I mean... y'all want critique, I give you critique. So I wanted to come back to this and talk about the write-ins:
[]Write In
-[] Cards on the table.: We lay out what our current issues and "orders" are as well as a summary of what intelligence we already have and explain that "These are what we are doing at the Empress's request"
edit: also, if she wishes to confirm this with the Empress that can be arranged.
[]Write In
-[] Be Blunt: "I started a very concerning investigation after the empress read some online conspiracy I sent someone to look just so I can use the whole thing as a lesson on why what random foxes on the internet say shouldn't effect her ruling now we are going down a rabbit hole of a seemingly dangerous situation. I need all the help we can get to protect this nation and the Empress."
I want to touch back on these two plans : the danger with these plans is not just that the IRG takes over your investigations and shuts you out, or hands you an investigation team with a few operators slipped in with the analysts, ready to headchop you: there's another danger here, and that is that by being so open about Ahri getting Qanon'd, it raises red flags. It will make Manandal suspicious. Here she is, she's just the head of the IRG, she's not close enough with either the Empress or the Heir Presumptive to be privy to these sorts of things... and yet the Heir Presumptive is telling her that the Empress got Qanon'd? In their first private meeting? Where Princess Yui is asking for help building her power base? That's suspicious as all fuck. The immediate reason that springs to mind: you're trying to establish that the Empress is unfit to rule so that you can legally softcoup her. Why else would you start talking about these sorts of things?
"Whiskey, you never said anything about that!"
Actually, I did, but people didn't notice:
I mean, if you know more than the QM about how the proposed plan would go wrong:
By all means share with the group. I'm keeping an open mind, what are we all missing?
That's one outcome, but not the only outcome. I'm not spoon-feeding here. I would direct you to this exchange:
Or the possiblity that she interpretates your words as the empress is unfit to rule and is mentally unstable.
You do not have the full measure of what the chibi is thinking.
A very good point, yes. Reminder for the thread that even when Yui was briefing her navy buddy Shiki and her mentor/uncle Johnny about the Egon investigation, she pointedly avoided saying that she was sent there because the Empress read conspiracy theories on foxthot 4chan.
Like, I really dunno how did people overlook this part. I certainly wasn't drawing attention to it because I didn't want to influence the voting too much, but I mean, you have a poster raising a possibility and the QM agreeing that he's made a very good point. But if you missed that, you missed that.
So, since we're already here, let's go to plan
@Always Late :
[X]Coyotes and Wolves
-[X]Personal loyalty to the Empress: Her Imperial Majesty has privately requested that this investigation be made, as the matter of military weapons getting into the wrong hands is a significant priority to her. However, it has become much larger than was anticipated, and she needs loyal, capable people at this earliest, most tenuous date of her role.
--[X]Bait the hook: If the General wishes, a personal, private meeting can be arranged to address her concerns about our "influence".
Here's the problem with this write-in:
It doesn't answer Manadal's question. Yes, her question was literally "Why should I help you?", and on the surface this write in answers that, but it's not answering her true question. Now okay, sure, there needed to be some reading between the lines there, but I mean...
"I will speak frankly, Your Highness. It's one matter to be assisting Her Majesty's Vicereine on Her Majesty's business. It's another matter entirely to be assisting the Heir Presumptive in establishing her power base. The Guard protects Her Majesty the Empress. Against all foes, foreign, or domestic. Near or far, Your Highness."
"I resigned my office as Imperial Vicereine," you say, stalling for time. Manandal gives you a flat, unamused look.
"You are Vicereine, Your Highness. In thought and deed, if not word. If you want the Guard's assistance, I need to have your measure. Why should I help you?"
So let's break this down a little:
- She sees your actions here as establishing your power base.
- She's reminding you that the Guard protects the Empress from threats near or far, and is implying you could be one of those threats.
- She wants your measure. She wants to know
you.
- What she's really asking is
"Why should I help you form your power base?"
(Also she has no patience for bullshit.)
The way this write-in is framed, what you're saying here is effectively "You should help me because I'm following the Empress' commands and you're loyal to the Empress". Here's the problem: that does
nothing to address what Manandal wants answered: building a power base. Best case, you look like someone who can't read between the lines and understand what she's asking, oblivious to the fact that you're establishing a power base. Worst case, she takes this as Yui deliberately trying to deflect and not answer her question; you're talking doing this investigation for the Empress, ignoring the issue she raised that you're building a powerbase. And bringing up the private meeting with Ahri is just raising suspicion. She hasn't said anything yet about Yui's influence on Ahri, but in a preemptive effort to show that the IRG doesn't to worry about Yui's influence over Ahri... Yui is showing her influence over Ahri. Why would you preemptively offer something that was never asked? Why are you trying so hard, is it because there
is cause for concern?
So yeah. How we present ourselves to the CG, with this write in, is problematic. With the default options on the other hand, you're presenting yourself to the Commanding General as a patriot, a military officer, a pragmatist. Those are things she understands and can work with.
Had this write-in won, Manandal would have reiterated her question again, making the point that she's unsatisfied with your answer. You could recover from that, but it would definitely have weakened your personal standing with her (and she'd consider you less than reliable, if not sus).
Here, have a write-in. I'm not voting for it till I'm sure it gets some support, since atm, avoiding "Oh shit the DM asked "are you sure about that?"" is priority one, but here.
[]Appeal to the Mutual Threat (Those Sumeragi Fuckers Are Up To Something): The simple fact of the matter is, the Great Houses are gearing up for war. Sumeragi in particular seems to be eyeing the throne itself, and the Navy is partially compromised and stretched thin as is. Necessity demands that you make certain any intelligence force you assemble be loyal to the Empress first and foremost, as well as limit any information the Great Houses could acquire on the formation of such.
So this write in is on the face of it also okay, but it runs into the same problems as the Personal Loyalty Coyote & Fables write in, which is that great, you're answering the Commanding General's stated question of "why she should help you" but it doesn't really answer her question of "why should I help you build your power base?" She'd again reiterate her question, and you'd have a chance to answer and recover.
It's a subtle but significant difference that is the difference between Manandal thinking "she's deflecting, trying to hard and avoiding the question, why is she doing this, what is she hiding?" and "you get the situation, but that's not what I asked, get to the point."
-[]Also, Ri-Sumeragi is fucking chew and you have pictures.
EDIT: Made the joke optional.
Yeah this would have been vetoed anyway, because nobody knows that Johnny and Maggie are an item. And anyhow, as I've alluded to in the past, while the affair
is scandalous, Johnny has a contingency to reduce the fallout if their affair leaks, which is something that I'm going to touch on in the next Salt Thirst side.
I know people skip over the salt thirst sides, but fuckit, I like writing Johnny and Maggie and I also use them as glimpses to to seed thoughts and ideas about the world. Those who have eyes, let them see. It's not
all salt thirst.
...that said, if
anybody has pictures, it'll be Johnny.
Maggie gave him a choice between photographing her "impromptu" photoshoot as she devolved from being dressed to wearing only her tails and a smile, or playing alone with his guns in his room