Y Draig Gosch
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- Pronouns
- He/Him
Is the Si gonna be part of the team? Or is it just gonna get strong through devouring select meals (read supervillains)? I prefer the second to the first.
Astrocytoma (A Young Justice/Justice League Terraria Crossover Self Insert)
- Thread starter Black-Aengel-01
- Start date
- Crossover Fantasy Horror
- Location
- In the Space between Spaces
A bit of everything really. I wont spoil too much.
To make the SI future form.
- Location
- In the Space between Spaces
Well, since I am close to finishing the next part I wanted to put this here for future work. (Took a while to create a battle that was not an easy curbstomp. I mean, the heroes had psychics on their hand, that battle should have been a gift wrapped in a pretty red ribbon. Likewise making the battle seem something they just got out by the edge of their teeth demanded quite some special things. But even then I am not sure if I am doing it good enough.) Anyway, since the SI will escape soon enough and do his own thing, and since the Astrals are a species of monsters that can go from bacterium to planet killers in less than a year (even faster on earth since all the magic and stuff here just means that if an astral gets loose shit is going to hit the fan at terminal velocity) I wanted to make a character creation plan so that I can draw him up in future parts. And since I am going to have some fun with that, I am going to include you people as well in the making process.
Now, I have exams this Monday, so I am posting this here so that when I am done with it I can post the next part and then I will get started in the drawing.
Character Creation
Upon touching the complex mythopoeic weave of the Divine, you have taken it upon yourself to be closer to the design of the beings of this world. You feed upon the myths of men and upon doing so; your form can now mimic theirs in turn.
This form you take is purely of aesthetic design, and mayhaps for infiltration purposes. It is easier to walk amid the mortals of this world when your form is not too dissimilar to theirs. But know this, it matters not how much you walk like them, you are no kin to humanity.
Not anymore.
Form of Man: The disguise you make is yours to design. Form it and shape it to your will.
Either (Describe it or find a Picture)
Luminal Archetype: Upon a certain stage in your development, the pattern of colour shifts from your original hue. A sign of maturity closing in and your form growing more powerful… and deadly. Your dark hide shifts, the glow of esoteric mythopoeic organs undergoes recoloring
Pick two, with a third as optional. The first will be the primary design and the second will be the complimentary addition with an optional third for adding minor traits. Ex: Man + Shark + Wyrm = A man with shark like features, like head, skin and webbed feet, but also has multiple sets of mandibles like a worm. Shark + Man + Wyrm = a Shark with humanoid characteristics and a long segmented tail with smaller fins running across its length. Ex 2: A Tree + Organ= A mass of squirming flesh resembling the figure of a tree. Organ + Tree = A floating bulbous mass of tissue with hardened chitin like structures resembling branches and feeding tendrils underneath similar to roots.
(The first will also allow certain powers and abilities even while in disguise.)
Pick one mayor and two minor.
Minor Flaws are easily hidden or explained away.
Now, I have exams this Monday, so I am posting this here so that when I am done with it I can post the next part and then I will get started in the drawing.
Character Creation
Upon touching the complex mythopoeic weave of the Divine, you have taken it upon yourself to be closer to the design of the beings of this world. You feed upon the myths of men and upon doing so; your form can now mimic theirs in turn.
This form you take is purely of aesthetic design, and mayhaps for infiltration purposes. It is easier to walk amid the mortals of this world when your form is not too dissimilar to theirs. But know this, it matters not how much you walk like them, you are no kin to humanity.
Not anymore.
Form of Man: The disguise you make is yours to design. Form it and shape it to your will.
Either (Describe it or find a Picture)
Luminal Archetype: Upon a certain stage in your development, the pattern of colour shifts from your original hue. A sign of maturity closing in and your form growing more powerful… and deadly. Your dark hide shifts, the glow of esoteric mythopoeic organs undergoes recoloring
- Main (Will be the main colour of the flesh, with minor variation)
- Trim (Secondary colour, may vary greatly depending or not)
- Weapon (Hardened body parts designed for attacking)
- Glow (Will also be the colour of the eyes)
Pick two, with a third as optional. The first will be the primary design and the second will be the complimentary addition with an optional third for adding minor traits. Ex: Man + Shark + Wyrm = A man with shark like features, like head, skin and webbed feet, but also has multiple sets of mandibles like a worm. Shark + Man + Wyrm = a Shark with humanoid characteristics and a long segmented tail with smaller fins running across its length. Ex 2: A Tree + Organ= A mass of squirming flesh resembling the figure of a tree. Organ + Tree = A floating bulbous mass of tissue with hardened chitin like structures resembling branches and feeding tendrils underneath similar to roots.
