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Fate/Broken: Kaleid Liner Prisma of Fear

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Amatsumi said:
Why would Servants bother when they can phase out / Astralize?

Forgot about Prilya being sanctioned fanfic.
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Yikes fanfic of a fanfic... fanfic ception

A regular servant could I don't think whatever the class cards manifested can.

Edit: it's implied that the servants are not in the right mind when summoned through the class cards.
 
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dat_noob1926812 said:
[] yes Gilgamesh managed to partially do it by himself because of his 'ego'
[] no, the control the class cards have over the heroic spirits powers is too strong
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I wana say no yet also yes... Eh fuck it.

[X] yes Gilgamesh managed to partially do it by himself because of his 'ego'

Having a card aware can be either incredibly useful or back fire horribly. Especially for Kuro/Chloe, if you haven't butterflied her away.
 
Crizom said:
I wana say no yet also yes... Eh fuck it.

[X] yes Gilgamesh managed to partially do it by himself because of his 'ego'

Having a card aware can be either incredibly useful or back fire horribly. Especially for Kuro/Chloe, if you haven't butterflied her away.
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it's already established in the story that Rin has the archer card.
 
dat_noob1926812 said:
it's already established in the story that Rin has the archer card.
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Uhh, I know that. What I ment by my other post is that what will happen to Chloe if you awaken the archer card since she came into being by merging with it. Would EMIYA be in control or would he just sit back and give advice or would she even exist since you might butterfly her existence.
 
Crizom said:
Uhh, I know that. What I ment by my other post is that what will happen to Chloe if you awaken the archer card since she came into being by merging with it. Would EMIYA be in control or would he just sit back and give advice or would she even exist since you might butterfly her existence.
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Whoops sorry I forgot what I had and hadn't uploaded yet. (I have a little backlog so if I get too busy to write I can still have weekly updates) there's a reason that was/will become relevant.
 
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Who fears you? Pt 5
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    • Who fears you? Pt 5
    Still unsure about the servants and the cards so I'll reiterate here:

    Gilgamesh was able to partially 'break' his card and maintain some control of his body (due to his ego which is one of the things SI will be confused about) the question is 1. can servant see and hear things while manifested in a physical form and corrupted (the answer is yes in this fic)
    2. can a servant break out of the controls put in place by the corruption of the cards. (as Gilgamesh has proven they can resist it)
    so I, unfortunately, do not have a great amount of knowledge on the precise capabilities of each servant and have heard it's dependent on the amount of mana a servant has.
    Given sufficient support/encouragement can a servant break free of whatever the cards did to corrupt them and manifest themselves?
    (cause I'm at a crossroads in a future update and don't know where to go if no-one gives me a compelling theory I'll flip a coin)




    The spike punches straight through my construct amour and pierces into my left shoulder.

    What the fuck?

    "Gahegeg."

    I get dragged on the roof and land in the dirt with a loud thud.

    "GAH."

    ...

    Well... that was embarrassing.

    A second passes then two. I take in a deep breath then brace myself.

    "GAHEGEGE!"

    I rip the spike out of my shoulder, hold it out and drop it on the ground. Ring get to fixing that would you.

    "Command confirmed."

    "    Well, that was rude, though I do suppose shooting you out of the blue probably means i deserve it."

    "AAAARRRGRRGHHHH!!!"

    "C' mon you can do better than that Medusa."

    "W-who are you!" "How did you enter the mirror world?!"

    Rider charges me throwing her spike at me again. Although this time I sidestep the spike and go to slam my fist in her face as she passes. Unfortunately for my efforts she ducks under my swing sweeping out my legs as she passes, I barely manage to get myself into a roll before hitting the ground. By the time I stand upright again a chain waves around in front of me.

    "Not so fast."

    "Illya shoot him!"

    I wrap my arm around the chain while ducking my head under it, right turn to face her and pull.

    Ring enhance my strength with constructs.

    "Command confirmed."

    "W-why shoot him!?"

    I try and wrap the chains around my arm further and wait for the perfect moment. I see rider begin to swing the chain to throw me around, oh no you don't I yank the chains as hard as I can in an attempt to swing rider towards the buildings.

    "Just do it!"

    Riders body jerks with the chain as she's thrown through the schools front door.

    Right then what am I goi-

    "GAH!"

    I'm thrown forward myself as something hit me in the back, oooh boy, that hurts. Almost causing me to fall over. I get through my awkward half stumble/fall and straighten myself out.

    I turn back towards Illya.

    "What the hell was that for?!"

