PSA: DELAY

The update will take a little longer than usual, I forgot to charge my computer today and the file got eaten when it died. Sad, too, because it was practically done. I'll have to rewrite most of it, (the opening bit is from the original concept draft, so that's about 500 words recovered) but I guess it's as good an opportunity as any to encourage anyone who hasn't voted to do so. Votes are always open, so don't be afraid to write one in even after a quiet week.
Note to self, remember to pat back for overcoming irrational fear of communicating failure/setback to audience
EDIT: To answer Nevill's question, your providers are the people who house and feed you. Mary at the Marching Mare, and Naomi at the Synagogue. The other word I wanted to use was "proprietor" but the technical definition of that word implies you're their slave. Technically not inaccurate, as Mary is getting practically free labor off Den and Naomi is a bit of a slave-driver, but I digress.
 
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EDIT: To answer Nevill's question, your providers are the people who house and feed you. Mary at the Marching Mare, and Naomi at the Synagogue. The other word I wanted to use was "proprietor" but the technical definition of that word implies you're their slave. Technically not inaccurate, as Mary is getting practically free labor off Den and Naomi is a bit of a slave-driver, but I digress.
Your Host?
 
Technically, Naomi doesn't host the maidens, the Synagogue does. Naomi just supervises them and distributes food once their chores are done.

It's hard to find terms that would apply equally to both protagonists.

On an unrelated note, I am a bit worried about us neglecting the books, what with the spell research system (that I imagine is there to be used), and with an implication that things are about to get worse. We should probably look into it at least a little today.
 
Books won't be neglected, at least by the characters. If you aren't in control, they have a routine they'll go through that involves some research and skill development. They'll get a smaller amount than they'd get if you controlled them, but it's still something. Researching was always meant to be like DS leveling: very helpful in accessing certain tools and abilites, but you could win without ever touching the system if you played smart and were lucky. It'd be like fighting Gwyn naked, but it's doable.
Or more accurately, Ornstein and Smough with no retries.
 
Act I - 31. Oh, What A Beautiful Morning
THE WRITER'S BLOCK FINALLY LET UP A LITTLE WOO HOO

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[x] Anna

Anna sat in the center of a pool. Blue-green waves lapped gently against her waist, soothing her bare skin. She could feel it push and pull against her. Back and forth, push and pull, push and pull, push and…

Pull.

Down she went, down under the waves and into the deep. Her body shook and twisted in the current, but she made no effort to escape the tumult. Deeper and deeper she was drawn, until all she could see was darkness.

She felt it then. The smooth barrier of lumber. The source of the pull. It called to her, begged her to come over, needed her to. She beat against the wall, struggling to find a crack or weakness and break through. Her lungs began to burn and her arms felt heavy, so heavy, so weak.

Were her hands always this small? Was the water always this hot?

Tiny fingers clawed against the wooden barricade, seeking any notch or lip to grab and pull, anything to open a way out. She could feel the heat behind her, consuming, devouring, burning away the world as it raced towards her. Red light slowly suffused the landscape, bathing the deep in fire.

The water, cool and sweet, wrapped around her as she struggled to escape. It bound to her skin, shifting into a thin layer of translucent cloth. It, too, feared the flames and clung to her like a frightened child.

Her fingers found something. In the poor light, all she saw was a patch of black against the reddish wood, but her fingers felt some kind of cavity. The heat bore down on her as she dug in, seeking any kind purchase. Her thumb pushed against a strange lump, and the wall before her shifted. A square section, twice as tall as her, popped ajar from the rest of the barrier.

She gripped its edge and pulled with all her might. Her arms strained, her feet ached, her lungs and nose burned with sulfur. The inferno closed around her, crackling like laughter as it inched further towards her. It was on her heels when she pulled the doorway open, and a tongue of flame reached for her as she dove through.

There was a feeling like something tearing through her midsection, and she turned as she fell through the doorway. On the other side of the door was a young girl with blue hair, dressed in a simple green dress. She was crying, beating against an invisible wall as the flames slowly ate her body.