(The first will also allow certain powers and abilities even while in disguise.)
- The Wyrm: The form echoing the design of a worm or serpent. It either has no limbs or hundreds upon hundreds of small appendages running across its body. (Giant Attack Tail Binkaku Kagune style)
- The Salamander: A form resembling that of a reptile like a lizard or crocodilian. There is no hard limit to the number of limbs it could possess. (Eldritch Fire Breath)
- The Geode: The form of a crystal, either as the central mass of the entity, or a substance resembling rock with glass like growths across its surface. (Stronger Spells)
- The Tree: A tree like form, with branches, roots and even leaves, though may not necessarily be out of plant matter. (Distant Seeds)
- The Polyp: Unlike bilaterally symmetrical organisms, the Polyp design is radial in shape, or at least, is mostly radial. (Local Non-Euclidean Region)
- The Organ: It is a purely asymmetrical shape, or resembling a bulbous mass of tissue. Very likely has citae, tendrils or cyst like growths. (Greater Psionics)
- The Insect: Characterized by having a hard, chitinous exterior and multiple limbs. Could possibly have wings of some kind. (Extreme Strength)
- The Bird: A vaguely avian shape. A beak and wings are the norm, though it may have other traits that sets it apart from that clade of animals. (Extreme Agility)
- The Un-man: The form of man, but in every way and form, wrongly made. From either too many limbs, or too long a body or too misshapen, whatever it is, it only follows human natural law whenever it suits its fancy. (Endocorporeal Micro Pocket Dimension)
Pick one mayor and two minor.
Minor Flaws are easily hidden or explained away.
- Forehead Marker. A crystal, an extra eye or a horn. Easily hidden with a bandana…. Most of the time
- Eerie Glowing Eyes. Sclera of alien colour and a shine of the eye. At least the glow isn't noticeable during the day. Just make sure to wear good sunglasses.
- Odd Distal Pigmentation. Your hands and feet tend to have an oddly coloured pigment. Better keep those gloves and shoes on in public. (Cannot pick this and Distal Aberration at the same time)
- Odd Hair Colour. Yes, I just dyed my hair white with a red band, and I don't care what you say, I think it looks cool. (Colours are affected by Luminal Archetype)
- Abnormal Oral Traits. Sharp teeth, dark mucosa, long tongue… well… I hear facemasks are in fashion these days.
- Non-Existent Somatic Processes. You don't need to breathe… or even eat for that matter. Even the way you move that makes people get weird vibes about you. Heck, you oftentimes forget to even blink! Sometimes it happens in public and… well… some people find it unsettling… but they can't quite tell what it is. Most of the time.
- Dermal Lines. Your human form is a suit to hide your inhuman form. These lines show where the horror underneath pierces the disguise. Even a cursory glance from someone is enough to let them know that something is off about your body if you have so many lines. The advantage of this though is that to undergo transformations is much easier and does not need to completely destroy parts of the disguise in the process. ++Transformation.
- Living Tattoos. Your entire body is covered in artworks that seem to possess a life of their own, moving and swirling in non-Euclidean patterns and bizarre designs. While aesthetically pleasing… if somewhat disconcerting, they surely do draw a lot of unwanted attention at times. The great perk is that it boosts acts of thaumaturgy and sorcery as the tattoos often are arcane nexus designs. ++Magic.
- Distal Aberration. Your hands and forearms, as well as your feet do not fully conceal their nature, always showing hard chitinous clawed hands. This makes it considerably hard to hide your nature as an abomination, as no commonly available set of clothes can easily hide these traits. However, that means that your arms and legs are always available for straight up combat at any time, including acting as arcane focus. +Magic, +Transformation.
- Location
- In the Space between Spaces
Yes. Have fun. I will collect the most well done of both sufficient velocity and spacebattles and then make a voting. Then i will draw him. There is ample time so have fun.
- Pronouns
- He
How long do we have to put in suggestions cause I have to head in to work soon but I would like to put some up when I get home.
- Location
- In the Space between Spaces
*Repeatesly, violently, viciously, hatefully slams face against wall.* Why???!!! Autocorrect you keep failing me!!!!!!