    As I rotated out of the way riders spike flies right past my face and towards Illya, who dodges out of the way just in time, starting to look panicked.

    "It brushed past me! I-it just brushed right past me!"

    Oh? Riders backup and charging me, I go for a quick jab with my left hand that she ducks under without much effort.

    "Hegehh."

    I lose control of my left side as the construct armour shatters.

    "Kyaa!"

    What? Oh, she has stabbed me again.

    "Close combat is too dangerous, you need to distance yourself from her."

    "Y-your right.-"

    Fkn bullshit, ring why is Rider cutting through my armour like butter?

    "-I'll distance myself from her."

    "Possession of a potentially magical weapon combined with a complete lack of fear in the corpsman is reducing the effectiveness of your constructs against target: 'Rider.' The only source of fear allowing corpsman can make constructs under these circumstances is the Fear produced by person of interest: 'Illya'"

    Ring repair damage and don't bother with construct armour anymore, I pull the spike out of me again.

    "Gagah."

    "Command confirmed."

    I look back over to see Illya running away from Rider.

    "Whoa, she's a pretty fast runner."

    "Alert potential magical discharge detected."

    I flex my left-hand testing that it's back.

    "Right then fight smarter not harder."

    "Hang on! stop running and start fighting!"

    I use the ring to generate a construct long-sword.

    Rider throws her spike again this time causing a large explosion behind Illya.

    I get myself ready and prepare to charge.

    "Geez, this is insane."

    I start my charge.

    "Calm down Illya."

    "I don't know if I can."

    "Here she comes again."

    Rider starts charging towards Illya.

    "You again?!"

    Rider takes a swing at Illya that I deflect with the tip of the blade. Huh so if the strike is indirect the constructs hold up.

    "Illya visualize a powerful attack and swing me!"

    I take a big lumbering swing with the long-sword that rider dodges, but I'm already bringing the sword back down before the sword has finished it's arc. Just in time to deflect riders attack away from my body, I go to thrust the sword at riders heart.

    "Visualize a powerful attack"

    Rider parries my strike with the other end of the chain, giving me the opening I need to land a knee in her stomach.

    "Hurry!"

    Unfortunately, it doesn't look like my blow did much.

    "Geez, I don't care what happens!"

    "Alert potential magical discharge directed at corpsman."

    Wait, that's me I turn around and see a purple arc of energy coming towards me. RINGFTLNOW!

    "Command confirmed."

    The scenery flickers and I see below where Rider is consumed in a cloud of purple explosion.

    "Wow what just happened."

    "Watch who your shooting with that!"

    Illyas eyes glance up as I let gravity bring me back to the ground back and legs straight arms cross in front of me in a classic black adom pose.

    "Ah, sorry."

    There's a loud CRACK I land on riders back, then jump off to get some distance landing about twenty meters away.

    "Don't apologize keep shooting!"

    Illya looks over to Rin a slightly confused expression on her face as rider stumbles back to her feet.

    "That's a very safe distance."

    "She's like a parent here to watch their kid perform in an athletic event."

    Seriously how is she still standing her back show be broken.

    "So then let's see what you fear!" Ring let's.

    "Command confirmed."

    "Umm.. should I keep attacking?"

    I see, two women happy? What? ah well, fuck it ring generate the constructs.

    "Yes keep attacking your opponent isn't human so there's no need to hold back."

    To construct woman manifest in front of me smiling pleasantly at Rider, who charges them appearing not to notice.

    "This all seems a little too brutal, but I'm finally starting to feel like a magical girl now."

    Rider doesn't react.

    Right her eyes are covered, one of the constructs seemingly gently grabs strange eye cover rider has before being exploded by a beam of purple.
     
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    • bigreader said:
    Fear.
    It seemed to be a weird place to stop the chapter nice to see him actually doing something and getting involved now but it just seems like a strange place to end the action.
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    Thanks and yes it was originally I was gonna make this the start of the next thing (chapter?) but I decided against having one super update that's twice as long and had two half fights instead. the next chapter basically picks up where this one left off.
     
    dat_noob1926812 said:
    Right two options here (for a future update)

    Can a servant with sufficiently powerful Mana rating 'break' the control of a class card.
    [] yes Gilgamesh managed to partially do it by himself because of his 'ego'
    [] no, the control the class cards have over the heroic spirits powers is too strong

    The way I've planned the class cards is that the heroic spirits are 'trapped' within the cards to allow their powers to be used by whatever magus activates the card. (because that's how I interpreted it working in Prisma Illya if I'm wrong please correct me.

    please answer with a [x] yes or a [x] no
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    Voting is now closed, since there where only two votes I cast one in private and made a decision.
    what that decision is well... you'll find out.
     
