Timber! [Naruto - Male SI]

The most important thing I want to see going forwards is character interaction and/or reaction. How do other people feel about what the MC is doing or feeling? What does Kurenai, Hana, Naruto or Kiba think about whats happening to our main character and whatnot. I personally think that the best and most important things in any story are the characters, not whatever techniques, gimmicks or skills the characters may have, so I hope you focus on the character interaction more in the future chapters.
 
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This is a fan fiction so the most important thing I would say is to write what keeps you writing.

Characters are certainly important, but I would say more so in terms of characterization. The characters should be consistent in personality, thoughts, actions, and words. They should be interesting and preferably likable in a way. The main character should have drive, motivation, and the agency to enact change and reach for their goals. Other characters are there for support, but each instance of one being shown should be purposeful, advancing the plot, enabling the main character, serving as an obstacle, or adding dimensions to the main character. Adding in pointless interaction like fluff, reaction, or wondering how someone is doing that does not advance the main plot or themes of the story just serve to pad the word count. Any professional editor would immediately remove such scenes, and no publisher would waste pages on publishing such.

Of course, this is not a professional work and if you like writing such things then do so. Those that enjoy reading such will do so, and those that don't do not have to.
 
This is a fan fiction so the most important thing I would say is to write what keeps you writing.

Characters are certainly important, but I would say more so in terms of characterization. The characters should be consistent in personality, thoughts, actions, and words. They should be interesting and preferably likable in a way. The main character should have drive, motivation, and the agency to enact change and reach for their goals. Other characters are there for support, but each instance of one being shown should be purposeful, advancing the plot, enabling the main character, serving as an obstacle, or adding dimensions to the main character. Adding in pointless interaction like fluff, reaction, or wondering how someone is doing that does not advance the main plot or themes of the story just serve to pad the word count. Any professional editor would immediately remove such scenes, and no publisher would waste pages on publishing such.

Of course, this is not a professional work and if you like writing such things then do so. Those that enjoy reading such will do so, and those that don't do not have to.

Well, yeah. But I feel like the author has already established the character, his goals and the world around him. At the same time I feel the interactions with characters and the world are the best parts to read far, so I'd wish for more of that. I do agree that the author should always focus on what he feels like is important, but I'd also say that not every story needs to be plot driven. Character driven stories can be just as good.
 
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Chapter 2.2.8
Chapter 2.2.8

Traveling…I hated it.

Running from one end of the country to the other, going from picturesque to dreary and mundane in the span of days was such a drag.

The fabled runners high remained elusive, and I was stuck with getting increasingly bored during the journey, which sadly wasn't a good thing. Boredom led to thinking, trains of thoughts that tended to become complicated, which in turn led to worries and frustration.

No Hana or Kurenai-sensei to enjoy the time between points A and B, just a harsh and silent taskmaster and an admittedly friendly teen, that did a piss poor job of distracting me from thoughts of encountering Zabuza Momochi, which might be a real possibility and even an objective given that they send me, a sensor, along.

We find him, we don't attack and get a chance to talk. Chances of that happening? Seven out of ten?

Then what?

Watch Unmo try and fail at convincing Zabuza to join the rebels and then get attacked?

If the guy had wanted to join at some point in the last couple of years that he had been a missing-nin then he would have done so already.

Are we going to be sent home with a nice friendly 'thanks, but no thanks'? I really didn't see that happening given what I knew about the guy. Stuff that I had learned as part of my backstory since my 'dad' had been supposed to be a fan and had left in a bid to join the bloodthirsty swordsman.

So…either we are going to get attacked straight away or after the failed attempt of convincing him to join.

I breathed a silent sigh and closed my eyes for a second, my sensing an ever-present constant, and the reason why, despite the overall situation, I was currently somewhat relaxed.

It was the night before we expected to hit signs of Zabuza's passing, possibly even hints of a trail, and my sensei and teammate were currently fast asleep in their bedrolls on a dry patch under a tree nearby.

Their chakra was in a state I recognized as deep sleep and nothing else with a developed chakra network in our vicinity.

It was a good indicator of the progress I had made so far.

Two high-profile rebels trusted me with being the night watch in 'enemy' territory.

This, the feeling of another milestone reached, and the fact, that I was currently truly unsupervised for the first time in ages gave me the chance to lean back and actually do my freaking job.

Another little sigh, a minute flex of my hand to get rid of the hints of a cramp, and I was finally done with my overly long and overdue report for Shikaku Nara.

The stub of a pencil disappeared quietly into my pouch, hidden among my little stock of shuriken, and the standard-issue scroll with the painfully small and coded writing was handed to a Shadow Clone, which I had summoned with maximum concentration just to avoid any chances at noise and smoke.

An unnecessary but cathartic nod to the clone was the signal for it to silently glide away from us and then make its way to one of the many hidden stashes from where the scroll would be picked up by some other hidden Konoha operative, who had the means to bring it out of the country.

Now…

Now I could get back to worrying about Zabuza, worst-case scenarios, and the niggling feeling, that I was forgetting something.


Bingo!

