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Alectai said:
[X] "I'm not really sure of how it works yet, and I haven't really had a whole lot of time to think about it" You say, a bit sheepish. "There's... Something--it called itself an Exaltation--that was apparently looking for potential heroes, but it kind of saw that I was in a lot of trouble, so it decided to come to me... Which is kind of helpful, as I had kind of stumbled into a big monster fight earlier--I heard screams and thought I might be able to do something to help . It came to me and gave me it's power though, so I managed to beat the big monster before it do too much damage."

You couldn't help but frown. "Turns out it was a demon of some kind, summoned by a guy who wanted to end the world. And it distracted everyone enough that he managed to get away, and the government people here couldn't track him in time. The Exaltation--uh, I just kind of call it my Passenger right now, if it has a name, it hasn't given it to me--mentioned that there was a big disaster probably going to happen soon, which suggests that the guy was going to succeed... So it provided a couple ideas to us, Miki and I put our heads together with some of the people here, and we figured out how to keep him from fully succeeding."

You deflate a bit at that. "I... Couldn't really stop it totally... It was... Really, really big, really... Really strong... But my Passenger helped, Miki and Ran helped, and I gave it everything I could... And the end of the world gave up first. After that, there's a whole lot of strange stuff that I don't really understand yet, and my Passenger hasn't talked to me since the end of it, but I don't think it's completely gone, I can still use some of the power that it gave me if I have to--that's probably why I managed to get so good at cards--a lot of things that used to be hard for me just come naturally I guess--kind of like a permanent Character Transformation almost? Except it's like that Character Transformation is into myself? I think figuring it out's going to take a while, but maybe I'll actually have a while now? I mean, the End of the World didn't happen and while things are a bit different I guess, I still managed to protect all of you, so that's fine, right?"

Trying to point out that for all her precociousness and Hero Power, Amu is an 11 Year Old Girl who is in Way over her head, and is just trying to make sense of everything with her friends and family. An honest approach is probably the best methinks.
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[X] Alectai

Can't really think of anything to add to that. Easy to understand, seems IC, and gets across the fact that the stakes are pretty high. Works for me.
 
Alectai said:
Except it's like that Character Transformation is into myself?
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My only objection would be that Amu doesn't really think of it that way. It's sort of like one, sure, but the effects it's had on her so far are - and remind me if I'm forgetting something:

- Compassion virtue increased to 5. Okay, she hasn't really noticed, but her parents certainly have.

- Various physical boosts. That stuff, she's used to from Ran; it doesn't bother her.

- Lore increased to 5, giving her the equivalent of a high-end university education - plus a few decades' worth of experience - in everything that can conceivably be considered science, math and/or mechanics, not to mention the more mechanical parts of thaumaturgy. Sure, it's slanted towards Creation and a lot of it is unapplicable, plus she hasn't really understood the scope of it yet, but it's a major change.

- An intelligence boost, from three to four dots. She started out smart, sure, but she's now genius-level, and a lot of that is in knowing better ways of thinking. (Which is why it stacks with Miki's boost; Miki is smarter than Amu because she thinks faster.)

This adds up to an enormous change in her experience of life, in a very short time.

Honestly, if you give her three days to rest and recuperate, she's going to utterly freak out. So far she hasn't really had time to think about it, nor the understanding of why it matters - but cognitive science is also part of that Lore package. Miki isn't as bothered; she was used to being smarter than Amu, she still is, and she's always had memories from both sides of that divide. Ran and Su... well, pretty much in the same boat as Amu. Possibly worse, because Amu has occasionally mistaken herself for Miki.

I believe this picture about covers it:
 
Baughn said:
My only objection would be that Amu doesn't really think of it that way. It's sort of like one, sure, but the effects it's had on her so far are - and remind me if I'm forgetting something:

- Compassion virtue increased to 5. Okay, she hasn't really noticed, but her parents certainly have.

- Various physical boosts. That stuff, she's used to from Ran; it doesn't bother her.

- Lore increased to 5, giving her the equivalent of a high-end university education in everything that can conceivably be considered science, math and/or mechanics, not to mention the more mechanical parts of thaumaturgy. Sure, it's slanted towards Creation and a lot of it is unapplicable, plus she hasn't really understood the scope of it yet, but it's a major change.

- An intelligence boost, from three to four dots. She started out smart, sure, but she's now genius-level, and a lot of that is in knowing better ways of thinking. (Which is why it stacks with Miki's boost; Miki is smarter than Amu because she thinks faster.)

This adds up to an enormous change in her experience of life, in a very short time.

Honestly, if you give her three days to rest and recuperate, she's going to utterly freak out. So far she hasn't really had time to think about it, nor the understanding of why it matters - but cognitive science is also part of that Lore package. Miki isn't as bothered; she was used to being smarter than Amu, she still is, and she's always had memories from both sides of that divide. Ran and Su... well, pretty much in the same boat as Amu. Possibly worse, because Amu has occasionally mistaken herself for Miki.

I believe this picture about covers it:
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I protest the inaccuracy of that caption.

