Why couldn't it have been Star Wars?

With the few toasterfuckers left alive, having them give Rex the knowledge how to build Gellar fields or Hexagrammic wards is pretty much vital to his continued existence. Pentagrammic wards would also be nice, but would require a member of the Inquisition... and that wasn't happening on that planet.

Or something like the Cadian Pylons from the Necrons, but that seems like even less of a chance of ever happening.

...how well did all his other thousands of planets deal with the demonic incursion?
 
I love how Rex has now adopted the Rogue Servitor Mentality from Stellaris. I might do another run through soon... with that exact Throne line.
 
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I'm sorry to see that a lot of people weren't too happy with these last few chapters. While I prefer to read positive comments, I am glad you're bringing up your issues as well. Thank you for your feedback, it has been most helpful and I hope to continue to improve my skills as a writer.

If I'm being entirely honest, I wasn't too happy with these last few chapters either, but my other ideas were just as bad or worse. I'll try to do better in the future as I continue the story and I hope you all will stay and continue reading and enjoy.
 
I didn't like what happened but that in no way takes away from the story which still is on the top of my ongoing list of fanfic.

it's also in character for Rex, until he is hit over the head he doesn't seem to be proactive, saying that I hope this is the last time someone similar happens (missing chaos taint that is blatant for years and not monitoring his subjects/captives) as he is a machine which doesn't forget and has unlimited awareness through his units.
 
First and foremost was ensuring the humans that remained were cared for. He had built plenty of housing previously, not being sure how many prisoners he'd be taking with the Tau or in the future. He'd decided to get over the issues of urban by building 'tall' rather than 'wide'. The structures he'd made were like mini-hive cities. He'd called them Hivites.

They were a fairly simple design, filled with whatever he'd thought might be nice to have for a human. Ten kilometers wide and the same in length, around one kilometer in height. The homes, which were apartments of 1000 square meters suited to fit five adults quite comfortably, lined the outer walls of the buildings, giving the 'residents' a nice view of the terraformed wilderness that could be opened for fresh air. There were two hundred and eighty apartments separated into four sections per level with one hundred levels, meaning that a fully packed Hivite could comfortably house one hundred and forty thousand people.

The wilderness that stretched for hundreds of kilometers beyond each complex was a carefully controlled ecosystem, with various cloned fauna and small fluffy animals of zero threat value and high cuteness levels from those few worlds he'd visited with life beyond primordial goop.

That wasn't the end of the facilities of the Hivites, however. In the inner layers beyond the housing were communal eating zones, recreational and exercise facilities, internal gardens, even a market district for those who wished to engage in commerce using his own currency, which he called Credits and gave everyone a few thousand of. They didn't have to buy food or pay for housing, clothes, medical care, or anything like that, but he wanted to encourage people to engage in things like art, music, maybe science if they would be so kind and share that with others. Whether the money would aid in that, he had no idea, it was an experimental thing.

There were also hundreds of portals in every section on every level, as well as in most of the facilities. They integrated well into the hallways, allowing his forces instant access to virtually any location in the entire structure. He'd also included many conventional surveillance systems, as he didn't want prisoner getting any ideas. If they did, though, there were several, off-to-the-side areas throughout the structure that lacked such obvious systems, just a lot of dust. In truth, dust was rather prevalent everywhere in the facility.

He'd rather they plot against him in a place where he'd know everything they planned than find some other workaround.

The structures were large enough that they required their own life support systems, of which there were dozens of redundant and separate systems that worked independently of each other, as well as generators to support them independent of his territory's own power generation.

Hivites feels like punchline to a bad dad joke, wich feels quite in character now that he has made Kira his official adopted daughter.

I assume that all the housing is just about similar when it comes to living standard so I am quite curious how the nobility feels about living like a "commoner."

Also how quickly did it take for Rex to terraform and build his "Hivites" becase the aperant speed of it feels like such a power move and it feels like Rex is not far from reaching a sufficient mass and momentum that nothing comprehensible will be able to stand up to him. As in a second Indomedus Crused is need to take Rex down.

They were really nice to live in, he was sure, if you ignored the fact one was living in a police state/prison camp.

The difference between a dystopia and a utopia is sometimes a matter of perspective. Considering average IoM's living standerd just rockeded of to the strotospher I think many would think that they are in paradise. Especially since I highly doubt they are even aware of the panopticon level of surveillance they are under.

