[X] On the Trail
[X] A Promising Lead
Are we seriously voting to destroy the ring. God I hate gisena so much all of her major options fill me with rage. Dumping 50 arete into gisena and the only real positive thing is it might personality wipe her. Instead of fun interesting things like more praxis gang you decide to pour 50 precious beautiful arete into the most salt inducing option. You people manage to lower my expectations at every turn, it's actually impressive in a shockingly horrifying way
I always knew you are a right proper lad. Don't worry brother, the Boosted Bonobo sect will not win today.
 
A rather dramatic shift! If not attempting to secure the Broken Kaleidoscope, however, where else would Hunger spend all that Arete? Might be a strong argument for Enough Gun...
 
It's a broadstrokes plan, but I think it's workable as long as the info-gathering phase goes well.
It is not concrete, however. Like, realistically, there are three workable paradigms besides "get x(i.e. Cold Light) and hope that it works out":
  • Defensive paradigm: NS/AH/SitS. Cover entire Human Sphere with NS, massively reducing Dien's ability to influence Human Sphere and thus reducing his advancement speed. Would work pretty well, except we didn't get NS when we could so we would have to wait for next Pillars proc, meaning that Dien got few weeks of headstart, so we started affecting his growth curve much later than we would like
  • Hunter paradigm: Basically On The Trail and Promising lead. Keep destroying Dien's infrastructure and slow him that way, and then slowly get what we need to beat him. It follows up our previous choices and it is realistically one thing we can do
  • Power paradigm: Admit that we can't play strategic scale game and give up. Get Closing the Fist and RoW so Dien can't realistically out scale us and just let him fuck with Human Sphere while we grind to the point where we can cut through. Thread would probably never pick this so whatever
So we want to do hunter thing. However, Dien is not an idiot. He is resourceful, intelligent and he understands how Cursebearers operate. He already blind-countered our Ruin snipe plan before we even got to use our Ruin prison. And while he is working with imperfect information, I still don't see any combination of Advancements we currently have as capable of truly challenging him.

So yeah. We need picks, and then we need to do something with them. Right now we don't seem to have any concrete idea of which Advancement we should get and given absolute dogshit gameplay thread is having lately, I am sure they would jump at chance to get Imprisoner's Refinement or something else that doesn't do shit for our current situation. As such, I would much rather just BK Gisena and let her solve this and then deal with that particular issue at later date.
 
Hey @Birdsie, how do you write so quickly? Like, specific actual-typing-process details. I've been trying to get this CYOA drafted up for weeks of intermittent computer access, and I'm pretty sure it's been more than twelve hours total by now, with less than half your wordcount.
 
Our current priorities are a) finding and killing Dien, and b) preventing the destruction of the human sphere. On The Trail without the power BK provides is worse than Enough Gun for b since we wouldn't have the power required to use what we learned from it against Dien, as we wouldn't have power that can be applied well on a strategic scale. If we're going to choose A Promised lead then we'll need Enough Gun.
get x(i.e. Cold Light) and hope that it works out"
Cold Light is pretty much the best option we have, given that with the increased Praxis endurance we have due to 400 willpower that's elavated by 0.2 up the ISH for military purposes we'd almost certainly be able to have it exceed the Human Sphere in aoe, the rate at which it improves in effectiveness doesn't drop off like with NS and unlike SitS it doesn't require us to actually rule the Human Sphere to defend it without having to let Dien commit further unforgivable acts.
 
Cold Light is pretty much the best option we have, given that with the increased Praxis endurance we have due to 400 willpower that's elavated by 0.2 up the ISH for military purposes we'd almost certainly be able to have it exceed the Human Sphere in aoe
Ergo
"get x(i.e. Cold Light) and hope that it works out":
So what happens if Cold Light is not silver bullet to our problems because ~10x Praxis pool is not enough for entire galaxy? We just lose because we spent 25 Arete on something that doesn't meaningfully affects Dien? What if it doesn't automatically detect and affect only foes? What if Dien expects what appears to be known Praxis super move and has already congegencies in place?
 
I expect that Cold Light would give us the required range, but friendly fire is a fair concern given that a lot of the planets Dien controls have humans just living their lives.

The Ruin of ADS is rather indiscriminate.
 
Another issue is that Cold Light is very limited in what it can do. Take NS as an example - it deals with Dien well, sure, but it also give precious Mental Stability, helps us with high Agi issue in future and so on. Not that I would refuse 25 Arete "make Surgeon go and stay go button", of course, but it is still something to consider.

That aside, how large is our Praxis casting pool right now? We used to stand at about 32 Quickening and then we got +10 Willpower with Winter King and another +50 from Breaker of Suns as well as slew of Praxis techniques which also increase our casting pool. Overall, we should be at above hundred Quickenings worth of Praxis right now, right?
 
Current vote count?

While Broken Kaleidoscope will certainly result in more than 50 Arete of value for Gisena (and possible, indirectly, for Hunger as well - as Renaissance Woman provided stages of Mitigation atop its power and finesse boost to Gisena herself), this is by no means a similar type of Advancement to RW! Gisena is pushing herself into highly speculative and dangerous territory in order to defeat her ancestral foe. Whether this is the path she 'should' take may not have an objective conclusion, but it's certainly not following the time-tested line of advancement provided by the Maiden!

That said, the Ring of Artifice does contribute to Gisena's Grace creation speed and is one of the reasons she can scale so quickly given downtime.