Anna reached out towards the girl, but the current pulled again. She struggled against it, pushing towards the girl. Back and forth she went, push and pull, push and pull, push and…

Pull.

Down she went, down from the girl and into the deep. Her body shook and twisted in the current as she struggled to escape its grasp. Deeper and deeper she was drawn, until all she could see was darkness.

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Day 4
Morning


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Your eyes flash open as you jolt awake. You're sweaty, your heart is pounding, and you feel so cold. An unnatural shiver crawls down your spine as you reach out to steady yourself. It's okay, you tell yourself. It's just a dream. Just another crazy, terrible dream. You sigh as you wave your arm a little, searching, scrambling for purchase against the empty air.
You feel an itching sensation in your Seals.
Empty air? Shouldn't you have reached the wall by now?

You twist around to find that, at some point in your sleep, you'd turned around and the wall was on the other side of the bunk. Which left your leaning side hanging over open air.

Thoughts of your nightmare are quickly driven from your mind as you yelp, falling off your perch and crashing to the floor far below in a graceless heap, your legs stretched awkwardly in the air behind you by fabric. A chorus of whines and derisions echo around you, none particularly notable as you groan into the wooden boards.

A stray hand drunkenly grabs at your head, poking your cheeks and inelegantly groping the majority of your face. "Anna," a tired voice calls from your side. "Did you fall again?"

You attempt to turn your head, but the awkward angle prevents you from seeing any more than the small frame of the girl who was unfortunate enough to sleep in the bunk below yours. Her hand gropes your cheeks with a little more purpose, and you hear her click her tongue at you.

"Yeah, yeah," You whisper loudly, struggling against your bedding. It seems your fall managed to tangle it into a tight knot around your legs. "Could you help a little, Caph?"

"One sec" another click of the tongue, and her fingers deftly slipped into the knot, wriggling for a moment. "Almost…"

The knot loosens in an instant, and your lower body drops with a thud against the ground.

"...got it," Caph helpfully proclaims.

You groan in response as you drop your head to the floor with a light thunk. It's too early for this shit. Far too early.

Click. Something pokes your side. "Anna, get up," your bunkmate chides. "You're not easy to walk around like that."

You sigh as you pull your legs under you and stand, grabbing your dislodged bedding as you do so. You toss it onto your mattress and stand to one side. "There, aisle's clear."

Another click. "So it is!" Caph crawls off her bed and faces you. She's quite a bit shorter than you, crown just barely reaching your chin. Her nightwear hangs loosely off her thin and fragile figure, giving her a ghostly look. Short white hair frames her small face and simple smile. Her grey eyes almost look at you, but don't really focus right. She's staring a little to your left. "Thank you."

"It's no problem," you assure, and her head adjusts slightly. "I'm just sorry I woke you up."

She shrugs, eyes still unfocused. "Meh, I can use the extra time to get myself ready for the day. It's always nice to take care of myself, go at my own pace" she walks around you and moves cautiously towards the baths, clicking all the while.

"I- yeah. Okay." You mumble. You mentally slap yourself. I can't believe I made another spectacle of myself.

It wouldn't be so bad if you could keep quiet. The nightmares come and go all the time, but over a decade you've gotten fairly good at making your episodes minimally disruptive to the other girls. Yad-Caph, the girl beneath you, stopped complaining about any noises from your bunk long ago, only every once in a while groaning about how creaky the frame was when you moved.

She was kind enough not to say anything after your worst nights.

You step out into the center of the room, a small walkway that cut between the stacked bunks. You navigate the messy floor with a grace that came with familiarity, stepping around various piles of clothing, literature, and hobby material. Say what they would of you, at least you and Caph kept your floor cleaner than most. It was by necessity, of course, but true nonetheless.

You quickly ready for the day and leave the women's quarters behind. After a minute you find yourself at the dining hall, seated with a plate of bread and eggs. It's nothing special, but it's a hot meal in a mostly quiet room. Few people are up this early, allowing you to eat in peace for once. A few tables down, Caph eats with an older, much groggier woman. The girl laughs as her friend falls into her food, coming up a moment later with an eggy face mask.

