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Therapy, a Wormfic

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I read this back in 2016 and went through it again over the last few days, enjoying it just as much this time. I read all the post-story discussion, wanted to respond to one, and remembered that there's no necromancy ban.

Deathsheadx said:
There were was a sense of rushing to the end goal, more apparent in the final part of the story. the whole thing with the Cauldron railroad felt like a railroad, it felt more like forcing the story from point A to B than a natural progression.
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True, although that's exactly correct in-universe. When Contessa decides you're going to jail, you're going to jail because Path to Victory always wins. Given who Sanity was and what she had done, the only way that was going to happen was for her to be railroaded. There's no way she could have been sent down without overwhelming evidence and a rigged court room like that -- with 12 randomly-selected jurors, at least one of them would have practiced jury nullification because they were someone that she cured, or had a close friend/family member that she cured, or were so appreciative of her helping to kill Behemoth, or or or... As such, Taylor needed to be railroaded, which means the story needed to be railroaded.

I think part of the issue was the timeskip across the month-long gap while she waited for trial/waited to be sent to the Birdcage. It would likely have felt much less like a railroad had we seen Amy and Sabah struggling to free her, her lawyer urging her not to plead guilty, etc. On the other hand, that material wasn't actually essential and skipping it wasn't a major issue. The part at the end, where Conflict Resolution talks to Scion, was a bit of a disappointment since it gave Taylor no agency, but it was super uplifting and satisfying to see things finally get fixed in the Wormverse using the power of socialization instead of punching. That was novel and satisfying.
 
A damn good story and here are a few typos I noticed while reading it
frommerman said:
I realized that I was about to seriously confuse someone as I replied. "Hello, Janet. This is Kid Win, of the Wards ENE speaking. I need to be directed to whoever is in charge of the investigation I know you all are carrying out against the PRT in response to last night's press release.
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frommerman said:
again,and
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frommerman said:
You know ,that was Quarrel,
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LordCirce said:
A commotion in the phones screen bright Amy out of her thoughts, and she thumbed up the volume as both she and Sabah leaned in to hear what was being said.
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frommerman said:
[Conflict Resolution] highlighted the changes its new partner had made, changes for the betterment of all. They glittered in the Entity's sight, jewels of newborn rightness steadily devouring what little cloudy black remained. "Behold this goodness! Behold this light! Know, Guardian, that it is good! But turn around, stare hard into the blackness, and know that there are so, so many more than just us. That we are the only ones of our kind!

Unless we fix the rest of them, too. One world saved is not enough, Guardian! The minds of one planet, great though they may be in collaboration with us, cannot possibly hope to forestall the End of All Things!

Guardian. WE MUST SAVE THEM ALL!"
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After all these years, I don't know what to think about this fic, as the dsm-v was controversial, and the shard is using shard knowledge to assume what it thinks is sanity.

I am not saying it is bad if it sounded like that.
It is just a worm fic that I shouldn't overthink or take too literally.
 
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