Since it looks like On the Trail is leading for Hunger, brainstorming some search & investigation tactics could improve Hunger's effectiveness in the contest against Dien!

There will be a Patreon/Blurb Library update today or tomorrow.
 
Assuming a promising lead wins then we'll probably be getting info on Dien's powers and locations from that. So I think we should have Hunger focus more on the military side of things. It is his specialty after all. Instead of focusing on how whatever Dien is doing works we should focus on what he's doing with his power. Places he's using to grow more Heroes would be a good place to start. Destroying them would probably only inconvenience him but that's the point. We need to stall him until we can discern his main bodies location. After that the fight itself should be firmly in our favour. As for his backups that's a problem for afterwards and probably Gisena.
Edit: Reread the update and Dien mentions incubator realms which are critical to his plans. He specifically says that he hopes Hunter doesn't find them. These should be a priority to find if possible.
 
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I mean, if you don't want BK then we should obviously do On The Trail as it leverages Rank and Wisdom from Breaker and then combine that with A Promising Lead. It has got fairly straightforward gameplay.
 
Adhoc vote count started by ilbgar123 on Feb 27, 2021 at 3:39 PM, finished with 162 posts and 41 votes.


I mean, if you don't want BK then we should obviously do On The Trail as it leverages Rank and Wisdom from Breaker and then combine that with A Promising Lead. It has got fairly straightforward gameplay.

Well, that's why I did it.
 
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Anyhow, strategy:
  • It should be clear that Dien's goal, whatever it might be, requires time and resources, otherwise he would finish it instantly or somewhere in deep space. As such we can find thing he needs and contest them
  • He is not an idiot, so we can expect him to redirects us. 1 pick fight means Arete expenditure point, yes, but it might also mean getting Hunger away from something Dien wants to get. And while Bastion provides a great deal of protection, lower Rank still means that Hunger is somewhat easier to fool
  • We do have Supreme Enclosure still, so we can use it to gain valuable information and strategic mobility. In particular, Astrals might be aware of old Foremost ruins that might be Dien's target. Also he seems to like eating celestial bodies, so we might want to pay attention to major ones, such as black hole in the center of the galaxy
  • Speaking of Foremost ruins, I'm sure Republic was aware of some places they didn't dare to go to. Same with their Armaments. We might use them to scout Dien's potential targets or find ourselves other Foremost shards. We could also double back and visit Shard of the Arcanist
  • Dien's scheme can't exists in vacuum(well, it can in literal sense), but resources need to be allocated, so we might try and follow them back to their sources. We can expect multiple layers of deception there, but that is just how it goes
  • We would really want to run into and turn Catherine to our side, if at all possible
  • We can feel Dien's Rank increase, so we can link certain events with jumps in his power, or the lack of thereof. Although he might also use this to manipulate our perception
  • Getting Refinement of Place whenever we manage would make all of this that much easier, obviously
 
[X] On the Trail
[X] A Promising Lead

Mistakes were made and I found an addictive and time consuming hobby, I won't even mention it's cursed name lest I lead a noble soul astray from curiosity. I'm not sure how long it's been... but my mind has begun to stir once more! I may be ensnared again shortly, but I'm glad I caught up on this amazing quest. Re-reading Haeliels talk with Hunger in 'Justice' teared me up once more, so thanks for keeping up the reactions Pittauro!

As for the most expensive and perhaps critical part of the vote...
BK is cool and all but It just feels like the sort of option that is going to be massively more trouble than it's worth when all is said and done. I can understand why she might might want to, but I'm hoping her galaxy brain can figure out it's probably not in her, or Hungers, best long term interests.

If my stage II mitigation proves lacking, good luck folks!
 
So what happens if Cold Light is not silver bullet to our problems because ~10x Praxis pool is not enough for entire galaxy? We just lose because we spent 25 Arete on something that doesn't meaningfully affects Dien?
Within the area affected Dien's infrastructure and minions would be destroyed, leading to him losing power and preventing him launching further incursions into the Human Sphere while it's active, while we're unlikely to hit him directly with it he'd still suffer major setbacks because of it. If we choose to have Gisena gathering information on Dien not developing capabilities to oppose him while we try to find him will risk the destruction of the Human Sphere.
I mean, if you don't want BK then we should obviously do On The Trail as it leverages Rank and Wisdom from Breaker and then combine that with A Promising Lead. It has got fairly straightforward gameplay.
It also leaves Dien pretty much unopposed in his campaign against the Human Sphere. As Dien will have had the opportunity to gather power unimpeded while we just keep our Arete unspent instead of converting it into power, if we don't have enough power to leverage what we've learned by the time we've finished gathering information then it's very likely we'll end up losing.
 
Hey @Birdsie, how do you write so quickly? Like, specific actual-typing-process details. I've been trying to get this CYOA drafted up for weeks of intermittent computer access, and I'm pretty sure it's been more than twelve hours total by now, with less than half your wordcount.
I Write Through.

How I do it, at least nowadays:

Step 1. Enter the mindset for writing.

Ultimately, this isn't something everyone can do. My situation is helped by the fact that I've learned to control my mind better through self-hypnotic exercise, voluntarily entering a dissociative state, and even lucid dreaming. I have very good control over my own emotions. I have a very good sense for how my own mind operates. I'd even go so far as to say that I can induce dim feelings in myself at will to simulate a character I'm writing, or a situation I'm writing about.

