Yet in the shadows, the bitter, jealous brother of king Char, Seph, cursed the day of the princess' birth. Once more, his brother had done something greater than him. Once more, he would receive praise in his place. Yet, a deep void began to seep into the brother's heart on that day, a void that began to fill his soul. That void, which the Founder considered heresy, was obvious to the eyes of the pious. It was the heresy of betrayal.
Meta plot spoiler and a discrete insult to Galia? Take a like!
 
The Elves really don't give a shit as long as the Void is contained.

Really don't.
That is until they find the other void mage (Louise) that you were hiding along with everyone else making their exodus to the desrt.

And I think 'gas mining rights and equipment' is quite far from 'allowing millions of your thousand-year enemies to cross through your lands before settling right beside it".

Not to mention that there's no running away from a global extinction event, which is induced by a massive upheaval of a continent the size of europe floating into the air before slamming back down to the earth.
 
The Elves really don't give a shit as long as the Void is contained.

Really don't.
Read the vol 20 summary Flere posted. The elves have an extremist faction called the Iron Blood Alliance that advocates for the total genocide of Halk humanity.

Furthermore even for the less extreme elves their culture is so speciest against humans that they sent an entire clan of elves into exile because one of them (Tiffania's mother) had a secret romance with a human.

The prejudices are set deep on both sides.
 
In canon, the main deal that Nepthys told Bidashal he could make was this:

"The hundred year old Sahara at the other side, the rights to mining the Wind Stones, and the provision of various techniques and equipments."
Wind Stones were something which made a boat fly in the air - an absolute necessity. The crystallization of the previous residents of the wind. There were lots of them sleeping in the Elf-controlled Sahara.
And then, the technology of the elves who had cleared the Sahara desert and changed it into the place where they live; it far exceeded that of humans.

The Elves really don't give a shit as long as the Void is contained.

Really don't.
Yeah maybe but humanity does, your sister is a void mage, and even that do not care stance is no where near universal.

This sort of thing would need serious diplomacy or an alien invasion like varyag 2.0.
 
So far this story feels like it is still in the prologue stage. Will there be any significant plot events before we reach the canon timeline, or will it just be slice of life until that point?
 
I think that book will be normal, but that he will probably end up writing smut eventually under an alias, because it's Henry. May the Founder have mercy for him, because his mother will not should she find out.
Father has a link with the underground post, is the purveyor of the niche stuff from Germania, and the king is on it too. He's fine as long as he doesn't experiment with writing sexy elves.
 
I think that book will be normal, but that he will probably end up writing smut eventually under an alias, because it's Henry. May the Founder have mercy for him, because his mother will not should she find out.

If by "normal" you mean "will probably be banned in Galia and its author sought out as a subversive printing filthy, filhty truths lies about the glorious and righteous king.

He's turning the Lion King into Hamlet/Macbeth in Galia starring a Lion Tabitha.
 
No, The Lion Princess is going to be a classic children's tale, using animals in the place of people.

The thing is though, do they even know what Lion's are?
 

"The stars fly high in the sky under these brilliant moons of ours, that yet pale to the beauty of your eyes,"
Should've been a Gramont.
and then activated my stealth field of absolute non-existence.
The AT is strong with this one.
This felt like being back in University, being the only one with the galls to reach for the professor and properly do the exercise scribbled on the board.
But Shade, what if you get it wrong?!
You know what, I am not even surprised. Bet you all that the first Gramont's name was Dio and he inducted his descedants into the way of looking and being fabulous!
Not enough posing.
but doesn't actually realize there is grammar involved.
:rolleyes:

:V

It's all in the punctuation and its subtle influence on the reader.

Why won't they realize my genius?

The fact that the first question the Du Tremelle had asked had been about a love potion had already been written off in the back of my head, becoming my warning against accepting any and all gifts from her, her friends, or anyone even remotely linked to her.
Always look at the chef making your food.
It wasn't a flawless plan, but it was the most ideal.

and her faith in her ancestors was strong, for no heresy could worm its way into her heart.
Founder/10, churchbros approve.
Yet in the shadows, the bitter, jealous brother of king Char, Seph, cursed the day of the princess' birth.
My copy of Strunk and White's The Elements of Style says this should be "princess's".
The Elements of Style said:
ELEMENTARY RULES OF USAGE
1. Form the possessive singular of nouns with 's.

Follow this rule whatever the final consonant.

Thus write,
Charles's friend
Burns's poems
the witch's malice
This is the usage of the United States Government Printing Office and of the
Oxford University Press.

Exceptions are the possessives of ancient proper names in -es and -is, the
possessive Jesus', and such forms as for conscience' sake, for righteousness' sake.
But such forms as Achilles' heel, Moses' laws, Isis' temple are commonly replaced
by
the heel of Achilles
the laws of Moses
the temple of Isis
The pronominal possessives hers, its, theirs, yours, and oneself have no apostrophe.

...

What? I don't see what's wrong with having a book about basic grammer! :V
was the heresy of betrayal.

Father has a link with the underground post, is the purveyor of the niche stuff from Germania, and the king is on it too. He's fine as long as he doesn't experiment with writing sexy elves.
Reminds me of that snip about Eldar ears on 1d4chan. :p
 
Get a pen name and find a publisher. Perhaps only contact him through messengers. Then start publishing as much stories from Earth that you can remember and all the smut you desire.

Then laugh when you catch your dad reading porn you wrote.
 
I feel like Henry's adaptation translates much more closely to Reconquista than the situation in Gallia.

While the jealousy fits to a T, Joseph actually is the rightful king of Gallia so the stinger of linking a 'void' to an usurper doesn't quite land. As a means of sending Joseph a meta-knowledge warning message, this story fails by lacking most of the key emotional anchors he might see as relating to his own situation. Its likely just going to be a story about lions to him if he ever reads it.

Meanwhile the lack of obvious character stand-ins means it flops as propaganda for seeding distrust in Joseph's regime. Its simply too broad to apply to any specific royal family, the only direct link to Gallia being Char Lotte Seph and blue eyes.

The character Seph translates far more directly to Cromwell who claims to wield the power of Void in the goal of overthrowing the rightful monarchs of Halkegenia, yet commits heresy such as necromancy in addition to the "heresy of betrayal".
 
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A pen name? I vote for "Charles the Charming". Awesome work so far, Shade. I find it pleasant to wake up to a new chapter every day.
 
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