No game No life, for example, had both it's MC's be the absolute top gamers on the planet. That's an accomplishment?

Honestly the criteria is too vague to speculate on.
I would define it as being able to say: "This is something I have accomplished, this I have achieved". In No Game No Life (or what little I know of it), the protagonists, despite being super-talented and Multiple Winners of Everything, weren't satisfied with any of that. They didn't feel accomplished.
 


Damnit.



Unfortunetly invisitext is a hassle on Ao3 and totally nonviable on FF.net, so anything fancier than what I did here, IE right aligning all the text, is a no-go. Even then, FF.net only allows middle, which is irritating.

Hell, I have to tell everyone on FF.net to go to my profile to find broken links to all the images Dex makes.
If it makes you feel any better, invisitext is often more annoyance than its really worth. The right justification thing does a good job of of setting the text and is much more pleasant to read. I think it worked well.
Isn't that how it always is? They disguise themselves to fit in, looking all normal and cute or whatever, and then BAM! They've melted a mountain when you weren't looking. Watch out for Astra, is what I'm saying.
Somehow, I knew what that link was going to be before I even clicked on it.
Poor Tentacool, though. Doesn't get to snuggle up, watch movies, and eat popcorn with the rest of the gang, all because he's sopping wet at all times.
It sounds like he needs a fish and/or punch bowl to lounge in. At the very least, now that Astra's done showering, May could toss him into the bath, just so he's not cooped up in his pokeball.

Actually, now I'm wondering if higher end hotels come with things like fish tanks in the room, so you can let your Pokémon rest comfortably. Actually, that seems like a pretty easy thing you could ask for even at some motels, sort of like asking for a rollaway bed. If nothing else, it would reduce the odds of water damage from trainers trying to find their own solutions.
Hey, at least these two aren't"enslave God and remake the world in my image."
What's wrong with that? It seems like a perfectly logical and ambitious goal. Besides, you know what they say: Aim for the stars and even if you fail you'll land in R'lyeh!
This is a story with basically Shounen adventure levels of violence, and when the author responds to a request for blood by saying he's suddenly going to go all Temple of Doom on a ten year old, you can't tell if he's being serious or not? I suspect you are the reason laugh tracks were invented.

*Looks at Naruto.*
*Looks at My Hero Aca*
Uhh. You may want to consider what Shonen Adventure violence allows for.
It's a combination of things ranging from the skill and care required to prepare it well (cooking food gives you a lot more leeway because it kills all sorts of nasty things and let's you add in a ton of different flavors) to the traditionally small portions requiring you to order a lot to get a good meal.

That said, a lot of this is cultural and in the Pokémon world, it might be more common to do up a larger portion of a single fish as a sushi dish, rather than handcrafting individual, near bite size, portions.

Oh, also, while we're suggesting different types of sushi, there's the concept of Chirashi, which is sashimi and other things over a bed of sushi rice. That tends to be much closer to a full meal on its own, but still places a heavy emphasis on the fish and rice.

There's also the concept of omacase, where you essentially leave it up to the chef. Depending on the setup, this could get you enough food for a meal, but it's also going to involve a lot more variety and interaction with the chef. It probably would be an interesting experience for Astra, though.

Regardless, this has been a fun ride and I can't wait to read more. Hopefully May finds out soon, because Astra really does need someone to talk to and more opertunities to let her hair down. Though, barring that, Roxanne should have some interesting comments in the near future. At the very least, she should be concerned about the blast and one of the people looking into it, which may impact her lesson schedule.
 
[Slams fist on table]

The feeling of pride an author gets when another is inspired by their work enough to write on their own accord is higher than any style change can possibly mar!

Honestly I would take higher offence at grammar, spelling, and formatting mistakes than a tone shift. And length, to a lesser degree.

f you feel inspired to create your own scene, I happily encourage you and anyone else who feels the same.
I haven't tried to write an omake in part because I don't feel like I have a full grasp on the complexities of the characters. Some ideas for omakes are also kind of set after Astra is outed to May, since May can't react to the different-from-usual strangeness if she's too busy reacting to the revelation that the usual strangeness isn't what she thought it was, but since that hasn't happened in the story yet and it's going to be a major scene (probably, unless May is a lot more canny than she lets on and figured out long before she's told) and we have no clue how it will go or what May's opinion of Astra will be afterwards nor how their friendship may change, there's a lot up in the air there and I'm not sure how it ought to work while keeping them in-character.

I do have ideas though, at least. Things that could be omakes someday:

In an AU where Astra is a boy, May buys 'Astro' a Dawn Stone for one of his other mons, and it abruptly evolves him from a Kirlia to a Gallade. Hilarity ensues.

Astra as a Gardevoir (already outed to May) mega-evolves, and May reads the "opened their heart" or whatever weird line it is from official something-or-other description of Mega Gardevoir. (I can't find the original source but it was stated somewhere that the chest point represents their heart, and now that it is 'open' as a mega, they have immense psychic power). When May says that, Astra realizes that she now appears to be wearing a wedding dress. Hilarity ensues. (Relentless teasing from May is a given, but if Astra's gotten a good enough understanding of people by then, she could turn it right back around by acting like she and May are now engaged or something.)

May spends an entire day teasing Astra a few times too many, so Astra gets revenge that night via psychic dream manipulation. Hilarity ensues.

May is trying to catch a wild Pokemon, but her throw is off. The ball misses, bounces around the room like a Looney Tunes projectile, and bops Astra on the head, abruptly catching her. Hilarity ensues.

May and Astra are out and their pokemon are hanging out at a day care for a few hours. Unfortunately, Torchic has May's vocabulary... even around newly-hatched babies. Hilarity ensues.