I've been told once that I have a "tulpa," which I still don't agree with, but I can see how other people might perceive it that way. It's a slightly unfair advantage I have over you normies, which explains why my rate of creation is so unbelievable!

Usually, the "mindset," has to happen on its own for most people, from what I've gathered. Although it's not strictly necessary, it makes writing much easier and more pleasant. I don't use any narcotics to induce the mindset, but a friend told me that marijuana helps him. Shrug.

If you're still confused about what the fuck I mean when I say, "mindest for writing," then consider this Wikipedia article. Mushin is pretty close to what I'm like when I actively write; it's like a meditative state, where every part of my mind is working in concert, like a clockwork machine. I write almost unconsciously, words pouring out ceaselessly from the well of my own mind. I'm kind of doing it right now; translating conscious thought into text right in front of my eyes. It can be helpful in any endeavor; I was a part of an after-school fight club in middle school, and it was helpful there, and it's still helpful right now as a writer.

It also helps to ask other writers for advice. I once requested such from Rihaku like a coy middle-school girl asking her crush out.

Step 2. Rough consideration of the content.

After I'm in the mindset, I take 1-5 minutes to consider what I am going to be writing. I consider what I want to write, and how I want to do it. I consider what the end effect/goal of the written piece is meant to be. This is usually when extra ideas come to me like, "Oh, and I'll have this guy cut off a giant snake's head, to solidify his status as a badass king, etc, etc." After I consider that, I re-consider it for another 1-5 minutes, from a more objective standpoint. I throw darts at what I've considered and I see if there are any chinks in it. This helps in minimizing plot holes, reducing idiocy, and making the work more cohesive.

If I'm considering an entire work, rather than a particular chapter of a work, then this step can actually take hours, rather than minutes, and I often make individual notes about it. This step is mutable!

Step 3. Advice.

If I'm stuck at the consideration stage and find that there's something I'm not sure about, I go on Discord and ask one of my several co-writers and/or associates what they think on that particular matter. For example, regarding my newest quest, I wasn't sure what to call the eponymous Lovecraftian mechs, and after asking several of my friends, I came to the conclusion the word, "Oneirodyne," is a perfect fit.

Step 4. Visualization of the process.

I begin to actually write. Before I do, however, I carefully take a minute to analyze what happens/is supposed to happen in the scene.

First, I imagine the scene - visualize it - as if it were happening in real life, with me as an omniscient observer. If needed, I reframe the scene to be a movie, an anime, or anything else - whatever helps me visualize it better to fit in with the genre/mood/theme. As I visualize, I begin to write it in real-time, almost parallel-processing the visualization to the scribing of what happens.

In order to better adjust the tone for what I'm writing, I imagine that I am a storyteller sitting at a campfire, regaling a group of people with the story in question. It helps smooth over the prose somewhat, at least in the beginning stages.

When I'm writing dialogue, and I can afford to do so, I also mutter the lines in the characters' voices to myself. It helps me fit in what a given character would say. When you say a line in your head, it can sound better or worse than the actual line would be when spoken out loud.

Step 5. Refinement of the work.

Once I have the full chapter/whatever ready at hand, I read through it once again.

I fix up grammar mistakes, patch out what I don't like. Sometimes, I even change the order of entire paragraphs in a way that flows better, or delete entire paragraphs and reframe their prose to be slightly better. If I find myself stopping for whatever reason, I go back to Step 2 for that particular section, then go forward to Step 4 and write it. If it's still not good enough, I take a break and return to Step 1 altogether and scrap what I've gathered thus far.

There's nothing shameful in deleting even an entire chapter, if you consider it inadequate! You simply need to approach the issue from a new direction.

Be careful, however, about how much you spend on rewriting a single sentence or line. Avidly looking for good synonyms in a dictionary is generally a bad idea; I think a writer should only rely on the words that are dearest to his own mind, since forcefully entering a thousand alien words into the flow can be pretty jarring, especially to yourself. This is why reading is very important; it helps you further acquire new levels of familiarity with the vernacular in a non-synthetic manner. I never even knew that the fuck "pellucid" is or means, until I read Long Arm of the Law back when Rihaku released it. Now I've used it several times that I can consciously think of.

Usually, though, I don't bother with elegance unless I'm trying hard. That relates back to Step 1.

Step 6. Coffee break.

Caffeine is the nectar of office work. Drink it.

Step 7. The finishing touches.

Once I'm completely sure there's nothing I can do to further improve what I've got, I sit back, work myself out of the complicated mental state I've tangled myself into, and then read what I made while doing my best to pretend I'm a neutral reader with no idea what the fuck I'm looking at. It helps if you have an actual beta reader who is willing to volunteer their time and sanity to go through this.

The ultimate reason why this step is important is that while some things can be clear to you, in hindsight, they might not be clear to a third party/audience. If I find any such flaws, I brutally extricate them to make a more cohesive work. This is also good for catching any last final inconsistencies/mistakes that slipped through.

Step 8. The publishing.

You post that bitch. And you post it hard. And then you write an Author's Note above it just to boast how you posted it that much harder than anyone in the thread or on the forum, and how you've mined enough Arete for two fucking EFBs and no one can do anything about it. You are the fucking king of Arete.

Hubris? Hubris is nothing less than your true mantle, and arrogance is the signet of kingship you wear, you magnificent bastard. Every day, you stand in front of the mirror, grin at yourself, and tell yourself that it's okay to be a writer. Because it doesn't matter if nobody loves you, if you have a bunch of fucking words on a page, and people admire and fear you for it. You deserve to be a dick to your lessers as much as you want, which is just about everyone else. So keep doing it, and keep writing, until you inevitably die from a heart attack at age thirty!

