In The Grimdark of Fanfiction -40k


*SAD/ANGRY TECHPRIEST NOISES INTESNIFY*

I was just about to talk about this. Ninjad.
The video is 30 minutes long, so I will paraphrase.

In recent weeks, Games Workshop, the the company that owns W40K, has become increasingly hostile to fan animations. As such, the creators of If The Emperor had a Text To Speech device have decided to stop producing it until GW stops being hostile. They ask that all TTS fans don't attack Games Workshop employees, but keep their protests to criticizing the company's practice's.

Also, they will have started looking for fandoms where the owner actively supports fanworks, and the channel will start making content for those fandoms. For as much as this announcement sucks, I am excited to see what Bruva Alfasuba makes next.
 
I have an idea that I have been mulling over recently. Inspired in part by HBO's Bamd of Brothers and The Pacific, and in part from listening to the audiobook of Eugine Sledges With the Old Breed: At Pelelu and Okinawa.

What I have in mind is a story written as a memoir by an imperial guardsmen, giving a firsthand account of the experience of fighting on the ground in the 41st millennium. One without any glamour or frills, but a frank look at the guardsmans life on and of the battlefield.

You know one thing you never see addressed: camp followers. It's only Gaunts Ghosts that acknowledges that such exist and I really wish more works would include those.
 
So here is a first sample of my Guardsmens memoir idea, written to convey my intended style. Its styalisticly modelled after With the Old Breed, by World War 2 Pacific theatre veteran Eugene Sledge, as a veteran recollecting their experience in war. Also when you see the term "hedgerows" use, think the Bocage of Normandy. No character introductions or such, as this is intended to take place in the action.

Content Warning: There is a part that might upset people after the line "Skelan! Put him out of his misery!" I hope the way i engage with what happens passes Sufficient Velocities muster, but I am putting the warning up just in case.

A Leap of Faith

Jumping unto the Hellstorm of the Kastelon Campaigns
By Merudet ver Melliur
Chapter ??: Assault on Bargelud

It took us about 2 hours to make our way to our assigned bridge, and its surrounding town of Bargelud. There hanged an excited yet nervous tension above the platoon, as more so than the spontaneous encounters with the secessionist's militia, this would out first proper action. Our excitement for this encounter was tempered by our need to arrive unnoticed by the enemy, and while the hedgerows that crisscrossed over the land made for excellent concealment for us, it meant the same for our opponents. By the Emperors fortune we would arrive unmolested to Bargelud's outskirts, and we all took cover behind the hedgerow closest to the town. My squad took the furthest left of the line, closest to the river. As we waited for the next order, I noticed Lieutenant Sylwin observing Bargelud, after which she ordered the vox-man up. I deduced afterwards that she was conversing with lieutenant Ver Alkeyon, who was leading his own force to take the other end of the bridge.

After hanging up the vox, Sylwin moved up and down the line, instructing each squad and heavy weapon team on their task in the coming assault. When she reached us ,she told us the following;
"See that checkpoint at the bridge," she said as she pointed at it, now becoming visible in the early dawn. "They might have rigged the bridge to blow, and that's a prime spot for the detonator. Take it or destroy it, no matter what."

The plan was to begin the assault at the suns first rays, which would be shining at our backs, and into the eyes of the secessionists. We would throw smoke grenades, which would be followed by specialist Vexon launching a missile at the top floor of the nearest building, which Sylwin had identified as a heavy stubber position. My squad had one of our own heavy stubber teams assigned to us, as another building close to the checkpoint was thought to make a good vantage point for them.
The next half-hour we spent waiting for the attack to begin was one of the most agonizing stretches of time I have ever experienced. We had to avoid detection, so there was not much for us to do. Even dozing off was out of question because we needed to be ready in case the enemy found us early. My squad mate Raken busied himself by constantly checking his lascarbine clip and the drum of his grenade launcher while Leryn whispered the chants of accuracy to her lasrifle. After checking over my lasrifle for the third time I spent my time using my bayonet to clear dirt and mud off my boots. An utterly futile endeavor in the field, but He on Terra despises idle hands.