Archie/Maxie summons Kyogre/Groudon, starting a torrential rainstorm/blistering drought. Astra uses telepathy to politely ask the legendary to stop because it's kind of about to cause a lot of problems, many of which she can name fairly easily. The legendary stops, spends about a minute staring, then slowly lumbers back down to where it slept. Hilarity ensues.

Finally, the most ambitious, which could be an entire Omake series:
May, Astra, and Brendan have just finished their first round of battles in Chapter 14 or perhaps their meal in Chapter 15 of Hyphen, when Ash Motherfucking Ketchum comes out of the Petalburg gym. Ash bothered Norman over and over until Norman finally said "fine we'll do an unofficial match, if you win you can challenge me for real" and of course Norman abruptly steamrolled Ash, and was a dick about it, as Ash complains out loud to nobody as he leaves the gym. May tells Ash that Norman only let him do that because Norman knows that type of person, the type that's 'too dumb to ever take no for an answer', that's how he deals with those. Ash needs to go to Rustboro now. Oh, so do May and Astra? They should travel together!
So instead of Anime May and Anime Max, Anime Ash instead ends up with Hyphen May and Astra as travelling companions, starting in anime episode AG004 in Petalburg Forest (where they are soon joined by Anime Brock).
This goes exactly as well as you'd expect.
Either May and Brock bond over their gym leader parents ditching their families, or May gets mad at Brock because she thinks he's doing exactly that. Ash and Brock might get kind of uncomfortable with May's casual swearing, or maybe Brock gets uncomfortable and Ash starts picking up vulgar language like Astra does (horrifying Brock). May continues to be abrasive by viciously sassing Ash and Brock every time they do something dumb, such as when Brock starts fawning over a lady. May also runs out of patience for Team Rocket rather quickly, or perhaps just viciously sasses them every time they do anything.

Anyone feel free to write any of these if inspiration strikes.
 
I haven't tried to write an omake in part because I don't feel like I have a full grasp on the complexities of the characters. Some ideas for omakes are also kind of set after Astra is outed to May, since May can't react to the different-from-usual strangeness if she's too busy reacting to the revelation that the usual strangeness isn't what she thought it was, but since that hasn't happened in the story yet and it's going to be a major scene (probably, unless May is a lot more canny than she lets on and figured out long before she's told) and we have no clue how it will go or what May's opinion of Astra will be afterwards nor how their friendship may change, there's a lot up in the air there and I'm not sure how it ought to work while keeping them in-character.

I do have ideas though, at least. Things that could be omakes someday:

In an AU where Astra is a boy, May buys 'Astro' a Dawn Stone for one of his other mons, and it abruptly evolves him from a Kirlia to a Gallade. Hilarity ensues.

Astra as a Gardevoir (already outed to May) mega-evolves, and May reads the "opened their heart" or whatever weird line it is from official something-or-other description of Mega Gardevoir. (I can't find the original source but it was stated somewhere that the chest point represents their heart, and now that it is 'open' as a mega, they have immense psychic power). When May says that, Astra realizes that she now appears to be wearing a wedding dress. Hilarity ensues. (Relentless teasing from May is a given, but if Astra's gotten a good enough understanding of people by then, she could turn it right back around by acting like she and May are now engaged or something.)

May spends an entire day teasing Astra a few times too many, so Astra gets revenge that night via psychic dream manipulation. Hilarity ensues.

May is trying to catch a wild Pokemon, but her throw is off. The ball misses, bounces around the room like a Looney Tunes projectile, and bops Astra on the head, abruptly catching her. Hilarity ensues.

May and Astra are out and their pokemon are hanging out at a day care for a few hours. Unfortunately, Torchic has May's vocabulary... even around newly-hatched babies. Hilarity ensues.

Archie/Maxie summons Kyogre/Groudon, starting a torrential rainstorm/blistering drought. Astra uses telepathy to politely ask the legendary to stop because it's kind of about to cause a lot of problems, many of which she can name fairly easily. The legendary stops, spends about a minute staring, then slowly lumbers back down to where it slept. Hilarity ensues.

Finally, the most ambitious, which could be an entire Omake series:
May, Astra, and Brendan have just finished their first round of battles in Chapter 14 or perhaps their meal in Chapter 15 of Hyphen, when Ash Motherfucking Ketchum comes out of the Petalburg gym. Ash bothered Norman over and over until Norman finally said "fine we'll do an unofficial match, if you win you can challenge me for real" and of course Norman abruptly steamrolled Ash, and was a dick about it, as Ash complains out loud to nobody as he leaves the gym. May tells Ash that Norman only let him do that because Norman knows that type of person, the type that's 'too dumb to ever take no for an answer', that's how he deals with those. Ash needs to go to Rustboro now. Oh, so do May and Astra? They should travel together!
So instead of Anime May and Anime Max, Anime Ash instead ends up with Hyphen May and Astra as travelling companions, starting in anime episode AG004 in Petalburg Forest (where they are soon joined by Anime Brock).
This goes exactly as well as you'd expect.
Either May and Brock bond over their gym leader parents ditching their families, or May gets mad at Brock because she thinks he's doing exactly that. Ash and Brock might get kind of uncomfortable with May's casual swearing, or maybe Brock gets uncomfortable and Ash starts picking up vulgar language like Astra does (horrifying Brock). May continues to be abrasive by viciously sassing Ash and Brock every time they do something dumb, such as when Brock starts fawning over a lady. May also runs out of patience for Team Rocket rather quickly, or perhaps just viciously sasses them every time they do anything.

Anyone feel free to write any of these if inspiration strikes.


I am literally vibrating with the number of comments I cannot give on these.
 
I'm no writer, but for a while, I've had an idea about an awesome near endgame scenario that I envisioned for Astra.