And then? Once all of that is done? YOU PRESS CAPS LOCK. AND THEN
YOU BOAST
JUST HOW GOOD
YOUR FUCKING WRITING PROCESS IS
COMPARED TO EVERYONE ELSE'S

AND THEN YOU LAUGH LIKE A MANIAC. HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAAHHAHAHHAHAHAHA HOO HOO HOO HOO HOO HOO

Step 9. Return to the vicious cycle.

And then you realize Rihaku is still better than you, as is basically almost everyone else, and cope by making this shitty guide. And then you'll inevitably write more, crushed and pushed onward by your insecurities and inadequacies to keep excelling. There is no motivator greater than stress.



PS: Don't actually do steps 6, 8, or 9. I was kidding.
PSS: Do step 8, but without the weird shit.
PSSS: Actually, step 6 can be good. Judge it on case-by-case basis.
 
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Is it really a duel if one side wasn't informed of the stakes? The Surgeon's campaign of conquest is closer to an Apocryphal ambush than anything resembling a fair fight. But I suppose Dien would say the essence of life is struggle; he seems really into the Hobbesian war of all against all. To be fair, that's how orcs develop beyond drones, eventually gaining gender and identity. Is Dien's philosophy just parochialism on his part, belief in survival of the fittest because that's how his species does things? He's too intelligent for it to be that simple, but it might be a piece of the puzzle.

What amazes me most, though, is that this guy cooperated with the other Foremost. Lamented their loss, spent what might've been entire objective seconds mourning them! The hell did their civilization look like at the end, for it to have produced him? He didn't even consider compromise when he learned of Hunger's existence, just jumped straight to planning to outpace his growth. Engaging in a contest of escalation with a Progression-type is serious hubris! Having even fragmentary memories of the Foremost must make it hard to view creatures of his current level as peers, though.

Then there are the ten billion campaigns the Surgeon's said to have participated in. Even exaggerated for effect, that's an intimidating martial pedigree. His option (which in hindsight we should've hesitated more before picking) described Dien as a 'battlefield medic'; his first interlude implies the Makers created the Heroes in the first place. What sort of war required such soldiers? And what could possibly shatter the Foremost's hegemony so completely, reduce their races to the pitiful states in which Hunger and Seram encountered them? Occam's Razor suggests the Forebear as an answer. Looking at Dien's go-to playbook, I can begin to understand how they might have wound up a stop on his Procession.
It had taken time to settle in, to orient himself towards the painful mundanity of this husk-realm, all but empty, worlds like glittering trash-heaps atop a fusion-torch pyre. But there was nothing quite like a capable opponent to reify his focus, light a fire in his spirit to burn away all that was feeble and unnecessary.
Classic Dien, never missing a chance to throw some shade at the universe. So much wasted space! What matter exists is bleakly banal, not a speck of supernal glory to be seen. If the Voyaging Realm is representative, the Foremost preferred not to live on planets. It's slightly surprising Dien's not making a bee-line for a Realm. Maybe the Industrial's not organic enough for a Shard of the Surgeon, but the Accursed knows the Voyaging's got enough megafauna. I'm curious what he'd make of Aobaru too, but perhaps that's best left a hypothetical, since the answer's almost certainly 'something horrifying'.
Every Hero, after all, needed a Tyrant to overcome.
Literally Heroic resolve is impressive as always. Dien's narration is neat, but this line in particular hammers home the regret about picking him. A Maker might've succumbed to despair, been disheartened by the immense discrepancy between what they are and what they were. Dien's first interlude posits as much. A Hero can't help but rise to the challenge. Still wonder who started calling them Destroyers instead, their caste has the most contrast between the two names.
Dien clicked his tongue as he felt one of his Feeder Suns extinguished. It did not take a Hero of his formidable intellect to deduce that the aptly-named Lord Hunger was the cause. Frustrating, but not unexpected. He had felt the Cursebearer's Pressure battering at his own not minutes ago, though - in no small part because of those Suns - his own was the greater, and likely to remain that way. Seventeen Ringwastes fully assimilated and another two hundred eighty-nine in various stages of completion: his findross-absorption schedule promised exponential progress, and it would not be long before he could move onto methods more elegant and effective than the full-scale exploitation of populated systems.
Hey, at least he approves of Hunger's name! I suppose it makes sense. Hunger's a primal drive, up there with fear in terms of nature's strongest goads. That Hunger was able to cut through and annihilate a sun in minutes is gratifying, but the scale of this conflict is daunting and proves the truth of Dien's earlier assertion: initiative is crucial.

We know the outline of how orcs work, so Dien's pyramid sun scheme is somewhat comprehensible. Humans in the Manifest Realm are said to be the source of findross; by rendering systems into biomass, he can harvest the findross of their inhabitants by funneling it to him through the sun somehow. He probably knows what properties allow for findross production in the first place, allowing for optimization. It's possible the herbivore Hunger noted is a custom creature engineered for just such a purpose, Dien's unlikely to have created an ecosystem to improve his ring's ambiance.