"Welcome, one and all, to the Empire of the Galactic Throne. Your wellbeing is our purpose."

Pampering is mandatory. Please do not resist.
I am however curious, the Eldar fell because of their descent into horrific debauched hedonism. Will the humans fall for the same trapp? Growing bored of their privileges and two descend into the same depths and attract the attention of Slaanesh. Will Rex be paranoid enough about that and take precautionary measures.
 
It kind of makes sense that the chaos uprising was sudden to him since he didn't notice it at all before, but what about the entire guard regiment? What about all the priests, and pdf, and mechanicus, and so on? No one noticed that things were getting worse in the underhive? I could buy someone noticing and then getting killed, but if there were bots everywhere, that seems badly off to me. He spent years on that world and never even tried to terraform the pollution away somewhere just to see if he could for later, far away from any hive cities? No attempts at constant surveillance everywhere?
Everything that happens after the uprising starts makes sense, at least. Not much else to do than run away when a single daemon anywhere could take him out like that again the second it saw one of his units. What feels dumb is really only how it got to that point.

Tldr: between "here are five layers of justifications for all of this" and "Your protagonist is pretty stupid", by now, I'm leaning towards the second of those, but the consequences make sense :D
 
"Out of the billion worlds in the Infinite Empire, the Mysterios had singled out the world of Cepharil – where Trazyn had pillaged a World Spirit mere centuries before."

From the novel "The infinite and the Divine"
Yabut seriously, the 'billion' is probably as accurate as the 'infinite'. It could be it's translated from Necron for 'metric fuckton'. :p
"Welcome, one and all, to the Empire of the Galactic Throne. Your wellbeing is our purpose."
Empire of the Galactic Throne seems a poor choice of name on two fronts:
* 'Empire' is overselling it, and also is going to provoke anyone from the Imperium of Man (given that the two words mean essentially the same thing).
* 'Throne' is super going to provoke anyone from the Imperium of Man.

I mean, it's very unlikely you'll be able to come to peaceful terms with them any time soon but you don't have to be in your face offensive about it.
 
Yabut seriously, the 'billion' is probably as accurate as the 'infinite'. It could be it's translated from Necron for 'metric fuckton'. :p

Not sure about the hostility here. It's a very straightforward quote from reputable characters. The Necrons have access to "infinite" energy in the form of monoliths that can copy ships and crews wholesale. The C'tan are the closest things to divine "legit" gods of the materium.
 
It just chaos attack was so sudden. There was no indication at all.

Personally, it was that there was such a quick turnaround from what should be a series of very debilitating events.

He was ousted as not what he claimed to be, revealed himself as an AI, confessed to murdering the AdMech that stood against him, was possessed by a daemon for everyone to see, fought it off, evacuated some then burned the rest with the planet, delivered an ultimatum, then somehow convinced a significant portion of the remaining populace that he's perfectly fine and capable of protecting them as he announced their secession from the Imperium.

Most of that in a day. The whiplash was strong and the resolutions were too smooth, in particular, that last bit I think.

Perhaps it would have been better if we got the see things from the people's point of view a bit more. For instance how loyal to the idea of the Imperium and its God-Emperor were the people of Gansora? I don't think we ever see how Rex and his deeds were received by the common man.
 
Empire of the Galactic Throne seems a poor choice of name on two fronts:
* 'Empire' is overselling it, and also is going to provoke anyone from the Imperium of Man (given that the two words mean essentially the same thing).
* 'Throne' is super going to provoke anyone from the Imperium of Man.

I mean, it's very unlikely you'll be able to come to peaceful terms with them any time soon but you don't have to be in your face offensive about it.

It's also just a really confusing name on several levels. He has a single populated world (barely an empire), there is no throne, and doesn't have enough territory to be called galactic, so no part of the name is accurate yet. And it sounds more like a name used for the Imperium on some feudal world that hasn't been integrated yet.

To reiterate what others have said, while the pacing of the last few chapters has felt really wonky, I'm still enjoying this story.
 