Uh... i guess you have until this monday? I have an exam then and only then will i contiue writing the next part so... actually, take your time, we have plenty of time.
I like it. Though how would his human disguise look like? And the colours? Because the proposal wont count unless it has all the designs.
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spiderlord4
Please do not bully the Spider
- Location
- England
An interesting idea to me would be Tree + Wyrm + Geode. Then Forehead Marker, Eerie Glowing Eyes and Dermal Lines. It seems like it would result in a rather interesting form, drawing on legends of stuff like Ladon and the hydra, making parts crystal just increases the eldritch ness. Evil trees are a staple of mythology too.
Maybe for a human form going full uncanny valley with a tall, thin, androgynous appearance with long hair. Go full Ringu, and with a trio of glowing eyes and lines all over the body it would leave him looking kinda creepy, but recongnisibly human.
Not sure about colours, but pure white for main with a grey trim and pink glow would add up to an almost corpse like, albino design, perfect for sliding right into the uncanny valley without going edge lord.
Maybe for a human form going full uncanny valley with a tall, thin, androgynous appearance with long hair. Go full Ringu, and with a trio of glowing eyes and lines all over the body it would leave him looking kinda creepy, but recongnisibly human.
Not sure about colours, but pure white for main with a grey trim and pink glow would add up to an almost corpse like, albino design, perfect for sliding right into the uncanny valley without going edge lord.
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A frail and short old man which can contort his face into any shape he wants.
View: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Td2x8s9GZlo
These could serve as an inspiration for the face shapes.
For the colors:
Main: Gold
Trim: Crimson Red
Weapon: Magenta
Glow: Pitch Black
Tempted to suggest Un-man + Polyp Builds. They just work so well together.
With forehead marker, nonexistent somatic process and dermal lines.
The core concept involving noneuclidean geometry and space folding.
Basically, the human suit is a higher dimension origami that folds away the true form along the dermal lines, starting from the forehead marker.
With the main form being a radially symmetric fleshy wrinkle in space time in the vague shape of a person, that looks the exact same shape when viewed from any angle, and doesn't really move or articulate along joints, but warps and stretches as if being bent along by space.
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Human form could be just any regular person with lines
Maybe something like this, with the black parts are folded in, not flat.
And wispier greenish energy highlights glowing out the holes.
Luminal Archetype:
Honestly, not good at selecting palettes, but probably something associated with eldritch energies? Thats usually portrayed as Violet or Green.
dark Violet body with Glowing green rifts?
Maybe a fleshy pink secondary color highlights, like parts of the outer fake skin cover remaining in patches after it inverts.
Pick one major and two minor.
Minor Flaws
1. Forehead Marker.
2. Non-Existent Somatic Processes.
Major Flaws
1. Dermal Lines.
Also toying with the idea of its natural weapon being a weaponized internal pocket of folded space.
Kind of like giving things a big hug, but they come out the other end looking like an inverted flesh nugget star trek transporter accident, as a consequence of being pushed into a space that was folded into a Klein bottle.
With forehead marker, nonexistent somatic process and dermal lines.
The core concept involving noneuclidean geometry and space folding.
Basically, the human suit is a higher dimension origami that folds away the true form along the dermal lines, starting from the forehead marker.
With the main form being a radially symmetric fleshy wrinkle in space time in the vague shape of a person, that looks the exact same shape when viewed from any angle, and doesn't really move or articulate along joints, but warps and stretches as if being bent along by space.
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Human form could be just any regular person with lines
Maybe something like this, with the black parts are folded in, not flat.
And wispier greenish energy highlights glowing out the holes.
Luminal Archetype:
Honestly, not good at selecting palettes, but probably something associated with eldritch energies? Thats usually portrayed as Violet or Green.
dark Violet body with Glowing green rifts?
Maybe a fleshy pink secondary color highlights, like parts of the outer fake skin cover remaining in patches after it inverts.
Pick one major and two minor.
Minor Flaws
1. Forehead Marker.
2. Non-Existent Somatic Processes.
Major Flaws
1. Dermal Lines.
Also toying with the idea of its natural weapon being a weaponized internal pocket of folded space.
Kind of like giving things a big hug, but they come out the other end looking like an inverted flesh nugget star trek transporter accident, as a consequence of being pushed into a space that was folded into a Klein bottle.