Anyway, the 'waste' suffix is in keeping the original AST. There was an Orcwaste, an Elfwaste, even a Legendwaste. The first denoted terrain stripped of all findross to empower orcs, which is pretty much what Hunger observed here. The upshot of this is that the Green Suns have to be linked to Dien in order to empower him; he's aware the instant Hunger destroys one. It's possible Hunger (or Gisena) could locate him through that connection. It's probably routed through the Astral, since that's how the Human Sphere handles FTL. Letrizia's knowledge might be relevant there? The Astral could also be where all that extra material came from, assuming Dien gives so much as the vestigial shadow of a fuck about conservation of mass.

Other thoughts: Dien is exploiting 'populated systems', so we should seek out the most populous. Hunger knows the headcount of the Republic's worlds well at this point, and Dien's Pressure as good as announced that he sees humans as a resource. That could hint at where the Surgeon's set up shop. And though it was a while back, he was able to sense the substance of Gisena's Graces through his Ring's power over blood. Since the only people actively using findross in the galaxy should be Gisena, Dien's experiments, and various Shards, if Hunger can search for concentrations of findross on a celestial scale he could both expedite the party's reunion (Aobaru was right, you never split the party) and generate leads. A Ring of Essence would be better at this, but you play the hand you're dealt.
The more stars that fell beneath his sway, the greater his personal power became, reserves of findross swelling to reinforce his Astral gradient and physical frame. Along the way he'd extinguished more than a few rival Shards; in terms of opening position he'd been more than fortunate, his advantages of valor and circumstance sufficiently overwhelming that their defiance had been wholly inadequate. How uninteresting!
You could say that all the stars in the sky are our enemies! References aside, Dien continues to have absolutely no chill. Is this truly the best use of resources? Does he have no regard for other Shards, to inclination to rebuild what was lost? It's one thing to dismiss former glories, another to steamroll the closest thing he has to peers. He really is inhuman, though with a tone genial enough that you can almost forget the sheer scope of the horror he's perpetrating. An Apocryphal proc lamenting the lack of interesting adversaries is peak irony, though. Are there any Ruhuk Cursebearers? I can imagine Dien cheerfully taking the Apocryphal Curse; he reminds me a bit of Jiko, Priest's MHA character.
Etrynome had been critical in providing the terraformation infrastructure necessary to enact his plan in weeks rather than years, but the day would come sooner rather than later when Ceathlynn of Amarlt turned against him. He had kept Armament and pilot occupied and isolated, building the tools that he used to build the tools that eventually delivered the final product. Nonetheless he expected both would catch on quickly enough if they had not already done so, and he doubted they would tolerate his wholesale reconstitution of native Republic populations. Perhaps he could buy a few weeks more of loyalty with a genuine offer of augmentation, subversion absent even on the Astral or sub-molecular levels... ideally she would accept and then slay Lord Hunger on her misguided personal crusade, or at least weaken the man for a few days.
That less than a week can yield relevant gains is a bad sign. The diegetic implementation of the recent Wishes means Hunger's burned out on the Praxis, so we can't afford to take time to grind. The next Pillars session will offer ample picks, but that's weeks (?) away, and who knows how bad things'll be by then. Still good to know that Ceathlynn'll eventually wise up, realize she's being kept in the dark and fed bullshit, and rebel against Dien. It'll probably be too late to matter, but he's such a hypercompetent monster that every snag in his plans is cause for rejoicing. Unfortunately Catherine was disillusioned with the Republic, adrift in the universe and looking for purpose. In other words, ripe for someone like Dien to swoop in. He's even a doctor; she gets to advance the limits of human Heroic knowledge again!
Even in spite of such relentless efficiencies as Dien had pursued, it was no foregone conclusion that he would grow past the ability of Lord Hunger to defeat. Beginnings were fragile times, for life most of all, and Dien in his current state was little more than a nascent shell compared to the Foremost glory of the Surgeon. An inconvenient Progression-type Cursebearer was just the sort of foe capable of cutting him down before his prime, whether through sheer thoughtless might or some spectacular feat of sudden advancement.
Yeah, unfortunately for all his power Hunger's still taking his first fragile steps as a Cursebearer. It's unclear what kind of relationship the Foremost had with the Accursed, but multiple Cursebearers had to have been affiliated with them at some point. Dien's audacity continues to impress, he's undaunted the prospect of an enemy Progression-type without underestimating the threat. Would seeing Haeliel's Favor give him any second thoughts? How would a Hero relate to the Seraph of Heroism, whose justice is such a far cry from the valor they epitomize? The idea of an orcish ally is a tantalizing prospect, but Jotarun and Dien are both walking war crimes.
Thus he had not been negligent with contingencies. All manner of clone and spore and infective data-carrier had been seeded throughout Republic space, not merely within his own sphere but all systems adjacent or which practiced trade - or any remotely physical form of contact - with the societies under his covert or open control. Some projects had been designed for aggressive growth, others for stealth and resilience. It was unlikely for any one strategy of Lord Hunger's to address them all, though the miracles of a Rank gradient would surely sift the vast majority away, in the absence of Dien's own shadow to protect them.
Honestly, I struggle to imagine a version of this quest where Hunger has no Rank. Astral interactions are ubiquitous and we've had Ranked enemies ranging from Avecarn to an Armament. Hunger's backstory would have changed, with the war against the Tyrant featuring different horrors. No overwhelming Pressure to warp the world against the plucky band of rebels, though a broken Soul Evocation could've achieved a similar effect. He probably would've wound up with Defensive Rank at minimum no matter what won; Battle Magic hasn't shown up, but we've had opportunities to unlock the Imprisoner. Hunger's a Progression-type, all magics are theoretically open to him.
Deep-tunneling programs carried seedling spores through the Astral to distant systems throughout the galactic rim, well beyond the conventional reach of the Human Sphere; should he perish here, there was no reason another iteration could not arise in the void of deep space and muster a calamitous wave to avenge him. He would flee with his consciousness if he could, but he very much doubted that a Cursebearer worth their salt would, in event of victory, fail to dispatch him in every way that mattered.
Man, now I'm hearing Dien's narration in this voice. Orcs and mushrooms are both fungi, so it's easy to imagine a version of this exchange where the speaker's holding a gun to Dien, who'd probably tell him the true name of god is I.