You almost move to join them when you're startled by a plate clattering across you. You turn, speaking out of habit, "Sheesh, Miriam, you nearly gave me a hea-"

Vibrant viridian eyes meet your own grey ones. Familiar raven hair peeks from under her headdress. A bandaged hand shakily lets go of her plate, and her other shovels a bit of egg into her mouth. There's a bit of her usual demeanor in her eyes: defiance and a bit of disdain for you, but you can see a hint of something else in her posture from this close. A hint of doubt, of fear.

Lo-Ruhammah swallows and clears her throat. "H-hey Anna," She says it casually, but your name sounds odd in her mouth. Like it's not used to the shape of the word. "You don't mind if I s-sit here, d-do you?"

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[] "Actually, I was just leaving."

[] Do not respond.
-[] Leave
-[] Stay

[] Scream
[x] Internally
[] "Not really…?"
 
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Third person narration caught me by surprise. I don't think there were any chapters written like that apart from the interludes.

Not sure what the nightmares are about. I am not even sure when she got her Taint - could be on the night of the riots when her mother died and she almost got crushed, could be that she always had it, - so I don't know what to make of the dream of escape where she leaves her ten-year-old self behind. One is swallowed by the lightless deep, another incinerated by the incoming fire... however you interpret what either of them means, it does not sound like any one fate is better than the other.

The Seal is normally associated with fire, and the Taint with darkness; but the Labyrinth was also described before as an 'inky blackness'.
"Yeah, yeah," You whisper loudly, struggling against your bedding. It seems your fall managed to tangle it into a tight knot around your legs.
How tall are the bunk beds? I had a flashback to my student days in the dorm, with the beds reaching about one seventy, so I winced a little when she dropped down. But a fall from that height would likely give you more trouble than just tangled limbs.

It took me a while to realise that Yad-Caph is completely blind. She handles it well. Was this the 'necessity' that Anna mentioned?

Clothing, literature, and hobby material strewn around, huh? Definitely feels like an university dorm. I wonder if they get inspections from Sister Naomi.

I also wonder what's involved in becoming a Holy Maiden. We've seen people like Anna and Yad-Caph who probably have nowhere else to go, but it was also implied to be an honor, and I can't imagine Lo-Ru being among them if it were merely charity.

[x] "Actually, I was just leaving."

Den had no prior history with Lo-Ru, so it was easier for him to talk. He only got second-hand experience. Anna, though... not so much.
Saving her was one thing, but there really isn't much for us to talk about as far as Anna is concerned. It may change, but that probably won't happen overnight.
About the only thing I can imagine Anna would be interested in is whether or not she intends to tell the priests about Den.
 
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Lo-Ruhammah
Lo-Ru, dressed as the characters which inspired her.


The Ryuko cosplay looks almost exactly as I intended her to look. Asuka one made me realize Hideaki Anno has odd proportions.
Pretty good for my first try at proper reference drawing. Idk about the hands, I've never done them well but I think these turned out alright.
EDIT: Oh yeah, I've been updating the character sheets recently. Check 'em out if you haven't already, I put in some additional backstory and lore just for the fun of it.
 
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[A]ct I - 32. Survivor's Guilt
Short bc work and delayed bc same. Weekly/biweekly might become the norm for a while. Apologies in advance.

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Day 4
Morning


Your throat freezes shut. Damn it, damn it, damn it. Why is she here? What does she want? Is her posse waiting menacingly behind you to once again put you through an inexplicably cruel torment this morning in some sick attempt to "fix" you? You glance around. They're nowhere to be seen. Are they waiting to jump you elsewhere? Why aren't they here with Lo-Ru…
They're dead.
Oh.
You let them die.
Right.
Don't you feel guilty?
Fingers snap before your eyes, startling you out of your panic. "Hey, I a-asked you a question," an angry mask covers the ravenette's face.
Why don't you feel anything?
"Oh, uh, no," the thoughtless reply escapes your lips before you can stop yourself. "Not at all."

