Are you sure you posted the right version? I had just reread the reposted versions and I can detect only two small changes. You didn't even correct the typos.I'd actually appreciate it if you removed this, as I changed a decent amount in the parts I previewed earlier in the thread. Not fully rewritten, mind you, but there are some larger changes that might be missed that are going to be relevant down the road.
The changes I detect are Weld's comment about names, and Marrow's line about "failure is not an option" and the narration immediately prior.
The typos I noticed were the quicksilver/silverstreak issue and the "the fights any fights " line.
You said that there are changes that are supposed to be important in going forward, but despite having read the original versions multiple times and the new version I simply can't see anything other than what I have already posted. I am simply going to have to ask for help and ask you what significant changes you are talking about.
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