After an unspecified amount of time, The Pokemon League challenge approaches and Astra has been drilling her 6 Pokemon team relentlessly. Unfortunately for her, the night before the challenge is to take place, 1 of her team members comes down with a serious illness(or maybe a training accident/injury). Astra is distraught, but without any truly ready replacements on hand, she decides to go ahead with 5 regardless.

skip ahead to Steven, and she's managed to fight her way through to the end. When Steven pulls some crazy maneuver and her 5th Pokemon flies into the wall, unconscious. The crowd go wild wondering what her 6th Pokemon is since no one so far has seen her release it. Astra meanwhile is panicking at the sight of her last mon out of the battle. The ref and Steven are wondering if this is the end of the challenge when Astra straightens and turns forward with a fire in her eye.

Her illusion shifts, and everyone sees a Pokeball fly and what emerges but a Gardevoir! A Pokémon no one present even recognizes. Astra then proceeds to finish the battle herself, maintaining the illusion all the while. It's at the very end when Astra takes a Meteor Mash to the face that she uses to sneak in a Shadow Ball(or some other attack) which blows Metagross out of the area in an explosion of power that things go sideways.
The crowd, Steven, the ref, and all the people watching TV are stunned into silence not only sat her show of power, but at the empty arena containing only a victorious Gardevoir and a confused Steven; Astra's illusion having faded when Metagross hit her and she was focused on getting off her counterattack. And in her elation, Astra begins cheering telepathically and twirling about even in the face of the stunned-silent crowd.

*Cue Drama*
 
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Astra's illusion having faded when Metagross hit her and she was focused on getting off her counterattack. And in her elation, Astra begins cheering telepathically and twirling about even in the face of the stunned-silent crowd.

*Cue Drama*
Steven, Roxanne, Tate and Liza et al would figure it out right away or already be in the know at that point, and they'd probably just roll with it because they're cool. Most of the drama would stem from everyone else, methinks.

Bonus comedy points if May is totally surprised and didn't see the twist coming from miles away. Because she has noticed plenty of holes in Astra's disguise and pretty much ignored them so far.
 
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Steven, Roxanne, Tate and Liza et al would figure it out right away or already be in the know at that point, and they'd probably just roll with it because they're cool. Most of the drama would stem from everyone else, methinks.

Bonus comedy points if May is totally surprised and didn't see the plot twist coming from miles away.
That's probably true, but other than curiosity, what reason would the gym leaders have to seek out and question Astra on her psychic talents any further than casually when she appears in their cities? I also don't know if there's some noticeable difference between the psychic "presence" of a human and Pokémon in their universe. OP hasn't had Astra run into any other psychics yet.
 
That's probably true, but other than curiosity, what reason would the gym leaders have to seek out and question Astra on her psychic talents any further than casually when she appears in their cities?
They probably wouldn't, but would they really need to? The gym leaders are pen pals. If Astra does something confusing or suspicious in front of enough gym leaders, they might figure it out on their own.
 
It occurs to me that May and Brendan are gonna feel really weird if Astra evolves again and matures and is thus 'grown up' while they're still mid-teens. Even if they're fine with her secret, I forsee awkwardness. Especially if someone starts flirting with Astra. Oh god, there's an omake idea...
That's probably true, but other than curiosity, what reason would the gym leaders have to seek out and question Astra on her psychic talents any further than casually when she appears in their cities? I also don't know if there's some noticeable difference between the psychic "presence" of a human and Pokémon in their universe. OP hasn't had Astra run into any other psychics yet.
Roxanne already figured out that Astra is a psychic based on the fact that Astra's voice doesn't show up in recordings, she'd probably ask the twins to do some poking assuming any of those higher-ups talk to each other at all. Birch has Astra's trainer profile on his "pay special attention to" list, because he figured out that she was speaking psychically way back when she registered. And iirc she met Steven Stone and his Metagross already? Metagross might not tell, though. Or care, for that matter.
 
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Steven, Roxanne, Tate and Liza et al would figure it out right away or already be in the know at that point, and they'd probably just roll with it because they're cool. Most of the drama would stem from everyone else, methinks.

Bonus comedy points if May is totally surprised and didn't see the twist coming from miles away. Because she has noticed plenty of holes in Astra's disguise and pretty much ignored them so far.
Alternatively, May (or the others) notices but concludes the opposite: Astra's a human psychic, who, unwilling to lose, disguises herself as a pokemon 'so she can get personally involved rather than watching her team get hurt from the sidelines' - and is super implicative about "don't worry, I won't tell anyone about what happened there." Astra, of course, misunderstands this as talking about her larger secret, resulting in at least one more iteration of very confused attempts at figuring out what was meant.
 
[Slams fist on table]

The feeling of pride an author gets when another is inspired by their work enough to write on their own accord is higher than any style change can possibly mar!

Honestly I would take higher offence at grammar, spelling, and formatting mistakes than a tone shift. And length, to a lesser degree.

f you feel inspired to create your own scene, I happily encourage you and anyone else who feels the same.
I was mostly joking, but we'll see, maybe I'm inspired to write one in the future.
To be honest, the idea of writing fanfiction or omakes is more daunting to me than writing my own stuff, I just don't think I can write characters the way the original author intended.
My only attempt to do so is only 500 words long and still took me several days to write, and that's despite giving the main character a massive shift in perspective on purpose. (In case you're curious, 'Butterfly' in my signature.)
So, yeah... I don't think I can avoid offending you with the length.
(The grammar should usually be fine though... frankly, I'm a bit embarrassed by my previous post, I wrote it in a hurry. Would you be so kind and edit your quotes thereof to reflect my edits?)

Please throw a bit more inhumanity into the omake pool Unseelie.
Would be easier if this wasn't set before the introduction of the Fairy type. :V
 
When I'm back in the States and not on mobile I might try my hand at writing something. Probably Astra foodgasming some more.

This region corresponds to Kyushu, right?
 
