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- Existance
Yay, more accidental destruction!
Well, guess that's one way to look at writing what you know.
Badly.
(that or he's going to have wyvern-sized chocolates custom made . He'll add a bow tie to his standard shirtless get-up, too. Chippendale Lung. Huh. I never thought we'd see the day. )
- Location
- Dagobah
I can see him saying something like:
Lung looked at the girl. "You are a dragon. You are Asian!"
Taylor blinked. "But I'm not Asian."
"I am a dragon. Since you are also a dragon, you are also Asian."
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- West Michigan
Ack uses giant blocks of italics for every POV other than the primary character. It's just part of his style at this point.
OverReactionGuy
Verified Sanity
It indicates a change in the P.O.V.
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- Yes
I tried. Then I unwatched the story.
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- West Michigan
Even though it answered nearly all of your concerns in its first two segments?
- Location
- Australia
... may I ask why?
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- Yes
The police being so certain Taylor had a bomb in her locker broke SoD, given your comments I didn't feel like trying to slog through that to see if it improves.
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- West Michigan
Read the police POV segment. They did their jobs, analyzed the incident scene, and threw out the bomb theory entirely when it failed to stand up to the evidence.
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- Existance
Shush, that's too obvious. It's clearly a Contessa plot. SoD broken.
- Location
- Australia
The police were told by the principal that someone had exploded a bomb in the school. Kind of a serious matter, so they hit that as their first lead. Yes, they were coming at Danny a bit hard, but then, they want to nip this in the bud before any other bombs go off.
As I said; all they know is what they were told. And then they investigated.
Also, yes, the effect in the locker was actually an explosion. A real explosion. Which actually exploded the locker.
Specifically, this:
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Except that it wasn't a prank or terrorist act or even really a bomb. That bomb-tech seems to have clued into the fact that there was a parahuman inside that locker who REALLY wanted to get out.
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- Australia
Or rather, there was something inside that locker. More than one something. None of which had any reason to be in there.
He's got a glimmer of an idea of what actually happened, but has not yet joined the dots. (Once he hears about the dragon flying around, he might just go, "Ooooh." Or maybe not.)
Mandabar
Waifu of choice is Rem. Give that girl some hugs!
- Location
- Florida, USA [Yes. Florida *FacePalm*]
Seems obvious to me. Not the police at fault, it's that damn principal again. I mean if someone calls in a bomb threat, the police have to assume it's genuine. Same thing with someone said a bomb went off. They assume there is one, and if there's one there could be more.
And after they investigate. Voila, they know something is wrong with the initial info.
Makes sense. SOD remains rock steady, and steel reinforced.
And after they investigate. Voila, they know something is wrong with the initial info.
Makes sense. SOD remains rock steady, and steel reinforced.
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As I noted there are any number of reasons for an explosion OTHER than a bomb, some perfectly legal, others not. The police are not going to be asking questions about bomb making materials until:
1)They know it was actually a bomb.
2)They know what kind of bomb.
No, given that they investigated the scene they should know a lot more than what they were told, and even before they investigated they should not have automatically assumed the civilian, untrained and possibly panicking Principal is competent to evaluate the source of the damage.
Okay. In that case the door could not have been embeded in the far wall(the explosion would have originated at the top of the locker), and the explosion would be too directional to be any sort of simple improvised device.
OverReactionGuy
Verified Sanity
Actually the police did their jobs in this chapter. It didn't break my SOD or whatever.
Btw, bomb threats are taken seriously. So when someone in a position of authority, Blackwell, calls one in, the police are legally obligate to assume it was a bomb until they further investigate what happened.
I do not get why that breaks your SOD honestly.
Btw, bomb threats are taken seriously. So when someone in a position of authority, Blackwell, calls one in, the police are legally obligate to assume it was a bomb until they further investigate what happened.
I do not get why that breaks your SOD honestly.
Castle_Bravo
The user formerly known as Nuke_Equestria
don't worry its just ducky or gibbs in disguise
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- Australia
They get there, there's obviously an explosion happened. "Okay, it was a bomb. Let's start asking questions."
As I said; they were told it was a bomb, when they got there it looked like a bomb had gone off, so they assumed for the moment that it was actually a bomb, rather than (say) a water balloon prank gone badly wrong.
The explosion went in all fucking directions. Did you not read the bit about how the floor was damaged, the ceiling was damaged, and the lockers on either side were damaged? The explosion happened at about chest level; a foot or two below the top of the locker. Which blew the locker door across the corridor.
What part of this is hard to understand?
WhoAmEye
Bunker-Dwelling Cryptid
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- Vault Birb
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- She/Her
What the fuck kind of water balloon pranks did you grow up with?!
Angush
I have no idea what I'm doing
- Location
- Australia
Australian ones.
But the BACK of Taylor's locker should've been completely lacking in any sign a bomb went off, since Taylor's body was between it and the explosion