That tangent aside, what do the Astrals think of Dien using their realm to spread his spores far and wide? They're aligned with the Republic, but soon there's not going to be a Republic to be allied to. The Makers apparently conquered the entirety of the Astral, and now their Shards are waking. Probably not a pleasant surprise for the folks upstairs, if they hate their Implements so much. Hunger did mention a lack of attacks against Novakhron, but attributed it to them gearing up for something bigger. Perhaps not picking Extinction Burst could pay dividends in another department? Astral politics are a black box, but Hunger can guarantee he'll be gone within twenty-five hundred years, likely much sooner. The Shards are here to stay.
This despite the depth of his network; he had spared every means not to underestimate his foe. Bio-modded infiltrators spanned every major Republic settlement, and were making inroads into the Empire; these would maintain a facade of normalcy to Lord Hunger while securing Dien's control over relevant polities.
Once again, the Association makes out like a bandit while the Sphere's preeminent powers are bled dry. Though with our luck, the Spider'll turn out to be running the show in their corner. Dien's level of preparation's pretty terrifying too. It's looking like we'll need Artful Thorn upgrades by the bucketload to get rid of him. Rather than tracking down all his contingencies, 'simply' stab the Form of Dien Bravo to death. The man's basically two 40k factions rolled into one and lightly sprinkled with JoJo references. Without gratuitous overkill, he'll die harder than Bruce Willis.
At the next stage of conversion were factory-worlds, planets directly conquered and re-written into productive engines churning out implements of expansion, restoration and war. Many lesser Heroes he'd budded across these planets, an army swelling by the billions every day, honed against themselves in the manner of Heroic warfare such that only the most able would survive; the findross of the weakling consumed by the Orkhor, and the Orkhor's by the Warlord, and so on up the cosmic chain until viable lieutenants started to materialize. Planetary-wide countermeasures ensured that, outside of the systems themselves, cursory examination of a factory world would reveal nothing untoward to optical or Astral observation.
Fascinating that the appropriate terminology managed to persist however far into the future the Manifest Realm is. Gisena could likely tell us, but Gisena's not in the business of delivering unnecessary exposition. The thread's really earning that 'scales like DBZ without the breaks' tag, though. The final boss of the original AST would barely qualify to be one of Dien's lieutenants. Jotarun didn't even have Rank in the double digits! Standards have fallen, orcs aren't getting proper nourishment. And huh, orcs ate Joanian humans because people were the source of findross? Somehow that penny just dropped for me. Not so different from Dien, despite the scale and sophistication of his setup.
The fewest and most critical were his Incubator Realms: impossible to hide, the scale and ambition of these future Ringwastes and their Feeder Suns simply too vast to practicably cloak with his current means. These he had to hope that Lord Hunger would not stumble upon - or produce at such a rate that the Cursebearer would be unable to scythe them down in time. Hopefully the Praehihr, lacking any other examples in his immediate vicinity, would believe the project a one-off.
He's shit out of luck there. As an Apocryphal Cursebearer, Hunger's professionally cynical. It's fortunate that Dien doesn't know what Curses Hunger has, though I'm sure he's curious. Our other apparent advantage is that at no point in his musings does Dien mention the other party members. He got his intel from eating Republic personnel; Hunger's stunt to create artificial difficulty by engaging the Fifth Fleet alone has thankfully left Versch and Nova off his radar.
In a battle of cosmic resources, there was nothing so crucial as initiative, and so Dien had prioritized speed above all else, even to the point of his personal diminishment. Much of his own reserves he'd fed to one project or another, succoring otherwise-unviable candidates whose functions were critical to the broader vision. It was disgraceful and unnatural to so-compromise empirical selection, but necessity demanded and - like any good Hero - Dien would do anything to win, no matter how much he enjoyed a good fight. It was ironic that in his present state he would be wholly incapable of putting up much of a fight against Lord Hunger, despite his superior gradient. The gulf between their physical attributes and combat techniques was likely too vast, given his opponent's access to at least the Royal Praxis.
His present weakness is promising, though Hunger's reliant on a stolen Republic ship for transport. If we get lucky and can trace him through his Feeder Suns, catching and Sealing him early could cut the head off the snake. Hunger's Rank would do the rest, though even at this veritably embryonic stage effort would need to be spent cleaning up the mess. Dien's social Darwinism seems to be a personal quirk, but the ruthless pragmatism's the defining trait of orcs. They're like an entire species comprised of Catherines! What did Foremost Heroes even do in peacetime, other than prepare for war?
Parasites and skinchangers; factories and nodes; like the tendrils of a vast and inescapable forest he had taken root in this Sphere, and it would take a fire of galactic proportions ever to burn him out. He possessed self-propagating assets across every phylum of organization and scale, every strategic niche fostered and exploited.
'The Surgeon'll give us so many picks,' I said. 'Lots of artificial adversaries for us to farm, won't that be fun? We'll have the moral high ground too!' That take has... aged poorly. As ever, hindsight's 20/20. Hunger's charisma is virtually useless against an enemy like this. Sure, he could rally any human polity that doesn't block his messages on account of being a memetic hazard against the orcish hordes, but anywhere Dien's spent time will have a populace biologically incapable of betraying him.
Would it be enough to face this enemy, this Praehihr who would yield for nothing, whose Progression was as shocking as Dien's preparations were thorough? Would enough of his projects mature, come to useful fruition, before he was hunted down and killed like a dog by that murderous blade?