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- Location
- United Kingdom
I think an Organ-UnMan with the abnormal oral traits, Non-Existent Somatic Processes and the living tatoos could be cool. like a mix between some of the more fleshy tomie incarnations and these:
Edit : Adding in the colours and description of human form
Main: A pale ivory tinged with yellow, almost pus like
Trim: A reddish pink like slightly darker lungs
Weapon: a dark brownish red like almost congealed blood
Glow (for eyes and tattoos): bright crimson
human form: tall, over 2 meters but with thin limbs that grow thicker towards the appendages and an overlarge torso given that they would look otherwise undernourished, their ribcage straining against their skin, looking as though it is trying to hold more in their body than it should. on their face, the number of teeth and identifying features such as moles, hairs and proportions are oddly inconsistent, never changing enough that you wouldn't recognise them at a glance but if one were to study them closely over time the effect would be like a new identical twin every day, the same face but having been shaped by different environmental factors.
Main: A pale ivory tinged with yellow, almost pus like
Trim: A reddish pink like slightly darker lungs
Weapon: a dark brownish red like almost congealed blood
Glow (for eyes and tattoos): bright crimson
human form: tall, over 2 meters but with thin limbs that grow thicker towards the appendages and an overlarge torso given that they would look otherwise undernourished, their ribcage straining against their skin, looking as though it is trying to hold more in their body than it should. on their face, the number of teeth and identifying features such as moles, hairs and proportions are oddly inconsistent, never changing enough that you wouldn't recognise them at a glance but if one were to study them closely over time the effect would be like a new identical twin every day, the same face but having been shaped by different environmental factors.
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I think the salamander geode and the bird, major drawback Living Tattoos, minor drawbacks Eerie Glowing Eyes, and Abnormal Oral Traits, magic fire breathing lizard for the win, weird teeth and eyes for intimidation
Something like this but with gems coming out of it and dark purple and green
Something like this but with gems coming out of it and dark purple and green
- Location
- In the Space between Spaces
I am afraid that the first form is what gives the power. Any add-ons are basically aesthetic mostly. However, that idea of yours that he is a self folded spatial anomaly is so good that i may just let it be part of the winners. But you have not given me his human disguise yet, not the Luminal archetype, so i cannot tag it. Fix it up and then we will see.
Yes, this works.An interesting idea to me would be Tree + Wyrm + Geode. Then Forehead Marker, Eerie Glowing Eyes and Dermal Lines. It seems like it would result in a rather interesting form, drawing on legends of stuff like Ladon and the hydra, making parts crystal just increases the eldritch ness. Evil trees are a staple of mythology too.
Maybe for a human form going full uncanny valley with a tall, thin, androgynous appearance with long hair. Go full Ringu, and with a trio of glowing eyes and lines all over the body it would leave him looking kinda creepy, but recongnisibly human.
Not sure about colours, but pure white for main with a grey trim and pink glow would add up to an almost corpse like, albino design, perfect for sliding right into the uncanny valley without going edge lord.
I can also see a ton of jokes being thrown his way whenever anyone calls him a girl. And then horror when he gets pissed.
SI: "FUCK YOU I AM A GUY!!! WRAAAHJHGJBMUG!!" Eldritch horror intensifies.
Random Villain. *Horror filled screaming*
You forgot the human disguise and colours. Add those and you would be golden!I think an Organ-UnMan with the abnormal oral traits, Non-Existent Somatic Processes and the living tatoos could be cool. like a mix between some of the more fleshy tomie incarnations and these:
Don't forget the human disguise form. Beyond that though... nice... me like.I think the salamander geode and the bird, major drawback Living Tattoos, minor drawbacks Eerie Glowing Eyes, and Abnormal Oral Traits, magic fire breathing lizard for the win, weird teeth and eyes for intimidation
- Location
- In the Space between Spaces
I'm going to say this before more submissions show up.
Please fill everything in, including the colours and the human disguise. Also, of the Form Revealed, he will only get the power of the first form that is picked. That means if it goes like Un-Man + Salamander, then the SI will only receive the pocket dimension.
This form is only an early stage of his development. A rapid, short growth spurt, but not something that would allow him to fold physics like a pretzel just yet.
Please fill everything in, including the colours and the human disguise. Also, of the Form Revealed, he will only get the power of the first form that is picked. That means if it goes like Un-Man + Salamander, then the SI will only receive the pocket dimension.
