I guess that there was enough confusion there for the other two to not notice their friend wasn't actually a human.

A very interesting battle, and a nice way of showing Astra how another group of pokemon deals with interacting with humans.
I wonder what she would have learned if she had got a chance to talk with those workers about how they normally interacted with those pokemon.
 
Thanks for the update!

Unfortunate as it it, this is looking like more confirmation that Astra's hefty dose of trauma about her own abilities from that whole "Bruise The Fabric Of Reality" incident is going to be manifesting in a way that'll drastically affect how she battles. Sure, she already had plenty of reason to hide them and keep her identity secret, but recently it seems like she's not even letting herself consider using them. There were a whole bunch of places where I was convinced "Ah, so at this point she's going to have to mentally pull that grunt away and worry about the questions later- oh", or "So is she going to teleport over there and help out directly? At this point I think she's the only one who can still move fast enough to save- oh", but obviously those never happened against another pokemon.

I think it may also be exaggerated by how extensively she's slotted herself into the role of a Trainer: Trainers don't have powers, they have to use their pokemon's powers. Therefore, her first response can never be her own powers. The loophole to this, as we saw with the telepathic spike, is that she mostly only falls into this mindset during an actual battle. Everywhere else, all she has to overcome is the... oh yeah, the massive trauma that's there too.

...It's going to be a long time before Astra starts working on more subtle tricks beyond the bare necessities, huh?
 
The exploud did nothing wrong. I feel bad for it, honestly. Will it lose confidence in itself and its ability to defend its family? What will happen to the Whismur colony? Inquiring minds want to know.

Also, Dermonster, have I ever told you that your user profile looks like a Cacturne?
 
Heh, she was yelling out "Ralts!" at one point in that battle. You can tell because the sound of her speech echoed off the walls; which means it was an actual sound instead of a psychic mind-speak thing. On top of that her illusion also dropped, and right after the "Ralts!" thing we got this line.
Brendan stared at Astra, wide-eyed, then glared at Exploud with grit teeth.
There's no way Brendan doesn't know, even if he doesn't necessarily understand.

I like how subtle it was though. I feel like I'm the only one who noticed the foreshadowing and stuff? I love it. :D
 
Heh, she was yelling out "Ralts!" at one point in that battle. You can tell because the sound of her speech echoed off the walls; which means it was an actual sound instead of a psychic mind-speak thing. On top of that her illusion also dropped, and right after the "Ralts!" thing we got this line.

There's no way Brendan doesn't know, even if he doesn't necessarily understand.

I like how subtle it was though. I feel like I'm the only one who noticed the foreshadowing and stuff? I love it. :D

Wait, she did what?

*looks over the text*

[Closes eyes. Rubs forhead.]

This is what I get for writing everything in sentence sized chunks at three in the morning over the course of half a year. I forget that Astras voice isn't subject to accoustics.
 
Heh, she was yelling out "Ralts!" at one point in that battle. You can tell because the sound of her speech echoed off the walls; which means it was an actual sound instead of a psychic mind-speak thing. On top of that her illusion also dropped, and right after the "Ralts!" thing we got this line.

There's no way Brendan doesn't know, even if he doesn't necessarily understand.

I like how subtle it was though. I feel like I'm the only one who noticed the foreshadowing and stuff? I love it. :D
It would've been "Kirlia!" or something after the evolution, but yeah, good catch, even if it turns out that was an author error.
 
This is what I get for writing everything in sentence sized chunks at three in the morning over the course of half a year. I forget that Astras voice isn't subject to accoustics.
Unsolicited advice, ACTIVATE!

You could let it stand as an accidental plot point. Assuming it doesn't completely derail all plans ever. Which is a rather large assumption.
 
Wait, she did what?

*looks over the text*

[Closes eyes. Rubs forhead.]

This is what I get for writing everything in sentence sized chunks at three in the morning over the course of half a year. I forget that Astras voice isn't subject to accoustics.
I can sympathise. I had a bit in my story where I completely forgot that one character had lost his sense of taste and therefore couldn't have possibly found something someone made for him tasty. I thought about simply rewriting it so he didn't react to the taste, but in the end I worked it into the story.

Not sure if the same thing is possible here, since Astra's got a pretty big secret to hide.
 
Unsolicited advice, ACTIVATE!

You could let it stand as an accidental plot point. Assuming it doesn't completely derail all plans ever. Which is a rather large assumption.

I thought about it, but it's too blatant for now. The big reveal isn't supposed to happen until ███████████████████, and if they get too much info it makes them look like idiots when they get the wrong answer.
 
An Explosive Reveal. (1)
That Combusken can probably use a nice talk about it being wrong to burn people who can't heal back up from it with a potion and a burn heal, just in case. Even if May orders otherwise. Oh, and same goes for kicking now.

That aqua grunt doesn't know when to quit. The dumbass might have earned himself a recurrent villain spot. :facepalm: Way to make himself suffer more.

:V

Also, that fight was totally unfair. Exploud barely got to use any turns, I thought that bullcrap was done with gen 1! Mudslap and those other attacks don't cause flinching! I call hax! Let Exploud have a rematch.