"Just this morning," the old lady began to rage when the initial relief at our arrival had dissipated, "my husband had just gone out to collect the eggs from the coop when those…" the sheer anger apparently had the old farmers lady at a loss for second and she looked at her husband for support. To no avail, however, as he simply remained quiet and resigned at the loss of their food stock.

Seemingly enraged even further by the sight of her depressed husband the spitfire hit her groove again.

"Those rogues," she eventually said, but had obviously refrained from saying something unsavory in the presence of 'respectable' Kiri-nin such as us, "they strolled on our property and demanded our food or…."

The implied threat got an honest scowl out of Chōjūrō while Unmo and I remained stoic, hints of compassion shining through to give the old farmers couple a fuzzy feeling.

"This wouldn't happen under Mei Terumi," Unmo muttered under his breath, just loud enough for the civilians to hear, obviously planting the seeds for the newest gossip in the tiny nearby village.

"We will deal with them," Unmo promised, pretending to be finished writing down the notes provided by them.

"Thank you," seemingly gathering some new hope at our show the old man displayed heartfelt gratitude while his wife sagged in relief, tiredness now replacing indignity.

"Sanzo," Unmo turned to me, and I was suddenly very glad to have kept up my routine of mentally retelling my fake-origin story every now and then, "can you located the targets with the provided directions?"

"I can, sensei!" I replied dutifully, still mindful to keep up appearance in front of the old couple.

That I had sensed the beacon, that was Zabuza Momochi, hours ago was a little secret I was going to keep to myself since I had absolutely no desire to reveal the true extend of my sensing capabilities to the 'not-quite-enemy'.


"Four signatures two clicks north-east," I said between the jumps from tree to tree and held out my right arm to exactly pinpoint the direction, which was apparently the sign for Unmo to take the lead again as he wordlessly jumped ahead.

Our pace not slowing in the slightest and not getting any more subtle confirmed to me that Unmo was looking for a straightforward meeting with the rogue.

Something he seemingly was going to get sooner rather than later as…

"Three signatures are breaking off…" I informed my superior just loud enough for him to hear before I dutifully relayed further information, that I was actually willing to share, "taking position in a small perimeter around the major signature."

What I had been sensing for some time now had jogged some faint memories and I was beyond certain, that I was walking into one of those deja-vu moments, that strangely enough involved some random bridge.

A mental shake and I refocused on the encounter ahead.

Two chunin-level shinobis, who after aligning themselves with the Demon of the Hidden Mist imaginatively had started to go with the moniker Demon Brothers, which in turn probably was an insult to all demons, given that they were as average as you could possibly be. Not exactly decent in my opinion, but also not useless.

The third signature might also be considered a chunin-level threat, as it was elevated by the noticeable control and unique properties of their chakra but held back by the size of it due to their age. All in all, someone that might even push a teen as talented as Chōjūrō.

And last but not least Zabuza Momochi, the Demon of the Hidden Mist, the epitome of a powerhouse, who unfortunately also had the skills to use said strength to maximum efficiency.

He also had a sword. A big ass sword, that he was known to whip around like a toy.

A toy, that could cleave you in half with its weight alone.

I wasn't sure you could climb much higher on the shinobi ladder without some crazy gimmick or a fortunate biological heritage.

These four against an average jonin and two talented teens.

Whatever.

It wasn't the best mindset to have when you stepped into a clearing and came face to face with a slightly annoyed looking killing-machine, but, honestly, what can you do?


"Unmo," Zabuza began with a distinct lack of hostility, and I got the notion, that my sensei was perhaps chosen for a reason, "didn't expect the rebels to trust you with kids again."

'Uuuhh! Shots fired!' I had to bite my lips and was immensely glad to stand behind Unmo after Zabuza's low blow.

"Zabuza," Unmo said as a way of greeting and remained at least on the outside unfaced, "your group got smaller again," he noted without infliction, but the hidden insinuation as obvious as the little nods to the trees left and right, which was apparently the wrong thing to do as Zabuza, seemingly already tired of the conversation and us interrupting his day lazily reached over his shoulder and grabbed the sturdy hilt of his massive sword.

Despite the threatening little action, I remained calm as a cucumber as the guy had yet to actually draw the sword while his chakra remained in a relatively relaxed state, which made reading him extremely easy.

Still.

Just in case, I felt my body slowly but surely get ready for action, which was visibly mirrored by Unmo and Chōjūrō who simply couldn't rely on the benefits of sensing.

Hints of nervousness were further revealed when Unmo began to make another effort at reaching out to Zabuza.

"Zabuza, think about it, you and your comrades would have a place and future with us."

I heard Zabuza snort in derision and watched as he finally pulled the giant lump of steel free.

"Always the pretty words," he muttered and shook his head, "but I fancy my chances on my own."

...

I snorted and failed to hide my derision with a cough.

I just couldn't help it.

This felt like cracking lame jokes in the company of Kakashi and Itachi over the bodies of some dead kids all over again.

Just so stupid and tiresome.

Instantly I had the intention of everybody in the clearing, even Zabuza's sword remained motionless while his razor-sharp gaze was squarely on me.