When we were two minutes away from the appointed hour, the instructions went down the line to conduct final checks. With the sunrise at our back we made ready to spring up over the lip of the row. Members of the platoon pulled out smokers, and I heard Vexons assistant Kaisyn load a rocket into their launcher. What happened next occurred much faster then you might read it. At the appointed signal, each squad across the line threw smokers into our line of advance. Seconds after they popped I heard that signature rush of the rocket firing, and saw the second floor of the building go up in dust and fragments. I swear I saw chunks of the unlucky bustards inside launch into the open.

"ADVANCE! ADVANCE!" The shouts of Sylwin and my sergeant gave me no time to contemplate our enemies end. Save for out other stubber team spreading fire onto potential hiding places, we rose and ascended over the rows lip and through the brush near as one. With no thought other than getting into the town, we ran like the Emperors messengers. The whole dash is hazy in my memory, even moments after. My singular desire was moving forward; no thought was given to any other matter; even to the sporadic return fire and the flow of time. Once I noticed I was approaching the buildings wall through the smokescreen I had to will myself to slow down, hitting it with a slight bump. Raken was not so aware and ran straight into it, though I was not in the headset to laugh at his misfortune. As the squad stacked up against the wall I lifted him of the ground.
"Was he hit?!" barked sergeant Caloun. "No! He hit the wall!" I replied over the las and autogun fire that had increased in frequency by this point. Lucky for Raken he would only be dazed for a few seconds, his helmet and flak saving him from anything worse then a few bruises later. Once we were all up against the wall, we implemented the clearing procedure that was drilled into us during training. Between Leryn and me was a window, and on the sergeants command I pulled out a grenade and motioned to her.

On Caloun's mark Leryn smashed a windowpane with her rifle butt after which I tossed my grenade in. The same was being done with the door behind me and another window further back, and once we heard the grenades go off, everyone who could flashed lasfire into their opening. There was no one in Leryn and my window, but once we filled through the door I saw four downed secessionists, one of whom I noticed was moaning in pain on the floor. Sergeant checked them over, revealing the rebel to have been a youth perhaps a year or two younger then the regiment average. He looked to me to have taken a severe amount of shrapnel to his mid-section, and his struggled breath made it sound like he was not long for the world. Caloun certainly thought so.
"Skelan! Put him out of his misery!" She simply nodded, and moved to stand to the left of the boy, then took aim. And with one flash to the temple, the young mans war was over. To where his soul went, I do not know.

The urgency of the situation meant I could not think of it in the moment, but that execution, brief as it was, has never faded from my memory. So often the projector vids, vox plays, operas and other entertainment do their utmost ensure no ambiguity to such executions. The evil heretic is always defiant; cursing the Imperium and its servants with his or her last moments before the hero righteously ends the villains' life, to the swell of hymns extolling the Imperium's virtues. All I saw in front of me was a youth on the cusp of adulthood struggling for a few more breaths of life, and it ended with no fanfare. I have no idea what Skelan felt or thought of it. She was one to keep things locked in her heart. I never herd of her killing anyone before this, which if true would make a dying, helpless enemy her first kill. Weather she feels guilt for cutting short the life of one who might repent, or embarrassment for ending someone who could not shoot back is a secret she will carry to the Emperors embrace. And it fell to her only because of the sergeant's whim. I could have been the one ordered to carry it out, and it would have been me those fading eyes would have stared up, the last sight that would stay with him to his judgment.

The word "intimacy" is used often with an overtone of warmth, comfort and desire though closeness. It is also the word I would use to describe an execution conducted in such a manner, with none of warmth.
 
So here is a first sample of my Guardsmens memoir idea, written to convey my intended style. Its styalisticly modelled after With the Old Breed, by World War 2 Pacific theatre veteran Eugene Sledge, as a veteran recollecting their experience in war. Also when you see the term "hedgerows" use, think the Bocage of Normandy. No character introductions or such, as this is intended to take place in the action.
This story excerpt is really well done.

I actually planned on writing a WH40K fanfic myself, but dropped it after the GW debacle, but seeing this may just encourage me to finish up the bios and write it.
 