    Kind of hard to follow what is happening and who's talking in that fight, I though it was Illya and Rin then I remember that Ruby is also there helping out.
     
    Aeveth said:
    Kind of hard to follow what is happening and who's talking in that fight, I though it was Illya and Rin then I remember that Ruby is also there helping out.
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    hmm... in future chapters I'll try and do something to be clearer.
    typically it's:
    uncertainty or panic = Illya
    orders = Rin
    comments and instructions = Ruby
     
    Who fears you? Pt 6
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    • Who fears you Pt 6
    sorry for the late update Uni assignments are coming up to the due date and I've been busy.



    Dammit, Illya.

    "Huh?" Illya appears quite confused.

    "She dodged it."

    Well, now that's just rude.

    I guess I could try and subspace her mask? No, that's a stupid idea the noble phantasm in her eyes would wipe us out.

    Illya fires another purple beam that rider dodges.

    Hmm…. how am I going to proceed with this.

    "I-i can't hit her again."

    I bring the construct blade to a more guarded position.

    "She's a lot more cautious now, we have to can attacks. Can you imagine something?"

    "I'll give it a try, extra large blast!"

    Illya starts shooting multiple pellets from her stick in a wide area that unfortunately includes me.

    Ring get us out of the way.

    "Command confirmed."

    "D-did that do it?"

    The scenery flickers and I'm back in the building.

    "Probably not."

    "Idiot that was too spread out! Prepare for a counter attack."

    Right Ring can we go deeper into her fears?

    "Confirmed."

    I see blood coagulate around Rider.

    Let's do so, we're running out of time.

    The world around me fades and I hear giggling? What?

    I see two women standing before me giggling they look pleased? I feel glad that they're here all I ever wanted was to make sure my sisters were safe. W-wait that's not my feelings those aren't my sisters, I have had to do terrible things to keep them safe. They fade away and I know the image was never real, no don't leave I can't let this happen again.

    And reality comes back into focus, Rider is still gathering what looks like blood. Fortunately, she appears to be very slow at it, what is Illya doing?

    What was that?

    I don't know but I can use this. Ring can you generate the sound of giggling from… whatever that was.

    "Confirmed."

    I see the noble phantasm is getting closer to being completed.

    RINGGENRATETHESOUNDRIGHTNOW.

    "Command confirmed."

    "It's using it's noble a phantasm!! Run!"

    Riders head jerks up at the giggling and… are those tears?

    "AAARRRRRGGGHHH!!!"

    Rider's scream sounds distorted.

    Ring can we simulate the voices?

    "Illya take cover!!"

    "Confirmed."

    "Umm… w-where?"

    Do so, have them say 'it was all your fault.'

    "Just get away from the enemy!" That damn stick is waving around a lot.

    "Command confirmed."

    "Hurry over here! A barrier won't work." Rin prepares some red gemstones in her hand.

    Rider appears to be starting to have some kind of seizure.

    "Converting all magic to physical protection barrier. Please endure it Illya."

    Shit out of time.

    Hmm… this amount of fear should do. Ring FTL us behind Rider.

    "Wh-wh-wh-what's going on here?!"

    "Command confirmed."

    Rin holds up a gem generating a barrier in front of her and Illya.

    "Class card lancer include." Wait? who?

    Riders hands go up to her head as she silently screams.

    "I'm sorry, I'll try to save the next one." I generate a construct sword.

    Rider appears to stop the noble phantasm and stand upright, speaking with a distorted voice.

    I prepare to stab Rider in the back as something breaks off her face.

    "Don't be."

    "Gae-Bolg!"

    Riders back explodes with the tip of a red lance touches the blade of my construct sword.

    Then Riders body burns

    "Lancer un-include.-"

    I dismiss the construct sword and go to grab the class card, as a young girl in a purple dress goes to do the same

    "-Target defeated class card rider-"

    She freezes. Then callously raises her stick and points it at my face.

    "Let go, this card is mine to recover."

    Her voice is monotone and flat, I stare her down for a second and her eyes widen with... recognition?

    "I suppose that's fair."

    I let go of the card with a kind smile, I mean I probably couldn't use it anyway.

    "Huh, w-who is that?"

    "Hu-hu-hu-hu."

    "That stupid laugh."

    "How unsightly Rin Tohsaka it starts with this one, I'll be taking this card."
     
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