Thanks for the update!

Unfortunate as it it, this is looking like more confirmation that Astra's hefty dose of trauma about her own abilities from that whole "Bruise The Fabric Of Reality" incident is going to be manifesting in a way that'll drastically affect how she battles. Sure, she already had plenty of reason to hide them and keep her identity secret, but recently it seems like she's not even letting herself consider using them. There were a whole bunch of places where I was convinced "Ah, so at this point she's going to have to mentally pull that grunt away and worry about the questions later- oh", or "So is she going to teleport over there and help out directly? At this point I think she's the only one who can still move fast enough to save- oh", but obviously those never happened against another pokemon.

I think it may also be exaggerated by how extensively she's slotted herself into the role of a Trainer: Trainers don't have powers, they have to use their pokemon's powers. Therefore, her first response can never be her own powers. The loophole to this, as we saw with the telepathic spike, is that she mostly only falls into this mindset during an actual battle. Everywhere else, all she has to overcome is the... oh yeah, the massive trauma that's there too.

...It's going to be a long time before Astra starts working on more subtle tricks beyond the bare necessities, huh?
This just makes me think she's gonna out herself during an extreme situation. And since we're going with extreme...



Astra's arm hurt in May's grip.

Her legs ached but she kept pumping them.

She dared only look forward towards the light at the end of the tunnel-

-Not back towards the fiery burning light that blazed behind them.

'JUMP!' she -rashly- breathlessly thought at May when she felt her feet burn.

May did.

Stupidly, hopelessly, clearly unable to clear the 10 yards between them and cold freedom.

Astra hoped she wouldn't notice the telekinetic aid, as the girls practically flew out of the cave mouth just ahead of a river of surging lava.

Only to take a nosedive down a cliff.

Followed by whole chunks of melting rock the size of cars.

"OHSHITFUCKSHITDAMNFUCK BLAZIKEN SKY UPPERCUT!" red light shined into said red furred pokemon, who with nary a doubt kicked off the cliff side to punch a ton of rock into smithereens, only to promptly use the momentum gained from the impact to catch down to the falling girls, spin, grab them, and throw them up and away from the lava avalanche, getting them out of dodge while mitigating their downward momentum at the same time!

Only for a humongous shadow to fall over the fighting pokemon.

"RETURN!" the falling -spinning- May somehow did a 720° no scope recall beam to save her starter just before he got crushed by a rain of pebbles, lava, and dust.

Then everything EXPLODED.

Astra was vaguely aware of May's intermittent, continuous cursing as she felt the very cliff kicked them and hammered them as they still fell how high was that mountain oh there's the ground-

"Sceptile! Slaking! CATCH!"

Both pokemon materialized just in time underneath each girl, seizing hold of them as gently as possible as they -painfully- completed their fall, grunting and wheezing as they were safely left down on safe, sloped ground...

"What's that sound?"

The four looked uphill as a few dozen geodudes, graveller, golems and magcargos and a lone groudon, clearly out of control, rolled down the slope at what looked to the exhausted girls to be approximately mach 1 speed towards them.

"OH SHIT-

"-oh fuck."

The grass and normal pokemon were promptly returned as the girls did the only sane thing they could:

They jumped down another cliff.

For a moment, time seemed to stop as they stared at each other, wide eyed, floating through the air in slow motion, clearly communicating to each other through their long bred familiarity, that the situation they found themselves in was. Absolute. Bullshit.

Time resumed as something the weight of a truck struck Astra's feet.

'MAY!' she cried.

May acted fast.

Bending mid-air, one hand latched onto her companion's arm, the other reached back at the solid ground they had just ejected themselves from, slowing down their flight by scraping at the dirt and digging furrow just under the multi-tons of rock pokemon avalanching themselves over her tiny, little, frail fingers.

Until she lost her grip.

"Shit!"

The girls fell again into uncertain doom-

"OW- Oof!"

Except it was a short fall this time.

"... Please get off me," begged Astra.

May crawled off her friend and slumped to lie down on the ground.

"What the..." she gasped, rolling to face towards the sky, "fuuuuuu... UCK?!"

The sky blotted out as a fucking Golem fell from above and towards the exhausted girls and was covered by a blue glow and... floated?

May wheezed for air as her eyes, scrunched up in confusion, lowered until they found her pokemon journey long time companion holding her arms up towards the third stage falling-object hazard who, following her friend's arm movements, gently floated down and to the side, until it came to rest on safe ground, somewhere where it wouldn't crush them to a pulp.

The Golem, clearly feeling it had had enough excitement for the day, promptly curled itself into a ball and fell asleep.

May wholeheartedly agreed.

On second thought, she chucked a pokeball at it, which easily sucked up the Golem and captured it. She deserved something good out of all that mess.

Without even waiting for the pokeball to give its final 'ding!', she sat up and turned to Astra.

"You're a psychic."

"... Uh-hm..." Astra glanced at May without half the panic she'd thought she'd feel whenever this day might've come. Clearly the exhaustion talking.

"You know what, fuck it," May lied back down, both girls resting on the safe and sound -and hard- ground, looking up at the sky -before looking away with scrunched up eyes, fuck, the sun was harsh, "you've fooled me all this time."