Her shoulders uncoil slightly, tension you hadn't noticed dissipating at your permission. She takes another bite of her eggs, and another, and another. In less than a minute her plate is cleaned. She sets her utensil down with contradictory grace and gently pushes her plate to the side.

You, in contrast, have yet to take your first bite. You lift a piece of bread to your mouth, teeth sinking into it. Despite your fraying nerves, you can't stop yourself from glancing at the woman before you. You've never really seen her in any context outside her tormenting you or getting in trouble for tormenting you. It was surreal to see her in a normal light for once.

Despite her earlier relaxation, you could see a lingering remnant of tension in her frame. It wasn't entirely directed at you, she shook slightly whenever a loud noise echoed through the hall. There was an edge to her, one she hadn't had before. It was almost like she expected to be attacked at any moment.

"Um-"

"Listen," she interrupts you, eyes locking with yours, "I'm going to be blunt. I'm not here to make f-friends. I'm here because I n-need your h-help and you owe me."

"Owe you?" You say, a little incredulous. "Since when do I owe you?"

Her smirk is vicious, "Since I kept you and that m-man out of the briefing."

Well, that would explain why you hadn't been asked to make a statement or anything on it. On the other hand, it made you indebted to Lo-Ruhammah, something you'd rather avoid if you could. "I saved your life," you counter, vainly hoping it'd amount to something.

"You did," she nods, folding her hands in front of her mouth. "Which is why I kept quiet in the first place. You want it to stay that way?" She leans forward conspiratorially, "You have to h-help me with this. U-unless you want me to tell them wh-who that Demon was."

Blackmail. This was a trap. She just wanted you under her thumb, and then she'd never let go. She was merciless, even now.

Her good hand grabs yours, squeezing it tighter than strictly necessary. "Come on, A-Anna," she whispers, a little frantically. Her eyes lock with yours, harsh and angry. "You help me, I keep the truth about their d-d… d-de-dea… in the Incident quiet."

She can't even say the words. Her tone gets an edge and her grip tightens, but neither helps her say it. She sees something in your face and her voice lowers, eyes harsh as she changes tactics. "Or maybe I just tell them you were the Demon. That the little mark on your chest finally b-burst while we were nearby. It's been t-ten years, yeah? No surprise that you finally went b-berserk."

Your eyes widen. "You wouldn't-"

"Damn right I w-would. You melded with him. I could s-see it in your eyes. That means you knew what was g-going on with him, and you did n-nothing to stop it. You l-let them d-die."

"I was paralyzed!" You whisper harshly, not wanting anyone nearby to overhear.

"So? Melding works through a Soulbond. After the Bonding ritual, you can't interrupt that with something like paralysis. You h-had to know what was happening. You had to have l-let him k-k-k..." Her voice is desperate, her face twisted in an almost painful visage. She can barely talk about it at all. She mutters something under her breath.
"You had to. It h-has to be your fault."
"It's nothing bad, what I'm asking" she moves on, the subject of her posse still uncomfortable it seems. "Just a l-little favor, and you're in the clear. We can put this thing beh-hind us. You can continue being the T-tainted Maiden with a spotless record, and I can go b-back t-t-to…" her face slackens, losing much of its earlier heat. "I-I can focus on figuring out what the h-hell I'm going to do now."

You almost pity her for that. Almost. But you know she's just doing it intentionally. She's always been a manipulative bitch. You've fallen for it before, in the early years. She gets your sympathy, and she gets you to do something for her. And then another thing, and then another, and it never stops.
Not always. She was different at first. Before she found it.
And yet, you can feel it, somehow. Deep in your core, the same place you heard Den's voice before he came to your rescue, the same place Lo-Ru burned with that horrific spell, something tells you this is different. That it's real. That, this one time, she's not trying to manipulate you.
Like you're all she has left.
Or, she is, but not to control you. It's almost like she genuinely needs your help. Your help. Whatever she's planning, she can't go to anyone else for it.
She can't. You're all that's left. And it's been so long since she could talk to you normally.
You don't know which to believe.

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Make your choice

[] Accept her terms
[] Something doesn't add up. How serious is she, really? Call her bluff (Spirit LV 3)
[] Reject her request

And then?

