Madfish said:
First I think it would be better to wait until evening unless we want to say that Zelda was invited too, our parents are going to be busy with bathing and putting a toddler to bed shortly. Interruptions aren't going to help here and we don't want them distracted.
A very good point, consider me changed to 'later this evening'.
I also thing we want to start with it being a political sort of invite. It's still personal in that it's from Kahlua herself but she's jumped the gun on asking us before asking her parents permission.
I'm curious why you think this. In my opinion that is the wrong tact to take because it isn't as humanizing as simply describing it as a birthday party.
If need be we can mention the political part of it, but starting out with it doesn't sound great to me.
We should also mention that her parents are wary of Sunnydale because of the really bad rep it has Moonlite World wide from the local Nightlife. It's a big stigma in the Moonlit World so there's an even chance they'll block the invite considering we're planning on writing back to say she needs to ask them first. We also need to add that while it might be moot if they do ratify the invite that it's a big deal to turn down due to they're social and political position.
Again, here, I don't see why talking about the politics would be helpful in convincing our parents that they should let us go. They wouldn't care about this stuff. Reputation is a big deal, to us, and we may know how much it will matter in the end, but they don't. To their point of view it's not a big deal if we don't get involved with the movers and shakers of the supernatural world. Hell, that's probably their preference given the danger involved in that kind of escapade.
Us as questers have a
very different perspective than Alex's parents do, and the political considerations that matter a lot to us are just going to make it sound more and more of a bad idea to our parents because it's going to be repeatedly pointing out that their eight year old son is getting involved in heavy matters well before he has any right to be dealing with such things.
I know you don't like actual word votes but if we want to get our intent across we're may need at least a few 'quotes'
I'm not so opposed to throwing a few quotes up to try to get an idea across, but I just don't like it when they're much longer than a sentence or so, because it gives no time for reaction and it gets way more restricting the more words you put into it.
Perhaps this might help some thoughts
Pros to going:-
- Could make useful contacts, connections and even potentially allies.
- Shed or mitigate some of the stigma of where we live.
- Likely to learn a lot more about the Moonlit world and the opinions and biases of those within it.
- Don't anger Kahlua
- and if the invite is 'ratified' don't through their consideration in their face. (This could be better phrased)
- Last chance in a while to see some of our friends.
Cons to going:-
- Danger.
- Worrying Lu-Sensei.
- Could destroy our reputation with a bad showing.
I don't think we really need to mention most of these, and should really portray the ones we should mention non-politically if possible. Though noting that this is the last chance to see some of our friends in a while is a big one, so that should definitely get mentioned.