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Inverted Inheritance (F/SN AU)

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SilentKnight said:
You made a valid point, but doesn't Excalibur also stops aging? Didn't Lancer Artoria started aging and later became a divine entity because she survived the last battle of Camelot and took up Rhongomyniad as her primary weapon?

Maybe I got it wrong, but I think both Caliburn and Excalibur stops aging while Rhongomyniad turns the holder into a Divine Entity if they hold it long enough.
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You're actually correct base in lancer atora's bio
 
RBomber said:
Boobturia was kind of jerk, though. I mean, Dark Boobturia was at least aware of her darker qualities, but Light Boobturia entirely oblivious of it and taking her Queen Facade to scary level.
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Doesn't Boobturia, the one who arrives in your game, become friendly with you, while not understanding why someone might have trouble looking at her later ascension costumes?
 
@Spectral Waltz Could I do proofreading for you? I really like what you have so far, but I also see some places that could use commas. I feel like nitpicky punctuation comments would be best left out of the main thread, if you want them. Mostly, it's the lack of commas for direct address in dialogue. (i.e. "Apologies Shirou…" should be "Apologies, Shirou..." or "Understood mama" should be "Understood, Mama") (I'm also a stickler for capitalization of nicknames. Again, only if you're interested; I don't intend to mess with your word choices or content, just punctuation.)
 
Crusader Jerome said:
@Spectral Waltz Could I do proofreading for you? I really like what you have so far, but I also see some places that could use commas. I feel like nitpicky punctuation comments would be best left out of the main thread, if you want them. Mostly, it's the lack of commas for direct address in dialogue. (i.e. "Apologies Shirou…" should be "Apologies, Shirou..." or "Understood mama" should be "Understood, Mama") (I'm also a stickler for capitalization of nicknames. Again, only if you're interested; I don't intend to mess with your word choices or content, just punctuation.)
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It's telling that both of the examples you mentioned are in dialogue, where I will point out that I deliberately ignore what is grammatically correct in favour of how I think the characters would speak in that case. When Arturia says, 'Apologies Shirou' she is not pausing between the words, she is saying them with only a standard space, thus, they are written how she says them. Same for the 'Understood Mama' part, Shirou's doesn't pause for effect between those words, he simply says them.

So... I'm sorry if those set off your grammar nitpick senses, but they're kinda deliberate on my part. I have method to my madness.
 
RBomber said:
Boobturia was kind of jerk, though. I mean, Dark Boobturia was at least aware of her darker qualities, but Light Boobturia entirely oblivious of it and taking her Queen Facade to scary level.
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Can you elaborate? Do you mean the Divine Spirit Lion King, or Lancer Artoria the Servant? Cuz they are two different people. One can't die and became a wandering ghost. The other one grew to be mature and have composure and found her ideal way of being king.
 
Teen Spirit said:
One of these days I really want to do an omake where UBW Abridged!Rin reacts to Mom!Saber.
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Oh please do~

On that note, just food for thought that occurred to me this evening, considering Arturia pretty well always serves to make Rin realize she's Bi, I just want you to imagine a younger Rin where she doesn't think anyone can see her, singing...

Invert!Rin: "Shirou's Mom, has got it goin' on~"
 
Spectral Waltz said:
It's telling that both of the examples you mentioned are in dialogue, where I will point out that I deliberately ignore what is grammatically correct in favour of how I think the characters would speak in that case. When Arturia says, 'Apologies Shirou' she is not pausing between the words, she is saying them with only a standard space, thus, they are written how she says them. Same for the 'Understood Mama' part, Shirou's doesn't pause for effect between those words, he simply says them.

So... I'm sorry if those set off your grammar nitpick senses, but they're kinda deliberate on my part. I have method to my madness.
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Defies convention, but it's your stylistic choice to make, so I'll accept it.

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Spectral Waltz said:
Not to mention that he knew full and well he would not be able to match a Saber Servant in close combat.
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(Would be simpler to say "Not to mention that he would not be able to match a Saber Servant in close combat." Also, the phrase is typically "full well.")

Thus concludes my nitpick. Your prose is highly readable, and if you ever want a proofreader for grammar, punctuation, etc., I would be willing to do it.
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Spectral Waltz said:
I just want you to imagine a younger Rin where she doesn't think anyone can see her, singing...

Invert!Rin: "Shirou's Mom, has got it goin' on~"
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Nah, worse.