Deep down I knew I was simply cocky due to my confidence in my ability to run and hide, but man, I was just longing for the chance to simply say my mind for once in who knew how many months.

"What chances? To do what exactly?" I asked and felt myself fall into my old Anbu-slouch. Relaxed, consequences a problem for future me.

"Listen man," I continued, comfortable with the train of thought in my mind, "from asshole," I pointed at myself, "to asshole." I pointed at him.

"You reached your zenith some time ago and now it's just downhill for you. Wandering the countryside, bothering old folks until someday somebody comes along and kills you for your bounty." I stated it as a fact, which I went on to elaborate.

"You are strong, but not as strong as Yagura or Terumi-sama, hell, I bet Kisame would wipe his ass with those bandages," I pointed at his face, "not to mention the dozens of monsters roaming the world."

You could hear a pin drop and I loved every second of it, so I carried on.

"And you have the charisma of a puddle." I finished with a flat stare, meant to drive home, that I was meaning every word so far.

"So, Mizukage is out of reach for yourself. You already had your attempt at killing Yagura so going back is a big no-no, and this?"

"What is roaming the countryside going to archive? Why do you deny the kid over there a chance at a proper a life?" I asked while my humor and derision were now long gone.

"You have the skill, the power, and the reputation to be a someone among us. To have your words have weight in a village where people with bloodlines," I stared directly into the foliage and sensed the teen stiffen, "can live happily. You could lead the next generation of swordsmen and help us defend the country from foreigners harassing our borders, looking for weakness to pounce on."

I breathed a big sigh of relief, visibly satisfied with myself, and smiled at Zabuza.

The smile wasn't friendly, the smile was empty.

It was the smile of a Root agent, that had butchered scores of random children for his village, for some stupid mission.

"This was the carrot," I revealed and unsealed my wakizashi, one hand already in a one-handed ram seal.

"The stick? You attack us and I promise I will kill at least the boy."


Sorry for the long wait, but my ideas tend to come in weird intervals across all my stories.

I finally have something in mind for this story and more importantly this arc, that is hopefully somewhat unique and lets me play with the tension of the world.

That said, I'm a sucker for comments and likes, but more importantly, ideas and inspirations, that help me explore directions for all my stories so feel free to check them out and leave your thoughts.

Thank you again for your patience.
 
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It has been a while since you've updated this story so I'm not fully clear on the details. But I so remember enjoying this immensely. If you have a clearer view of what you want to do with this story that's a good thing because you've derailed your character's arc from the tired old canon rehash a while ago.

So I'm really interested in where you'll be going from this point on. Thank you for what you've posted so far.
 
I will be honest I have forgotten a lot of his backstory, it would be nice to have a quick summary after a long update so I don't have to read it all over again.
 
Daiki Ito was born two years before the Kyuubi attack and raised in an orphanage.

In an effort to be accepted at the Academy he started to teach himself, which was quickly discovered by the matron of the orphanage, who sensed his talent and decided to teach him in a controlled environment to prevent unsupervised accidents.

His sensing ability was discovered and his chakra control began to rapidly advance under the tutelage of the former medic-nin, so far so that medical nin-jutsu was introduced to him.

The novelty and the amazement at the superhuman feats had never ceased and he never lost the pleasure of working/experimenting with his chakra.

In a bid to further advance he looked for multiple sources including an older academy student named Hana Inuzuka, later even going so far as to eventually decide to come clean with his teachers at the academy to gain the attention of more influential individuals.

After a test, that involved the acquisition of gen-jutsu skills among other things he graduated from the academy at the age of eight and joined the still active Root operation under Danzo.

After basic anbu military training he was placed on a team with Fu and Torune under the supervision of an agent called Kinoto, who further advanced their skills and made sure they were well versed in kiri customs and habits given, that they were meant for an elaborate mission involving the impersonation of a kiri genin team during a chunin exam in Tsuchigakure.

Successfully completing the mission their extraction from foreign territory however was derailed by the Uchiha massacre in Konoha, which forced them to make their way home on their own.

Arriving at home Daiki, by now aged ten, was given the chance to drop out of the anbu program given, that Root was disbanded.

Given his prodigal chakra control and his fledgling experience in gen-jutsu it was decided that he should enter an apprenticeship under the tutelage of then Tobuketsu jonin Kurenei Yuuhi. During the apprenticeship, Daiki was promoted to chunin, and Kurenai was promoted to jonin, which allowed them to take on more advanced missions.

By the age of twelve, their paths had eventually split as his sensei had gotten a genin-team at some point and Daiki was able to do missions solo.
"I do." I leaned back contentedly. "I feel like I found my niche for the time being. Express courier missions, undercover surveillance and protection, and the occasional foray into the pages of my bingo book." That I did them solo went without saying, I really was living the dream.

At this point, Daiki was chosen for a long-term mission in Kiri, the objective being the infiltration of the rebel faction. Chapter 2.2.3
 
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The fabled runners high
You gotta really push for one for those. You gotta hit a wall, and that turn of phrase is far more literal than a lot of people realise, and run anyway. It's an emergency adrenal and hormonal response, if your body ain't convinced you really need to keep running right this instant, its not coming. Running for your life for a few hours straight? That'll give you one. You won't really notice at the time though.
 