Astra tries onigiri for the first time, and May calls them donuts just to mess with her. Astra is disappointed to find that they are not jelly-filled as May claims. :V
Well, I was planning to go with a drive-in chicken restaurant frequently visited by a blonde-haired biker chick, but this'll be a good thing to write while I bug some of my more knowledgeable friends about Pokemon usage.
 
Y'know, I have to wonder how many people are going to catch on to Astra's secret on their own, and then just straight-up not tell anyone because they don't want to completely screw her over. If May isn't the first to figure it out, then it'll probably be Professor Birch. (EDIT: Not sure if Steven Stone is an Aura-user or could somehow tell what Astra was, or if something else wonky was going on there)
Professor Birch knows the following:
1. Astra has no last name, but has a grandfather.
2. Astra is a powerful telepath, to the point that she's completely replaced normal speech with telepathy. She's also exceedingly young to be so good at it, or so it would seem...
3. Astra had (as of entering his lab) never so much as seen a cell phone or other digital handheld device before (judging by the sheer awe she displayed at it)
4. Astra is (or rather, was) exceedingly small for her listed age of 14.
4b. Astra stated her age with an inflection as if she was asking a question, squinting and thinking about it for a moment.
5. Astra has really weird clothing that covers her completely.
5b. If Brendan passes along her alleged albinism, then Birch could ignore this point, except that she didn't want to take her hat off to get her height measured even indoors with just Professor Birch in the room. That itself could be explained by her trying to avoid drawing attention to her albinism for fear of bullying or something, but if she grew up in the middle of nowhere (see point 3) and is around so few people her family doesn't even have a last name (see point 1), she shouldn't have the expectation that it would be an issue with him... unless perhaps her parents or siblings or other people she lives around forewarned her? But at that point, you're diving deep enough that, when added to all the other evidence, Occam's Razor is going to cut in.
6. Astra was really, really, REALLY nervous, even when they'd been talking for a bit, though he initially blamed that on his staring.

Birch didn't work out the following, but if his memory is good enough he may work it out afterwards or in the future:
7. Astra has no ID. When he asked if she'd brought her ID, she started with "I don't" before quickly stuttering it into "I didn't"; while not conclusive, it leaves open the possibility that she doesn't have an ID at all.
8. Green hair, red eyes, and so-pale-its-white skin is a rather unusual combination.

Finally, if he keeps track of her, he may (or may not) spot her unexpected growth spurt by the time she gets to her second gym. This is entirely circumstantial, however, and he might not know enough about it to deduce anything.

Brendan may also contribute his own observations next time he sees his grandpa or talks to him; as his grandpa put Astra on his "keep an eye on" list and Brendan is in her starter-trio-group, it is exceedingly likely that Birch will ask Brendan about her and will get more information as a result of that conversation (or even Brendan will mention something offhand, like how Astra lived in a literal cave and her grandpa painted on the walls). How is Brendan doing, anyway?

Last we saw him, Birch was going to be living below his means for a few months in order to save up enough money to fund a research expedition into the deep forest. The odds of this being important to the story are considerable. Birch will most likely find the Ralts village. When he shares the amazing news with Brendan, who later shares it with May and Astra, Astra will react... strangely, and probably worriedly. Also, all the pokemon in that village have white skin, green hair, and red eyes, and are roughly the same size(s) as Astra, and they're all powerful Psychic-types. Birch will almost definitely put 2 and 2 together and get 4 at that point if he hasn't already. Throw in that there's a really really old-looking Kirlia that lives in a cave with often-painted-on walls, that has a side-room and bed left in it for someone... younger? Yeah...
 
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Not Oblivious. (Ch 21: May PoV.)
Sorry for the double-toast but I wrote an omake and figured the notification might be worthwhile.

Omake: Hyphen Not(?)-21B: Not-Oblivious

If May wasn't (or isn't?) too oblivious, her own view of most of Chapter 21 might go something like this:



May wasn't stupid.

Contrary to what Roxanne clearly believed (the pretentious egghead), school and grades weren't everything. For May, they were basically nothing. Changing schools every other year, ending up in a completely different place with a completely different curriculum, had played havoc on the quality of her education. She was always the weird new kid who nobody knew. She had huge gaps in what was supposed to be basic knowledge, and her classmates always thought it was funny. Little bastards.

Slowly shaking off her bad mood, May wandered through Rustboro City. Alone and lost in thought, she finally had the time to really consider all the strangeness that Astra had brought into her life. It was obvious that Astra was hiding something. Something big, maybe, something earth-shattering. Maybe even something that would turn the world on its head if it got out.

It wasn't like May didn't notice the little things.

Little things like the way Astra's voice didn't echo like everyone else's did, no matter where she was or how loud she shouted, even when she wasn't supposedly throwing her voice. Like how ridiculously fucking interested that Steven Stone asshole had been in Astra, and how Astra recoiled under his gaze in particular even before they had the slightest clue how strong he was. Like how Astra had lived with her grandpa and his neighbors in a cave deep in the forest where she'd never even heard of, no, never even conceived of the fundamental concepts of bikes, or elevators, or plumbing, or hotel etiquette, or coffee, or muffins, but knew everything about making a fire and cooking berry soup and sleeping under the stars and all that outdoorsy stuff.

Little things like how Astra learned to play a violin in only a single day. Like how Astra clearly remembered the appearance of a living Armaldo despite no such thing existing for thousands of years. Like how Astra got a massive dizzy spell (and probably a migrane) upon trying to figure out where she'd seen it.