[] Questions
-[] The favor
-[] Why you?
-[] Other (Write-in)

[] Leave and talk to Yad-Caph instead
-[] 'bout what?

[] Start working on your chores
-[] by which you mean procrastinate
-[] no seriously

[] Descend the Labyrinth

[] Write-in
 
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[X] Reject her request
[X] Questions
-[X] Why everything. Why even torment you to begin with? Why try to squeeze control out of this? Had she learned nothing?
 
"I'm going to be blunt. I'm not here to make f-friends. I'm here because I n-need your h-help and you owe me."

"Owe you?" You say, a little incredulous. "Since when do I owe you?"

Her smirk is vicious, "Since I kept a lid on what r-really happened that night."
I see. A business transaction. What's the street value of a dead friend nowadays?
"Come on, A-Anna," she whispers, a little frantically. Her eyes lock with yours, harsh and angry. "You help me, I keep your part in their d-d… d-de-dea… in the Incident quiet."
Weeell. Far as I remember, Anna had no part in their deaths, and was in fact being beaten half-conscious by them at the time, which was what prompted Den's rampage and the slip in self-control.

Somehow I doubt Lo-Ru making things public would go well for her either.

It's really manipulative to come to Anna and try to twist her arms by... threatening Den? I don't think this one would harm her in the slightest. You'd be better off making that appeal elsewhere, Lo-Ru.

Not that Den's likely fate is to be taken lightly, but considering their prior history, I doubt Anna would acquiesce to go back under her tormentor's thumb so soon.

[x] Reject her request

[x] Questions
-[x] The favor
--[x] You owe her nothing. She may state what is it she wants, and you might even make a deal once you figure out what you want out of this, but she doesn't get to blackmail you.


I don't think Anna would be her first choice to turn to if Lo-ru had any say in this, so... she doesn't get the advantage in the negotiations. She is going to owe us, not the other way around.

On the other hand... I am curious. I am not against this in principle, it's just I find her terms - and the assumptions in which the offer was made - unacceptable.

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[x] Something doesn't add up. How serious is she, really? Call her bluff (Spirit LV 3)
 
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[x] Reject her request
[x] Questions
-[x] The favor
--[x] You owe her nothing. She may state what is it she wants, and we might even make a deal once we figure out what we want out of this, but she doesn't get to blackmail you.
 
If she accepts - and she looks desperate enough that she might - we may want to think on what we could ask from her that we can't do ourselves. Maybe she has access to the parts of the Synagogue we don't (through her brother?), or maybe she knows something we could make use of? She certainly knows some potent magic at the very least...

Come to think of it, what are Anna's goals? Den came here for a reason, and he had a goal since day 1, while Anna was just kinda... there. Doing chores and living her daily maiden life, until she met Den.

Does she want to learn something? Achieve something? It'd be hard to make the best use of our request to Lo-Ru if we don't have long-term goals that we can work towards.

Edit: her character sheet has this
Goal: Learn the beautiful secrets of Spiritual Magic
Alright, that's something. The readers would probably be interested in finding out why she and Den are soulbound, too.

But somehow I suspect Astaroth would be a better lead for this than a fellow maiden who isn't even Tainted. Her brother might know a thing or two, though...
 
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[x] Reject her request
[x] Questions
-[x] The favor
--[x] You owe her nothing. She may state what is it she wants, and we might even make a deal once we figure out what we want out of this, but she doesn't get to blackmail you.
 
System overhaul happened. Little was related to the present issue, but a few mechanics have shifted. The major one is a complete rework of researching and me making sidequests more obvious by having them be the requirements for stat level-ups (visible on the character sheet).

Which, helpfully, gives Anna and Den a few projects on the side to work towards. Consider these as you formulate a counteroffer.
 
