RWBY: fixing the world (or ruining it, up to you)
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- Crossover Sci-Fi Fantasy
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I count white votes as Golden as the Golden pieces are technically white ones just a color variation. I only really care if the vote is understandable.
On another note..... I may end up having to close this quest sadly....
Apparently genocide is not allowed on this site period. even towards species and races only capable of murder and war and all that. Grimm count as a sentient species so under that purview technically what I have already included in the update counts towards the technical definition of Genocide.
Technical definition: "the deliberate killing of a large group of people, especially those of a particular ethnic group or nation."
which is what you need to have to tell a compelling and true to the source material RWBY story.
And in another thread merely suggesting the MC for the quest uses poison to wipe out the Orks of Warhammer was enough to get the person who suggested in threadbanned and a 25 point warning.
For anyone not in the know, the Orks of warhammer are like Tolkien Orcs not that different from the grimm in RWBY except they can talk in the human language thats the only real difference.
I mean I read other quests that allow the mass killing of grim without issue. but maybe this is a new ruleI count white votes as Golden as the Golden pieces are technically white ones just a color variation. I only really care if the vote is understandable.
On another note..... I may end up having to close this quest sadly....
Apparently genocide is not allowed on this site period. even towards species and races only capable of murder and war and all that. Grimm count as a sentient species so under that purview technically what I have already included in the update counts towards the technical definition of Genocide.
Technical definition: "the deliberate killing of a large group of people, especially those of a particular ethnic group or nation."
which is what you need to have to tell a compelling and true to the source material RWBY story.
And in another thread merely suggesting the MC for the quest uses poison to wipe out the Orks of Warhammer was enough to get the person who suggested in threadbanned and a 25 point warning.
For anyone not in the know, the Orks of warhammer are like Tolkien Orcs not that different from the grimm in RWBY except they can talk in the human language thats the only real difference.
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- canada
ya thats what I figured too, but at the same time I think SV's definition HAS to be different than the standard one or the mod here is a ORK fan when it comes to warhammer and the rule is normally not heavily enforced or at least not this hard and has decided to enforce it heavily because he likes the race.
Those are the only two reasons I can think of as otherwise more than half the quests on this site are violating the rule....
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- canada
the same mod just posted in the thread claryfing the reason they got banned a bit more.
Apparently the dude was talking about torturing the Ork's for the fun of it and comparing them to rats and fungi and talking about wiping them out wholesale.
That is a BIG weight off my back there. Genocide is acceptable as long as its a war situation and we don't take a whole lot of glee out of it and its done for survival and all that. Thank goodness.
Also Grimm like the Grimm dragon are senients in my book. they are outright stated to be capable of proper human level thought just not human speech and can communicate with each other.
also the mod stated he had 0 knowledge of warhammer so he must also not realize that ORcs are basically permanently at war with everyone in it. SO I am not very worried now. Gonna talk to the mod to fully clarify but we should be ok.
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- Titan
Well that sucks.
Count Sinner
Fate in Your Favor
- Location
- Placentia ca
[X] Tell Everyone.
[X] A white Knight
[X] A white Knight
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- Titan
For the sake of the quest, would it be inappropriate to ask the time of suspension for the QM?
Got a point based suspension from questioning a mod, so I believe that should be a day if its a first offense.
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- Titan
Yeah, he PM'd me, 24 hours. Vote can continue normally then.
- Location
- Somewhere Beyond the Sea
[X] Tell Weiss, Ruby, and Dove
[X] A golden horse
[X] A golden horse
Intro part 10: Emerald forest part 3: Players and Pieces +AN/apology and explanation
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- canada
Important!
Ok first I want to apologize for the massive delay this had coming out. I kind of wanted to avoid anyone recognizing me and asking for my old quests on here to be rebooted which is why after being refused an alternate profile by the mods I made one anyway. I was greatly cheesed off and was not sure if I even wanted to continue this for a while when my new profile was folded into this one. Took me a bit to calm down from that and then had midterms so ya. Sorry everyone.
The reason why I did not want to be bothered about my old quests is because I honestly began to hate how I was writing them one after the other thanks to my extreme difficulty in fleshing out the characters in them. Which is a large part of the reasoning behind doing this kind of character driven quest instead of another empire building quest thing. I may restart those quests one day when I know how to write characters properly but for now it just won't happen so please don't ask if you were a former reader of those.
Finally I want it noted that I am loving this quest more and more with each update I add. In fact I would have quit the quest if not for how much fun I am having writing it. So with the massive hurdle that happened already past there is little chance of me permanently ending this quest anytime soon. Take heart and trust in that. (so long as I don't get outright banned for pulling that crap anyway.)