This form is only an early stage of his development. A rapid, short growth spurt, but not something that would allow him to fold physics like a pretzel just yet.
i love spiderlord4's idea
My idea for a possible form:
Form of Man:
Pale flesh. Pitch black hair. Emerald eyes. Unnaturally tall and lanky, roughly 7-7'6'' tall. Constantly covers body when trying to blend in, but when revealed his horns and marking are quite obvious. Very intimidating.
Luminal Archetype:
Main: Light grey. (flesh)
Trim: Oily/prismatic. (scales)
Weapon: Deep, deep black. (wood)
Glow: Poisonous emerald green. (Talons/interior)
Form Unveiled:
1 Salamander / 2 un-man / 3 tree
Can vaguely be described as a demon. constantly changing height, around 12 feet tall, with 4 arms that are each topped off with seven fingered hands. digigrade legs and asymetrical wings that look like the branches of a tree come from his back. The face is dragon like, with a trifold mouth and a crown of thorns protruding from the back. Has 7 eyes on his face located randomly on the head, all pupil less. The skin is mostly scales but is "armored" with thick bark growing from the body. 3 tails are located on it's back, each one with a fanged mouth at the end. When looking closely, there is no interior flesh but rather petrified bone and wood that grinds together in a Perpetual movement.
Flaws:
Forehead marker
- Your crown of thorns remains with you at all times. can be hidden with a good hat and long hair, but otherwise your inhumanity is obvious.
Non Existent Somatic Processes
- You are wood and bone and nightmares and madness. It can be hard to remind your body how to act human acts when your body has never needed to do so on it's own.
Living Tatoos
- The eternal movements of your form churn their way across your skin, showing a maddening lattices of sounds, movements, and the echoes of distant dimensions. Not pleasant for anything sane to view, But can be used to help manipulate your personal eldritch abilities.
This was fun to make, Even if it doesn't get chosen!
Edit: right after posting I realized this is probably more of a final form rather than initial. Oops!
Form of Man:
Pale flesh. Pitch black hair. Emerald eyes. Unnaturally tall and lanky, roughly 7-7'6'' tall. Constantly covers body when trying to blend in, but when revealed his horns and marking are quite obvious. Very intimidating.
Luminal Archetype:
Main: Light grey. (flesh)
Trim: Oily/prismatic. (scales)
Weapon: Deep, deep black. (wood)
Glow: Poisonous emerald green. (Talons/interior)
Form Unveiled:
1 Salamander / 2 un-man / 3 tree
Can vaguely be described as a demon. constantly changing height, around 12 feet tall, with 4 arms that are each topped off with seven fingered hands. digigrade legs and asymetrical wings that look like the branches of a tree come from his back. The face is dragon like, with a trifold mouth and a crown of thorns protruding from the back. Has 7 eyes on his face located randomly on the head, all pupil less. The skin is mostly scales but is "armored" with thick bark growing from the body. 3 tails are located on it's back, each one with a fanged mouth at the end. When looking closely, there is no interior flesh but rather petrified bone and wood that grinds together in a Perpetual movement.
Flaws:
Forehead marker
- Your crown of thorns remains with you at all times. can be hidden with a good hat and long hair, but otherwise your inhumanity is obvious.
Non Existent Somatic Processes
- You are wood and bone and nightmares and madness. It can be hard to remind your body how to act human acts when your body has never needed to do so on it's own.
Living Tatoos
- The eternal movements of your form churn their way across your skin, showing a maddening lattices of sounds, movements, and the echoes of distant dimensions. Not pleasant for anything sane to view, But can be used to help manipulate your personal eldritch abilities.
This was fun to make, Even if it doesn't get chosen!
Edit: right after posting I realized this is probably more of a final form rather than initial. Oops!
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- Location
- sweden
- The Polyp: Unlike bilaterally symmetrical organisms, the Polyp design is radial in shape, or at least, is mostly radial. (Local Non-Euclidean Region)+geode for that outer wilds eye of the universe quantum star look with the same colors i think would be neat.
Possible forms:
Form of Man: Average sapient being in an effective 2 mile radius. It acts more like a reality perception filter where the it appears to be the averaged appearance of all sapient beings within 2 miles at that time or when the last sapient being is within that radius. This normally causes a subtle change in appearance as sapients enter and exit the range, though the change can be quite dramatic or appears to even be twins for very low population areas. This also tends to make it look somewhat androgynous in many areas. The appearance makes it somewhat easier to disguise itself in a crowd from a distance, though appearance changes only has a subtle supernatural size changing effect on clothing and equipment worn and there is a perception of uncanniness in close viewers from the shifting of appearance.
