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Divine Administration - of Gods and Bureaucracy (Worm/Exalted)

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I literally cannot wait for you to start on 1.7. This one was so much fun to see take shape - Taylor actually seeing a Decree's effect in action!

And you've got so much planned. It's great ^_^

Serafina said:
Also, forgot to mention: Most of the office-description was written by my Beta-reader Snowfire. Because fancy descriptions are fun to write.
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You...you didn't need to make it an entire post on it's own...:oops:
 
Omake: New job
Tu Yu: Greatings Preventor-Of-Mortal-Exploitation-Via-Immortals.
Piggot: My jobs what again?
Tu Yu: You are to insure no god uses their power to the detriment of mortals exceeding their domain.
Piggot: Lots of regulations then?
Tu Yu: I believe they take up most of the Adminisrator-Of-The-Mandate's sanctum.
Piggot: Lets get started.
 
I wonder, AFAIK, in canon, Sophia's probation in the Wards was one of the reasons why getting banned from extra-curricular activities seemed to make her so angry. It made the PRT see that she had gotten into big trouble with the school, which put her position in the Wards in jeopardy. What's going to happen, with the (implied many) documented records of bullying?
 
My first official act of the day was issuing a decree on the school, like I had done at the hospital.


"By decree of Taylor Hebert, Administrator of the Mandate, Divine Lady of Bureaucracy and Paperwork:
All members of the staff of Winslow High shall report all perceived incidents of physical and verbal assault. Each report shall receive the utmost attention and be duly investigated. Known perpetrators shall be observed by the staff whenever possible, and repeat proven incidences will be punished to the highest possible degree."
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Oh my. This will be glorious. :D

Her speech went on for several minutes. The importance of strength, of how we had a duty to aspire to be just as strong as parahumans. How failure to do so made one worthless and not even deserving of pity.
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Reeeaaalll subtle there Emma. :rolleyes:

Anyway, nice chapter @Serafina!

Also:
Madison's last name is Clements. I noticed a couple instances of Clemens...
 
ReaperofInterest said:
I wonder, AFAIK, in canon, Sophia's probation in the Wards was one of the reasons why getting banned from extra-curricular activities seemed to make her so angry. It made the PRT see that she had gotten into big trouble with the school, which put her position in the Wards in jeopardy. What's going to happen, with the (implied many) documented records of bullying?
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I see that Fina's link a few pages back will be very useful in the future :p
 
Ursine said:
while making MedHall bureaucracy more efficient, especially in the area of finding and stamping out corruption.
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The Vice-President of Marketing clicked out of his power point, handed the flash drive with his reports over to the CEO and retook his place at the conference table.

The VP from Accounting eagerly lept to his feet. "Ladies, Gentlemen I have excellent news! Based on current metrics, the new procedures have already put us on track to save over 200 million dollars this quarter!"

Applause rose from the gathered executives. "And that's not it- this week alone the automated reporting procedures have found, prevented and reported to the PRT nearly 5 million in corruption and resource misallocation linked to organized and parahuman crime."

Applause exploded. Even their famously inexpressive CEO was smiling so wide you could almost hear every last one of his teeth grating.
 
Serafina said:
Just as planned.
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Yes. Yes! YES!
Serafina said:
"By decree of Taylor Hebert, Administrator of the Mandate, Divine Lady of Bureaucracy and Paperwork:
All members of the staff of Winslow High shall report all perceived incidents of physical and verbal assault. Each report shall receive the utmost attention and be duly investigated. Known perpetrators shall be observed by the staff whenever possible, and repeat proven incidences will be punished to the highest possible degree."
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I swear I actually had appropriately dramatic music show up the instant I started reading that. The second half of 'You Are My King' from the Fate Zero OST actually. Took me a moment to determine that it was my music player and not just my muse singing in joy at that.

Also a fan of the Divinely over the top sanctum, even if I will hear Warframes Lotus every time the AI speaks.
 
Very nice snip, I like it. The way her sanctum has grown and the fact that it now features Pattern Spiders and other such things is great and I must say the explanations about about divinity and how Taylor thought about that was very well handled.

The way Taylor decided to retaliate against her bullies is great too, as not only does it help her but it also helps everyone else, well normally as I am sure the gangs and Sophia won't take that lying down, I am pretty sure Sophia will suspect the sudden change has something to do with Taylor, so she WILL think the girl triggered. Then there is Panacea to whom taylor gave her identity, this might play too and have taylor labelled as a dangerous master, however given what she did they would be hard pressed to PROVE any master effect. Truly good job.