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He has Nanites damnit, why did he not saturate all the hives with them?! He has the resources of 100.000 systems, he can drown worlds with nanites. He knows about Chaos...so what in the fuck did he do for 3 years!?
With the few toasterfuckers left alive, having them give Rex the knowledge how to build Gellar fields or Hexagrammic wards is pretty much vital to his continued existence. Pentagrammic wards would also be nice, but would require a member of the Inquisition... and that wasn't happening on that planet.
The problem with these is that I don't think the author fully understands the setting. The things he keeps saying are superstitious nonsense, even after having nearly been possessed by a demon, are what keep humanity at the bare treading of water that they maintain. The prayers to the machine spirit work and are actual parts of maintenance, but he sees it as superstitious nonsense.

Edit to clarify - SOME of the prayers are real and work because Machine Spirits are real.

The prayers to the Emperor may not be much for the individual normal person, being so weak in the warp, but when its trillions or more across a galaxy, with psykers assisting that, it is what keeps the imperium staggering along and fighting everything that would happily, gleefully kill, consume, or subvert humanity. the next best potential faction in the setting for humanity in the setting are the Tau who don't think the warp is real and are only ignored by chaos because their souls are so tiny in the Warp compared to everything else. Add on to the heavily implied factoid that gue'la are not only second class citizens but are also likely castrated chemically and/or outright mind controlled by the Tau controlled race of mind controllers. That's what makes the setting grimdark rather than grimderp. Grimdark is where the situation is so dire that the worst things are sometimes the necessary things and even then at best you might only live to tomorrow. Grimderp is "and then bad shit happened, lol, fuck you thats how the setting is because satire or something" Yeah, objectively there are no good guys in 40k, subjectively I root for humanity because I am human and they are the only ones that fight for humans.

I do like the story, its been interesting, but the crisis after crisis by a revolving cast just waiting to wander on stage for their turn is getting a bit repetitive and feels like an answer to "cant have a Commander get too far along, which curveball will it be now"
 
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Oddly, the only thing that I really disliked was the Empire of the Galactic Throne name thing. He could do better for a name. That'd just piss off the folks from the IoM and confuse people.

Maybe the confusing folks is what he wants.

I can't wait until he explains that they should be rather thankful to his Adopted Daughter Kira who is a Blank. Due to her, he didn't just fall to Scrap Code and the demon invasion.

Well, it's obvious what his short-term R&D should be. Cloning vats for Kira. He needs a few billion of her ASAP.

Looking back, it's obvious why the corrupted were going after Kira. She was the only one that could really harm their local goals. If any of their local mooks had taken her out, Rex would have been corrupted.

I'm not really surprised that he didn't detect them. Magic Wards. I'm sure they call it something else, but that's what it boils down to.

I can't wait until the Tech-Priests groan realizing that they flunked knowing 1.6M knowledge. I'm not really surprised though. Most of the science that we take as basics of knowledge has likely been overturned over 15 thousand years or so.
 
I'm feeling nice, have three chapters for today.
Thank you for not leaving us with a Chaos attack cliffhanger... that would have been...

By the way, why the name "Galactic Throne" ?

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Read other comment and I agree that this name would antagonise everyone from Imperium of Man.
Would Rex reconsider later in the story?
Seems unreasonable for him to make new mistake so soon...
 
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Random note to move away from the chaos talk and since he's near the Tau Empire. There's actually a dark age AI that rules a world near the Tau that the Tau occasionally try and conquer but get beaten back by the absurd technology the AI equips its human servants with, servants it then on a global scale erases the memories of ever being equipped with such weapons and fighting the Tau. So, if he wants technology far beyond his current grade and an understanding of how to AI in 40k he could easily just invade that AI with a gazillion or so troops and vivisect it for what he wants, it certainly doesn't seem like a benevolent entity either so there's little moral quandary about murderizing it, and if it is friendly then it's probably possible to trade for what he wants.

Seems like it's a solid way to solve his Chaos issue, get daot AI tech, integrate it, then think really hard and make daemons explode just by being in the general vicinity.
 
Not sure about the hostility here. It's a very straightforward quote from reputable characters. The Necrons have access to "infinite" energy in the form of monoliths that can copy ships and crews wholesale. The C'tan are the closest things to divine "legit" gods of the materium.
I'm not being hostile, I'm just pointing out that the quote is not a reliable source for 'how many worlds are in the Necron empire'. I'm not saying the characters aren't reputable, or the quote itself is misquoted or not canon. I'm saying 'billion' is very likely a poetic word for 'lots and lots and lots' and shouldn't be taken seriously as an actual estimate.
 