Little things like how Astra wasn't so much surprised by May's tale of Wally on route 102 as she was afraid of it. Like how Astra froze up when the brand-new rare pokemon Ralts was mentioned, but her eyes went distant and dull, as if she was reliving something horrible. Like how Astra tried to dissuade Brendan from looking too much for that rare Pokemon. Like how much Astra had panicked when May had tossed some empty Poke-Balls (and a Super Potion) to her in the slowest, most telegraphed lob in history, all after a verbal warning. "Surprised me a little," my ass!

Little things like how startled Astra was by May's mention of the Psychic type, followed by indignance when May said they were kinda weird. Like how she asked if May had a type (which was still absolutely hilarious). Like how horrified and upset Astra was at the talk of the giant Mightyena... the truck-sized Dark-type hellhound that could have effortlessly slaughtered almost any Psychic-type in the forest. Like how even the mention of any member of that line made Astra nervous. Like how Poochyena had been unexpectedly hostile to Astra at first, and even now just ignored her most of the time.

Little things like how Astra had let slip that her grandpa couldn't just walk into a store and buy something, then immediately tried to distract May with a race (and succeeded, damn my competitive streak). Like how Astra honestly, really and truly thought that human babies came from eggs, like Pokemon babies.

Little things like how Astra had panicked almost immediately after obtaining her first Badge, and had hidden in the bathroom for half of May's fight. Like the way May had tried to clap Astra on the shoulder as they left the Rustboro Gym and her hand came down around something solid several inches above where Astra's shoulder appeared to be (which had never happened before). Like the way Astra had panicked and shoved her hand off and hoped she hadn't noticed. Like the way Astra seemingly began growing rapidly, at least an inch just while she was in the bathroom, and would presumably keep growing rapidly until she levelled off at the correct height.

May noticed all of these little things, and many more besides. She was, as she told Astra, good at sniffing out bullshit, and Astra was full of it.

May just didn't really care that much.

Astra was her friend. One of the only two friends she had in the world now, after her dad had decided to move "one last time" that likely wouldn't be the last time after all. She wouldn't put it past him to un-retire and try to throw away her entire life again even when he said he wouldn't, but May was a trainer now. She could live on her own now. She wasn't leaving Brendan and Astra. Not now and not ever.

It had hurt, that first evening, when Astra didn't trust May enough to stop covering up completely around her. Those towels were obviously not comfortable. It shouldn't have hurt — it made sense, they'd only known each other for a few hours — but it still hurt, because they were friends. May had said she wouldn't look at Astra differently, and Astra didn't trust her; a little albinism wasn't that big of a deal between friends, right? But maybe Astra had friends before who said that and then reacted poorly. Or, she couldn't help but think now, maybe it was something more than a little albinism. Something like having green hair and big red eyes and not much of a nose and skin so pale it was white. Like a rare Pokemon.

May didn't really care enough about the reasons to try to dig up the secret in its entirety, so she hadn't actually put things together on purpose, content to ignore the problem and pretend it didn't exist if it wasn't staring her right in the face. She'd rather just think of Astra as her weird friend. It hadn't been until several hours into her walk, dredging through memories and trying to sort out what had happened in her life in what regions and when, that everything suddenly came together. One of Unova's most sought-after rare Pokemon (that her dad had ranted about losing to) was called Zorua: an illusionist Pokemon that could disguise itself as anything, even a human, and (though she wasn't sure she was remembering correctly) might even be able to talk like one. Its evolution, whatever it was called, was even more accomplished.

Everything fell into place all at once. It all made perfect sense, too much sense, and May couldn't keep herself from thinking about it now that she had nothing else going on to grab her attention. She began mumbling a steady stream of swears as she failed to repress it.

Astra was a Pokemon.

A Pokemon. A Ralts, or presumably whatever that evolved into. Something that could be caught in a ball and carried around on her belt. An animal.

...Well, humans are kind of animals too, right? She thought she remembered a science class saying something like that at some point... probably. In Kalos, maybe? So, really, they weren't that different.

Right?

...

Yeah. Astra was her friend, first and foremost.

A Pokemon.

...

Her friend.

Her Pokemon friend.

...

Whatever. She was still Astra. Still her friend. It didn't really matter. It shouldn't.

Well, sorta. It was kind of a big deal... but... only because it meant May would need to pay more attention to some possible problems, right? Well, she didn't have to, but what kind of shitty friend would she be if she didn't look out for Astra? Yeah, they pissed each other off sometimes, they were both a bit weird, but nothing was perfect. Shit, should I tell Brendan? What if he tells his dad? Would Birch try to catch her? Or should I let Brendan figure it out himself, and risk him freaking out on Astra in person? Dammit! She resolved to not touch that until it looked like it was a certainty. Maybe it wouldn't happen and she wouldn't have to deal with it.

When May really thought about what happened after Astra's battle match with Roxanne, really stopped and thought about it, she realized what had probably happened. May had been hurt, at first, by Astra's absence, that total lack of the Pokemon her friend in the audience to cheer her on in the first half of the match. But Astra had returned and eagerly made up for lost time, so May had let it go as the intestinal distress she claimed it was.

Astra must have evolved, she realized now. Evolved in a bathroom stall, in a gym where she was surrounded by people who had just seen her in an absolutely riveting battle and were expecting her to come out of that bathroom looking about the same as she did when she went in. Can Pokemon evolve just from watching battles? From just giving orders? It didn't really matter.

Astra had been a bit more nervous since getting back from the bathroom, so she obviously knew she was taking a huge risk by coming back. She'd bumped her apparent height up an inch or two sometime in there as well, and that was a risk, too. If Astra grew too fast, people (like May) might start asking pointed questions.

If May had been in that situation... if May had been a Pokemon illusionist whose disguise no longer matched her body, she might have panicked. She might have run away. She might have left behind everything she cared about (again) and tried to start over. She might have abandoned her friends.

Astra didn't run. Astra didn't abandon her.

