Man, if Taylor gets a nightmare, I hope her bed can handle the weight.
How much does she weigh anyway as a wyvern? Or is it lol!physics as usual with capes.
Only a little bit more than her human weight. Her wings and tail add some mass, but not a huge amount.
So Lung got the QA shard, and the implication is that Taylor got Lung's shard. It doesn't seem to be a straight power swap, as Taylor got a dragon ability but not Lung's ability specifically, but (the cape formerly known as) Lung seems to have some kind of insect related power, going by the name. Which raises the question, what exactly can he do? Did he get Skitter's power, or a variation on it? Or is it actually completely different and just happens to involve insects?
We shall see what we shall see.
Sounds interesting ... do you have the link?
About Amy being jealous. ... Well wyvern!Taylor could always offer to be her flying mount. That'd be cool
Except that, as I keep having to point it, Taylor is the size of a teenage girl. Before her change, Amy is
heavier than her.
It's kinda hilarious to me that you pretty much spelled out what Armsmaster was thinking in bold like you were saying "THIS IS WHAT IS GOING ON IN HIS MIND RIGHT NOW! THERE ARE NO OTHER ALTERNATE INTERPRETATIONS TO GET FROM THIS SO STOP TRYING TO NITPICK EVERYTHING!"
Actually, that's due to the fact that there are only so many ways to differentiate one type of text from another.
When it's Taylor's PoV, I use italics for thought processes, and bold to emphasise words within that thought process.
When it's someone else's PoV, I keep third person, but use italics for everything, and bold for thought processes. When I need to emphasise a word within
that thought process, I take away the italics.
Kinda clumsy, but it's what I've got to work with.
Amy: Good news Taylor, I've figured out a solution. I'll just have to grow you a bit bigger to fit all the new brain mass in...
Taylor: Wait, what now?
Oh, Interesting a new chapter so soon
@Ack! Does this mean we just have to have pages upon pages of people screaming at each other for or against your snip to get you to update?
Did you take my advice to change it from arresting to questioning, or was that something you had already done, and then I suggested it again for some dumb reason? Dur
I believe that I may have followed your suggestion.
Hmm, did you also change it from 'Deadly' force to 'Necessary' force? I like the change.
Well, people were still screaming ...
I liked getting to resee the first part of the last scene again from Armsmaster's viewpoint, quite pointedly it was to stop all the nitpicking, but I still enjoyed it quite a lot.
Heh you noticed too?
Well, it wasn't
quite for that reason, but I'll take serendipity where I can get it
The rest of the chapter was great, especially all the Vicky and Taylor interactions. God I can't wait till Amy pops up.
New update tomorrow?
... nope. Have to wait for it to come up in the voting round.
"with his luck" you are in third person not first here.
Ack, reread the sentence. If it is my luck it should be I wasn't quite sure.
So either "I wasn't quite sure where this 'big red bird' thing would lead to. Probably a Case 53, with my luck."
or "He wasn't quite sure where this 'big red bird' thing would lead to. Probably a Case 53, with his luck." (or, knowing his luck)
Either one can be his internal though processes but you can do it either way, but not both at once. That just is jarring in a single paragraph.
Okay. See the bolding? That's his
internal thought process. The non-bolding? That's referring to his
external thought process. I made a part of it bold to signify the fact that this was his actual thoughts, expressing on the page. The rest is just noting that he had those thoughts, without quoting them directly.
It's the difference between ...
His leg was hurting.
and
Crap, he thought,
my ankle's really killing me.