I'm not being hostile, I'm just pointing out that the quote is not a reliable source for 'how many worlds are in the Necron empire'. I'm not saying the characters aren't reputable, or the quote itself is misquoted or not canon. I'm saying 'billion' is very likely a poetic word for 'lots and lots and lots' and shouldn't be taken seriously as an actual estimate.

I don't see how it's hyperbole given that people call the imperium "empire of a million worlds" and the databook's supports that. Can you give an example of the 'unreliability' of the character in question? Because that is a very definitive statement I linked. I don't see how a billion worlds is unrealistic for a civilization at the Necrons level.
 
while I rather like this story so far I would caution you from going too far into the memes unless you want to write a crackfic.
The mechanicus and it's members know far more about science then we do today, they still design and build starships, warp drives, energy weapons, and all sorts of things we can only dream about. A good rule of thumb is that an enginseer probably has about a bachelors in a engineering field and one in theology, a magos likely has equivalent knowledge to someone with at least one hard science phd, and an archmagos is likely more educated then any human currently alive.
Secondly you are asking questions about someone who died almost 40 millennia ago, the chances of Isaac newtons name having survived more then a few dozen millennia is basically zero, but I would be very surprised if any of the techpriests there didn't know the laws of motion in general, even if they didn't know them under that name.(I mean could you recite the names of the Mesopotamian gods referenced in the epic of Gilgamesh in order of appearance? that book isn't even half as old as some individual members of the mechanicus)
Thirdly faith is a real physical force in warhammer, it's effects can be measured and quantified, so calling anything superstitious is in and of itself superstitious nonsense. I mean your SI nearly got beat by a friggen lesser demon, whereas the machine spirits of individual starships have been known to fight off greater demons for weeks at a time, and they aren't even sapient.
 
Frankly, the best way to get anti-warp tech would probably be sending some drones back to that Necron world blasting "SORRY ABOUT THE FIGHT YOU SPOOKED ME - HOW DO I TELL THE OLD ONE'S ANGRY BOWEL BLAST REALM TO FUCK OFF? - CAN OFFER ORK REMOVAL SERVICES AS PAYMENT - PLEASE REPLY VIA THIS MEDIUM" (except more formally and seriously) on every possible medium you can, pamphlets included.

Worst case scenario it's one of the more killbot-like Necron leaders and he ignores it, or it's one of the still emotion-having ones and they chuckle a little bit.
 
Right, I've just finished chapter 21, and while I've been enjoying the ride so far and will definitely continue...there are some rather silly decisions going on here. Primarily, the LasRail. Leaving aside that the converted weapon is almost certainly a coilgun not a railgun (GW not being well known for their research or sensible sci-fi or combat tactics for a reason)...sticking a lasgun on a coil-gun makes decent sense if you've got the tech to make both small and light enough, and in-setting at the infantry scale one fires faster less-damaging shots while the other is naturally armor-piercing at the cost of RoF and ammo.

Scaling that up to vehicles? Now things are a little questionable, but for general purpose turrets (that would theoretically be used against a variety of targets) still makes sense, even as it doesn't for designated main cannons or chaff-clearing repeaters.

On a space-ship? Now I think you've lost track of what exactly you just told us a Las-Rail is. It's one gun on top of another gun with your own frankensteined mat-sci and engineering program. You already had ship-scale lasers, and ship-scale coil guns? Have VERY different properties and limitations. First and foremost, the ammo is now big enough that placement of the magazine is a real concern, as is the question of a magazine period. Fabricators might be able to make your ammo for you in the barrel, but a multi-ton slug of the densest ferro-magnetics you can make still takes time that even a small magazine of pre-made slugs would rapidly outpace reloading and refiring. After-all, capacitors and charge-time aren't a concern with constant access to the whole energy net. Just the time it takes to reload a slug, and the wear/heat on the coil-barrel.

Which means that 'Rail' Cannons? Are very heavily influenced by where you put them in a ship to maximize barrel length (and thus how fast the slug can be accelerated) and convenience of ammo transportation to the cannon assembly.

Lasers on the other-hand? Don't really give a shit about anything but the emitter, focusing array, and the capacitor running it. The latter is a non-issue, and the former don't take nearly as much space.

In other words...why would you stick them on top of each other scaled up to capital-weapon sizes?