May needed time to process all of this, to come to terms with Astra's secret (she's a Pokemon), but May wouldn't abandon Astra. She couldn't. They'd known each other for less than a week, but it already felt more like a year or two. It was an odd friendship, but deep down inside, in some long-forgotten cobweb-filled corner of her soul that she would never admit existed, May knew they needed each other.

Astra needed May to help her with those parts of city life and human life that she wouldn't have any way to know about (but May was not going to give her Pokemon friend The Talk, for that way lay only trauma. Brendan could fucking deal with it). May needed Astra to help her get by in the wild, making fires and camping out and cooking soup and... well, maybe not keeping clean, Astra sucked at that of course, but everything else. It was a practical need, she might rationalize.

But even deeper in that forsaken corner of her soul, May knew she needed someone who wouldn't abandon her. Someone who wouldn't disappear and never return when something went wrong. Someone who would still be her friend, even if it was risky and not always very fun. And May knew that Astra needed someone, anyone, to lean on and seek comfort from. May wasn't the touchy-feely type, hadn't been for a long time, but Astra kind of seemed to be. May could maybe learn to tolerate that for Astra's sake.

So abandoning her Pokemon friend wasn't an option. There. She didn't really need to think about it much. She could just keep going as she had been and everything would be fine.

Still wandering aimlessly around the city, May had only just started to wonder what to do if Astra started talking about her secret, when suddenly the sky cracked open.



May wasn't sure how long the explosion of ruinous energy lasted. It was a hell of a light show, a pillar reaching clear through the sky, but it just felt wrong on some fundamental level. The way it left a sickly patch of yellow in the blue skies visible through the missing clouds... it was like a scar in the world itself.

When it began, she'd almost immediately started running, not away from it, but towards it, shoving her way through the crowds of gawkers that emerged out of nowhere into the streets in a panic, dodging cars that were drifting to a stop. She slowed down, though, when she really got a good look at the energy and the scar it left behind. Doesn't really look Psychic-type... maybe it's Dark? Maybe Ghost? Yeah, there's no way Astra made that when she was trying out new Evolution moves... right?

Even as the crowds thickened in the streets, she pressed on, her body on autopilot as her mind ran through possibilities, all efforts at repressing her conclusions abandoned in the heat of the moment. Astra was afraid of Dark-types... well, of Poochyena and Mightyena, they were basically the only common Dark-types in the forest. Astra wouldn't be afraid of Dark-types if her neighbors or her grandpa could defend against them, right? Astra's grandpa told her lots of stories, therefore he had to be experienced and wise, therefore he had to be at least one stage evolved, since one badge was apparently enough experience to do that for Astra. He would have told Astra that they'd get less scary someday if he could stop them, therefore Astra getting a secondary Dark-type upon evolving was ludicrous and bore no further thinking about. She's too nice for that anyway.

The crowd in the streets was so thick it was getting harder and harder to force her way through it, sirens blaring as panic took hold of the unthinking masses. Vehicles stalled and stopped every which way on the roads and in some cases even ended up on the sidewalks. Idiots.

What about a secondary Ghost-type? Psychic is weak to Ghost? I think? But... well... Astra being a Ghost-type didn't seem right either. Ghosts like pranks, right? Astra's too nice. Again. Yeah, May didn't think Astra could ever be the boogeyman that went bump in the night. Oh, she had the potential, but she wasn't keen on using it much. She only pranked May with it because May was prying, probably.

Moves were the strongest when used by a Pokemon of the same type, and that looked like a really insanely powerful Dark-type or Ghost-type move, therefore, it must have been used by a Dark-type or a Ghost-type. Astra probably wasn't Dark-type or Ghost-type, therefore, Astra probably didn't cause that explosion. Bam. Logic. So calm the fuck down. And go back to ignoring the thought that Astra was a Pokemon.

...She's probably scared shitless of this. May started picking up the pace at which she shoved through the chaotic throngs of people freaking out in the streets. I told her I'd see her at the hotel, so if she's freaking out, that's where she'll go to find me. Probably. I hope. If Astra wasn't there, May wasn't sure where she'd even begin to look.

The crowd continued to hinder her progress as various first responders tried to get the unruly masses out of the way of their vehicles. Astra doesn't want to be touched, since that'll mess up her size illusion if someone notices. She might be hiding somewhere. There were too many hiding places, though, and there was no way May could search them all in any reasonable span of time. Hotel it is!



It took May almost a half-hour to finally get back to the hotel, a half-hour of pushing, jostling, shoving, and generally forcing her way through the crowds of people who were still too busy completely losing their shit to do anything but get in the way. Still mumbling curses to herself at their idiocy, May fumbled her keys for a few moments and shoved open the door.

Her heart leapt into her throat, unbidden. Panic immediately set in again as the first thing she processed about the room was that she didn't see Astra. "Fuck fuck where-"

Her words cut off as she saw the lump under the bed. That's her, right? It fucking better be her. Does she know I'm here? Dammit! Don't panic, May Astra, don't panic. It's her. It's gotta be her. Even so, she could feel the doubt creeping in as she walked over and the lump didn't move.

At the last moment, she hesitated, steeling herself for possible disappointment or shock. Just in case. Because it has to be her. It has to be. May pulled the sheets up from the pillow-side end of the lump.

Oh thank Arceus, "There you are," May breathed out, letting go of half of her panicked tension even as Astra buried her face deeper in a pillow. The fact that Astra was obviously not happy kept the other half of it around.

No response. Uh... shit. "You okay?"

The sniffle she got in response told her that the answer was no. Fuck.

"Right." Guess I'm winging it. "It was the, uh, giant explosion thing, yeah? Lot of people getting worked up over it, and all. Kind of a crazy lightshow, from where I was. Heh. Um." I'm so bad at this.

She wasn't close enough to get hurt... I think? Better check.
"You weren't anywhere near that, right?"