Change the name to Arturia-mama, and you get a clear. And why she knows that song? Kirei :evil::whistle:

"It's a song for praising a beauty of Christ Follower! Honest!" ;)

Just wait until Artie-mama (or worse, Taiga) hear the song. And found out who teach it to her.

Crucified!Kirei: "Worth it."
 
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If and when Mordred shows up I expect there will be copious amounts of hugs, feels, and acts of random violence.
 
Rowknan said:
If and when Mordred shows up I expect there will be copious amounts of hugs, feels, and acts of random violence.
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On one hand, I wonder how Medea's fetish will react to Arturia being a virgin mother. Or she could just fall back on Mordred.
On the other hand, I would be interested by seeing Morgana being the Caster alongside Mordred being the Saber. The family reunion would be awkward. And three Saberfaces at once. (Maybe we should talk of Igraine faces then)
 
beorn91 said:
On one hand, I wonder how Medea's fetish will react to Arturia being a virgin mother. Or she could just fall back on Mordred.
On the other hand, I would be interested by seeing Morgana being the Caster alongside Mordred being the Saber. The family reunion would be awkward. And three Saberfaces at once. (Maybe we should talk of Igraine faces then)
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Medea would fucking squee. Morgana would just try to viciously kill Arturia.
 
Rowknan said:
If and when Mordred shows up I expect there will be copious amounts of hugs, feels, and acts of random violence.
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"MOOOORDREEEEED!!!!"

"AAAARTTUUUUUUURR!!!!"

*Shirou doing his best Nanako impression* "Noooo Fighting!"

[35 minutes later]

*Mordred and Arturia still glaring at each other*

*Chibi-Shirou finish dinner and washing the dish*

*Chibi-Shirou considering his option*

"Um, Mordred-Onee-sama-"

*CRITICAL MOE HIT!!*

"-Yes?! Uh, um, what do you want, Runt?!?"

"Mordred~"

"It's okay, Artie-mama. Mordred-onee-sama, would you like to help me make the dessert? Please? Artie-mama wouldn't allow me to work on kitchen unsupervised...."

*Shirou using Puppy Dog Eyes!"

*CRITICAL HIT MOE! STRIKE TWO!!*

"Hmph. Fine. Let see your inadequate cookjng skill then."

[2 Hours Later]

"...This... not bad. Not bad."

*Very (un)convincing Mordred down-praise the cake with very (un)convincing, very (not) stoic, definitely-not-in-bliss (says you), her voice definetly not melted like creamy ganache against 400 W lightbulb*

"Ehehe, thank you. Can you gave me headpats?"

"Eh? Why I should gave you-"

"Please? Onee-sama"

*Mordred hand moved on her own, against her wishes*

*pat pat*

*CRITICAL HIT MOE! STRIKE THREE!! OUT OF PLAY!!!*

"...Thank you, Mordred Onee-sama."

"...Your welcome. Dammir Mort, stop blushing!! He's just a kid... very cute kid... Can make awesome sweet.... kyaaaaaaaa~"
 
SilentKnight said:
Can you tell me why do you think she is a jerk? I only play FGO in the NA server, and info from wiki only says so much.
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During Camelot Singularity, your Enemies are Knights of Round Table, under (Divine Spirit) Lancertoria. She was, for a lack of better word, become increasingly inhuman in each chapter, including purging what she perceived as weakness from her Knight, and ordering purge on her Knights who questioning her judgment. This lead to things like Bedivere became totally subservient, and Tristain become horrifyingly callous and, for lack of better word, psychopathic.
 
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Omake (Non-Canon): Santa Claus is (not) real?
  • Apocrypha
    • Hmm... Christmas Eve, and me with nothing to do...

    How about an Omake~?


    *creak*

    Eleven year old Shirou's eyes opened in the darkness and he turned, squinting at the shadowed clock on the wall.

    Just past midnight. Christmas Eve had become Christmas Day.

    *creak*

    The sound of wood shifting slightly made him blink, coming fully awake. An Intruder?

    Mama wouldn't be awake right now, so did that mean that someone was trying to sneak into their house?

    Did that mean...

    Santa Claus?!


    Quickly and quietly as he could, Shirou rolled out of bed and crept towards the door on tiptoes. The noise was coming from the living room, a steady creak of someone moving back and forth, then a rustling...

    He hurried to the corner, eyes wide with wonder-!

    And then his face fell, one part disappointment, one part confusion.

    "Mama?"

    "Eh?" The figure whirled, "What are you talking about? I'm obviously Santa Claus, and you're not supposed to see me. Go back to bed little one."