For that matter though, if you're enamored with using magnetic accelerator weapons for your (knife-fight) space battles...why on earth would you go with Star-Trek? With the exception of the Borg, every ship is a thin wavy bit of non-sense, and their weapons are only practical because they are exclusively beam-weapons with small emitters that need no turret or barrel, or (mostly) self-propelled torpedoes and missiles. Well, that and structural stability is a non-factor because of BS inertial dampening and 95% of a warships durability against ALL weapons in the setting being in their shields. The opposite of what you're gonna find for all the future capital-scale weapons like macro-cannons, plasma launchers, particle cannons, and possibly even friggin Gauss cannons (if you can ever steal those, the infantry version had a big-ass barrel, which raises some concerns about the naval version and the fact that Necrons have minimal need for internal spacing in their ships like Rex). Both in terms of the geometry demanded by the massive turrets, barrels, and magazines of naval weaponry...and in terms of a ship-structure that can deal with getting hit by giga-tons of force, or hyper-thin beams of energy that cut through shields and armor (looking at the DE and Necrons here, and while zero internal space might make dealing with blunt force from Imps and Orks reasonable, exotic screw-you beams that can cut through dozens of meters of armor go from bad to horrifying when the struts holding a massive battleship together are so relatively thin.)

Finally we come to the Ion cannons...and look. IRL, 'ion cannon' is sci-fi nonsense. But in classical sci-fi depictions? It's the non-penetrating electrical system damaging weapon. The one that doesn't bust the hull, but does fry or 'stun' or even power down another ships internal powered hardware. In some depictions it's permanent damage, in others it's mysterious power-drainage, and in most it's extra-effective on energy shields.

How did that become
there would instead be powerful ion cannons, weapons more than capable of melting through the hulls of enemy ships
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Like, pump enough energy into a particle projector of any kind, and assuming it doesn't break, yeah it's going to start melting whatever it hits. But it's just weird, especially for a Star Wars buff where Ion Cannons are a thing in that setting, and melting hull armor is absolutely not what they do there.

Edit: The thing about the ship types is that they work in Star-Trek for a reason. There? Weapons and Shields technology is so wildly beyond armor and mat-sci that the ship design really isn't that much of an issue. If the shields fail, no amount of armor or redundant engineering is going to save you from a naval phaser carving you to pieces. And ramming and (physical) boarding are basically non-existent tactics. In 40K, comparably effective shields are either Warp-based, lost Archeotech, or Necron. And the armor is Adamantium, Necrodermis, and Wraith Bone - materials that CAN stand up to all but the most exotic attacks in the setting so long as they're thick enough.

The D'deridex sounds like it's big enough to not be so badly off for it's horizontal shape and thinner struts, especially since nearly all of it will be a solid block. But all the smaller ships? Seeing as you DON'T have OP shields yet, it just looks like a repeat of the dumb, weak, swarm tactics Rex used earlier with his bots. And while it was viable because sheer industry can replace the losses...he already learned from the Necrons that tactic only works up until it doesn't at all.
 
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Finally we come to the Ion cannons...and look. IRL, 'ion cannon' is sci-fi nonsense. But in classical sci-fi depictions? It's the non-penetrating electrical system damaging weapon. The one that doesn't bust the hull, but does fry or 'stun' or even power down another ships internal powered hardware. In some depictions it's permanent damage, in others it's mysterious power-drainage, and in most it's extra-effective on energy shields.

How did that become

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Like, pump enough energy into a particle projector of any kind, and assuming it doesn't break, yeah it's going to start melting whatever it hits. But it's just weird, especially for a Star Wars buff where Ion Cannons are a thing in that setting, and melting hull armor is absolutely not what they do there.

Your other points are all pretty valid. This one has the issue of Warhammer 40k ion cannons being... weird. Believe me, if I hadn't read the wiki for tau ion cannons that explicitly says they melt armor, I would have assumed they were like star wars ion cannons. That might be on me though, I probably should have had Rex remark 'huh, this is weird since its not like star wars' or the like. Would have made sense.

Thanks for the feedback!
 
You already have DNA of a Blank.... Start Vat Cloning some Organs to integrate into your Robot Army, it's time to adapt into a Cybernetic Army!

Servitors are awful only because often they are forcibly converted humans, the cloned Servitors that were never aware and conscious from minute one are A-okay though.

Blank Servitors will be far superior!
 
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