Just reread everything because of one update and in terms of ideas the mc hasn't dabbled in summoning and senjutsu. That could be the basis of a whole arc you would just have to figure out the big bad for the said arc.
 
I've got the feeling that Daiki's character cracked something pretty fierce there. Maybe not unsalvageably, but still pretty seriously. For all his skill, he hadn't done long term infiltrations before, and has noted a problem with impatience in the past right?

Though, interestingly, based on how he's behind his teammates (who aren't doing something stupid like taking their eyes off Zabuza), and said team consists of a kid and one of Kiri's honorable/famous Jonin Non-Seven Swordsman...

Zabuza, with his full view, and his years of experience with some real psychopaths in the form of the other Seven Swordsman and Kiri superiors is in position to recognize not just how serious Daiki is, but that he's a veteran of this particular kind of ruthlessness.

And unless he joins up and does some socializing/snooping, he shouldn't have any reason to realize that Daiki was out of character.
 
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Chapter 2.2.9
Chapter 2.2.9

He stared at me and laughed while I felt the gazes of my team.

His laugh was low, cruel, and mocking, which was only reinforced by him leisurely strolling towards us. His sword began to audibly slice through the air in big lazy swings, perhaps one part loosening up and one part intimidation.

And yet here I was, almost smiling.

The tiniest part of me hoped for a spectacular confrontation, blood, death, and carnage, just so I could slip away and simply… go home.

'Sorry Hokage-sama, mission failed, my bad'

"What if don't care?" he asked, making a grand show of truly not giving a fuck about his comrades.

I watched him come closer, perhaps in an effort to intercept me, but I was unbothered and couldn't help but sigh in annoyance at the unbelievable drag my life had become.

"But you do," I responded, making absolutely sure my tone suggested, that I was giving about as much fucks about the outcome of this situation as he was pretending to give about his little boy-wonder.

"You believe me," I continued, unhurriedly going into a small crouch for a shunshin, while my chakra hovered around the tenketsus holding the first and second gate. "And your chakra spiked just for a heartbeat when you heard my threat."

"Now then," feeling the tiniest hints of boredom and annoyance slip through my mask of cold professionality I gave him a flat stare and a final ultimatum. "I will consider your next step your final answer."

It was a glorious moment.

I felt everybody tense up, their chakra taut like a wire, they all believed me. My team even more so, because they stood between Zabuza and me. Zabuza would have to go through them to prevent me from gunning for his comrade.

A little fact, that made me unreasonably confident, and them highly uncomfortable…to put it mildly.

My focus was now sorely on Zabuza and his chakra. Even the most minor surge would be my go signal, and this was exactly the reason why I immediately sensed the moment when the tension left his coils and pathways.

His posture remained taut, but beneath the skin was another story.

Still, I remained poised.

I wanted visibly confirmation of his decision.

"You mouthy little rat," his laugh was cruel and mocking again, but there was something menacing lurking in between.

"Unmo," he called. "I have one condition!"

Slowly but surely the tension left everybody except me.

I was still secretly hoping for an escalation so I could fail my mission and go home.

But, ...no such luck for me, apparently.

Seeing that tiny little spark of hope rapidly dying I quickly and thoroughly buried my streak of insubordination deep into the back of my mind and watched my superior perk up.

"I want this little bastard on my team."

Oh, joy!


"Why am I on his team, too?" Chōjūrō cried out in despair dodging massive sword strikes and hails of icy needles.

"Shut up and be grateful to learn from one of the Seven!" I shouted back and readied Kiba, the pair of swords while impossibly light and sharp, still felt incredibly awkward with the weird prongs on each of them.

At least it was a good sign, I reckoned, that I was even allowed to practice with them before they went back into the Ao's custody and Chōjūrō's Hiramekarei was locked back up at the base.

Practice, yes. Ownership, not yet.


"What do you think this is about?" Chōjūrō asked me, a hint of worry in his tone.

"I mean, why so close to the village?" he continued, his eyes wandering to our teammates.

Haku the picture of serenity with his eyes closed and his chakra as tranquil as a glacier was the exact opposite of 'Sensei' Zabuza, who practically radiated irritation. He was obviously more than just uncomfortable being this close to his former home and more importantly the man he had failed to kill the last time he had been here.

I shrugged, having honestly no idea since it wasn't every day one of Unmo's summons bids you to race to the village outskirts for a meeting with Mei Terumi of all people.

Not feeling like giving Chōjūrō the runaround or letting the silence become awkward I hazard a guess, that was more than a bit farfetched but something fun to think about.

"Maybe she will tell us, that Zabuza-sensei's missing-nin status was rescinded and she wants us to prepare for the next chunin-exam in Konoha. I heard someone mention it at the base, that it's supposed to be in three or four months." I answered with a shrug and a smile in my voice.

"Tsk." I heard Zabuza's clear irritation, but I couldn't help but poke the bear.

"Come on, us versus some genins, you know it would be funny."

