Another human approaches, and you glance over Artemis's head to see Alejandro coming up to stand on the other side of your wing from her and gently pat your side (though honestly, with how much he irritates Artemis shocking him alone could count as a side objective rather than a barrier to launch…)
Missing punctuation after the parenthesis.
…You… suppose, that's true, thought it seems to be cheating to lean on technicalities like this.
"though"
Missing a space.
Another horn sounds to the easy, from the outside of the camp.
"east"
"…Ryza…" Kelton says, more loudly than he really needs to, and when you glance back at him he's clutching at his ears. "A little warning next time!" Belle moaned, shaking her head with a dazed expression.
Why did you switch to past tense here?
Finally, however, you fly over the Kingdom army as it begins to march away, carrying as many of their own wounded with them as they can. You see healers begin to swarm forwards from the force of Parvei armor knights to tend to those they could.
"armored"?
Salvador had been to every major city in the Empire in his time as a Wyrmguard, usually following Thaddeus around as the late and lamented Emperor worked to keep his ancestor's domain trundling along the path of history without letting the idiots of the realm upend things.
"ancestors's"?
The leadsoldier, the one with both lance and shield
Missing a space.
"It seemed like there rebels were everywhere, everything was on fire.
"the rebels were"? "there were rebels"?
It's clear the don't know enough to waste time questioning them when he should just go and find out more from the scene.
"they"
For the next twenty minutes, as Salvador flys he spots several more groups of routing soldiers making their way southwest,
Firstly, "flys" should be "flies". Secondly, there should be a comma after that word.
If only she hadn't revealed her presence by raising the bloody void amidst one of the main Imperial army formations in the area and wrecking spirits only knew how much destruction!
"wreaking"
From within Salvador can hear the raised voices of a meeting
There should be a comma after "within".
"Sir Salvador Wyrmguard, Blade of the Emperor, to see His Grace," the Gwenlynn says formally to the guards.
That "the" should not be there.
This sentence should end in a question mark in addition to the exclamation point.
if we don't start send out foraging parties immediately,
"sending"
but just as Salvador is about to draw the Fell Slayer and shoot some fire into the air a massive voice roars from the other side of the blue-blooded mob.
There should be a comma after "air".
The Blade nods, it is a fair request, and even if it wasn't having this sort of argument in front of an audience would be bad for the already shaky morale of this army.
There should be a comma after "wasn't".
"Precocious heirs are a blessing and a curse," he grumbles as he walks to a table along the side of the tent and pours himself a goblet of wine before offering the another goblet towards Salvador.
That "the" should not be there.
"I know there'll be no indolent upon my throne when I'm gone, so long as the boy can survive that long."
"indolence"?
However, how can I claim to protect them if I let that monster lurks across the border
"lurk"
An annihilated army cannot"
Missing punctuation.
"If you have made your decision, Lord Blade, then it is will will be,"
Something went very wrong with this sentence.
Neither option is palatable to me, you understand that don't you?"
There should be a comma after "that".
"Is there anything that the Northlands Duchy can do to air your mission, my lord Blade?"
"aid"
Confusions, but not at Salvador's mission.
Pretty sure this should be "Confusion", singular, not "Confusions", plural.
Maybe eventually some of them will be able to think about last night logically eventually…
One of these is redundant.
As Godric gave him a detailed map (drawn by his own hand, apparently) Salvador made up his mind.
There should be a comma after the parenthesis.
It would take some time to go to the Meridian army and bring them up to speed to make sure they didn't start another war.
"Meridiem"
"Well, hopefully you'll be able to take a nice long nap when we get to the camp," she says, pressing herself against the yeoman's back (and was it just a weird light, or did he flush slightly? Looking the other way, you spot Axton and Kelton, and all around you you can hear the sounds of the moving Kingdom army.
Missing the second parenthesis as well as the punctuation after said second parenthesis.
[] Plan Probably Not Going To Win
-[] Spend some time reading
The Dragon Within and getting to know your dragon-self better. While this long-term transformation went relatively well, perhaps you can learn more to make next time go better.
-[] Spend some time with your various friends, making sure everyone's okay. (Choose 2)
--[] Melissa and Sister Selinda
-[] Spend some time studying magic. You won't have the time to schedule out what exactly to practice, but you'll pick up something useful.
--[] Continue learning Red Magic
I don't expect this plan to win because the general sentiment in the thread seems to be that we should rest, but here's my picks. Improve our ability to work with/as Dragon!Ryza, check on Melissa, and Red Magic primarily for the sake of Runewriting because I don't remember how much Red Magic we need for that, although improving our ability to counter Green Magic is also a good idea.
I still suspect the Master was either the Guardian, or was Aithusa doing a salty runback on the calamity. Either is possible.
I remember the Old Master being referred to as a man. Is that just me?
