Dark Prince of Camelot

We've only (officially) met Gemma an hour ago or so. Meanwhile:
"Mhm. Well you've definitely made an impression. All I've heard all day is how nice you are."
So who told her about us?

Piper, Gavin, Gemma - they probably all made a comment, and she is wondering why the new guy is hanging around her magical friends specifically.

Eh, it looks like Soccer is happening, so we'll have a chance to clear this up.
 
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[X] Physics
 
This quest was a great surprise. Well written, interesting mythos and use of pre-existing mythology, and a nice use of magical girl tropes. Fun theme, good and not difficult reading with a great flow too.

I do feel that it could do with focusing more on the protagonist, it still feels like we're at an extending mix of tutorial and Chargen. The quest has the risk of becoming stuck on the sandpit that is mundane stuff. Lots of quest get lost and forget to advance the plot. It soon becomes a drag for everyone involved, cause there's no sense of reward at the reading.

You're an experienced author, so I'm not too worried.
 
This quest was a great surprise. Well written, interesting mythos and use of pre-existing mythology, and a nice use of magical girl tropes. Fun theme, good and not difficult reading with a great flow too.
I'm glad you like it! Always good to have more participants.
I do feel that it could do with focusing more on the protagonist, it still feels like we're at an extending mix of tutorial and Chargen. The quest has the risk of becoming stuck on the sandpit that is mundane stuff. Lots of quest get lost and forget to advance the plot. It soon becomes a drag for everyone involved, cause there's no sense of reward at the reading.
I wouldn't say tutorial, but this is set-up. You're still at the point where the plot you choose to pursue can vary wildly, so right now I'm just sort of throwing out hooks and waiting to see which draws attention. Don't worry, shit will start to hit the fan soon enough. I don't want this to be one of those quests that peters out on inconsequential bullshit.
You're an experienced author, so I'm not too worried.
Aw, shucks. :oops:
 

Husbando-wise our pickings are still rather slim, especially with two of the candidates maybe being our real dad at one point in time of their existence which is gonna be turn off for some people (well that and they're still trying to get with our mom's reincarnation anyway)

At least we still have elf man, and his luscious locks, and dreamy eyes, though the fact that we snubbed him when he invited us back to his place, and that he's kind of our biggest roadblock to world domination (which is clearly for a good cause, I swear) makes things complicated too
 
I'm still waiting to see the people behind the Knights, specially Gawain and Arturia. Gemma and Terri are fun and interesting, but they seem to me much more interesting in the friend sense. Gwin is a politician. Literally worse than Lucifer Elf, who is very bad.

Wonder if we will get a MILF waifu. That isn't immortal evil Aunt.

Ah, waifu discussion, as senseless and baseless as I remember. It's good to be back.
 
Morgana is for friend shipping. We're more her friend than her serial reincarnating daughter is, even on that girl's first go around.
 
What does Morgana have against Camelot, anyway?

Prolly that her lil sis had the luck to become a Queen thanks to a magic sword that said "Yeah, you're cool," instead of working her ass off in a medieval setting where she was looked down off to learn the great magicks to become Queen. So, she dislikes Artura for cheating.

Or cuz Artura HAD a family and all and no one tried to find her after she was lost. And possibly rejected her bcuz dark magic.

She prolly likes Mordred because a) He's probably a bastard, therefore a sign that Artura screwed up, and b) he was prolly a toddler when she first saw him and he was the 'most adorable thing ever Gawain wasnt this cute'.
Or whatever. Maybe he was a poilite lad who liked her magic tricks, despite mommy saying auntie was bad. Kinda.
 
What does Morgana have against Camelot, anyway?

Prolly that her lil sis had the luck to become a Queen thanks to a magic sword that said "Yeah, you're cool," instead of working her ass off in a medieval setting where she was looked down off to learn the great magicks to become Queen. So, she dislikes Artura for cheating.
This, probably. Morgana worked her butt off to gain her powers, and then Arturia derps into a magical artifact that not only makes her stronger than her, but gives her a kingdom too. Meanwhile, everybody hates Morgana for the audacity of wanting to do wizardy things and loves her sister, despite her having magic too, just because hers is yellow instead of purple or whatnot.