Perhaps. But even if he fell, his plots undone, all his works unraveled, banished to oblivion beyond even the reach of memory... Dien smiled.

It would be one hell of a fight.
Hunger's Progression has been absurd enough that this actually being in question is crazy. Just goes to show that the real god-stat is Apocryphal mitigation, which ought to be prioritized over any amount of power. Contests of escalation with a Crowning Curse can only ever purchase a temporary reprieve. Definitely having some buyer's remorse regarding Breaker of Suns winning over Shoguness, and not just because of the lore the latter would've offered. Dien is an entertaining adversary despite his enormous killcount, but the perspectives of other Shards would be interesting. We've yet to see one of the ithilyor in the flesh! Given our strategic situation it's greedy, but Heavenly Tomb would be a boon with all these Shards running around. If they won't cooperate on their own, into a cell they go! Once defeated, Dien could be subverted within Pillars and then tasked with unraveling all his contingencies.
They were supposed to be striking the enemy's flank, supporting Hunger's push towards the Republic capital with a two-Armament incursion of their own. But, Aobaru mused, no plan ever survived contact with the enemy, much less... whatever the horrific conspiracy was that they'd encountered here. Gisena had outright slain the first man they'd come into contact with, blasting him with supernal fire to briefly reveal tendrils of something unspeakable before a wave of Nullity had rendered it mundane ash.
Aobaru's PoV remains a refreshing injection of normalcy in a universe of unremitting escalation. Dien's handiwork resembles a genestealer cult from the outside; hopefully we won't have to go full Exterminatus to burn out his contingencies. Speaking of which, Gisena casting fireball's a new trick. But she's been off-screen for a bit and we did take Temporal + Vanquisher's to maximize her growth rate, so getting something like Evoker's Panoply in addition to progress on Make Whole is logical. That's one reason I don't want to nuke the Azure, apart from the sour taste of retroactively rendering the Temple arc pointless and all the reasons Hunger would disapprove in-character. Broken Kaleidoscope's a tremendous burst of power, but we'd be sacrificing everything Gisena might craft with her Ring going forward as well.
"Go. Stay in Novakhron. Don't leave Totality." Gisena's command had been brisk, frost overtaking her voice as soon as they'd touched down on this world, a field of Nullity like a shimmering veil drawn across her face. "Letrizia, you and Aeira don't leave that cockpit."
Gisena's masking up, I see. Better not inhale any spores! Six feet of social distancing wouldn't protect a baseline human, but with a Rank gradient all things are possible. It's easy to forget that thanks to Companions of the King, the kids aren't that far behind Hunger himself. It makes Ranking up a productive activity, though even with the Conqueror's Nimbus multiplier I'm not optimistic about overtaking Dien. Maybe his billions-strong armies of freshly minted Heroes count as an audience?
It was unlike Lady Allria to be so serious, but she offered no explanation, merely stood unsmiling at the air around them, eyes a brilliant emerald. It was a different shade than Novakhron's green-and-gold; the Apocryphal Armament's autumnal plumage a hue deeper and richer that seemed almost impossible to replicate with physical means. Always it had been the unbreakable bulwark of their formation; not even Letrizia and Verschlengorge's long experience sufficed to overcome its supremacy in raw power.