Major Flaw: Variant Living Tattoos. Similar in appearance, but it is more related to the Astral Biology in that it is more of an outward expression of a cognitohazard on underlying eldritch truths that it uses to absorb abilities. It does not provide it with boosts to its magical abilities like the other major flaws. While normal mortals only find the designs to be disturbing or beautiful, those who have greater perceptions of reality or tied to concepts are under the real danger of having their existence being overwritten by this. Such conceptually-connected beings instinctively avoid ever being coming within perception range of effect of him and consider him an existential threat.
Minor Flaws: Variant Odd Distal Pigmentation and Variant Odd Hair Colour and Variant Non-Existent Somatic Processes. The shifting average appearance as described above. Strangely enough he will still be able to handle tools like a human even if the only sapients around look like talking dogs or worms.
Luminal Archetype: A reality shifting of appearance to be more like the Form Unveiled (maybe like the Burning Godzilla).
Form Unveiled: Un-man+Polyp+Salamander. Shin-Godzilla including its hyper-evolution growth. Maybe eventually looking like Godzilla Earth or the more recent anime, though possibly all forms will be less than 6 feet tall.
A lot of powerful beings would treat him like a cosmic eldritch threat; and with the above, they would not really be wrong to think so.
Form of Man: Average sapient being in an effective 2 mile radius. It acts more like a reality perception filter where the it appears to be the averaged appearance of all sapient beings within 2 miles at that time or when the last sapient being is within that radius. This normally causes a subtle change in appearance as sapients enter and exit the range, though the change can be quite dramatic or appears to even be twins for very low population areas. This also tends to make it look somewhat androgynous in many areas. The appearance makes it somewhat easier to disguise itself in a crowd from a distance, though appearance changes only has a subtle supernatural size changing effect on clothing and equipment worn and there is a perception of uncanniness in close viewers from the shifting of appearance.
Major Flaw: Variant Living Tattoos. Similar in appearance, but it is more related to the Astral Biology in that it is more of an outward expression of a cognitohazard on underlying eldritch truths that it uses to absorb abilities. It does not provide it with boosts to its magical abilities like the other major flaws. While normal mortals only find the designs to be disturbing or beautiful, those who have greater perceptions of reality or tied to concepts are under the real danger of having their existence being overwritten by this. Such conceptually-connected beings instinctively avoid ever being coming within perception range of effect of him and consider him an existential threat.
Minor Flaws: Variant Odd Distal Pigmentation and Variant Odd Hair Colour and Variant Non-Existent Somatic Processes. The shifting average appearance as described above. Strangely enough he will still be able to handle tools like a human even if the only sapients around look like talking dogs or worms.
Luminal Archetype: A reality shifting of appearance to be more like the Form Unveiled (maybe like the Burning Godzilla).
Form Unveiled: Un-man+Polyp+Salamander. Shin-Godzilla including its hyper-evolution growth. Maybe eventually looking like Godzilla Earth or the more recent anime, though possibly all forms will be less than 6 feet tall.
A lot of powerful beings would treat him like a cosmic eldritch threat; and with the above, they would not really be wrong to think so.
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- Location
- In the Space between Spaces
Its an SI, i am male, therefore the SI is male.
- Location
- In the Space between Spaces
The image doesn't show. If you are using Deviantart it doesn't appear because i am in Cuba. Also... what would the eldritch form be like? And the colours?Human disguise:
The boy on the left.
Luminal Archetype:
The parts of the body exposed to the light shines hurts to look. (color too bright/strong)
- Location
- on Chair
- Pronouns
- He/Him
Honestly I like how you write, you setup the story, wrote interesting characters (sanguine and Desmond) with understandable motivations and goals, set up a upcoming problem of Tamed Starflesh clones/monsters, and changed the setting in logical ways.
But one Thing I always find is that the actual story, the character interactions, the aim, dream and struggle and victory is more important than the appearance or powersets. so Appearance or powers really should be the tools used to propel the story forward, or bring in more complications. So I am a bit iffy in letting us decide aspects of that, since we don't know where the story is going.
Buuut.. I do have some input. I leaned into the Ocean theme a bit.