Anyway thats that and thank you for hearing me out. And I apologize again for the delay. Now onto the update!
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Winning Options!
[X] Tell no one
[X] A golden horse
Arriving at the temple you and your companions found an array of pedestals with a combination of golden and black chess pieces on them. You notice that there is one full set there granting a total of two gold chess pieces and two black chess pieces for each type, not including the king and queen of which there is one of each color and the pawns are not there.
Quickly you realize what Ozpin intends for this exercise and can choose which chess piece you take and even whether or not to tell everyone else about this.
After a few moments of thought you decided not to tell anyone what you realized as Ozpin could be watching this through a camera in the forest and decide to change it up if he felt the purpose of the exercise was defeated.
Looking at the others to see if they realized the true purpose of all of this you notice they hadn't and so you speak up. "So these appear to be the 'relics' Ozpin was informed us about. Shall we make our choices? Of course its ladies first."
"Why thank you." Weiss replies as she and Ruby walked in front of you and Dove to pick up your relics.
"Hmmm…. I believe the queen piece suits us best." Weiss states with a smile. "What piece are you taking?"
"Ehhh it doesn't really matter." You state picking up the knight. "We will just take this one. Now, though those alpha grimm were following us I like our odds fighting them here rather than back in the forest. Plus if we fight them here the others will probably arrive and help. After all they all have to get here eventually."
The trees and bushes near the edge of the clearing rustle a bit. "Oh wait, here they are now." Yang and Blake come out of the treeline walking into the clearing causing Ruby to jump up excitedly and rush to Yang.
"Yang!" Ruby shouts happily as she dive hugs her sister with her semblance.
"OOF." Yang exclaims falling backwards before smiling. "Hey Rubes Glad to see you made it here sis!"
"Oh ya! We had a few close calls with an Alpha Beringal and Nevermore Alpha but we were able to ditch them thanks to Lux and Weiss we even got them to fight each other!"
"Nice Rubes! So I assume these are the relics?" Yang asked looking past Ruby. "by the way, who is your partner? Mine's Blake here."
"Yes they are indeed the 'relics', and Ruby ended up with Weiss." You answer for her walking up and nodding to Blake as you do so. "Why don't you go pick one as we wait for the others to arrive. We chose to stay here and make our stand against the two alpha Grimm to better deal with them."
"Sounds like a plan!" Yang states hopping up and moving towards the relics. "Heh well guess we will claim my own castle, eh Blake?" Blake shrugs with a smile not minding the choice.
"Now we just need to wait for the next group to arrive." As soon as you say that a bit of crashing through the trees and some roaring alerts you to the arrival of others.
Suddenly an Ursa burst into the clearing swinging its arms around and freaking out even as a short orange haired girl hopped off of it as the Burly guy from the night before that Dove informed you was Cardin rushed up and slammed his mace into the things head finishing it off even as the two you assume to be their partners rushed into the clearing after them.
"Nora! Please *pant* *gasp* never do that again." the pink and black haired kid states only to see 'Nora' missing.
"I'm queen of the castle! I'm queen of the castle!" She states twirling around with the piece on top of her head. "Nora!" Her partner shouted "Sorry Ren!" She apologized calming down and walking back to him with her relic in hand.
Do Cardin and Russel try to cause trouble with you? Roll 1d4: 1-2=yes 3-4=no. Result: 3 nope.
"Hey Dove!" Cardin shouts out walking up to you and your partner before noticing you with him. "Oh, your here…. Look sorry about last night. I was listening too much to sky there when I shouldn't have been. Pulling that crap was a disgrace to my family name."
"Its fine, just don't try it again and we will be cool ok?" You state with a smile glad that you won't be dealing with racist bs. "Go over there and grab a 'relic' while we are waiting for anyone else to arrive and for the two Alpha grimm to arrive so we can make our stand here."
"Wait alpha grimm?" Russel the final friend asks.
"Oh ya, Weiss Ruby, Dove and I ran into an Alpha nevermore and an Alpha Benigal on the way here. Weiss and I tricked them into fighting each other and put a bit of hurt on them but they should be here soon enough. We chose this location to fight them as its unlikely we will be able to outrun them and we don't want to fight them in the forest itself. With everyone here we should be able to easily defeat them."
"Alright! Sounds good man." Cardin gives a nod as he moves to pick his piece.
"I will take the king piece then, its the leader piece after all." He says with a nod picking it up.
Finally Jaune and Pyrrha arrive at the clearing in style with Pyrrha bursting into it at full sprint and a Deathstalker Alpha at her heels and Jaune clutching to its tail.