Just like good old times, I thought as my genuine cheer took a sharp turn towards cruel self-deprecation.

Speaking of old times.

"Incoming in ten seconds, six o'clock, Unmo, Gozu, and Meizu," I relayed dutifully to my team and slipped back into a slightly more professional mode.

There had been some shuffling since Zabuza and friends had been recruited.

It had been quite obvious almost from the start, that we, as in me, Chōjūrō, Haku under the guidance and leadership of Zabuza were meant to be the new and shiny core of the next government's Seven Swordsmen.

Which was nice and dandy for us, but it also meant, that Unmo, who was now leading the Demon Brothers, had gotten the rather unfulfilling job of being Mei Terumi's glorified messenger.

He basically had to always remain near the village, but obviously of off sight, just in case Terumi-sama had the need for his seagull summons to relay an urgent message.

Luckily for him and everybody involved he was smart and professional enough to know, that while maybe boring his part was simply too crucial for the rebel effort.

By now it was obvious to everyone, that every week this cold war could become very hot very quickly and when push comes to shove the rebels just couldn't afford to lose precious time with something as essential as gathering manpower.

Sigh...

Aaaanyway

"Unmo," Zabuza growled as a way of greeting when the three-man-squad dropped into the clearing. "Why are we here?" he immediately asked, not even giving the man in question the second to right himself.

"I don't know, Terumi-sama's Shadow Clone gave the order to gather and according to it she's on her way, too."

Having sensed our esteemed leader racing towards our position for quite some time now, I finally judged her distance to be in a believable range for my character and dutifully gave a heads-up for everybody present once again.

"Incoming in 30 seconds, four o'clock, it's Terumi-sama." I stated and watched as everybody seemingly decided to hold their tongue until the boss-lady was here.

3…2…1

And there she was.

Her chakra was as extraordinary as her cleavage, which instantly forced me to make an honest effort to keep my eyes above her neckline, which truth be told wasn't much of a loss either.

I could see and understand why people would rally behind her.

"Gentlemen," Mei Terumi said calmly, an aura of a true leader surrounding her.

"Terumi-sama," Unmo and Chōjūrō instantly stood at attention, while I tried not to look embarrassed at having missed my cue to join in.

"Thank you for coming," our leader began only for my idiot-'sensei' to cut in.

"Cut to the chase," he growled, perhaps becoming increasingly annoyed to be forced to come face to face with someone in a position he dearly wished he was in this close to the place of his greatest failure.

Still…rude and uncalled for in my opinion and apparently, I wasn't the only one thinking along those lines.

Unmo and Chōjūrō looked downright offended on Mei's behalf, even Haku gave Zabuza the stink eye, which I thought was hilarious and rather telling in itself.

Mei gave him a flat stare for a few heartbeats, while we watched on…and then simply focused on us and Unmo.

I couldn't help but smile at our leader effortlessly brushing off the disrespect while simultaneously disregarding the offender, which simply must piss off Zabuza even more.

He was a great shinobi, a powerful swordsman, and a harsh but effective teacher, but more importantly, he was also a colossal asshole, which is why I was quite glad to see him receive a reminder, that he simply wasn't the biggest fish around.

"Mangetsu Hozuki was found dead, and his brother along with Nuibari is missing."

Terumi revealed flatly and I saw the words struck Zabuza more than anything else she could have come up with.

"What?! How?" he asked visibly reeling from the sudden loss of a former associate.

"Who would be capable of…"

"He was found poisoned," Mei went on before Zabuza could derail the matter at hand even further.

"I called you here so you can act as reinforcement to Ao and his team. They found a promising trail heading north apparently left by Suigetsu using their clan's secret technique."

"North? Do you think Kumo is involved?" Zabuza asked and by now I just heard cold hard professionalism in his voice.

"I don't want to jump to conclusions. You have a capable sensor and the power; I want you to help find him and resolve the situation as quickly as possible. Unmo, you and your squad, will join them and report to me as soon as possible. If this is truly Kumo's doing, we must prepare accordingly."
 
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Wasn't Mangetsu supposed to be one of the few semi-decent (personality wise) Swordsmen, and second only to Kisame when it came to lethality (perhaps even his greater in skill)? And of course, more then anything else, NOT hated by his younger brother despite the two of them having the same dream?

Considering where Suigetsu ends up, and the fact that he apparently died by poison...and this looks like Orochimaru poaching around for interesting bloodlines and potential hosts. Possibly also legendary swords (he didn't just stumble across Grass Cutter after-all, and two birds with one stone fits his character). He might not be personally involved anymore, but opportunistic actions in the Land of Water fit his MO.
 
I'm waiting for his cover to be blown at this point. I'm assuming it's going to be with a fight against Yagura (not sure if he is alive at the moment as I'm planning to do a reread)
 
Wrong assumption. Naruto learned Kage Bunshin no Jutsu from a scroll of highly classified dangerous techniques (kinjutsu) and was able to master it quickly simply due to his insane chakra reserves. Possibly healing factor, too.
So what if Konoha treats the technique as a precious secret? Remember Ao has the Byakugan. If they could get their hands on that, getting an old technique isn't implausible.
 