And then the Morgana hate is so bad that, like somebody else pointed out, her own daughter had to work to redeem herself from being her daughter. She didn't just get disowned by her daughter, everybody acknowledging that she disowned her mother was considered a reward.

That'd drive anybody loopy.

And then along comes Mordred, living proof that the Arturia love is just as shallow as it seemed to be, and he's like, the only person who doesn't hate her. So she dotes on him, because he's her nephew.

So Mordred grows up, doted on by the nice, if a little bit weird, aunt that everybody else claims is an evil witch. He gets to find out firsthand the corruption inherent in the rulers of Camelot. Eventually, he hits a breaking point, realizes that they've got to go, because they're becoming as bad as the people they're fighting, and turns against them.

Naturally, the Aunt who's already seen all of the downsides of the system he's rebelling against is going to throw in her lot with him.

And then one of the very few people she likes gets thrown in an icicle for a million years, literally.
 
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Meanwhile, everybody hates Morgana for the audacity of wanting to do wizardy things and loves her sister, despite her having magic too, just because hers is yellow instead of purple or whatnot.

And then the Morgana hate is so bad that, like somebody else pointed out, her own daughter had to work to redeem herself from being her daughter. She didn't just get disowned by her daughter, everybody acknowledging that she disowned her mother was considered a reward.
This is unclear to me. I find it unlikely that she was hated for attempting wizardry to the point her daughter wanted to disown her. I believe it is more plausible that by the time that happened, she has already firmly established herself as Camelot's hated enemy. Makes me wonder what she did, because mere prejudice does not usually go that far.

The initial cause of conflict being jealousy looks very probable, though.
 
This is unclear to me. I find it unlikely that she was hated for attempting wizardry to the point her daughter wanted to disown her. I believe it is more plausible that by the time that happened, she has already firmly established herself as Camelot's hated enemy. Makes me wonder what she did, because mere prejudice does not usually go that far.

The initial cause of conflict being jealousy looks very probable, though.
At the very least I doubt it was just "magic". I have a feeling that if it was "just" magic, then it was really, really dark shit. Messing with souls, undead, etc. Human sacrifices. Conjuring demons. Weakening the Walls Between Worlds. Mind Control. Death curses. And so on.
 
Makes me wonder what she did, because mere prejudice does not usually go that far.
They burned people alive on mere suspicion of magic, if that helps you figure it out. :V
At the very least I doubt it was just "magic". I have a feeling that if it was "just" magic, then it was really, really dark shit. Messing with souls, undead, etc. Human sacrifices. Conjuring demons. Weakening the Walls Between Worlds. Mind Control. Death curses. And so on.
I'm not saying that Morgana did nothing wrong. I'm just saying that I'm not so sure they waited for the weird stuff before they broke out the torches and pitchforks.
 
At the very least I doubt it was just "magic". I have a feeling that if it was "just" magic, then it was really, really dark shit. Messing with souls, undead, etc. Human sacrifices. Conjuring demons. Weakening the Walls Between Worlds. Mind Control. Death curses. And so on.
End of the day, the reasons for past actions are little more than academic in my opinion. Morgana and Mordred might have been justified in their rebellion against Camelot, end of the day though it is still their fault that the Knights have been fighting a desperate holding action for the past thousand thousand years. Granted, it might have been worth it, maybe, the present can't be changed and all there is to do is to move forwards.
 
They burned people alive on mere suspicion of magic, if that helps you figure it out. :V
I don't know man, I think Magic was pretty accepted in Camelot. I mean, it was respected enough for it to be part of a Prince's official curriculum.

What I am more interested in is how Mordred himself views Morgana. I mean, as far as I can tell, the him of now doesn't seem to place her upon any pedestal. He even calls her vain and arrogant in the first few posts.
 
They burned people alive on mere suspicion of magic, if that helps you figure it out. :V
'They' who? Camelot was the Land of Magic. The magic the setting has today is just remnants of what was.

Merlin's magic does not stem from the sword or the Round Table, yet he is the hero, and Morgana is the villain.

Damn, that really makes me want to visit Auntie, if only to unlock her entry.

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What I am more interested in is how Mordred himself views Morgana. I mean, as far as I can tell, the him of now doesn't seem to place her upon any pedestal. He even calls her vain and arrogant in the first few posts.
He also said to Bone he does not get along with his family much.
 
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