PS: I also hope you are feeling better now .
 
...that Mandate is going to get some poor schmuck of a teacher killed when a gang takes exception to the facility actually giving a shit.

I also don't see a limitation clause anywhere. SO THEY ARE REPORTING ALL THE CRIMES ALL THE TIME by the way it's written exactly....

Yeah no potential problems there. None at all. N O P E
 
Would a God of Technological Progression make it easier for scientists to figure out how Tinker-Tech works, or make it easier for Tinkers to work?

EDIT:Also, why the heck would Emma actually try something like that? Did she honestly think that she would get away with it, even without anyone knowing about Taylor's second decree?
 
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Nigel Isaacs said:
Very nice snip, I like it. The way her sanctum has grown and the fact that it now features Pattern Spiders and other such things is great and I must say the explanations about about divinity and how Taylor thought about that was very well handled.

The way Taylor decided to retaliate against her bullies is great too, as not only does it help her but it also helps everyone else, well normally as I am sure the gangs and Sophia won't take that lying down, I am pretty sure Sophia will suspect the sudden change has something to do with Taylor, so she WILL think the girl triggered. Then there is Panacea to whom taylor gave her identity, this might play too and have taylor labelled as a dangerous master, however given what she did they would be hard pressed to PROVE any master effect. Truly good job.

PS: I also hope you are feeling better now .
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Or she could simply think that School believe that the locker was too much, so they changed their policy because they don't want something like that to happen again.
 
Ardion Prosili said:
...that Mandate is going to get some poor schmuck of a teacher killed when a gang takes exception to the facility actually giving a shit.

I also don't see a limitation clause anywhere. SO THEY ARE REPORTING ALL THE CRIMES ALL THE TIME by the way it's written exactly....

Yeah no potential problems there. None at all. N O P E
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As my daddy always said.

Son, the politicians want to use the law like a scalpel but in actual fact it is more like a sledgehammer.
 
Not very subtle. A radical change like that seems like the type of thing to make the Protectorate suspect a master at work and since it affects SS directly she's going to make it a point to investigate. Admittedly convincing the wards/protectorate/prt would take more work due to the beneficial nature of the master effect, but I still feel something subtler would be better.
 
Queshire said:
Not very subtle. A radical change like that seems like the type of thing to make the Protectorate suspect a master at work and since it affects SS directly she's going to make it a point to investigate. Admittedly convincing the wards/protectorate/prt would take more work due to the beneficial nature of the master effect, but I still feel something subtler would be better.
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Tell me, how do you think the Protectorate/PRT is going to react after questioning Taylor?

"Did you do this?"

"Well, not directly..."

"Define 'Not Directly'."

"Well see, what I did was make it so that all the staff in Winslow had to follow the rules to the letter and report bullying behavior. Everything else was just nature taking it's course."

"... Can you come work for us?"

"I thought this was an interrogation?"

"PLEASE?"
 
Oh, I don't doubt there would be jokes about that, but it would take a lot to convince them to trust her enough to let her muck around with their organization.
 
Queshire said:
Oh, I don't doubt there would be jokes about that, but it would take a lot to convince them to trust her enough to let her muck around with their organization.
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Vindictus said:
'Let'.

Such a curious word you chose there.
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Just to clarify Vindictus's comment, from my hazy memories of Exalted, there's nothing to "let" her do. If they have a bureaucracy or paperwork, she has domain over it, and there is nothing they can do to eliminate her influence short of completely disbanding their organization.
 
Oh of course, but what would they think if they learned that she'd effectively mastered a large number of people in their organization without their consent. I'm sure Teacher's powers seemed beneficial until the hidden price tag was revealed. Why should they trust some random girl with delusions of godhood?
 
Queshire said:
Oh of course, but what would they think if they learned that she'd effectively mastered a large number of people in their organization without their consent. I'm sure Teacher's powers seemed beneficial until the hidden price tag was revealed. Why should they trust some random girl with delusions of godhood?
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Again, the question is "What can they actually do to stop her?" And the answer is "Nothing."
 
Taylor's not making people do anything but what they're supposed to do and do it more efficiently
 
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