Rewrite update 3
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Third update is up.
Ugh, I wanted to make it longer but I went on for too long without giving you anything of acceptable length.
Anyways. I'm not using honorifics. Some terms such as Senpai and Shishou are staying tho. Because Reo is going to call Shinji that and there will be a damn good reason why.
Regarding Reo misreading Ikutsuki's name in the original version; it really made little logical sense the way I handled it, so I replaced it with this new version. Now Ikakatsukieh will get called the "Moon Man" or just Shūji. I'm not writting the ū all the time though, since it's sort of a pain in the ass to put it there.
Also Fallen London references. Part of a balanced breakfast.
I decided to go a bit more in depth in my description of the Dorm's layout. I mean where do they take baths? The bathrooms that you can go to in-game are probably too small for to have even a shower built in, all things considered. Everyone waiting for someone to finish when they want to take a bath seems like a big hassle, too.
I am going to be less frequent with the date things I always show, but as a trade off I decided to make them more interesting.
Heheheh...
Anyways, thoughts on this?
Ugh, I wanted to make it longer but I went on for too long without giving you anything of acceptable length.
Anyways. I'm not using honorifics. Some terms such as Senpai and Shishou are staying tho. Because Reo is going to call Shinji that and there will be a damn good reason why.
Regarding Reo misreading Ikutsuki's name in the original version; it really made little logical sense the way I handled it, so I replaced it with this new version. Now Ikakatsukieh will get called the "Moon Man" or just Shūji. I'm not writting the ū all the time though, since it's sort of a pain in the ass to put it there.
Also Fallen London references. Part of a balanced breakfast.
I decided to go a bit more in depth in my description of the Dorm's layout. I mean where do they take baths? The bathrooms that you can go to in-game are probably too small for to have even a shower built in, all things considered. Everyone waiting for someone to finish when they want to take a bath seems like a big hassle, too.
I am going to be less frequent with the date things I always show, but as a trade off I decided to make them more interesting.
Heheheh...
Anyways, thoughts on this?
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