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@zamin would it be possible to tell Aoki to do the shorter chapter but also add low-effort filler? I'm talking about stuff like character art, a doodled version of the author explaining that he's sick in a comedic way, the layout of the manga family's house, the characters going off script and needing to retake shots .... etc
 
We should probably think ways to make the exam arc interesting, or, well, magical. Like, both conflicts for different characters and way that it is different from a normal school.

Should it be directly an exam arc or should the cramming period be extended to introduce the characters? Maybe doing well in the exams is a requirement to go on the field trip later? And if a student does badly there can be a mini arc about preparing the to retake them so that they can attend?

As for this being a magic school, I imagine that not only the exams but the cheating and cheating countermeasures can be very creative. Like, how to you proof your exams against seers? What if someone has a familiar that they turn invisible? Can they trap a daemon in a pen to whisper the answers to them? Use illusions to take the exam in someone else's place? Sympathetic pens that makes one copy what the other writes?
 
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Yeah, pretty much. Also, instead of a CK2 system it's more of a pure combat focused system, which is why he can't gain any skills or points in stuff like Diplomacy or Stewardship.
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He does though. Has at least one perk in each at this point in the story. There's just not a lot of opportunities for a peasant to practice, so it's a lot slower.
 
mastigos said:
@zamin would it be possible to tell Aoki to do the shorter chapter but also add low-effort filler? I'm talking about stuff like character art, a doodled version of the author explaining that he's sick in a comedic way, the layout of the manga family's house, the characters going off script and needing to retake shots .... etc
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Not really? Stuff like that is more for manga that's already a hit (aka: already being published on its own rather than as part of a magazine) as a way to fill up any extra pages. Aoki and his series are still so small and new that trying to do something like that would just make people go "huh?"

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He does though. Has at least one perk in each at this point in the story. There's just not a lot of opportunities for a peasant to practice, so it's a lot slower.
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Sorry, there seems to be a misunderstanding. I'm not talking about Legends Never Die (where a Norse Viking gets a CK2 gamer system), I'm talking about Kami's Chosen King (where a Japanese samurai gets an RPG/fighting game system).

As Maeda mentioned, one of the main conflicts in the latter is that the samurai's gamer power just makes him fight good and doesn't actually help with things like ruling a nation or leading an army. He's basically a level 10 Fighter in a world where the vast majority of people are level 1 Peasants.
 
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[X][Aoki] Agree to accept a shorter chapter this week (All stats for Chapter 4 of Our Daughter is Actually a Vampire will suffer a -5 penalty)

[X][Yuzuki] The exam arc. A slice of life arc focused on the relationships between the main character, his students, and the other teachers at the academy.
 
Should there be a write-in reminding him of the request to be from a different PoV or will that be passed along anyway?
 
[X][Aoki] Agree to accept a shorter chapter this week (All stats for Chapter 4 of Our Daughter is Actually a Vampire will suffer a -5 penalty)
[X][Yuzuki] A field trip arc. A chance to get out of the academy and explore more of the world.
 
Bakkasama said:
We should probably think ways to make the exam arc interesting, or, well, magical. Like, both conflicts for different characters and way that it is different from a normal school.

Should it be directly an exam arc or should the cramming period be extended to introduce the characters? Maybe doing well in the exams is a requirement to go on the field trip later? And if a student does badly there can be a mini arc about preparing the to retake them so that they can attend?

As for this being a magic school, I imagine that not only the exams but the cheating and cheating countermeasures can be very creative. Like, how to you proof your exams against seers? What if someone has a familiar that they turn invisible? Can they trap a daemon in a pen to whisper the answers to them? Use illusions to take the exam in someone else's place? Sympathetic pens that makes one copy what the other writes?
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I like these ideas, also we could use the minor antagonists from previous chapters (if there were any) making an appearance once more in order to try and discredit the Main Character and sabotage the students at any opportunity. Either by making them doubt themselves (on the students where we establish have confidence issues) or by denying them the resources needed for their studying or for passing the exam.

Also, I would like to give a bit of foreshadowing about a Mastermind who is making life difficult for the MC so as to have a more clear antagonist for the series, building it up little by little and drawing readers with the mystery.
 
