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The Valkyrior (MCU Thor/Worm)

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We've had, as of the start of me writing this message, 201 messages mostly regarding the last snippet.

You can, of course, continue. That's fine. But I think everyone has their point out there and from the looks of things neither side of the argument is going to give any ground. So, what say we let it rest and everyone take this time to cool off until... hopefully tomorrow I'll have something new to argue about when I bring in a new character and start the arc that includes the Thor 1 movie.

What I will insist on is this remain civil and please stop baiting each other. Tone it down - please.
 
Farmerbob1 said:
Indeed. Imagine, bees in cybernetic armor.
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Jarvis - Sir I must protest. This idea seems rather foolish...
Tony - Jarvis you have voiced your opinion several times now.
Jarvis - I'm sorry sir but...
Tony - But nothing. Turn em on.
Jarvis - If you insist sir...

*Later*

Taylor - FLY! FLY MY PRETTIES! AHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Fury - Oh god this is going to be so much paperwork.
Tony - I feel like I should be doing something to stop this...
Jarvis - I told you so...
 
I agreed with people saying that Taylor name dropping was not well said. I see what you were doing with the scene and I think it's really important. The rewrite, I like a lot. I imagine that in future chapters Taylor will be stressing how much of a Hellhole her world was.

I approve!
 
Phant0m5 said:
The most critical parts of an engagement in bite sized bits. Use heavier rounds on Brutes, avoid Line of Sight on Blasters, target Thinkers first, don't let a Striker touch you.
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The weakness is with the Master classification - there are two easily definable "types" that have very different tactical implications, in terms of whether or not they are capable of subverting you and your allies.

OverReactionGuy said:
Compared to Steve. Yes.
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Eh, neither of them look like much next to Hulk.
 
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Silver W. King said:
Please change "did" to "do" and "came" to "come".

Or "your" to "my".

Sentence sounds weird otherwise.
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Not really.
First, "the name alone should give you an idea of what they do when they come to your city" is entirely the wrong tense. The Nine are dead. Gone. Kaput. Deceased. Pining for the fjords. They only thing they'll do is decompose. Taylor is saying "yeah, these monsters I'm describing? I fucking killed them." Using present tense undermines that impression.
Second, Taylor is not saying "your city" with the meaning "[the listener's] city", she's using it in a colloquial sense with the meaning of "they came to a city and did nasty shit".
 
azoicennead said:
Not really.
First, "the name alone should give you an idea of what they do when they come to your city" is entirely the wrong tense. The Nine are dead. Gone. Kaput. Deceased. Pining for the fjords. They only thing they'll do is decompose. Taylor is saying "yeah, these monsters I'm describing? I fucking killed them." Using present tense undermines that impression.
Second, Taylor is not saying "your city" with the meaning "[the listener's] city", she's using it in a colloquial sense with the meaning of "they came to a city and did nasty shit".
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Hmm? *Read original line out loud* Well, huh I guess it works. Its just that on first reading it sounded off, and kept reading it multiple times feeling something was wrong with it.
 
Taylor saying anything along the lines of "The truth is, I am a badass" just feels off. Stating what she's done/what happened to her to quench Carter's curiosity doesn't strike me as off, but that bit does.
 
Seclorum said:
Jarvis - Sir I must protest. This idea seems rather foolish...
Tony - Jarvis you have voiced your opinion several times now.
Jarvis - I'm sorry sir but...
Tony - But nothing. Turn em on.
Jarvis - If you insist sir...

*Later*

Taylor - FLY! FLY MY PRETTIES! AHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Fury - Oh god this is going to be so much paperwork.
Tony - I feel like I should be doing something to stop this...
Jarvis - I told you so...
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Coulson: "Mister Stark."
Tony: "Coulson. Thought you were dead?"
Coulson: "Quite comfortably, but your apocalypse may have suspended that issue for the forseeable future."
Tony: "Sorry about that."
Coulson: "So. Bees."
Tony: "We're trying radical solutions to colony collapse disorder."
 
Heather Sinclair said:
We've had, as of the start of me writing this message, 201 messages mostly regarding the last snippet.

You can, of course, continue. That's fine. But I think everyone has their point out there and from the looks of things neither side of the argument is going to give any ground. So, what say we let it rest and everyone take this time to cool off until... hopefully tomorrow I'll have something new to argue about when I bring in a new character and start the arc that includes the Thor 1 movie.

What I will insist on is this remain civil and please stop baiting each other. Tone it down - please.
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Bit late, but I want to add my 2 cents: Amy is a biotinker in the same way that Dragon is a tinker. She isn't a tinker like Armsmaster or Kid Win, no shard-library. However, any truly comprehensive PRT Rating would list her as Striker/Tinker, because she very much is capable of creating things outside the norm. Like I said, if Dragon is a tinker, Amelia is as well, or at least she's capable of it.

Master/Stranger as well, but those aren't relevant to this argument.

Oh, and Trump too. Forgot how broken Amy is.
 
esotericist said:
Coulson: "Mister Stark."
Tony: "Coulson. Thought you were dead?"
Coulson: "Quite comfortably, but your apocalypse may have suspended that issue for the forseeable future."
Tony: "Sorry about that."
Coulson: "So. Bees."
Tony: "We're trying radical solutions to colony collapse disorder."
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That makes me think of this interesting scenario...

Coulson - *Blasts Loki through a wall with the special gun* Huh... so thats what it does. *Dies*

*The world dissolves into whiteness... and then snaps back into full color*

Coulson - What just happened?
Brunhilde - Phillip Coulson. I have been expecting you.
Coulson - Wait, I remember you. Your Taylor's boss...
Brunhilde - In a manner of speaking yes.
Coulson - Why did you take me here?
Brunhilde - You died. I choose the slain to enter into Valhalla.
Taylor - *Stomps around the corner* God Damnit Phill! Do you have any idea how much paperwork this is going to be?
Coulson - *Looks sheepish* Sorry. So what happens now?
Brunhilde - Well I could toss you back into oblivion where your soul will cleanse itself and then reincarnate, but that would mean the end of you.
Coulson - I dont really like that option.
Brunhilde - Most dont. Another option is that you remain here and drink, and fight, and train until Ragnarok.
Coulson - I've never been much of a party guy.
Taylor - He really isn't.
Brunhilde - The last option is that I take you to see Odin and we offer you a job. *Smiles*
Taylor - They have a pretty swell health plan. *Chomps on a Golden Apple*
 
And then the bald old-man Valkyrie (with new and improved assets!) shows up!
Fury: ... the hell, Coulson?!
Coulson: Sorry sir. It's the apples.
Agent #Number: Sir, Tahiti is done.
Coulson: ...
Taylor: Coulson, you there?
Coulson: Kinda?
Taylor: *sigh* Welcome to Khepri's world.
Coulson's Corpsething: HEYOO
 
It's a satisfying sensation, to have overlooked a relatively lengthy story by an author that you know is good, in a world that you've previously enjoyed. A sort of subdued eagerness combined with a general feeling of contentment. Update to follow after the archive binge, however long that winds up taking.

Edit: Interesting, looking forward seeing how Taylor works with SHIELD, and perhaps comes to respect her new comrades in arms; as it is she's proving abrasive, which is fine for browbeating someone into accepting commands on a battlefield, but is less appropriate in (relative) peacetime. I also found it a bit strange that Lisa and the rest of the Undersiders haven't been mentioned, at least in Taylor's own musings, given how central to her character they were. Otherwise, it's solidly entertaining.
 
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