she can't use it well and we have a gun of our own, we don't need two. Letting her have a better Magical stat or the sword is a better idea, so we really should vote for one of those two.
We really shouldn't keep the gun on Akemi, since she can't use it well and we have a gun of our own, we don't need two. Letting her have a better Magical stat or the sword is a better idea, so we really should vote for one of those two.
I'd rather the magic for versatility and support, but i can at least swap my vote over to swords to tie it up, i suppose, because you're absolutely right.
ahem. Hence why I wanted to end it off on a nice note. I hope that my feedback could help at least somewhat, despite me not exactly really being qualified for it or something like that with my lack of familiarity with Quests. ^^; Good luck in your quest and the contest! I hope your quality continues to improve and your Muse give you inspiration!