"Heeelllpp!" Jaune cries out seeing the party before he immediately gets flung forwards towards the group losing his hold on the tail. Pyrrha herself gets launched towards the group as well when she blocks a claw swipe from the Deathstalker with her shield. Thankfully Weiss catches them and deposits them on their feet in front of the group with a swift application of her remaining wind dust.
"All right you two go pick your 'relic' and then we can finish this guy off before heading over to the cliff. Sound good?" You ask with a smile pointing behind you at the relics.
"Nope sounds great!" Jaune yelps quickly moving to pick his 'relic'.
"I will take the knight, the protector piece." He states with a smile before he was interrupted by the Alpha Benigal bursting into the clearing even as the Alpha Nevermore flies in from above.
"Alright everyone! Its go time!" You shout out swiftly working out a plan.
Vote time!
What do?
[] Write in plan to fight everything. (Note that while you can give everyone orders you only have the time to say 5-6 sentences so may be best to pick out groups to target each enemy and then come up with a plan for your group. After giving out instructions if you choose to do so pick out what Lux chooses to do.)
EDIT: Anyway this puts you on a team with Dove, Jaune and Pyrrha.
Weiss, Ruby, Cardin and Russel on another team
and the final team being Yang, Blake, Nora and Ren.
So my current team names are team CRTS or Carrots, Team BYRN or Burn, and finally I dont have any idea for your team.... soo ummm team name suggestions as well please? you dont have to give them right now but would be nice to have them for the update after the next one.
Ok first I want to apologize for the massive delay this had coming out. I kind of wanted to avoid anyone recognizing me and asking for my old quests on here to be rebooted which is why after being refused an alternate profile by the mods I made one anyway. I was greatly cheesed off and was not sure if I even wanted to continue this for a while when my new profile was folded into this one. Took me a bit to calm down from that and then had midterms so ya. Sorry everyone.
The reason why I did not want to be bothered about my old quests is because I honestly began to hate how I was writing them one after the other thanks to my extreme difficulty in fleshing out the characters in them. Which is a large part of the reasoning behind doing this kind of character driven quest instead of another empire building quest thing. I may restart those quests one day when I know how to write characters properly but for now it just won't happen so please don't ask if you were a former reader of those.
Finally I want it noted that I am loving this quest more and more with each update I add. In fact I would have quit the quest if not for how much fun I am having writing it. So with the massive hurdle that happened already past there is little chance of me permanently ending this quest anytime soon. Take heart and trust in that. (so long as I don't get outright banned for pulling that crap anyway.)
Anyway thats that and thank you for hearing me out. And I apologize again for the delay. Now onto the update!
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Winning Options!
[X] Tell no one
[X] A golden horse
Arriving at the temple you and your companions found an array of pedestals with a combination of golden and black chess pieces on them. You notice that there is one full set there granting a total of two gold chess pieces and two black chess pieces for each type, not including the king and queen of which there is one of each color and the pawns are not there.
Quickly you realize what Ozpin intends for this exercise and can choose which chess piece you take and even whether or not to tell everyone else about this.
After a few moments of thought you decided not to tell anyone what you realized as Ozpin could be watching this through a camera in the forest and decide to change it up if he felt the purpose of the exercise was defeated.
Looking at the others to see if they realized the true purpose of all of this you notice they hadn't and so you speak up. "So these appear to be the 'relics' Ozpin was informed us about. Shall we make our choices? Of course its ladies first."
"Why thank you." Weiss replies as she and Ruby walked in front of you and Dove to pick up your relics.
1d6 roll: 1=rook, 2-3= knight, 4-5=queen, 6=king Result: 4 Queen chosen!
"Hmmm…. I believe the queen piece suits us best." Weiss states with a smile. "What piece are you taking?"
"Ehhh it doesn't really matter." You state picking up the knight. "We will just take this one. Now, though those alpha grimm were following us I like our odds fighting them here rather than back in the forest. Plus if we fight them here the others will probably arrive and help. After all they all have to get here eventually."
The trees and bushes near the edge of the clearing rustle a bit. "Oh wait, here they are now." Yang and Blake come out of the treeline walking into the clearing causing Ruby to jump up excitedly and rush to Yang.
"Yang!" Ruby shouts happily as she dive hugs her sister with her semblance.
"OOF." Yang exclaims falling backwards before smiling. "Hey Rubes Glad to see you made it here sis!"
"Oh ya! We had a few close calls with an Alpha Beringal and Nevermore Alpha but we were able to ditch them thanks to Lux and Weiss we even got them to fight each other!"