Honestly this is a case of all parties being in the wrong here. To correct the assumption , the shadow clone jutsu isn't a forbidden jutsu . The one Naruto learned from the scroll and is considered the kinjutsu (forbidden) is the multi summon shadow clone .

The reason the shadow clone jutsu isn't in more widespread use and honestly I feel this fic messed this part up with too, is that creating one single clone cuts your chakra reserves in half. Two makes it even worse. Suddenly dropping from 100% to such low reserves in chakra is highly dangerous and often fatal . While we might not see it much in the anime due to the whole shonen aspect making "fight till I drop " the standard we do know chakra exhaustion for most people is a serious matter and without author hand waving something deadly.

For ninjas others clone methods are far more likely to be used (and available to learn) without the need of such a heavy cost in chakra that could be vital to their survival or wellbeing .

I could believe that they were able to get their hands on the jutsu from a user for the single use shadow clone technique but I don't necessarily think they'd be using it and it is kind of an odd choice .

But it's the most "popular used jutsu " by the anime so I suppose there's a reason it's so popular in fanfics
 
Honestly this is a case of all parties being in the wrong here. To correct the assumption , the shadow clone jutsu isn't a forbidden jutsu . The one Naruto learned from the scroll and is considered the kinjutsu (forbidden) is the multi summon shadow clone .

The reason the shadow clone jutsu isn't in more widespread use and honestly I feel this fic messed this part up with too, is that creating one single clone cuts your chakra reserves in half. Two makes it even worse. Suddenly dropping from 100% to such low reserves in chakra is highly dangerous and often fatal . While we might not see it much in the anime due to the whole shonen aspect making "fight till I drop " the standard we do know chakra exhaustion for most people is a serious matter and without author hand waving something deadly.

For ninjas others clone methods are far more likely to be used (and available to learn) without the need of such a heavy cost in chakra that could be vital to their survival or wellbeing .

I could believe that they were able to get their hands on the jutsu from a user for the single use shadow clone technique but I don't necessarily think they'd be using it and it is kind of an odd choice .

But it's the most "popular used jutsu " by the anime so I suppose there's a reason it's so popular in fanfics

That's cool reasoning and all, but your assumption is lacking, too.

While correct;
This jutsu allows the user to create one or more copies of themselves. The user's chakra is evenly divided between themselves and their clones: creating one clone will give it half the user's chakra, creating two clones will give each a third of the user's chakra, and so on. Depending on how much chakra the user has and how many clones they make, this rapid depletion of their reserves can be dangerous.
You forget the other part of the jutsu;
Shadow clones usually disperse once they are struck hard enough, but they have been shown capable of enduring injuries for a time.[14] When a clone's task is completed, it can disperse itself or be dispersed by its user. Once dispersed, the clone's experiences and remaining chakra are transferred back to the user.[

So in any given situation, which you know isn't going to be some kind of life and death situation where chakra exhaustion may become an issue, for example relaying an important message as quickly as possible, an action that doesn't require a lot of chakra in the first place, the Shadow Clone technique is perfectly suited.
 
Chapter 2.3.0
Chapter 2.3.0

The urgency was palpable and was made all the more evident when I sensed Ao's ANBU squad resume their pursuit the second we entered the range of his byakugan.

No doubt expecting my sensing to guide us while simultaneously urging us to pick up our pace and catch up with them.

Having finally caught up with our mission leader's brisk speed I couldn't help but glance around. Four people on Ao's squad, four people on Zabuza's squad, and last but not least Unmo's three-man squad.

This was almost a shinobi platoon!

But why?

Were they nervous?

Or just incredibly pissed?

According to the tidbits I heard that Mangetsu fellow was well respected, well-liked even, and incredibly strong. So much so that he was given Nuibari, the Needle, and practically already a member of the Seven Swordmen in anything but name.

Couple that with some kind of water-based ability in the body of a sensible patriot and you ended up with a shinobi the rebels and the loyalists were falling over themselves to gain the favor of.

Now he was dead, the legendary longsword gone and his little brother, also apparently a prodigy, missing.

What was the objective?

Retrieve sword and brother, erase any and all traces of the aggressor and deny anything ever happened?

Possibly.

Was this Kumo being brazen again? Were they daring us to show any kind of aggression against their shinobis, goad us into giving them the flimsiest of justification for more open maneuvers?

I guess I kind of saw now my superiors' line of thinking. Use overwhelming force to dissolve the situation and wipe any traces of anything ever happening away so we could play clueless.

Urgh, world politics!

But something was tingling, something didn't feel entirely right. The second I had seen and sensed one of the puddles saturated with faint chakra, puddles that Ao had identified as the little brother's way of leaving a trail, something began to buzz in my mind.

...

Whatever…

Eyes closed I thought about Mei Terumi.

Not these kinds of thoughts…this time…, but the reasons why she wasn't with us and barely left the village nowadays.

Yagura, the Fourth Mizukage, was apparently starting to grow… erratic. Showing uncharacteristic lapses.

