MiskWisk
Hoot
- Location
- Somewhere devoid of wit
- Pronouns
- He
The inclusion of Saki is to show a few things about a certain characters characterisation.
Saki's fate is significantly better, yes. Not that that's a high bar to clear.
CV12Hornet Cleans Out His Fanfiction Favorites List (Beware of Shit Taste)
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Saki's fate is significantly better, yes. Not that that's a high bar to clear.
FourthWall
Love & Destroy
- Location
- Chiraq
/a/ has a soft spot for Bleach, Youjo Senki, and Franken Fran, while Emergence's memetic infamy was bolstered, if not outright started on 4chan in general.
Triangulating those four points into a fic is a decent indicator the author's got some Anon in them
/a/ has a soft spot for Bleach, Youjo Senki, and Franken Fran, while Emergence's memetic infamy was bolstered, if not outright started on 4chan in general.
Triangulating those four points into a fic is a decent indicator the author's got some Anon in them
I haven't visited 4chan in more than a decade and I still knew about Emergence through memes and a youtube vid explaining it. Same with Franken Fran although that is older I think?
Mattman324
you expected some anime, non-IRL giant robot, eh?
- Location
- Working in the basement on my giant robot.
You want to know the funny part? You misread the situation. Because basically everything that follows is an extended sequence of her getting shit on.
An extended sequence.
It lasts for the next seven chapters.
The pacing of the story completely fucking crashes as literally everyone suddenly comes to individual realizations that she's an asshole, while barely any progress on the thing you'd think was the actual main plot line is made.
FourthWall
Love & Destroy
- Location
- Chiraq
Franken Fran was popular on /a/ about a decade+ ago, Emergence as meme is more than a decade old, and about a third of the modern Internet owes something to things that were memetic on 4chan (for better or worse), so I don't think this is the counterargument you think it is
- Location
- America
The fact that 4chan is effectively the primordial soup of memes and a good chunk of internet culture, is one that will never stop being funny to me.Franken Fran was popular on /a/ about a decade+ ago, Emergence as meme is more than a decade old, and about a third of the modern Internet owes something to things that were memetic on 4chan (for better or worse), so I don't think this is the counterargument you think it is
A Young Girl's Game of Thrones
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CV12Hornet
Riter.
- Location
- Tacoma, Washington
A Young Girls' Game of Thrones does not start off on the right foot. It's all the usual technical problems: rambling run-on sentences; odd word choices that impede flow; a lack of description, particularly dialogue tags; and probably a bunch of other things that I've forgotten. It takes Failninja sixteen chapters to find a beta and he still hasn't gone back to rework these older chapters, though happily this solves the worst of the issues going forward.
This is a great thing, because chapter 17 is also when the fic's plot straps a rocket to its ass and takes off.
Chapter 17 is when Cersei finally moves to kill Robert and Eddard and seize control of the throne for herself and Joffrey. While clumsily executed and having several severe knock-on consequences for her personally1, the killing of Robert succeeds. The assault on the Starks fails miserably, because Myrcella, in her ongoing efforts to network, is in the Tower of the Hand and the Gold Cloaks assaulting the place are not being paid to care about that. Myrcella thus makes herself a spanner in the works and uses her magic, Brienne's armor and skills, and at the end some careful negotiation to get the Starks - and herself - out alive and out of King's Landing entirely.
Naturally, this lays dynamite on the rails and blows the usual War of the Five Kings Stations of Canon sky-high. This is probably the biggest draw of the fic, because it's a pretty well-executed war. With Renly dead the Reach is in Stannis' camp for the first half of the war, and with Eddard free the Starks and Riverlanders are free to openly support Stannis. This makes him the primary opponent of the Lannister camp, and even with Myrcella yoinking the Stormlands out from under his nose his forces outnumber the Lannisters so badly that Tywin has to make multiple risky and ultimately losing gambits just to stay afloat.
Enter Myrcella, who proves to be a massive spanner in the works for everyone's plans. She personally kills Melisandre's shadow assassin when it goes for Tywin. She stalls Stannis so long, and so ravages his outriders, that he's forced to try something else and give Myrcella free reign, which she uses to take Harrenhal and move into the Vale. There Petyr tries to kill her for upsetting his plans, only for her to survive2, whip her forces into a frenzy, and smash the Vale quite thoroughly in a very satisfying curb-stomp. So long, Lyn Corbray, you won't be missed. As of now, she's poised to ruin Aegon and Varys' plans - I can't wait to see how that goes.
It's funny to see Myrcella so beloved by the populace and her army and have no idea why. Gee, Myrcella, it's almost like your efforts to be fair, evenhanded, and meritocratic are appreciated! There are hints of care underneath her high-functioning sociopath upper thinking - she's clearly pissed off when the shadow assassin badly injures Brienne, in a very "what is this feeling" sort of manner. And you look at her interacting with Tommen - look at her raw disappointment with every interaction with Cersei - and tell me she doesn't care about her family, too. Speaking of, the fic doesn't lean too hard into the misunderstandings, thankfully, but boy is Cersei one big blind spot for Myrcella. She spends those initial sixteeen chapters convinced Cersei is a canny political operator, and even after seeing Cersei exposed for the incompetent, grasping schemer she is, Myrcella still underestimates the depths of Cersei's delusions.
Which results in Cersei poisoning her and nearly killing her at a very inopportune moment. Myrcella doesn't take that well and kangaroo courts Cersei into being executed the first chance she gets.
Wrapping up the good stuff, we get a rarity: Tywin Lannister being humbled. We've seen him broken or killed, but humbled? That's new. By the latest chapters he's clearly deferring to Myrcella, playing the role as the senior advisor. It's clearly earned by their respective war records, but it's still unusual to see.
Now, on the debit side, besides the first sixteen chapters, the only other major problem is that many of the sideplots can't carry the narrative heft granted them. The scenes up North, with Arya, Jon, and Melisandre especially have me glossing them over, frequently, and I'm not the only one. Still, that's a small problem in the grand scheme of things when I'm still super excited for the upcoming Trial of the Seven with Aegon, Euron being a sorceror, and the situation up North starting to boil over. We've got a clusterfuck ahead, folks, and it's gonna be fun.
You're on the list.
- Two notable ones: Barristan Selmy gets crippled in the fighting, which leads directly to him throwing in his lot with Myrcella and providing the perfect face for her war leadership; and three Lannisters are in the party, one of whom dies (pissing off Kevan something fierce) and another being Tyrion (which sets Jaime against her).
- One of the few running gags is her increasingly ridiculous explanations for how she survived getting thrown out the Moon Door.
I remember reading that because it seemed quite popular on SB, and that generally means it's pretty good (praise the guy who does the weekly charts). But I didn't really see, it was not terrible but not great and didn't really do anything different from standard canon but a little nicer (y'know, fixfic stuff). So I didn't get through those initial 16. But That does sound pretty good, so I think I'll give it another go.
- Location
- USA
I'd recommend it. I don't remember the early chapters being that much of a drag, but if you found them so things are well and truly off the rails now. It's the same vague shape as canon but all the details are fairly mixed up so it's interesting to see how things shape out.