He was biased, being Novakhron's erstwhile pilot. But it had been more than borne out in their actual battle performance! The only other explanation was that he was some sort of genius in warfare... which, now that he thought about it, didn't seem that unlikely...
When the most ordinary member of the party's the Chosen One, you know things have gotten complicated. Aobaru's still grappling with the responsibility he was entrusted with, and who knows how seeing the Shards will change his view of the task? And we still haven't met Aobaru's terminator either. Say one thing for the last Apocryphal decision point, at least selecting Seram would've consolidated our problems into a single person.
"No," Gisena muttered to herself, eyes darting between objects only she could perceive. "Anyone who could make something like this, wouldn't be restricted to working with findross alone. Our individual Rank should protect us against anything wholly corporeal, but the populations here... Kids! Change of plan. We need to get into contact with Hunger and Adorie as soon as possible. And not just because we miss them!"
I failed to consider what picking the Surgeon would look like from Gisena's perspective. Since this version bailed with her Final Grace before things got bad she didn't have to watch Jeanne die, but one thing I've never accused Lady Allria of is lacking imagination. She could picture what's happening back home, just prefers not to. 'Suddenly, orcs' is not a welcome surprise, though since she's deduced the connection between the Manifest Realm and the Foremost she's probably at least considered the possibility as far back as the Mizuku debacle. Did Hunger ever fix that kid's face? Quickwater's blurb implied the potential to mass produce Surgecrafters, which'd be neat. Sadly we never have enough downtime to do science.
Just like that, the unease on her features was gone, and the mockingly cheerful Nullity Sorceress returned. Had she even actually been caught off-guard, Aobaru wondered, or had she merely adopted that expression to impress upon them the severity of the situation? Ever since she'd gotten that temporal Grace, it was becoming even more difficult to tell, and her facade nearly impenetrable even before.
For once I'm going to err on the side of optimism and say this was genuine alarm on Gisena's part. If any stimulus could elicit that reaction, it'd be this. Broken Kaleidoscope being an option at all testifies to her sincerity.
It was hard not to observe the Nullity Sorceress, he thought with chagrin. She was so stupefyingly, transcendentally pretty that the eye could not help but rest unconsciously on her, the rest of humanity bleakly dull in comparison. Hunger truly had superhuman will to resist her wiles on a regular basis. Or perhaps they were just extremely discreet?
Aobaru shouldn't sell himself short, that he retains enough wherewithal to crush on Adorie despite interacting with Gisena's a testament to his will. But yes, Gisena remains a superstimulus. Remember when she broke the minds of those Republic scouts by accident? I'm not sure she finished the Veil of Grandeur equivalent, though the sanity of our teammates suggests she did. If we're pairing off the party, Aeira and Letrizia get along well, but the true OTP was and remains Versch/Devouring Enemies.
"What are our options?" Letrizia asked, Verschlengorge's smiling fangs bared in anticipation. "Anything faster-than-light requires either magic or Astral travel, but we don't even know which system they're in right now."
Speaking of our boy, there's a smile worth protecting. Still sad Maw of Night wasn't an option for that build vote. We've been told Armaments only reach their full potential with a Praehihr pilot, but realistically speaking are we ever going to vote to get into Novakhron's cockpit? Hunger took on a big responsibility bringing new life into the world, especially an entity that'll have to suffer the Apocryphal Curse, so Nova deserves some attention. But there's never enough of Hunger to go around, even with Pillars. Always some new crisis in need of stabbing.
"We have three," Gisena articulated, raising her fingers in a lecturer's stance. "First, we could hunker down and try to create a Grace that can communicate with him. This isn't the Realm of Evening, so it may take as long as a realtime week for me to finesse something workable. Second, we try and seize the Republic Emergency Broadcasting system located in the sector capital. That should give us an indiscriminate line to every major Republic world and has good chances of reaching Hunger, but could be sabotaged by sufficiently determined interference - here or in the Astral Realm. Finally, we try to track them down manually, hijacking the fastest vessel we can find and relying on Nova's Pressure gradient to draw us towards him."
An Emergency Broadcast would alert Dien as well, though he likely won't remain ignorant of them for long anyway. He knows more about Astral interactions than we do and can sense Rank, which is troublesome. The hyper-logarithmic scale of Rank means Nova's much stronger than the kids, though maybe Sharpbright can channel their collective Pressure to reunite the party faster? Between A Promising Lead, On The Trail, and Gisena's own analysis we ought to have an angle to pursue by the time that happens. Just spitballing for now, but the findross singularities in Dien's Feeder Suns could be exploitable by Gisena; why destroy what she could hijack? Orcs naturally convert it into physical prowess, but Makers have a multitude of uses for findross.
"No path seem strictly better than the others," Aobaru said. "So, are we going to vote here, or are you just going to decide?"

"As if there's a difference," Gisena smiled, batting her eyelashes coquettishly. "We'll do all three, of course! I'll work on the Grace while you kids find the fastest vessel you can and push towards the sector capital. If that works, wonderful! If not, we'll have to track them down manually. Let's go, kids. Time is of the essence. This enemy has already defeated humankind in another realm, and it was much less sophisticated then... but, so was I."
I too remember the good old days when Jotarun having Rank was considered an outside context problem that we had to plan around. Hunger's going to kill his kind by the bucketload if Dien's home-grown armies aren't nipped in the bud. Seram has done well for himself, but if Hunger survives the next five-hundred years his tasks are going to make the Highwayman look like a cakewalk.
I haven't done one of these in a while, but February's almost over and Dien's thoughts provide ample fuel for panic speculation. Some tactics contained within as well, 2978 total words.
 
Step 7. The finishing touches.

Once I'm completely sure there's nothing I can do to further improve what I've got, I sit back, work myself out of the complicated mental state I've tangled myself into, and then read what I made while doing my best to pretend I'm a neutral reader with no idea what the fuck I'm looking at. It helps if you have an actual beta reader who is willing to volunteer their time and sanity to go through this.

The ultimate reason why this step is important is that while some things can be clear to you, in hindsight, they might not be clear to a third party/audience. If I find any such flaws, I brutally extricate them to make a more cohesive work. This is also good for catching any last final inconsistencies/mistakes that slipped through.
I've found running things through a text to speech program helps as well. There's a bunch of stuff that doesn't stand out when you read it, but when a computer reads it smacks you in the face
 
I've found running things through a text to speech program helps as well. There's a bunch of stuff that doesn't stand out when you read it, but when a computer reads it smacks you in the face
True, but I think the whisper approach is superior, even to that. It lets you imitate the specific tone and timbre of the voice, on top of its actual contents.
 
True, but I think the whisper approach is superior, even to that. It lets you imitate the specific tone and timbre of the voice, on top of its actual contents.
Ah, I don't use it for voice, I use it for rhythm and grammar. Because I'll overlook a missing word or the like if I already know the feel of the paragraph or sentence.

Whispering is a solid idea that I haven't tried yet, but soon I will add it as another tool to my arsenal!
 
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