"May..."

"I believe it, because, why not."

"So you're..." the newly revealed psychic twiddled her thumbs. "You're..."

"I'm OK with it, yeah."

"Oh."

"We kinda saved each other's ass multiple times by now. Daily, sometimes."

After a long pause, Astra sighed.

"You don't know how happy it makes me to hear that," she smiled as she took off her hat and threw it away, letting herself relax, finally giving up the illusion.

"WAIT WHAT THE FUCK YOU'RE A POKEMON?!"

Astra flinched the crap out into a sitting position, staring with eyes wide as platters at May, who did likewise.

"Y-y-you- but you said- fine with-"

"I SAID YOU'RE A PSYCHIC!" May bellowed over Astra's fully panicked muttering, "NOT A PSYCHIC POKEMON!"

As if giving out on the last of her energy, May deflated, though still staring at her pokemon friend as if she couldn't believe it.

"... There are human psychics?" asked Astra in a tiny voice.

May facepalmed.
 
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Got motivated by all those A Backwards Grin omakes, huh? :V

a bit more than half as tall as she was
How tall did you make Astra again? If she's nearly twice as tall as a grovyle she's reached the canonical gardevoir height.

Astra shrugged, feeling as lost as May looked.
It's been a while: Does Astra not understand other pokémon without reading their minds, or are their sounds generally less language-like than in the anime?
 
An Explosive Reveal. (2)
I suspect you meant "Golem" there, particularly since a Golem prominently features later in the scene, but Groudon would be pretty extreme.
I said extreme and I meant extreme. :V

It doesn't work very well, but I'm falling asleep so it'll have to do.

Maybe I should have added more lava.

the full white beard and moustache coating the button of his face.
Bottom.
When Whismer get scared,
Is Whismer an actual word? :thonk:
A mirror of her cry rung out behing her.
Rang? I think rung goes with a had, or a have before it. And behind.
Combusken rushed in and span,
Spun, I think.

Nice chapter!


Last silliness that doesn't really fit.

And yes, I'm quoting myself. :V

"... There are human psychics?" asked Astra in a tiny voice.

May facepalmed.

Thinking quickly, Astra made circling motions with her hands.

"NooooOOOoooOoo MaaaAAAaaaa, I'm noooOoooooOOOoo a psyyYYYchiiiIIiiic..."

"What are you doing."

"You're forgeeeeEEEEEeeeeetting this ever haaaaAAAAaaaappened..."

"You can't do that."

"Yes I CAAAAaaaaaaan... wooooOOOoooo," she added for good measure.

"That's not- you're saying you're not a psychic so that doesn't," May pulls out her pokedex and aims it at Astra, "should have done this from the beginning," she mutters. "It says here that you can't even use amnesia on yourself, much less on me."

Astra puts her hat back on.

"Aaaaaaall forgotten," she tops making silly waving motions, pulls out a Max Potion, sprays herself with it-

"That is so fucking cheap," complains the still battered May.

-lifts up May with telekinesis and, after making sure all her pokeballs are in order, walks off, going back to the closest city.

"You're not even pretending you're not a psychic," informs May.

"But now I know there's psychic humans."

"But, but, but, bleh."

"This never ever happened."

"Yes, it did."

"Never."

"Y-"

"Never."

Astra teleports them away.

And never acknowledged the day had ever happened.

Ever.

'... Someone pay attention to me,' complained Groudon.

Ever.
 
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Bottom.

Is Whismer an actual word? :thonk:

Rang? I think rung goes with a had, or a have before it. And behind.

Spun, I think.

gah, thanks for the corrections. I can't believe I didnt do a sweep for 'whismer' in the first place, there were three of them!

And nice omakes too! Thank you so much. Did you have a title in mind for them?
 
An Explosive Reveal. (2.5)
Astra's arm hurt in May's grip.

Her legs ached but she kept pumping them.

She dared only look forward towards the light at the end of the tunnel-

-Not back towards the fiery burning light that blazed behind them.

'JUMP!' she -rashly- breathlessly thought at May when she felt her feet burn.

That night was spent entirely upon deep philosophical talks interspersed with unintentional naps. By the time the sun rose, the two had reconciled and were closer than ever. Despite being forced to reveal her secret to someone, now that there was a willing, knowledgeable, understanding supporter traveling with her, Astra's journey was in a better position than ever.

Except... after a lazy morning spent sleeping in, as May watched her incredibly sore friend teleport to the couch instead of walking from the bed... a horrible thought clicked together and shocked her out of her drowsing state.

Her fists clenched, and a star of righteous indignation began to-No. No. Calm, peace, tranquility, all that jazz. Astra was her friend, and cared for her, and had not yet finished telling her all that she needed to know. Surely, there was a reasonable explanation for this?


" 'ey. Astra. Can you take people with you when you do that?"
"Yeah, 's easy," the Kirlia mumbled into her mind despite being facedown in a cushion.

Her fists clenched, and a star of righteous indignation ignited in her chest.


"Where was that all those cliffs ago, then?!"
 
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