Not enough vectors.

Having said that, huh. That's an interesting look at things psychologically speaking. "Becoming more like my Chara as my Chara change too" sound like an analogy that would work from that perspective?
 
Alectai said:
[X] "I'm not really sure of how it works yet, and I haven't really had a whole lot of time to think about it" You say, a bit sheepish. "There's... Something--it called itself an Exaltation--that was apparently looking for potential heroes, but it kind of saw that I was in a lot of trouble, so it decided to come to me... Which is kind of helpful, as I had kind of stumbled into a big monster fight earlier--I heard screams and thought I might be able to do something to help . It came to me and gave me it's power though, so I managed to beat the big monster before it do too much damage."

You couldn't help but frown. "Turns out it was a demon of some kind, summoned by a guy who wanted to end the world. And it distracted everyone enough that he managed to get away, and the government people here couldn't track him in time. The Exaltation--uh, I just kind of call it my Passenger right now, if it has a name, it hasn't given it to me--mentioned that there was a big disaster probably going to happen soon, which suggests that the guy was going to succeed... So it provided a couple ideas to us, Miki and I put our heads together with some of the people here, and we figured out how to keep him from fully succeeding."

You deflate a bit at that. "I... Couldn't really stop it totally... It was... Really, really big, really... Really strong... But my Passenger helped, Miki and Ran helped, and I gave it everything I could... And the end of the world gave up first. After that, there's a whole lot of strange stuff that I don't really understand yet, and my Passenger hasn't talked to me since the end of it, but I don't think it's completely gone, I can still use some of the power that it gave me if I have to--that's probably why I managed to get so good at cards--a lot of things that used to be hard for me just come naturally I guess--kind of like a permanent Character Transformation almost? Except it's like that Character Transformation is into myself? I think figuring it out's going to take a while, but maybe I'll actually have a while now? I mean, the End of the World didn't happen and while things are a bit different I guess, I still managed to protect all of you, so that's fine, right?"

Trying to point out that for all her precociousness and Hero Power, Amu is an 11 Year Old Girl who is in Way over her head, and is just trying to make sense of everything with her friends and family. An honest approach is probably the best methinks.
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I want to lobby to name Exaltation "Ex-kun". Makes it easier to talk about it.
 
I removed the bit you had an objection to Baughn. Aside from that, is it fine?
 
Excellent!

Back to waiting warmly, to gather my power for the next time it's needed.
 
Alectai said:
I'll leave that to Amu.
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She kinda did, it's "Passenger". She'll probably decide it's inconveniently generic at some point, though.

Oh, and Alectai - my explanation, above, wasn't really meant to prevent just a single problematic sentence. It's a significant issue, which has been less apparent only because I didn't fully realise that at the time (and Amu conveniently didn't have time to think it over).
 
Baughn said:
She kinda did, it's "Passenger". She'll probably decide it's inconveniently generic at some point, though.

Oh, and Alectai - my explanation, above, wasn't really meant to prevent just a single problematic sentence. It's a significant issue, which has been less apparent only because I didn't fully realise that at the time (and Amu conveniently didn't have time to think it over).
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Yeah, I'm trying to argue from Amu's perspective, namely, that her level of bullshit hasn't really sunk in yet. Obviously, you're free to adjust the write-in to fit in a bit better :)
 
Easily circumvented by avoiding putting her in situations where freaking out about the realization can come back to bite her in the ass

Best chance for it to sink in is during the next write up, or after dealing with the next crisis
 
Baughn said:
Oh, and Alectai - my explanation, above, wasn't really meant to prevent just a single problematic sentence. It's a significant issue, which has been less apparent only because I didn't fully realise that at the time (and Amu conveniently didn't have time to think it over).
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I'm not sure it need be 'that' big an issue either, not everyone would be equally bothered about such changes. Some might figure it would be some what equivalent (though clearly also not) to them learning it all over a longer period of time. Like having an enormous amount of school time crammed in to a short slice of time. Life changing, certainly, but is it really bad or even a problem. At least, is it one in a rational point of view? Not like one can expect to remain exactly the same after all.
 
[x] Alectai

Don't bother giving much thought as to giving the Shard a nickname yet. I mean, if it were to, say, somehow end up in a mini Amu clone of it's own that'd be one thing; but for the time being it's not important.

And, gonna be honest, not a fan of "Ex-kun". Doesn't really fit with the mental image of a mini-Amu, with blond hair and clad in golden raiment covered in the symbols of the Dawn and the Unconquered Sun.

I'd predict something like "Sunny" in that case.

Which is also awful, but also feels more likely to stick.
 
[X] Alectai
-[X] Do NOT give Exaltation any bullshit nicknames that are uncreative and stupid
 
Gamerex27 said:
Even though the Exaltation doesn't have feelings, I don't think it would like to have that nickname. I'm pretty sure it has too much respect for the Unconquered Sun (and for the dead) to go with that.
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Better than Sunny or Ex-chan, though, wouldn't you say?
 
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