[X][Aoki] Agree to accept a shorter chapter this week (All stats for Chapter 4 of Our Daughter is Actually a Vampire will suffer a -5 penalty)
[X][Yuzuki] A field trip arc. A chance to get out of the academy and explore more of the world.
 
[X][Aoki] Agree to accept a shorter chapter this week (All stats for Chapter 4 of Our Daughter is Actually a Vampire will suffer a -5 penalty)
[X][Yuzuki] A field trip arc. A chance to get out of the academy and explore more of the world.
 
[X][Aoki] Agree to accept a shorter chapter this week (All stats for Chapter 4 of Our Daughter is Actually a Vampire will suffer a -5 penalty)
[X][Yuzuki] The exam arc. A slice of life arc focused on the relationships between the main character, his students, and the other teachers at the academy.
 
[X][Aoki] Agree to accept a shorter chapter this week (All stats for Chapter 4 of Our Daughter is Actually a Vampire will suffer a -5 penalty)
[X][Yuzuki] A field trip arc. A chance to get out of the academy and explore more of the world.
 
[X][Aoki] Delay this week's chapter until Aoki has time to recover (Lose 4 Favor, must speak to Editor-in-Chief to find a replacement for this week's chapter)
[X][Yuzuki] The exam arc. A slice of life arc focused on the relationships between the main character, his students, and the other teachers at the academy.
 
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Adhoc vote count started by zamin on Oct 26, 2022 at 6:01 AM, finished with 57 posts and 37 votes.
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Sorry the guy is far to close to being cancelled.

[X][Aoki] Refuse and make him do a full length chapter (No stat penalty, but Aoki Akira will receive an extra level of Overwork)
 
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Scheduled vote count started by zamin on Oct 24, 2022 at 11:29 AM, finished with 59 posts and 38 votes.
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25. Time to Pitch In (Week 4 Pitching)
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    • First of all, apologies for the lateness. However, it's been a particularly busy few days for me.

    To keep it short, I left my job at the end of October. I've found a new job which is much better paying, but needs me to start ASAP, so I've spent the last few days running around sorting out all the paperwork and HR stuff. This is going to be a full time job, so I don't know if I'll be able to keep updating this as frequently as before, but I will try to get at least one post out a week.

    [X][Aoki] Agree to accept a shorter chapter this week (All stats for Chapter 4 of Our Daughter is Actually a Vampire will suffer a -5 penalty)

    [X][Yuzuki] The exam arc. A slice of life arc focused on the relationships between the main character, his students, and the other teachers at the academy.

    Despite your initial fears, Editor-in-Chief Suzuki Isamu was not too upset at the idea of delaying Greater Evil, Lesser Evil until Gendou could develop better drawing skills. Of course, being less upset didn't mean that he was actually happy with this development.

    "I know that this particular series' selection was a bit rushed, but in the future I will expect you to be more careful before picking up a new mangaka," he said, tossing your report at the top of a worryingly tall pile of documents. "Still, perhaps this is a blessing in disguise. We have another young mangaka who is in need of more… shall we say, personal guidance."

    "What do you mean by that?" you asked, feeling a bit worried at the gleam in Suzuki's eyes.

    "This particular manga series had a strong start, but has since struggled to garner much interest from our readers," he explained. "Masaru has reported that the mangaka is somewhat difficult to work with, but I suspect that this might be a personal issue between the two of them. Since you've chosen to drop one of your other series, I'll be transferring this one to you instead."

    "Alright, that makes sense," you nodded. "But… what if Masaru's reports are accurate? Should I be prioritizing this series over my others?"

    "No. No need for that," Suzuki grimaced as he shook his head. "I expect you to treat this just like any of your other series. If it works out, then good. But if it can't show any significant improvement within the next few chapters, then we'll just have to axe it."

    "So what is this series, anyway?"

    "Oh, right. I knew I was forgetting something…" Suzuki paused for a moment to dig out a document. The tower of paperwork on his desk wobbled alarmingly for a moment, only to settle down as the Editor-in-Chief found the file he wanted. "Here you go."

