Thing is - for too many people "any access" is better alternative to "no access". So risk of losing it is unacceptable. Which means that too many will count their stakes and find that most viable bet is "keep them independent and don't allow anybody else to get it in their pocket" as it's safest way to get access without no strings attached.and then there's all the other groups that would want to use the lifespan expanding technology for themselves.
which is pretty much every group that is even slightly notable.
Immortality and a real Panacea of the Gods will see the US turn to their Cold War roots. Every inch of Brockton will be covered by overt military and infiltrated by covert agents similar to @mp3.1415player's depiction in Distance Learning. Every alphabet soup agency will have infiltrated Brockton's entire population strata on both sides of tha law within two weeks. Everything within a thousand miles will be covered by sensors and observers human and not.they let them roam for more than a decade and yet that would be the thing that would make them get of their asses and stop the nine?
no at best i see them taking the SI and Amy into 'protective custody' and have them churn out the youth treatment for themselves and fuck everyone else
similarily might alexandria and cauldron be tempted to relocate the SI onto another earth like aleph if not into their own basement
It's such bullshit that any person trying to good in Worm has a thousand reasons not to. How would the Nine find out about this?? And how would they not be snuffed out immediately?not just endbringers, the nine are also going to show up
bonesaw to study the work and manequin to destroy whoever wants to improve humanity
i honestly doubt that, the worm US are a shadow of their old self and only held together by intertia and a lot of bandaids and spit from cauldron and even the sight of a panacea wouldnt be enough to reverse that, if anything it might accelate the destruction when everyone scrambles to get their hands itImmortality and a real Panacea of the Gods will see the US turn to their Cold War roots. Every inch of Brockton will be covered by overt military and infiltrated by covert agents similar to @mp3.1415player's depiction in Distance Learning. Every alphabet soup agency will have infiltrated Brockton's entire population strata on both sides of tha law within two weeks. Everything within a thousand miles will be covered by sensors and observers human and not.
This will be the new Manhattan Project. @Jack Stargazer may write it differently, but Cauldron's bullshit won't win against a greedy, motivated Uncle Sam. Especially when backed by billions of humans who can now see the Golden Age of Man promised by countless Science Fiction writers and research into these two very subjects. Research that Humanity as a whole have strived towards since time immemorial. 3 million years man has walked this world in all his forms and every one sought to leave behind a lasting memorial of them. This SI just made that possible.
They have become the Ultimate Neutral Party. Hell with Butcher's intense fear of death, she'll be motivated to keep the SI and Panacea alive at all cost. Most Importantly, Neutral and selling to everyone.
the same way anyone else would probably find out about it, something called news/the internetIt's such bullshit that any person trying to good in Worm has a thousand reasons not to. How would the Nine find out about this?? And how would they not be snuffed out immediately?
Oh, hell. If it wasn't for the fact that humanity was already fucked seven ways from sunday this would be our doom all by itself. Immortality would cement an unchanging ruling class in place, one increasingly alien to the proletariat, while ensuring that there is next to no social mobility. Without turnover due to age and natural death social mobility dies then and there even within the lower and middle classes. All glory to the Pharaoh.
And this is compounded by the fact that you just put the entirety of humanity into prime breeding age permanently. People don't die off from an increasing swath of natural causes and, even with the drastically reduced population growth rates typical in the first world... hoo boy. Suddenly a death by Endbringer-related social collapse or Scion drowning his tears in the blood of billions seems kind.
He might have secondary plans to deal with that once he holds the ruling class by the balls but, yeah, I might have just shot him there just out of panic in regard to that pandora's box. I'd be vilified for the rest of human history but I still might have done it.
Its certainly immortality enough to cause a dystopian gilded prison to form. We are already, just in regular life, feeling the weight of the entrenched privileged... the game a little more rigged by the day. Four hundred years of those who made it to the top of the ladder never falling is more than enough to create a nightmare.Boy, it sure is a good thing then that although the word immortality is being used, it's really more or less longevity. Though to be fair, 400+ years of living might as well be immortality.
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extra spaceBrian continues. "The girls can decide whether to tell you their names or not themselves. Skitter is pretty new to the group, so I wouldn't want to intrude, and with Tattle, well." He grins. " I'm sure it'll come up over dinner."
