Okay, update has wound up going really long, so I've got it saved in a google doc and have been working through it when I can. Things should go smoother now that finals are over, too.
But this post isn't about that.
That "I don't know what I'm doing" tag up top? That isn't there just for the memes, it's a genuine expression of my feelings as QM. Like, story-wise I'm fine; got notes on all the characters, some possible events later down the line, and a general sense of what's up in a way that isn't too open-ended or too restrictive, I would hope.
But regardless, I feel like I'm handling this quest really poorly on some level, and I've been trying to figure out why that is and how to fix it. Part of this is because of what was brought up in the "SV has an odd problem" thread, and part of it is because of the weirdly sexual tone I set early on with a particular option, when we were deciding on Alexandra's looks. You know the one. I brought this up in a discord chat, but I figured here might be a better place since... you know... this is the actual quest thread. One thing that was pointed out was that despite ostensibly being eighteen, Alexandra feels like more of a teenager than a young adult, and on rereading the threadmarks thus far, I'm getting that feeling as well. I'm not sure why that is, but it's definitely there, and definitely needs to be fixed.
So yeah, basically, I wanted to go ahead and open a discussion on some of the missteps this quest has had so far, particularly in terms of overall tone, pacing, and treatment of the characters, (though if anyone has suggestions on other aspects, feel free to throw those in as well) and how I might go about fixing them.