"Nice Rubes! So I assume these are the relics?" Yang asked looking past Ruby. "by the way, who is your partner? Mine's Blake here."
"Yes they are indeed the 'relics', and Ruby ended up with Weiss." You answer for her walking up and nodding to Blake as you do so. "Why don't you go pick one as we wait for the others to arrive. We chose to stay here and make our stand against the two alpha Grimm to better deal with them."
D6 roll: 1 is rook, 2-4 is horse, 5-6 is bishop. Result: 1 rook taken!
"Sounds like a plan!" Yang states hopping up and moving towards the relics. "Heh well guess we will claim my own castle, eh Blake?" Blake shrugs with a smile not minding the choice.
"Now we just need to wait for the next group to arrive." As soon as you say that a bit of crashing through the trees and some roaring alerts you to the arrival of others.
Suddenly an Ursa burst into the clearing swinging its arms around and freaking out even as a short orange haired girl hopped off of it as the Burly guy from the night before that Dove informed you was Cardin rushed up and slammed his mace into the things head finishing it off even as the two you assume to be their partners rushed into the clearing after them.
"Nora! Please *pant* *gasp* never do that again." the pink and black haired kid states only to see 'Nora' missing.
D6 roll: 1-3 is rook, 4-5 is horse, 6 is bishop. Result: 3 Rook chosen!
"I'm queen of the castle! I'm queen of the castle!" She states twirling around with the piece on top of her head. "Nora!" Her partner shouted "Sorry Ren!" She apologized calming down and walking back to him with her relic in hand.
Do Cardin and Russel try to cause trouble with you? Roll 1d4: 1-2=yes 3-4=no. Result: 3 nope.
"Hey Dove!" Cardin shouts out walking up to you and your partner before noticing you with him. "Oh, your here…. Look sorry about last night. I was listening too much to sky there when I shouldn't have been. Pulling that crap was a disgrace to my family name."
"Its fine, just don't try it again and we will be cool ok?" You state with a smile glad that you won't be dealing with racist bs. "Go over there and grab a 'relic' while we are waiting for anyone else to arrive and for the two Alpha grimm to arrive so we can make our stand here."
"Wait alpha grimm?" Russel the final friend asks.
"Oh ya, Weiss Ruby, Dove and I ran into an Alpha nevermore and an Alpha Benigal on the way here. Weiss and I tricked them into fighting each other and put a bit of hurt on them but they should be here soon enough. We chose this location to fight them as its unlikely we will be able to outrun them and we don't want to fight them in the forest itself. With everyone here we should be able to easily defeat them."
"Alright! Sounds good man." Cardin gives a nod as he moves to pick his piece.
1d6 roll: 1-3 is knight, 4-5 is bishop, 6 is king. Result: 6 King chosen.
"I will take the king piece then, its the leader piece after all." He says with a nod picking it up.
Finally Jaune and Pyrrha arrive at the clearing in style with Pyrrha bursting into it at full sprint and a Deathstalker Alpha at her heels and Jaune clutching to its tail.
"Heeelllpp!" Jaune cries out seeing the party before he immediately gets flung forwards towards the group losing his hold on the tail. Pyrrha herself gets launched towards the group as well when she blocks a claw swipe from the Deathstalker with her shield. Thankfully Weiss catches them and deposits them on their feet in front of the group with a swift application of her remaining wind dust.
"All right you two go pick your 'relic' and then we can finish this guy off before heading over to the cliff. Sound good?" You ask with a smile pointing behind you at the relics.
"Nope sounds great!" Jaune yelps quickly moving to pick his 'relic'.
1d6 roll: 1-4=knight 5-6=bishop. Result: 4 took the knight piece!
"I will take the knight, the protector piece." He states with a smile before he was interrupted by the Alpha Benigal bursting into the clearing even as the Alpha Nevermore flies in from above.
"Alright everyone! Its go time!" You shout out swiftly working out a plan.
Vote time!
What do?
[] Write in plan to fight everything. (Note that while you can give everyone orders you only have the time to say 5-6 sentences so may be best to pick out groups to target each enemy and then come up with a plan for your group. After giving out instructions if you choose to do so pick out what Lux chooses to do.)
EDIT: Anyway this puts you on a team with Dove, Jaune and Pyrrha.
Weiss, Ruby, Cardin and Russel on another team
and the final team being Yang, Blake, Nora and Ren.
So my current team names are team CRTS or Carrots, Team BYRN or Burn, and finally I dont have any idea for your team.... soo ummm team name suggestions as well please? you dont have to give them right now but would be nice to have them for the update after the next one.