Polyp+Geode+Wyrm
Main: Dark Purple
Trim: Green
Glow: Teal
Weapon: Flowing black metal Sand freely crystalized into weapons and back.
Human Disguise. The nice Bob with too many teeth.
An big man. both tall at 1.86cm and broad having a bit of a beer belly. while rounded off and not featuring a sculpted physice there are obvious muscles beneath the fat and deceptive strength. the kind you get working in construction or at the farm instead of the gym. Has medium length brown hair held back by a cap, bandana or other headgear most of the time. often wears sunglasses and baggy clothing like sweaters and hoodies with sturdy jeans and boots. a carefully crafted everyman that you can quickly forget and underestimate with a strong jaw and broad mouth. Charming, but not overly handsome or distinct. the image is ruined however with the unusal blue colour of his eyes and how they shine. Prefers to eat alone, and rarely smiles with his teeth. when you pay attention you might notice that his tongue is oddly dark and cylindrical, and that there seems to be a second row of teeth behind his first ones like a shark... Not to mention the really disconcerting way some of his "scars from work" ripple and move. What kind of work could result in that?
Flaws:
Eerie Glowing eyes. Magical mishap, i'm a mage you know. Glowy eyes come with the territory. just look at Doctor fate.
Abnormal Oral traits. What do you mean, human tongues can't extend that far? how can you chew anything with just one row of teeth?
Dermal lines. Large seam where the skin seems to ripple and faintly glow teal from the back of his neck to his tailbone. other seams also present on the limbs. Transformation is disconcerting as the human seems to deflate and fold inside into the seam as the true form emerges from the back.
The beasts true form sports three primary eyes at the tip of its body. its head flares in a oddly triangular wedge with five radial Tentacles whose tips can freely shift into any shape. Past the "head" is a long cylindrical body several meters long, but its mostly obscured by tens of further tentacles, fins sails, spines and carapace blades fractally growing from its main mass. the entire mass however seems oddly flexible, bending and twisting and compressing in impossible ways when needed.
aside the eyes and the tips of tentacles, which resembles fractured black glass in appearance, its skin ripples and waves like water, and shimmers with all the colours like a oil slick or ink in water. the Colours seem to form fractal shapes when one stares too long. when one looks carefully all the tentacles, fins, spines, eyes and blades seem to emerge from underneat the skin, and can change position, retract and emerge in any orientation on its body without consideration for an anatomy underneath. the skin flows and ripples along their emerging edges like a liquid or Gas. if one dares to touch the surface however, It remains solid and dry as steel even as it ripples and shifts in response to unseen forces. We theorize its more like a barrier or event horizon with more space inside than outside.
it has no mouth or Teeth, and eats by pulling its meal under its surface. it speaks by vibrating and rippling its surface like a speaker, from any position and can make any sound. the tips of the tentacles seem to be a strange sort of black tinted translucent sand, that can shift freely into shape, or crystalize into a solid crystal at will and then used or launched by some unseen mechanism.
But one Thing I always find is that the actual story, the character interactions, the aim, dream and struggle and victory is more important than the appearance or powersets. so Appearance or powers really should be the tools used to propel the story forward, or bring in more complications. So I am a bit iffy in letting us decide aspects of that, since we don't know where the story is going.
Buuut.. I do have some input. I leaned into the Ocean theme a bit.
Polyp+Geode+Wyrm
Main: Dark Purple
Trim: Green
Glow: Teal
Weapon: Flowing black metal Sand freely crystalized into weapons and back.
Human Disguise. The nice Bob with too many teeth.
An big man. both tall at 1.86cm and broad having a bit of a beer belly. while rounded off and not featuring a sculpted physice there are obvious muscles beneath the fat and deceptive strength. the kind you get working in construction or at the farm instead of the gym. Has medium length brown hair held back by a cap, bandana or other headgear most of the time. often wears sunglasses and baggy clothing like sweaters and hoodies with sturdy jeans and boots. a carefully crafted everyman that you can quickly forget and underestimate with a strong jaw and broad mouth. Charming, but not overly handsome or distinct. the image is ruined however with the unusal blue colour of his eyes and how they shine. Prefers to eat alone, and rarely smiles with his teeth. when you pay attention you might notice that his tongue is oddly dark and cylindrical, and that there seems to be a second row of teeth behind his first ones like a shark... Not to mention the really disconcerting way some of his "scars from work" ripple and move. What kind of work could result in that?