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So after reading Nevill's comments, I have come to a decision. The last update completely failed to get across the idea which I was attempting to portray. There was essentially no choice for Anna except to deny Lo-Ru's request because the reasoning behind the threat was awful, and the unreliable narrator had a horrific grudge that offers no room for sympathy. I sat down for, like, five minutes and realized I had a lot better Lo-Ru reasoning available (because for someone who's supposed to be smart, "it's your fault cause it is" is incredibly OOC for Lo-Ru. She should have reasons she's inclined to blame Anna beyond just "you're my victim." Even if they're ill-informed, emotionally-based reasons) and that Anna was never supposed to be as hateful towards Lo-Ru as she was portrayed.

Also, some freebie responses based upon the arguments you guys made for why Lo-Ru gave an ineffective threat (which she did. I hope the changes fixed that).

I'm very sorry to you all. That was my mistake as a writer, and I should have caught that big of an error in editing. You don't have to change your votes if you're already set, but I do want everyone to have an opportunity to reread the section if they so choose. Please let me know if the change is actually helpful, or if it only made things more confusing. Input like that is hugely important in helping me write better content in the future.

TL;DR rewrote the previous update, please check it on the off-chance it alters your vote. I added lots of fun things
 
[X] Something doesn't add up. How serious is she? (Spirit LV 3)

Well, I'm not really seeing a reason to agree to the deal, if she wants to play chicken with it, I'd take it all the way.
But I'm curious about the added option
 
The last update completely failed to get across the idea which I was attempting to portray.
I've reread it and I didn't find anything much different? I was fairly certain that Lo-Ru is blaming Anna by association, and that line of reasoning was faulty to begin with. The biggest threat she can hang over our head is not our involvement, but Den's.
She sees something in your face and her voice lowers, eyes harsh as she changes tactics. "Or maybe I just tell them you were the Demon. That the little mark on your chest finally b-burst while we were nearby. It's been t-ten years, yeah? No surprise that you finally went b-berserk."
I mean, that just makes her sound stupid. Den was the one who had a difficult Sealing ritual, and filled the purification chamber with blood. Den was the one Anna's soul reacted to. It would be clear for anyone doing even a surface-level questioning that something is very wrong with the boy - even if Anna kept quiet, and even if Lo-Ru managed to conceal the fact how she escaped the Demon if it were Anna... and now that she gave her statement and lied about two dead people, they'd be viewing it with a lot more scrutiny were she to amend it.

So at the core, it remains a threat to expose Den, and the reasoning remains that Lo-Ru is angry about what happened and blames the Taints for it. That's nothing new.
"So? Melding works through a Soulbond. After the Bonding ritual, you can't interrupt that with something like paralysis. You h-had to know what was happening. You had to have l-let him k-k-k..." Her voice is desperate, her face twisted in an almost painful visage. She can barely talk about it at all. She mutters something under her breath.
What's new is this part (laying a personal responsibility for what happened on Anna), and if she thought about it for a second, she would realize that the Soulbond ended the moment the Demon emerged, as by then Anna and the Demon were acting at cross-purposes, hence her saving Lo-Ru. That she chooses to ignore that incovenient bit, bitter as she is, doesn't make her more convincing, or make Anna more sympathetic to her plight.

And yes, it is plain to see that she is desperate. You don't turn to someone you've bullied for ten years if it were not so. You don't turn to someone you blame for the death of your friends and ruining your life if it were not so. But hardship isn't your indult.

I was leaning towards making a deal with her, but I didn't agree with the way she framed the situation. I don't see how the new scene was supposed to change that?

If you didn't frame the choice in the terms of Accept and Reject, mine would be Haggle or something.
 
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I've reread it and I didn't find anything much different? I was fairly certain that Lo-Ru is blaming Anna by association, and that line of reasoning was faulty to begin with.

Okay yeah, on point there. I was not attempting to fix that bit so I'm glad to hear that remained unaffected.
The biggest threat she can hang over our head is not our involvement, but Den's.

This was the bit I was trying to rectify, because one thing I haven't been able to address is why Anna is allowed to be a Maiden despite failing the basic qualifications (which does, in fact, involve Taints and Soulbonds), and how precarious her position is that Lo-Ru's lie would jeopardize it. That needs to change before Act 2 begins.

Because, hoo boy, that's coming soon.
...even if Lo-Ru managed to conceal the fact how she escaped the Demon if it were Anna... and now that she gave her statement and lied about two dead people, they'd be viewing it with a lot more scrutiny were she to amend it.