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Ok to many things happened let's go step by step
1. Rly happy for both continuing this quest AND for being happy doing it too. It doesn't make me think im just a annoying guy who keeps nagging u for doing more
2. Holy crap the teams are SOOO different from canon jesus and were partnered up with jaune and pyrrha? Well that will help us train jaune AND ourself better and faster! Maybe we can teach them how to use elemental attacks
3.holy f***ing s**t cardin's is being nice and not being a racist THIS HELPS us so much!
4. For a plan?
I got nothing not good during a battle just reinforcing/building up our battle prowess any suggestions anyone?
1. Rly happy for both continuing this quest AND for being happy doing it too. It doesn't make me think im just a annoying guy who keeps nagging u for doing more
2. Holy crap the teams are SOOO different from canon jesus and were partnered up with jaune and pyrrha? Well that will help us train jaune AND ourself better and faster! Maybe we can teach them how to use elemental attacks
3.holy f***ing s**t cardin's is being nice and not being a racist THIS HELPS us so much!
4. For a plan?
I got nothing not good during a battle just reinforcing/building up our battle prowess any suggestions anyone?
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- canada
I will NEVER complain about people asking for updates on a quest I don't say is ended or on a hiatus. its the people who complain when I say that, that bother me. and not because of them asking but because I have an easy to flip guilt switch. So when people ask about that I feel like shit about not continuing a quest I hate writing.
yep, plus that really does help you out a bit. Jaune can take a ton of hits once you train him up a bit while both Dove and Pyrrha can take the frontlines fairly well too. This gives you a bunch of people to tank for you!
ya, what you said to him the night before plus his friend getting kicked out before he got too influenced by him really helped him get his shit together. Plus since they never gave his origins I always saw him as either A) the heir of a company like Weiss or B) a member of a family of knights that served the former king of Vale that went on to be hunters. So while he is spoiled he also has a lot to live up to and without the influence of his punk friends he won't go bad.
Abyssal_light
Lord of the light, within thy abyss
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- Coaltown
[X] Plan "hit it till it dies"
-[X] "blake distract and direct the nevermore towards the ground then Wiess you freeze it .Yang, Nora and Cardin in once this happens hit it with all you've got. "
-[X] "Everyone else with me." *deploy aura light* we are going to whittle it down" "Pyrrha, Jaune defend from the bengal ! Dove, Ren harass the deathstalker from close range! Rwby' use your rifle on anything that looks vurnable ! *staying withing thirty feet start firing off rounds into Bengal *
Is this short enough.
-[X] "blake distract and direct the nevermore towards the ground then Wiess you freeze it .Yang, Nora and Cardin in once this happens hit it with all you've got. "
-[X] "Everyone else with me." *deploy aura light* we are going to whittle it down" "Pyrrha, Jaune defend from the bengal ! Dove, Ren harass the deathstalker from close range! Rwby' use your rifle on anything that looks vurnable ! *staying withing thirty feet start firing off rounds into Bengal *
Is this short enough.
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yes just barely..... however 1 problem.... what is 'it'? the Benigal or the Deathstalker? Both are Alpha grimm and therefore can be considered boss monsters.
Also you can have a bigger plan for your own personal actions. You just cant have more than 6 sentences of actual speech.
Finally everyone there is a hunter trainee with a decent amount of experience at fighting. They also might not listen to you. So with that in mind you might be better off just assigning roles for people to commit to based on their rough fighting styles or even just assigning teams of 4 to fight each Grimm yourself included.
This is all up to you guys.
EDIT: still a very solid first attempt just needs a bit of refinement. (honestly the biggest problem is not addressing the third enemy.)
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ok it has been 5 hours and i got 1 plan and 1 vote..... and the plan is flawed.
To be clear as possible you do not have to be afraid of making a plan or go into heavy detail. You can go into depth in a plan by leading with a specific spell or attack or you can just state you will focus on casting from behind your allies or whatever you wish.
I will never punish plans that are not super well thought out here so long as you do not make a critical error like choose to fight in melee range with your fighting style against a goliath or someone like Yang. aka the really dumb choices.
so please vote or come up with a plan. even if you don't feel confident about your ability to do so.
To be clear as possible you do not have to be afraid of making a plan or go into heavy detail. You can go into depth in a plan by leading with a specific spell or attack or you can just state you will focus on casting from behind your allies or whatever you wish.
I will never punish plans that are not super well thought out here so long as you do not make a critical error like choose to fight in melee range with your fighting style against a goliath or someone like Yang. aka the really dumb choices.
so please vote or come up with a plan. even if you don't feel confident about your ability to do so.