So I was discussing the Lost Primarchs and the Rangdan Xenocides over on discord, and it ballooned into hacking together a war story where the Lost Primarchs are sent to deal with the Rangdan encroaching on Imperium territory, and slowly losing faith with the Imperium and going rogue to pursue their own ambitions. Since there's little to no information about that period, I decided to write all of it down here to get some feedback.

The Rangdan

The Rangdan appear to be a viscous alien empire who probably enjoyed a cheeky bit of slaving on the side. Probably they eat humans, and are either allied or slaves under the Slaugh. So, I decided to make them into a multi-racial coalition of space pirates who were able to band together in the little-c chaos of the Dark Ages and carve out a fairly beefy empire in the Galactic North and East. They are bellicose, violent, and deeply interested in asserting dominance over the people in the gravity wells, seeing them as inferior because when your national history largely consists of plundering planetsides for loot you tend to shit on those losers. Revaunchist, imperialist, and utterly dominant via their capable FTL engines equipped with advanced anti-Warp fields, they're able to strike deep into any enemy star-nation they find, often opening their invasions with mass abducting civilians from soft targets to convert into Strogg-esque war thralls to throw back at them. These conquests feed the Rangdan Orbitals, empowers leaders that want to go out and invade others for more wealth, etc, etc, etc.

Crucially, they are not subverted by Chaos, society-wise. They worked to be a terrible, jackbooted engine of conquest and slavery, thank you very much! Their alliance with the Slaugh allowed them to leapfrog their neighbors in terms of military technology, and they were lucky enough to find multiple DAoT STCs early on in their raids. Because of this, they never needed to bother with Warp sorceries, and when their biggest enemies were the Dark Eldars, playing on the same field as them is a pretty bad idea, especially when they could throw down a null-field and troll the Dark Eldar that way.

Still, Rangdan high society is a boiling pot of ambition, bloodthirst, casual decadence and generates a healthy amount of despair. Chaos infestations do happen, and the Rangdan security state is largely built to contain Chaos. If an admiral murks another admiral, then the first admiral should have paid for better security. Sucks to be them. But if an admiral murks an admiral and leaves an eight pointed start somewhere, the Rangdan security state leaps on them, electrocruiciates them, and uses that as an excuse to why they should be funded even more at the next kurultai.

Primarch 11 and Primarch 2

Primarchs 11 and 2 are the real fucking weirdos. One of them is a primarch pariah null, which 0 of the other 18 primarchs like, because most primarchs are some form of psyker, conscious or unconscious. 2 is an anti-humanist philosopher and poorly closeted AI enthusiast, and decries the Imperial Truth as a waste of resources, because it clings too closely to the rapidly obsoleting human form, and AI are only dangerous if you fuck up, so don't fuck up, fuckups.

11 spends most of his time setting up the security apparatus on Terra and only occasionally goes out to do some peacekeeping and anti-warp operations. He was built to do that, since an internal security guy that couldn't be touched by the Ruinous Powers is incredibly useful if one of your demigod sons goes off the fucking rez. 12, because of what he would probably do if you left him alone with the Mechanicus for two (2) seconds, is packed off to command fleets in one of ten thousand conquests to keep his mind busy. He does this pretty well, but often goes off to build neat gubbins with the increasingly rogue Mechanicum complement to his fleets.

The Wild Card In the Xenocides

Okay, so, what does a largely warp-tech devoid empire, two warp-phobic primarchs, and a xenocidal total war have to do with each other?

Well, who would be interested in seeing two empires, both deeply apathetic to it and it's continued existence, locked in a total war? Mutual annihilations or the destruction of either the Imperium or the Rangdan? Ya boi, Chaos.

It was likely that the Rangdan and the Imperium would have fought. Both are deeply racist and chauvinistic societies. Both see the Other only as a threat or a bag of goodies to plunder. But, if Chaos can engineer a total war, one so ruinous that Chaos could swoop in and defeat whoever the winner is, then that would be better. So the initial probing skirmishes are mixed in with particularly cruel and frankly gratuitous attacks that bear the smell of warp technology. The Rangdan, knowing the Imperium employs psykers from fleeing alien confederates, deploys a fleet headed by their greatest commanders Ridley and Mother Brain R'h'idly and Maternum Cortex. The Imperium, knowing that the Xeno frequently traffics with Chaos, deploys a fleet headed by the greatest anti-warp specialists, Primarchs 11 and 2.