She essentially told the higher-ups "my friends and I were being delinquents and skipping work when we were attacked by a Demon out of nowhere in the lower levels because they're less crowded and turned out it was a horrible decision and now my friends are dead god why are my friends dead I didn't want them to die I just thought we could fight it off because it didn't seem that dangerous at first why did I let this happen why did this happen to me" followed by a lot of crying and, much later, her saying she ran away like a coward while her friends were getting killed. Since she listed no other witnesses they only have her side to go off (but, you know, it's obvious from the corpses they found that there was a fight, both died from something too big and powerful to be human, and there's evidence of incredibly powerful combat spells being used, which would definitely be used in that sort of fight).

You are correct about Den, and if Lo-Ru were to go through with this then it would not turn out to be as quick and watertight a condemnation as she expects (and would in fact ruin her own reputation in the process). But the mere accusation and circumstantial evidence behind it would ruin Den and Anna's chances of achieving either of their goals the easy way.
What's new is this part (laying a personal responsibility for what happened on Anna), and if she thought about it for a second, she would realize that the Soulbond ended the moment the Demon emerged, as by then Anna and the Demon were acting at cross-purposes, hence her saving Lo-Ru. That she chooses to ignore that incovenient bit, bitter as she is, doesn't make her more convincing, or make Anna more sympathetic to her plight.

Lot's I want to say, but Soulbonds be a spoiler so gotta tread careful. Your analysis of the bond is technically correct and the rest is normal correct (and that does bother me because it means I failed again to make this damn character a sympathetic bitch instead of just a bitch).
And yes, it is plain to see that she is desperate.

I'm glad this is obvious because it should be and it will be until and long after someone starts shipping them.
I was leaning towards making a deal with her, but I didn't agree with the way she framed the situation. I don't see how the new scene was supposed to change that?

If you didn't frame the choice in the terms of Accept and Reject, mine would be Haggle or something.

New inserts were supposed to emphasize how she's kinda nothing without her posse. Or maybe I'm the only one who finds that to make her a pitiable creature. Doesn't matter, I guess, this looks like it'll be a long-term writing goal for me.

Oh, and there is now a third option. To be honest, this was really a vote of "roll over for the Queen" or "stand up to her." "Treat her like an equal" is the third, new option.
 
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Lot's I want to say, but Soulbonds be a spoiler so gotta tread careful.
Not to push you for answers until we work to earn them, but you know what I mean. Probably. Possibly.

The Soulbond as I understand it is an ongoing effect, but the two-people-as-one-with-eyes-glowing-orange had ended once the Demon came out, and the contradictory actions of the halves that made the whole just a few seconds ago reflect this. (Actually, I think it might have ended when they incapacitated Anna, - which would be an important distinction to make if we wanted to understand the internal logic behind the bond - but I am not sure)
I failed again to make this damn character a sympathetic bitch instead of just a bitch
Hey, I still kinda like her (but then again, I like a lot of characters that can rightfully be considered assholes).

But Anna doesn't. And she wasn't present for Father Loamni interlude which is where a lot of my appreciation for Lo-Ru is coming from, so...
I haven't been able to address is why Anna is allowed to be a Maiden despite failing the basic qualifications (which does, in fact, involve Taints and Soulbonds), and how precarious her position is that Lo-Ru's lie would jeopardize it.
...huh. I kinda thought that she is working off her debt to the Church. As in, the Church provided shelter, food and education for her, and it was in turn expected that she'd be fulfilling the duties of a Holy Maiden.

I thought she was like a patient in a hospital that assists the staff in exchange for regular treatment. I was not aware she should have qualifications for it; rather, I thought being a Taint that caught Father Absalom's attention was her qualification. I mean, he couldn't have thrown her out in the streets after she lost her home and family, now could he?

Oh, and there is now a third option.
I don't understand it. Accept/Reject are actions in regards to the offer being made.
The "How serious is she?" is a question that doesn't clarify our stance in the slightest... :eyebrow:
 
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