The best tagline so far? "Friendship is tentacles."

Short, relevant and extremely attention-grabbing. Alagon made it first, I believe.
 
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For The Swarm:
Raising Kerrigan right.
Just your Friendly Neighbourhood Eldritch Abomination.
Don't forget your Orbital.
When in doubt, warp it out.
 
(Angrily deletes ten thousand words of notes.)

Alright fuck this I'm burning the script to the ground and starting from the bottom up. First arc's going to remain intact but everything else? Ground up.

Less serious, more whimsical and stabby stabby. Plenty of time for seriousness later in the story. This is fucking garbage. It's shit. Ten percent's salvagable but ninety percent's crap.

Someone roll thirteen d10s and two d20s please.
 
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Rolling.
Coshiua threw 12 10-faced dice. Reason: Reasons Total: 71
9 9 3 3 9 9 6 6 4 4 1 1 8 8 2 2 9 9 6 6 8 8 6 6
Coshiua threw 1 10-faced dice. Reason: Reasons Total: 7
7 7
Coshiua threw 2 20-faced dice. Reason: Reasons Total: 20
6 6 14 14
 
Alright well that's just... Well, it's a thing.

Thank you @Coshiua.

Sleep-deprived Generic_Generica is a font of good ideas sometimes but more likely than not it's a bunch of teenage overly-self-aware dreck.
 
just wondering no mention on the asteroid? at all? just thought you would want to know meow
The word 'asteroid' was used FIVE times in the story section you quoted... in your very own post!
Trying to figure out how best to handle Nova. Really lost on how to handle that well.
You mean Kerrigan!Expy right? The only Nova I know around is in Tiki's PASI story.

Tagline.

For the Swarm: Where awkwardness, misunderstandings and an ever expanding species of escalation meet.
This is my favorite suggestion.
(Angrily deletes ten thousand words of notes.)

Alright fuck this I'm burning the script to the ground and starting from the bottom up. First arc's going to remain intact but everything else? Ground up.

Less serious, more whimsical and stabby stabby. Plenty of time for seriousness later in the story. This is fucking garbage. It's shit. Ten percent's salvagable but ninety percent's crap.
*Blinks*

Whaaaa? Did something suddenly change? First arc means... xcom arc that we currently are in I suppose yes, changing your future plans? I can live with that I suppose. Hope everythings ok there Generica
 
The word 'asteroid' was used FIVE times in the story section you quoted... in your very own post!
You mean Kerrigan!Expy right? The only Nova I know around is in Tiki's PASI story.

This is my favorite suggestion.
*Blinks*

Whaaaa? Did something suddenly change? First arc means... xcom arc that we currently are in I suppose yes, changing your future plans? I can live with that I suppose. Hope everythings ok there Generica

First arc's staying intact. Second arc's getting rewritten just a teensy bit.

Everything beyond is getting its guts torn out so I can rebuild a passable story around the spine.

Example: The third part of the story was complete and utter dreck and it just went downhill from there. The most literal comparison would be to one of those horrible Mass Effect first contact AUs where Humanity is stronk and the Council is dumb except slightly better but honestly not really.

Yeah no. I'd like to say it wasn't that awful but I'm biased as hell since this is my fic. A lot of resentment leaked through into the fic and that wasn't a good thing.

Don't worry everything's going to be fine. Just have to figure out what's going to work and what isn't.
 
First arc's staying intact. Second arc's getting rewritten just a teensy bit.

Everything beyond is getting its guts torn out so I can rebuild a passable story around the spine.

Example: The third part of the story was complete and utter dreck and it just went downhill from there. The most literal comparison would be to one of those horrible Mass Effect first contact AUs where Humanity is stronk and the Council is dumb except slightly better but honestly not really.

Yeah no. I'd like to say it wasn't that awful but I'm biased as hell since this is my fic. A lot of resentment leaked through into the fic and that wasn't a good thing.

Don't worry everything's going to be fine. Just have to figure out what's going to work and what isn't.
There there, It will all be ok. Take your time that way you can be happy(ish) with what you produce. Was just double checking that Arc one is what is already written (XCOM) or if it was the pre-XCOM section and arc two was the XCOM. As long as it's all future outliney stuff that hasn't happened yet, tear it all down and burn it while dancing around it if it's required.

Also hard to do HFY when you're not human anymore. o_O
 
There there, It will all be ok. Take your time that way you can be happy(ish) with what you produce. Was just double checking that Arc one is what is already written (XCOM) or if it was the pre-XCOM section and arc two was the XCOM. As long as it's all future outliney stuff that hasn't happened yet, tear it all down and burn it while dancing around it if it's required.

Also hard to do HFY when you're not human anymore. o_O

Said it was the most literal comparison. More ZFY with a smattering of HFY.

Either way it was still pretty awful so rip and tear is what's happening to it.
 
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