The way Astra huffed into the pillow was either a good sign, or a really, really bad one. Could she have caused it after all? No, nonononono, even if maybe she did, not touching that. It doesn't matter. Not touching it.

Astra finally found where her words went, speaking with her face still stuffed in the pillow. "It was scary. It was really scary..."

Some traitorous part of May's mind pointed out the total lack of muffle in the voice, but she ignored it, instead sighing in resignation as her shoulders slumped. "Yeah. Yeah it was, wasn't it?"

Her fault or not, it was totally Dark or Ghost type. It scared the hell out of her either way. Doesn't matter. Not touching that. Fuck... winging it! Steeling herself against the nervous awkwardness, she climbed onto the bed and pulled herself under the covers next to her Pokemon friend.

She looks like shit. Giving what she really hoped was a reassuring smile as their eyes met, May tried to find the right thing to say. "Hey. Got room in here for one more?" Internally, she cursed her awkwardness. It's a bit late to ask permi-

"Woah—hey!" May yelped, reflexively leaning away and tensing up, frozen, as Astra suddenly began using her instead of the pillow for wrapping around and sobbing into. She's shaking so much. "Erk..."

Slowly, May forced herself to acknowledge and recognize that nothing bad was happening to her... that Astra was her friend and wouldn't abandon her... that it was okay to let Astra get close. That was what Astra needed right now. To be close to someone. And right now I'm the only one she has. Astra wouldn't abandon her, and she wouldn't abandon Astra. One arm was in a really awkward spot, but as May hesitantly kind-of relaxed, she brought her other arm up around Astra, patting her on the back like parents who weren't Dad usually did when they tried to comfort their kids. Still, the silence was awkward. What did people say in these situations?

"Um. There, there?" Nailed it. Pffff, yeah, right... dammit.

Astra snorted as she finally started to release her death-grip on May. Maybe May hadn't been meant to hear Astra's mutter, but no other sounds reached them here. There was nothing else to hear. "You're really bad at this."

"Oh, well fuck you too," May muttered back without really thinking. Dammit, Astra! Dammit, me!

Astra laughed.

...okay, that works, I'll take it. Mission accomplished!

Astra still didn't let go entirely, but the silence was more comfortable this time, now that May wasn't desperately searching for whatever she needed to say to make things better.

Astra finally spoke again. "I'm sorry."

Internally, May noped right out of that. Oh no, we are not doing that feelings crap now. Out loud, though, she said, "It's fine. Big fuckoff explosion blows up a quarter of the forest outside town, anyone'd be scared. Though, uh." Can we think about something else now? "It's kind of boring in here. If you want, we could order a movie or something." As the smell of dirty Pokemon Astra belatedly reached her nose, she amended her statement. "Maybe after a shower."

"A movie?" Astra tilted her head in that quizzical way that many animals (including humans) did when they were puzzled.

"Yeah!" May felt a little bit defensive, but internally told herself off as she forced the feeling away. She's just wondering which movie, May, she doesn't think it's a dumb idea. Calm the fuck down and explain. "A new Datney one came out recently, and I was kind of interested. It's called Treasure Galaxy, and it's about—"

"No, no, I mean, what's a movie?"

May opened her mouth to respond incredulously before she remembered that Astra grew up in the wild as a Pokemon. How the fuck do I even begin to explain this? Fuck it, she'll understand when she sees it. But she doesn't now, and that means she's never seen... May felt her eyes narrow as she declared her inner thoughts out loud. "Tomorrow I am going to rent the entire King of the Amulet trilogy and we are going to binge the fuck out of it."

Astra still sounded confused. "Okay?" She'll like 'em. Hard to beat the classics.

"Go take a shower, I'll figure the movie out."

While Astra got up and headed into the bathroom and started taking a shower, May ordered the movie and mentally prepared herself for Astra to come out wrapped up in most of the towels again. We really gotta get you another cloak, Astra. Fuck, did she not have enough money for a new one in any of the shops we walked by? Her traitorous imagination briefly entertained the idea of trying to get Astra to not wrap herself up completely tonight, to relax more around May, but thankfully the rest of her brain shot that down. Hell no. Act like it's not there, May. It's not there. There's nothing wrong with her.

She's weird, but she's your friend.

She's Astra.

Nothing else matters.
 
Words cannot express my level of 'giddy'. I'm acually giggling like a loon.

Very heartwarming! AAAA shit I dont even have words



Thank you so much!

Edit: I find it hilarious how both omakes so far are about May discovering that Astra is a pokemon early. Makes me ponder if I've pushed the 'reveal' back too far, but it's only been like. A week in story time? Only 8 chapters since they met. It just feels very long since my update rate is so shit.

I am still metaphorically screaming about the above. Action replay my dude I love you.
 
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Makes me ponder if I've pushed the 'reveal' back too far, but it's only been like. A week in story time? Only 8 chapters since they met
I think it's sort of inherent to the situation, as Astra's really not doing too well at the secret keeping, but seems to be succeeding nonetheless - making people really anticipate the point when the secrecy fails. That said, I suspect there's some distortion making it seem this way, as the main perspective of the story is Astra, who is damn near continuously worrying about it. I'd expect May at least to need at least a while more to figure it out, if only because why would she be thinking that hard about Astra's appearance and conduct? Sure, there's a pretty strong trail of evidence, but without reason to look or any experience to make the hints obvious, there's no reason for May to have started following it.
 
I find it hilarious how both omakes so far are about May discovering that Astra is a pokemon early. Makes me ponder if I've pushed the 'reveal' back too far, but it's only been like. A week in story time? Only 8 chapters since they met. It just feels very long since my update rate is so shit.