And when a jinchūriki was behaving weird…


A scowl was threatening to split my face as I carefully maneuvered my steps on this forest floor.

This was the exact opposite of my sunny paradise down south-east.

Massive evergreen trees blocked out most of the sun and remnants of a past rain shower were continuously dropping down on rotting locks, ferns, and lichen. Moss and fungi seemed to cover everything, that wasn't muddy earth or flora.

Of course, the trail would fucking end here.

And yet I wish this was the least of my problems.

No, it was the elaborated cave entrance, that looked like the fucking head of a snake.

Who was I kidding? It was the handful of people I was sensing deep down the rabbit hole with one presence sticking out like a sore thumb.

Far, far away I had really thought it would actually be quite a few enemy combatants given the vibrancy I had been sensing clustered in that little spot, but no, NO, turned out it was a just few with one shining like a beacon.

Obviously, I wasn't the only one that thought our unexpected destination and its occupant were rather unfortunate.

Oh, they tried to play it cool in front of their respective squads, but I sensed Ao's and Zabuza's chakras, they were tense, which was only made more obvious when Ao stiffly turned around and surveyed his little platoon.

"Unmo, send a summon, detail location and likely enemy," he commanded and took a small breath to center himself.

"Squad make yourself combat-ready, prepare for engagement," he paused, and I saw the veins around his byakugan contract before he visibly scowled. "our enemy is Konoha's Snake Sannin," he continued and I heard those that hadn't known so far shift uncomfortably. "and he knows we are here."


This was a literal dungeon with winding stairs, narrow corridors, and smooth stone lit by feeble torches every couple of feet.

Zabuza in front, me providing cover with my sensing while regretting every life decision directly behind him, then Haku, followed by the rest with Ao providing cover for the rear with his byakugan.

That's how we filed into the biggest room so far after we descended the third staircase, and instantly I could feel the tension rise to new levels.

Before there had been a dozen chambers, all rather nondescript and humble. This was the size of a mess hall… and filled with cages, the bars on all four sides, so you could walk between them and examine whatever or whoever was inside from all angles.

Taking a closer look, I could see that some were covered with layers of dust, some spotless, as if recently cleaned, and others… still with blood in them.

The tables with cuffs near every cell door didn't make the picture any rosier.

I swallowed, a stark reminder, that there were always worse things than death.

My pulse was high but steady, my mind focused, no doubt thanks to the fact that I could sense the monster still a couple of floors further down, seemingly content to wait among his subordi…

I swallowed again.

He just moved…and I couldn't help but stop, anxious to feel what he was up to.

My eyes closed, my concentration and sensing going above and beyond what I ever did in front of a kiri shinobi, but I didn't care.

He just…a juts…

I stiffened, which was unknowingly mirrored by my squad.

"Oh sh…"

Laughing

Laughing coming from a darkened corner of this very chamber!

One moment he was multiple floors further down and the next he traveled up through the walls like an exploding geyser.

There he was!

His torso grotesquely sticking out of the wall and a cruel smile on his lips, his gaze intense…

ON ME!


I met his gaze, I barely registered Zabuza drawing Kubikiribōchō and Ao Kiba while jumping in front of us.

My body, chakra, and mind absolutely rigid and I watched as his smile widened even further.

And he chuckled, low but genuine, and I felt my heart sink like a stone.

"Nothing special," he said with humor, and I just knew he was talking to me. "Every once in a while, it is truly refreshing to be proven wrong, isn't it, Daiki?"

I felt my entire platoon's shock and confusion while my thoughts ground to a halt. Face growing slack, my body felt light, and my thinking was reduced to ones and zeros, yes and no, left or right, simple but direct and efficient.

Tension at a boiling point I wordlessly watched as his gaze shifted to Haku next to me.

"And you even brought me such a special specimen."

The words barely left his mouth when something snapped.

The first and second gate practically burst inside my head and wind chakra literally exploded along my left forearm, racing over my wrist and the side of my hand, to extend more than a foot from my fingertips.

This wasn't the elegance of a sword; this was the chakra equivalent of an ax!

My arm was still in motion when the remnants of my wind chakra were rerouted to my feet to fuel the perhaps fastest Shunshin I have ever done.

I skidded to a crouch only a couple of meters away; away from the group of now enemy combatants and the missing-nin.

Crouching, my left hand in a one-handed ram seal, and my wakizashi unsealed, I dispassionately watched as the dust cloud I had left behind in my wake billowed through the kiri shinobis and…

"Haku!"

…the head of the bloodline user tumbled from his shoulder.

This was mercy, I reasoned, this was logical, this was me denying a Konoha missing-nin a valuable asset.

My blank gaze slid from my former team to Orochimaru, and I couldn't help but take note of his expression.

Surprise? Delight?

Then he laughed…again.

"You are truly one of Danzo-sama's finest."

From the corners of my eye, I saw Ao's head whip around in shock and horror, before he quickly schooled his features.

"Zabuza, my team, we engage Orochimaru, Unmo deal with the spy!" he snarled, and my gaze fell on the bandana-wearing jonin who would be my enemy.