    "'I Was Summoned Into Another World, But Instead of Being The Hero I'm The Demon General's Advisor!'" you read out loud, already feeling a headache coming on. "Well, I suppose it could be worse. If there's nothing else…" you stood up as Suzuki nodded and turned his attention back to his paperwork.

    "Masaru will handle this week's chapter, then officially transfer it to you next week," he said. "I'd advise you to read through it beforehand if you have the free time."

    Unfortunately, it seems that free time isn't going to be on the cards anytime soon. The moment you return to your desk, you're distracted by the cheerful beep of a new email. It seems your mangaka aren't wasting any time with their pitch submissions this week.

    Bracing yourself for the worst, you open the first message in your inbox.

    Space Racer Subaru-kun Chapter 4 Pitch:

    The chapter starts immediately where the previous one ended, with Subaru and Kiki racing through the dark tunnels. The route twists and turns unexpectedly, forcing them to slow down. Since they can still see clearly, the Juva racers quickly pull ahead.

    Fortunately, Subaru has a secret weapon: the new upgrades that Old Man Lakus installed earlier.

    Flipping a switch, he activates the ship's new sonar sensors, which maps out the area around them. Spotting a shortcut he peels away from the pack and tears off in a different direction, prompting jeers from the competitors and audience alike who believe that he's gotten confused and turned around.

    Kiki is annoyed at Subaru and asks why he didn't use it earlier, but he informs her that it uses up a lot of power, so he can only use it for a few minutes before their ship shuts down. Determined to make the most of this opportunity, he guns the engine and surges through the shortcut.

    Meanwhile, Karidok is in the lead. Looking behind, he feels reassured as he sees no sign of Subaru's ship. As the finish line comes into sight, he laughs at the thought of some outsider brat thinking he could actually beat a Juva underground.

    But suddenly, Subaru's ship bursts through the wall next to him, sending him veering off course! Subaru and Kiki steal the lead at the last second, dashing ahead to first place before anyone can stop them!

    As they cheer and hug each other in front of the shocked audience, Karidok slams his fist onto his steering wheel, visibly denting it in his anger.

    "Damn him! I'll make him pay for this insult!" he growls.
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    Our Daughter is Actually a Vampire! Chapter 4 Pitch:

    This week, we see Ikoa's wife's perspective of the previous chapter. While out shopping for groceries, she spots her husband. But just as she's about to call out to him, she notices that he's acting really suspiciously, sneaking around and trying to disguise himself.

    Feeling worried, she decides to follow him. She's so focused on sneaking behind him that she doesn't see their daughter. However, the daughter notices her and immediately freaks out because she assumes that her mother is following her.

    Not wanting to get embarrassed by her overprotective mother, she drags her friends off their previous route and into all sorts of different places - they go into the arcade, visit a fancy cafe, etc. as the daughter tries to shake off her mother, the mother follows Ikoa, and Ikoa gets increasingly frustrated as he tries to keep up with his daughter.

    After seeing Ikoa get caught by the cops, his shocked wife jumps out of her hiding place and tries to convince them that it's just a misunderstanding, only to get arrested herself. As the couple argue with the cops, the daughter walks around the corner, sees them, then turns and goes the other way in embarrassment.
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    The Greatest Fake Teacher Chapter 19 Pitch:

    Now that the festival is over, the exam season has arrived!

    The chapter starts with a teacher's meeting, where Kaito-sensei learns about the kind of tests that a magical school does. Every subject has two tests - Theory and Practical. The former is a normal exam done inside a special anti-magic room, while the latter is done out in the open in order to avoid too much damage if something explodes.

    As he is a new teacher, Kaito is asked to keep his eye on several "problem students". The other teachers suspect that they are cheating somehow, but they can never catch them in the act.

    Later, in private, Lady Malicia asks Kaito-sensei to help provide some extra tutoring for a few students who seem to be struggling in class. Kaito-sensei agrees easily enough, only to be shocked when one of his extra-tutor students turns out to be Delilah - the girl who'd confessed her feelings for him before!

    Kaito-sensei tries to remain professional, but it's clear that Delilah still hasn't gotten over her crush. She keeps day dreaming and getting distracted, and there are several awkward moments because she keeps trying to meet with him alone.