    The woman Shirou saw had exchanged her typical blues and whites for a very short black dress and boots along with a black santa hat atop her head but there was no doubt that this was Arturia, her voice even sounded the same! Even if it was a little harsh, and her eyes looked a little funny, but that was definitely his mother!

    Shirou's brow furrowed. "Mama what are you doing? It's late."

    "I told you, I'm not your mother. I'm Santa Claus, spreading gifts and good cheer to all the good little girls and boys." In the mouth of another the words might have been spoken cheerfully but from her they were a near deadpan. "Hmm... Come to think of it, have you been a good little boy? Good little boys don't sneak around their house out of bed on Christmas Eve you know..."

    Shirou for his part... Pouted. "Mama is being silly."

    Yellow eyes rolled as she sighed. "Alright yes... Maybe your mother is being silly, but you need to go back to bed and let Santa finish delivering her presents."

    The woman turned back to her bag and Shirou's brow furrowed even further. On one hand, he prided himself on being a good child, but on the other, he was curious as all children are. What was his present going to be?

    Innocently, he cocked his head. "Did Santa bring anything for me?"

    "Hm? Ah... Well I suppose, even if you're a nosy little boy you're not combative like those other children I delivered presents to... Let me see here... You'd like some friends right?"

    Shirou nodded, he wasn't bullied or anything, but students tended to say away from him at school. Between the strange bright orange hair, his european mother with her strange surname, his survival from the fire, and the fact that he was rather quiet to begin with meant that no one had really gone out of their way to make friends with him. He wondered how Mama could do that though, and even Santa seemed a bit perplexed.

    Which was when Arturia's voice came from behind him as she poked her head through the living room door. "Shirou? What are you doing u-..."

    'Santa' froze, Arturia froze, and Shirou looked between them. Identical but for outfits and eyes. Then in a very small voice whispered. "Two Mamas?"

    And then all hell broke loose.

    "Shirou get back!" At the whipcrack command Shirou jumped away instinctively, clearing a path as Arturia charged, the dim moonlight peeling back from the blazing light as her sword and armor coalesced from air, lashing out only to meet a blade of black etched in crimson as 'Santa' parried! The winds howled in the living room as shockwaves of strikes battered the surroundings but Santa was fighting defensively, using the sack she carried in one hand as much as the sword she carried in the other.

    "Damnit! I was just-! I'm just trying-!" The Black blade blazed and 'Santa' counterattacked, a mighty single blow that forced Arturia back for a moment. Within seconds she was charging back in, but those seconds were all she needed. "I can't deliver a present like this, but I'll do what I can! You'll see!"

    Then she charged, not at Arturia but to one side, fleeing out the doors and into the freezing night, leaping into the air-!

    And then vanishing as though yanked away, leaving only the faint sound of jingling bells in her wake...

    Shirou -quite sensibly- passed out.

    Apart from what Shirou and Arturia would both later agree must have been nothing more than a very strange dream (Some new dents in the living room furniture notwithstanding) the rest of the Christmas break passed quietly, but on the first day of classes the teacher had an announcement to make. A new transfer student for the new year, a girl with teal hair and slightly strange eyes.

    When she introduced herself however the class consensus was immediate. Pretty or not, she was clearly Chunni.

    Shirou thought nothing of it until she approached him during their break with a smile. "You're Einzbern Shirou-kun right? I was told to pass a message on to you from some strange Santa in a black miniskirt." She cleared her throat as Shirou froze. "Never let it be said that I don't deliver, even if this one is a little late. Merry Christmas Shirou."

    Then the girl smiled. "I introduced myself earlier but I should do it again. My name is Kiyohime. I'm sure we'll be the best of friends!"

    Somewhere in Fuyuki, Arturia felt a shuddering premonition of terrible things ahead...


    This was utter crack churned out on christmas eve on a spur of the moment ridiculous idea. Don't think too hard about anything depicted herein.

    For those unfamiliar 'Santa Alter' is a version of Arturia's 'Saber Alter' form from the christmas event in Fate/Grand Order. This idea came to me mostly because the notion of Invert!Shirou running into Santa Alter and immediately deciding that Santa can't be real because that is clearly his mother standing there was too funny for me to pass up.

    The notion of her giving him kiyohime as a friend was just icing on the bizarre cake when all was said and done.

    None of this is or will ever be Canon, just so we're clear. This is nothing more than me indulging in silliness.

    Merry Christmas Everyone!
     
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    • You guys know that Kiyohime is a terrible person and this was in the long term (or even the medium term) in no way a good gift right?
     
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