Time in stories is more often usefully measured in events, rather than the passage of days and weeks. The later is important to keep in mind for logistics, but character arcs tends to be driven by the things a character does and what happens to them; if a lifetime of experiences gets dumped on their head over the course of a couple weeks, then you should see way more growth than normal for that span. More grounded and detailed works might take into account the psychological and neurological effects of age, how trauma can effect growth, and the need to decompress to let things really gel and assimilate, but I don't think this is that type of story, nor are things happening at that fast a clip.

Beyond that, a good secondary measure is words spent, which is a good proxy for how long readers have been following things and what that means for their expectations. For example, if you release a book that spends 13.5k words over the course of 54 pages and one night, readers will still expect a complete character arc over the course of that night. Conversely, if your story summarizes 5 years over the course of a couple paragraphs, then readers won't expect many fundamental changes to the characters they've been following, despite the much longer time span.

In the case of Hyphen, you've gone significantly beyond that point, so it feels like a lot has happened and we should see both change and growth in their relationship, despite the relatively short time they've been together in story. On the other hand, unlike Shadow Over Innsmouth, the story is set-up to take much longer still, so we don't really expect to see complete arcs at this point. Given the short time in story, the events they've been dealing with, and the characters that are involved, it makes a lot of sense that the secret hasn't come out yet. After all, there have only been a few points where it even plausibly could. I think the real reason the topic keeps coming up is because the story's set-up basically guarantees it's going to happen, which both leads people to anticipate it and makes it easier to speculate about than events we have less information on. This has been exacerbated by the fact that recent events in story keep putting pressure on the secret, which makes the reveal seem more and more immanent.

That said, you just had a scene where they were, for lack of a better word, cuddling closely together, including Astra pressing her head against May. Given how different a Kirilia's body shape is (especially the horns on their head) and how close they were, it feels like the jig should be up at this point and all that's left is for one of them to address the subject (or for May to explicitly reject dealing with it for the time being). So you've sort-of lit a short fuse for yourself there.

If it makes you feel any better, I've been toying with an omake that goes in a different direction, but I've been having some issues plotting it out (let alone actually forcing myself to write, which is a longer running problem).
 
Time in stories is more often usefully measured in events, rather than the passage of days and weeks. The later is important to keep in mind for logistics, but character arcs tends to be driven by the things a character does and what happens to them; if a lifetime of experiences gets dumped on their head over the course of a couple weeks, then you should see way more growth than normal for that span. More grounded and detailed works might take into account the psychological and neurological effects of age, how trauma can effect growth, and the need to decompress to let things really gel and assimilate, but I don't think this is that type of story, nor are things happening at that fast a clip.

Beyond that, a good secondary measure is words spent, which is a good proxy for how long readers have been following things and what that means for their expectations. For example, if you release a book that spends 13.5k words over the course of 54 pages and one night, readers will still expect a complete character arc over the course of that night. Conversely, if your story summarizes 5 years over the course of a couple paragraphs, then readers won't expect many fundamental changes to the characters they've been following, despite the much longer time span.

In the case of Hyphen, you've gone significantly beyond that point, so it feels like a lot has happened and we should see both change and growth in their relationship, despite the relatively short time they've been together in story. On the other hand, unlike Shadow Over Innsmouth, the story is set-up to take much longer still, so we don't really expect to see complete arcs at this point. Given the short time in story, the events they've been dealing with, and the characters that are involved, it makes a lot of sense that the secret hasn't come out yet. After all, there have only been a few points where it even plausibly could. I think the real reason the topic keeps coming up is because the story's set-up basically guarantees it's going to happen, which both leads people to anticipate it and makes it easier to speculate about than events we have less information on. This has been exacerbated by the fact that recent events in story keep putting pressure on the secret, which makes the reveal seem more and more immanent.

That said, you just had a scene where they were, for lack of a better word, cuddling closely together, including Astra pressing her head against May. Given how different a Kirilia's body shape is (especially the horns on their head) and how close they were, it feels like the jig should be up at this point and all that's left is for one of them to address the subject (or for May to explicitly reject dealing with it for the time being). So you've sort-of lit a short fuse for yourself there.

If it makes you feel any better, I've been toying with an omake that goes in a different direction, but I've been having some issues plotting it out (let alone actually forcing myself to write, which is a longer running problem).


Some good points. I appreciate the insight.

As far as 'words spent' goes... Its a bit unavoidable that I'm going to be running into this problem (excess events) a lot. Turns out running the entire Hoenn Championship is going to take a Long While, and apparently I can't timeskip for shit!

No, seriously, I dont think I've had any point where I've skipped a single day, or even significant portions of one yet. it's all been chronicled from dawn to dusk. A hundred thousand words about roughly a week, when this entire thing is supposed to take a couple months! But it feels so hard to skip ahead a bit when there's so many things, especially this early, that feel like they need a dedicated scene to accompany it. Bits like May catching Tentacool and Lotad, which could have feasibly gotten a few sentences, but which I drew out into multi paragraph sections of their own. Are they necessary? No. Do they add a lot? I think they're pretty neat. But that's kind of a problem when I think every moment could be expanded into a pretty neat scene. I resisted this urge with Astra watching Not!Treasure Planet and I will have to resist it more in the future.

I've completely lost my train of thought. Was there a point I was trying to make, or is it justification? Am I even still replying to anything you actually said at this point? Hm.

TL;DR Fanfics usually take a lot more words to reach certain story beats than regular novels, and Hyphen is an extremely gratuitous example of such.

In the end, only I know when any or all secrets will be revealed, and how. And it's something for you guys to fret over! Hehehe.

Also, as far as the 'under the covers' thing goes, I could point out that Astra never took her hat off, and that May is both somewhat unobservent and also more focused on revving up the long disused 'comfort' section of her brain to notice, but it does seem like a bit of an afterthought, doesn't it? Eh. I should get back to writing 22.
 
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