Flaws:
Eerie Glowing eyes. Magical mishap, i'm a mage you know. Glowy eyes come with the territory. just look at Doctor fate.
Abnormal Oral traits. What do you mean, human tongues can't extend that far? how can you chew anything with just one row of teeth?
Dermal lines. Large seam where the skin seems to ripple and faintly glow teal from the back of his neck to his tailbone. other seams also present on the limbs. Transformation is disconcerting as the human seems to deflate and fold inside into the seam as the true form emerges from the back.
The beasts true form sports three primary eyes at the tip of its body. its head flares in a oddly triangular wedge with five radial Tentacles whose tips can freely shift into any shape. Past the "head" is a long cylindrical body several meters long, but its mostly obscured by tens of further tentacles, fins sails, spines and carapace blades fractally growing from its main mass. the entire mass however seems oddly flexible, bending and twisting and compressing in impossible ways when needed.
aside the eyes and the tips of tentacles, which resembles fractured black glass in appearance, its skin ripples and waves like water, and shimmers with all the colours like a oil slick or ink in water. the Colours seem to form fractal shapes when one stares too long. when one looks carefully all the tentacles, fins, spines, eyes and blades seem to emerge from underneat the skin, and can change position, retract and emerge in any orientation on its body without consideration for an anatomy underneath. the skin flows and ripples along their emerging edges like a liquid or Gas. if one dares to touch the surface however, It remains solid and dry as steel even as it ripples and shifts in response to unseen forces. We theorize its more like a barrier or event horizon with more space inside than outside.
it has no mouth or Teeth, and eats by pulling its meal under its surface. it speaks by vibrating and rippling its surface like a speaker, from any position and can make any sound. the tips of the tentacles seem to be a strange sort of black tinted translucent sand, that can shift freely into shape, or crystalize into a solid crystal at will and then used or launched by some unseen mechanism.
- Pronouns
- It/Its
So, already posted these over on SB, but thought I'd post them here as well. Also, this thread seems far more active. Anyway, the Living Doll was my first attempt but it was noted to be more a fully developed astral god, so I made Danger Noodle as a toned down version.
owrtho
- The Living Doll :
- The Danger Noodle :
Figured I'd mention that that's not entirely clear from the description. This:
implies that multiple parts may provide powers and abilities, but it's only the first that allows said powers and abilities to be used while in disguise. At least that was my reading of it.
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- Location
- In the Space between Spaces
I liked your comment. I really, really do, and you raise an important issue. One that I am quite glad to answer.
Alright, he reason why I decided to do this is quite simple. While I had a design already in mind I felt like… like it lacked enough originality and uniqueness to it. I wanted something more uncommon, something more original, and posting this helped me make a much more unique design on the Main Character's powers and appearance, which I will remind you, given that he is an Astral God, they can pretty much be anything and will be, in a way, everything at a certain point of his development. So I picked powers that would not affect the story too much, while at the same time giving me some manner of a challenge on how to make use of powers in more interesting situations, and also art, because I will do my damn best to attempt to draw the SI, in both his human and Eldritch forms.
An instance of originality that I did not think, spiderlord4's (The Blood Root) presents a main character with interesting aesthetics, and his eldritch form is something truly awe inspiring, as much as it is terrifying. Or OneGiantDounceCap's (The Folded Prince), a living, breathing spatial anomaly, which has an interesting twist to what I had originally designed for the pocket dimension. Or meloa789's and KJG's cognitohazardous additions.
Likewise, I also made this early enough so that the future of the story is not derailed in any major way, or if any at all.
Also, I like the human form you picked.
Also, owrtho, let's make it that he only starts out with the first ability, then he gets the second later on as he evolves. The reason why this initial ability is picked is because it allows him to have some powers while remaining human shaped without being limited to his magic, which at the moment, he is a complete novice in, or his psionics or limited fire breath.
See it this way: You are a three – ten ton eldritch abomination keeping your entire mass crunched up in the body of an itty biddy human while maintaining your mass from causing you to fall through the earth or crush the person you share a bed with. It takes a degree of concentration to maintain this state, or at the very least some of your mythopoeia being naturally used for this, so your powers are diminished due to this.
This picked power, or powers, permit the SI to have some more variation with his abilities without resorting to suddenly exploding into undiluted nightmare fuel every time he has to deal with a tough situation.
I also wanted to give certain descriptions to the powers, but I knew that there would be favourites if I did.