Blackhole1
(Verified Spatial Anomaly)
My two cents about the story and a theory on its dwindling readership:
You started the story out with a great injustice: a character we like is being victimized, blamed for things that weren't her fault, and the perpetrators get away with it. This isn't the first story with that premise. Indeed, 'fugitive trying to clear their name' has been done many times. Unfortunately, the 'clearing their name' part never happens. In fact, every step that Taylor takes, she just gets stuck in deeper and deeper, most of the time through little fault of her own. She's railroaded onto the train to Miseryville and there's just no way to stop it. It seems that in almost every new arc, you find some way to beat Taylor down further: being smeared on television, being hated by the public, Armsmaster's dog collar... It just builds and builds and every time something shitty happens to Taylor we (the readers) get angrier at the antagonists.
Now, getting your readers angry is a good thing. It means we're emotionally invested in your story. It means we care, and that's probably the highest compliment a writer can get. However, when you build up negative emotions like that, there has to be a pay off at some point. A moment where the protagonists overcomes her obstacles and resolves the primary conflict, generating a release for that anger you've generated.
And there isn't.
The trio is never punished. In fact, the trio appears to be thriving. Emma is getting therapy and successfully buried the truth. Sophia is closer to and more accepted by her fellow wards than ever. Madison is a rogue now, but she hasn't learned anything or even acknowledged that what happened to Taylor was her fault and is getting money and a boyfriend on the side. They're all getting their happily ever after while Taylor is still a wanted criminal because of something completely outside her control. Yes, there's Coil and Legend knowing about Sophia, but nothing really happens with that in-story. Taylor's name is never cleared. There is no comeuppance or payback. We never get a scene where Armsmaster if forced to mutter a public apology while the Trio is carted off to jail. The protagonist never overcomes her obstacles, she only manages to find some semblance of happiness in spite of them. All this anger you've generated is still boiling inside us and there's no adequate release for it because the bad guys keep screwing over the protagonist and getting away with it. You can only make us feel negative emotions for so long before we just don't want to be angry anymore and stop reading.
And then Scion happens.
Suddenly, the entire premise has become largely irrelevant. There is a sudden and dramatic genre shift as the story shifts from a 'fugitive on the run' plot to a 'survival' plot. Taylor's (and the readers's) desire for justice no longer matters and any chance of a proper release for our anger at the injustices forced on Taylor is gone. So why keep reading?
TL;DR The 'Taylor is suffering' meme is like salt. A little is fine. This story has so much of it that it metaphorically resembles a pickled herring.
But that's just my opinion. I hope it helps in your future endevors.
You started the story out with a great injustice: a character we like is being victimized, blamed for things that weren't her fault, and the perpetrators get away with it. This isn't the first story with that premise. Indeed, 'fugitive trying to clear their name' has been done many times. Unfortunately, the 'clearing their name' part never happens. In fact, every step that Taylor takes, she just gets stuck in deeper and deeper, most of the time through little fault of her own. She's railroaded onto the train to Miseryville and there's just no way to stop it. It seems that in almost every new arc, you find some way to beat Taylor down further: being smeared on television, being hated by the public, Armsmaster's dog collar... It just builds and builds and every time something shitty happens to Taylor we (the readers) get angrier at the antagonists.
Now, getting your readers angry is a good thing. It means we're emotionally invested in your story. It means we care, and that's probably the highest compliment a writer can get. However, when you build up negative emotions like that, there has to be a pay off at some point. A moment where the protagonists overcomes her obstacles and resolves the primary conflict, generating a release for that anger you've generated.
And there isn't.
The trio is never punished. In fact, the trio appears to be thriving. Emma is getting therapy and successfully buried the truth. Sophia is closer to and more accepted by her fellow wards than ever. Madison is a rogue now, but she hasn't learned anything or even acknowledged that what happened to Taylor was her fault and is getting money and a boyfriend on the side. They're all getting their happily ever after while Taylor is still a wanted criminal because of something completely outside her control. Yes, there's Coil and Legend knowing about Sophia, but nothing really happens with that in-story. Taylor's name is never cleared. There is no comeuppance or payback. We never get a scene where Armsmaster if forced to mutter a public apology while the Trio is carted off to jail. The protagonist never overcomes her obstacles, she only manages to find some semblance of happiness in spite of them. All this anger you've generated is still boiling inside us and there's no adequate release for it because the bad guys keep screwing over the protagonist and getting away with it. You can only make us feel negative emotions for so long before we just don't want to be angry anymore and stop reading.
And then Scion happens.
Suddenly, the entire premise has become largely irrelevant. There is a sudden and dramatic genre shift as the story shifts from a 'fugitive on the run' plot to a 'survival' plot. Taylor's (and the readers's) desire for justice no longer matters and any chance of a proper release for our anger at the injustices forced on Taylor is gone. So why keep reading?
TL;DR The 'Taylor is suffering' meme is like salt. A little is fine. This story has so much of it that it metaphorically resembles a pickled herring.
But that's just my opinion. I hope it helps in your future endevors.