The hate-filled gaze of my one-time teacher was unimportant, the hundreds of combat scenarios that flashed through my mind had priority.

"Chōjūrō, Meizu, Gozu retreat!" he shouted forcefully his tone allowing no argument whatsoever. "You must report to Terumi-sama at all costs!" he added passionately, urgency evident.

My focus was on the jutsu and the chakra gathering on my chest, but my eyes and mind tracked the retreating figures, that quickly disappeared up the stairs.

I simply couldn't allow word of Konoha's involvement to reach Kirigakure.

But…

I had more pressing problems, namely the jonin, that was eying me with wariness and hate.

I met his gaze steadily and raised my chin in a show of defiance with a hint of mocking.

"I was there when your team was murdered," I spoke matter-of-factly, eyes unblinking.

I watched as he reeled back as if struck, and confident the hidden chakra construct on my chest was stable, I continued my assault.

Definitely feeling rusty, but confident in my abilities for such straightforward technique my hands flew through a handful of signs.

A simple combination of the Hell Viewing Technique and the False Surroundings Technique.

"I watched as my senpai killed Kenchi." I pressed on, but this time he was going to see Kakashi in his ANBU-gear kneeling over his unconscious little student. The faint crackle of electricity clearly audible.

"Unmo!" faintly I heard a panting Ao shout from the background.

"You were there, too." I kept my tone biting and hurtful, while my chakra gave a little push. "Nearby, unconscious, useless, and we used you!"

Kakashi and Kenchi morphed into Itachi and Unmo himself.

"Un…" Ao's frantic shout was cut off by the ringing of clashing swords.

I readied myself, I watched my opposite carefully, his gaze was hollow and empty, his chakra, however, told a different story. It was absolute turmoil and my only chance.

So, I kept going, desperate to push him over the edge.

"We desecrated their bodies!" I finished my story with a vicious snarl, and again my chakra gave the tiniest of nudges.

Flashes, images, and sounds of the time my team and I probed them up like puppets to tell a story. The crunch of a foot getting crushed in a crack, the short but bloodcurdling sound of kunai being driven into the back of a skull…

Fast!

"Unmo!"

Vicious!

Predictable!

I managed to hold the furious swings of his katana at bay with my wakizashi, the clash quick and deadly until I saw what I was waiting for.

A powerful overhead swing meant to break or rattle my defense, to push the momentum of this fight in his favor, and to give me no chance to recover.

I put all my chakra-enhanced might into the block…and stopped his swing above my head.

'Bunshin Oroshi!'

A misshapen torso of a Shadow Clone burst from my torso, left arm missing, and his features surely expressionless like a doll, but it was enough.

Its right arm had already reached behind itself into my weapons pouch and grabbed a kunai. A lightning-quick motion and the blade cut deep into the side of my opponent's neck, just above the guard.

The blood splattering my face was just as much ignored as Unmo's shocked and disbelieving stare as I let my clone construct dispel to give myself the much the needed space to drive my wakizashi deep into the man's skull.


Bear in mind Suigetsu was introduced in a manga chapter way back in 2007. That coupled with the years spent in the Naruto world certain memories are close to thirty years old for Daiki.

At least that's going to be my justification for him walking into this mess. ;)

As usual, I'm thankful for every review and your thoughts.
Cheers.
 
Well, he's boned, even after he kills Unmmo, there's no way he's getting anyone else. He's going to get left behind with Orochimaru, isn't he? I mean he gave Haku mercy, but who will give him mercy, right?
I'm loving it and can't wait for more!
 
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Whew, Orochimaru interrupt was unexpected, but wow, Daiki's repertoire of assassination techniques are getting better by each update. Excited to see where this goes narratively ngl
 
Ehhhhh that was very whiplashy,sudden haku death, sudden killing his teammates etc just not sure how to feel about it . Kinda feel haku was wasted here tbh
 
Oof, that was a lot darker then I was expecting. Poor Haku, he nearly had his good (relative to the fact that he'd still be a child soldier in a high-mortality profession) ending too.

I do admit, I'm a little surprised Daiki is so deep into 'eliminate all witnesses' mode though. Sure he infiltrated the rebellion, but barring the team of too-stupid-to-live chunin commiting suicide by Swordsmen, he hasn't attacked them in anyway, and in terms of general policy (and especially in terms of NEED), the rebellion would be a closer fit to Konoha to make an alliance. And Konoha is most certainly in the business and need of allies with how their recovery from the Kyuubi got screwed by the Uchiha fustercluck, and the upcoming Sand/Sound invasion. Even better, a Kiri wracked by civil-war is in the sweet-spot of weak enough to not take advantage of an alliance, and strong enough to still be useful and not desperate, much like Sand used to be, and will be after a failed invasion and assassinated Kage.

Perhaps this is the ol' Root background coming in? Daiki is rather specifically NOT experienced in long term infiltration or diplomacy, and by earlier chapters it sounds like he wasn't particularly briefed as to what Konoha wants for this mission either (they did specifically pick him because he was already trained on Kiri impersonation right? Not having time for that sounds like not enough time for several other things.)
 
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