Scene set.
 
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I would be interested in reading it like a lost historical account of how two rival empires and a malevolent third party orchestrated a galaxy wide war and what that exactly entails. It would even show that by losing those two primarchs the Imperium loses its asset of Nulls who could stop Chaos Taint and Technology which leaves the Imperium vulnerable to empires perfectly happy to outgrow them eventually.
 
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I like it, I particularly like the idea of a Blank Primarch, honestly it kinda weirds me out that none of the existing ones fill the role.

Would be all manners of fun during conferences with psyckers present.

Would probably go very well along with Magnus :V

Or the Emperor :o

Edit: or perhaps not?

Both the Emperor and Magnus could presumably move unhindered and freely around the Sisters of Silence.

Dem plot holes...
 
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Would be all manners of fun during conferences with psyckers present.

Would probably go very well along with Magnus :V

Or the Emperor :o

Edit: or perhaps not?

Both the Emperor and Magnus could presumably move unhindered and freely around the Sisters of Silence.

Dem plot holes...

Pariahs aren't a magic bullet, they can be overwhelmed by more powerful psychic forces. For e.g., in Hereticus, when Eisenhorn tries having his Pariah associate's Pariah-ness projected into the mind-impulse circuitry of a Chaos Titan to frazzle it, it annoys it - for all of two seconds - and has significantly worse effects on Eisenhorn and companions.
 
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Pariahs aren't a magic bullet, they can be overwhelmed by more power psychic forces. For e.g., in Hereticus, when Eisenhorn tries having his Pariah associate's Pariah-ness projected into the mind-impulse circuitry of a Chaos Titan to frazzle it, it annoys it - for all of two seconds - and has significantly worse effects on Eisenhorn and companions.

Ah when we discuss blanks my mind always strays to Jurgen that is treated like a magic bullet in many of the Cain novels.

To be fair though I don't remember him encountering anything nearly as powerful as the Emps or Magnus.

Regular daemons or Chaos Chosen yes.

Daemon Princes or outright living gods no.
 
Ah when we discuss blanks my mind always strays to Jurgen that is treated like a magic bullet in many of the Cain novels.

To be fair though I don't remember him encountering anything nearly as powerful as the Emps or Magnus.

Regular daemons or Chaos Chosen yes.

Daemon Princes or outright living gods no.

Didn't they encounter a Daemon Prince of Slanessh? Jurgen got close and meltad it to death.
 
I like it, I particularly like the idea of a Blank Primarch, honestly it kinda weirds me out that none of the existing ones fill the role.
My headcanon is that Dorn is the closest thing we'd get to a blank primarch. Apart from fitting with both his standoffish nature and absolute commitment to truth, there's...I can't find it right now, dammit, there's someone who did an analysis of Praetorian of Dorn or the Siege of Terra books I can't remember which, and it seems like the implication that Dorn's ability as a primarch is to see through the bullshit of warp sorcery and obfuscation to see things as they really are, which is pretty much blankness by another route.

Personally I don't like how there's not a single Doctor Healer Primarch. Why not have a role that is dedicated to caring for others?
Sanguinius would be an excellent fit for this, he's about 80% of the way there with his concerns for his and his Legion's blood and nature, and he's extremely protective by nature already. If there was ever one primarch who would squeal "just this once everybody lives!" it's easy to imagine it from him.
 
Corax is the medical adjacent Primarch.

Raptor project, remember?

Not one Primarch is actually mono role despite them having primary roles.

Besides Angron but that's because he's a malfunctioning product.
 
I believe I have figured the secret behind the best Warhammer 40k stories. If you want to write a story, then begin by reading fiction that is not Warhammer 40k. Do you know what Ciphas Cain and Gaunts Ghosts are at their core? One is Horatio Hornblower, the other is Sharpe, both reformatted to fit into the 40k setting.

Find something outside the setting, military in nature based on history, and you will have something distinctive from the Primarch fixation the fanfiction scene is infested by. Either fiction or non-fiction can provide potential inspiration to build parts of the setting outside of the high-level stuff the official material and fanworks are inundated with, and provide thematic inspiration to give bones to a story.
 
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