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extra spaceShe begins to frown and I can tell that she's starting to get angry, so I speak a bit louder to interrupt. " I know you're already thinking 'bullshit' to that but it's kind of important. I.. hmm.."
extra space"It's the one thing that prevents the Gen 1 nanocytes from being a truly free-replicating colony, primarily because of the low quality materials I was forced to use to make them. The QPU in each unit contains a small transmitter, which connects to my central processor. " I tap myself on the head, indicating my BMI.
functioningI sit up in the bed, moving my now function legs over the side to sit on the edge of the bed facing her in her chair.
you've not relented?"But you have. Not. Done it. You've had hundreds, thousands of opportunities, you've never used your powers for evil. Even when sorely pressed, even despite the stress and the pain, and the sorrow which you deal with day after day, and the pressure from your power to do more, you've relented."
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exactly what II doubt even Dragon could have unraveled exactly I was looking for so quickly, especially with the precautions I had taken in that respect, so it must be a combination of paranoia, the current situation in the city leaving fuses short and tempers high, and the speed with which I asked to come in to see the Director.
He is lying by omission. He only said that he had spoken to Tattletale. And presumably, he really did get information from her. But he never said that she was his only source of information.
Isn't Flamel lying about getting it from Tattletale, when in reality he knows about it since he read Worm before he was inserted? (Polearmman should be able to tell that he is truthful about the actual revelation, but lying about the source, unless Flamel has done something like "Lisa, say after me: 'Coil is Thomas Calvert'")
Not trying to demotivate you author, as I would not bother to comment on a story I did not like, or see a lot of potential in. Definitely want to see more of this...
But I feel I NEED to explain several issues I have with your story. Over the years I have started, stopped, and dropped this story maybe 5 times. So I like the premise/idea of it. But the execution makes it difficult to read. I usually dropped it after pushing through to the 3rd or 4th chapter. This time, with the new chapter release, I got all caught up and felt like sharing WHAT exactly was keeping me away from it. I am not trying to be confrontational, just offer criticism, so I have placed it in a spoiler to be more easily avoided should you, or other readers, want to.
I'd suggest a bit of a rewrite. The premise and power(of the MC) is good. But this is difficult to read. The MC seems intent to just out himself to possibly the WORST people possible(Impulsive children employed by Coil), or in the WORST ways possible. He seemingly folds instantly whenever push comes to shove regarding information about himself. Which is difficult to read. No one likes MC's/SI's who are instantly found out, or who do not have an ace up their sleeve. Since at that point they've lost most of what makes them interesting to read.
You make Tattletale seemingly omniscient, when she really is not. Her power is super-intuition, and works off of input. This is why she is intentionally aggravating, smug, and talkative. To evoke responses that her power can work with. But here, in the first time she looks at him, you have her pulling info out of nowhere that she literally has no input for. That she could NOT have known. She would have more likely gained maybe a fraction of that info, then selected the wrong choice/possibility, then confronted the MC and initially been proven wrong, then been lost as to what his powers are exactly and unable to continue to guess once he took control of his body.
I mean, 4 chapters in and Tattletale and a bunch of kids(the Undersiders) know the MC is not from Earth-Bet, he is from the future, they know he is a Tinker, know he has Thinker powers and can control his biology, and likely know/guess the directions his Tinker power can go in, since she apparently could tell at first sight that not only is he a Tinker, but that he was looking at space and planning things to build.
Don't get me started on the MC placing himself right into the hands of Coil, before he has had the time to buid-up ANYTHING. Which is pretty much a death sentence or a quick one-way trip to mister Pitter and his "Candy", even if this was kinda corrected by him getting lost(by Tattletale), and winding up going to the Protectorate to point them at Coil.
The MC's Brain-interface thing makes ZERO sense(as far as him hiding his own knowledge). If he is afraid of knowing something becuz the Simurgh might read his brain matter, WHAT is stopping her from reading his computer brain? It just feels like nonsense.
Flamel shakes his head. "No, I meant the demographics. Half of the House of Representatives and the Senate are over the age of 60."