    It turns out that Delilah normally gets top grades but deliberately flopped her last test just to get a chance to spend more time with her crush. This causes some tension with the other two extra-tutor students, Eloise and Meagan, who are legitimately struggling to keep up and hate how Delilah is trying to hog all of the teacher's attention.

    The chapter ends with an ultimatum: Eloise and Meagan tell Kaito-sensei that either Delilah drops out of the class or they will.
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    What does Maeda think of this week's scripts?

    Available suggestions    : 5 (+1 extra suggestion for both Aoki and Yuzuki)

    [ ][Space Racer] Accept as is (give Tana-sensei an extra reroll)

    [ ][Space Racer] Change a few things
    -[ ] What?

    [ ][Space Racer] Reject and rewrite from scratch (-5 penalty to all final stats)
    -[ ] Suggestions for the rewrite?


    [ ][Vampire] Accept as is (give Aoki an extra reroll)

    [ ][Vampire] Change a few things
    -[ ] What?

    [ ][Vampire] Reject and rewrite from scratch (-5 penalty to all final stats)
    -[ ] Suggestions for the rewrite?


    [ ][Fake Teacher] Accept as is (give Yuzuki an extra reroll)

    [ ][Fake Teacher] Change a few things
    -[ ] What?

    [ ][Fake Teacher] Reject and rewrite from scratch (-5 penalty to all final stats)
    -[ ] Suggestions for the rewrite?
     
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    • I don't like that Subaru found a shortcut due to the sonar. That advantage should still have gone to those who has home court advantage in these tunnels. How about:

    They still find a shortcut, but it is instead one that is being used by some of the other racers (home court advantage). The twist here is that after the mention of the sonar's power drain, he collides with another racer (Karidok) and they are neck and neck until they literally burst through the cave exit by breaking a bit of the sides (maybe mc manages to nudge Karidok to break more of the wall at the last second because he was too busy raging). They manage to edge the win, but their ship gets heavily damaged but is in an ambiguous state of either being a total wreck, or a salvageable one depending on whatever future plot gets decided.
     
    I feel like the ending of Vampire does away with the funny limited-perspective premise, where Ikoa only sees his daughter, his wife only sees Ikoa, and his daughter only sees his wife. Would it be possible to edit the final scene so Ikoa almost gets caught by the cops, but his wife's intervention ensures that she does instead, which the daughter notices but Ikoa doesn't?

    Also the Great Teacher chapter was genuinely delightful, no notes. I agree that Subaru-kun needs something besides a tunnel shortcut, but I'm not sure what.
     
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    TimEd said:
    I don't like that Subaru found a shortcut due to the sonar. That advantage should still have gone to those who has home court advantage in these tunnels. How about:

    They still find a shortcut, but it is instead one that is being used by some of the other racers (home court advantage). The twist here is that after the mention of the sonar's power drain, he collides with another racer (Karidok) and they are neck and neck until they literally burst through the cave exit by breaking a bit of the sides (maybe mc manages to nudge Karidok to break more of the wall at the last second because he was too busy raging). They manage to edge the win, but their ship gets heavily damaged but is in an ambiguous state of either being a total wreck, or a salvageable one depending on whatever future plot gets decided.
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    I like this idea and it seems to create an excellent plot thread for what happens next, alongside the side-plot of what Karidok might do to get revenge.
     
    TimEd said:
    I don't like that Subaru found a shortcut due to the sonar. That advantage should still have gone to those who has home court advantage in these tunnels. How about:

    They still find a shortcut, but it is instead one that is being used by some of the other racers (home court advantage). The twist here is that after the mention of the sonar's power drain, he collides with another racer (Karidok) and they are neck and neck until they literally burst through the cave exit by breaking a bit of the sides (maybe mc manages to nudge Karidok to break more of the wall at the last second because he was too busy raging). They manage to edge the win, but their ship gets heavily damaged but is in an ambiguous state of either being a total wreck, or a salvageable one depending on whatever future plot gets decided.
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    Alternatively, the shortcut was only opened up because another racer crashed into a wall or something. That's why none of the locals knew about it.
     
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